Like a collision between Philleas Fogg and Monty Python Suki. All these images serve a greater purpose, juxtaposition to shock and inform in a dislocated way. Your work can remind me of a lucky dip, and it brings to mind Dud's piece about going inside Joan Crawford to find fleets of ships and a discotheque. I hope you get my reasoning (is that what it is?)
Always a pleasure!
Ray
Comment is about Memory Embryo (blog)
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Your poem his really emotional in a good way, I hope this isn't about your childhood. I can't wait to hear more from you.
Comment is about liza (poet profile)
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Thanks you Suki and Col. for your valued comments. I wanted to take the disparate characters as perceived and try to inject common ground - apart from them both being on the same side as it were. Col: You make a good point about dissension in the ranks. I think humorous observations can unsettle, but there has to be an acceptance of the far fetched within the framework of everyday experience. Otherwise, forget the whole thing and go back to mental lego. This would have been an audio too far i'm afraid. I could have slanted the poem to the religious accept, but that would have stirred things up perhaps. How about the Hawk being a tour guide for the Milky Way?
Correct Suki, a little like Michael Bentine in that way - sprouting hair etc.
Thanks again gents. Ray
Comment is about SEEING THINGS FROM THE OTHER SIDE (blog)
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<Deleted User> (18980)
Fri 23rd Mar 2018 09:37
Sort of interesting. I've read it three times and still have no idea what it's about. It's probably just me.
Comment is about Memory Embryo (blog)
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Thank you Racha and Col. I haven't written anything for over 6 months so hopefully this poem will start to get my juices flowing again.
Comment is about Foolishness (blog)
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Fri 23rd Mar 2018 08:30
Brilliant Ian. And the collective noun title is simply genius. Very well thought out indeed. Col.
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<Deleted User> (13762)
Fri 23rd Mar 2018 08:14
you're not the only one Hazel - there have been a few acts of impatient foolishness so far. But your interpretation of the prompt is excellent and worthy of forgiveness for jumping the starting gun. All the best. Col.
Comment is about Foolishness (blog)
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<Deleted User> (13762)
Fri 23rd Mar 2018 07:55
Congrats on POTW Alex. Your poem had me thinking good and bad things about what it means to be neighbours in this day and age. I'm glad John and Paul came to the rescue at the end. All the best, Colin.
Comment is about 'St Matthew and the Beatles' by Alex W is Write Out Loud's Poem of the Week (article)
Original item by Greg Freeman
Fri 23rd Mar 2018 04:15
Hello Liza Here!
Looking for some feedback
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Alexandra Rockwell Lorenz
Fri 23rd Mar 2018 04:11
Hi Racha,
Thanks for your comment on my sample piece. I'm glad you enjoyed it.
I'm looking forward to reading some of your work.
Enjoy the community...there are some really great people on here.
Alex
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<Deleted User> (16099)
Thu 22nd Mar 2018 21:36
My prayers and thoughts to you always poet.... be well
Comment is about temperance (blog)
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its amazing,its very philosophical its very beautiful , ill be following youre work from now own
Comment is about Foolishness (blog)
Original item by Hazel ettridge
HI Cynthia. The nearest I got to therapy is marriage counselling by "Relate." I'd split up by then, and selfishly it was for me. I showed her some poetry that i'd written, and she said I was very self aware, and seemed to know what was wrong. But the point is I told all, and walked away satisfied. I reconciled myself to fate, and the marriage healed up thank God. These relationships might I suppose be facsimiles of what a local priest could have managed in the past. It is a matter of simple trust, whoever that person may be. IMO. (Over simplification I know).
The dimension of sleep of course brings out all sorts of demons - assort of unholy alliance with the conscious mind.
Great times for your writing Cynthia.
Ray
Comment is about The Doctor (blog)
Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas
Ha ha a little poetic licence used there!
Comment is about The Battle of a Knackered Mum (blog)
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Whoops! Just realised I peaked too soon. This was intended for 1st April. This foolishness lark is taking me over.
Comment is about Foolishness (blog)
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<Deleted User> (16099)
Thu 22nd Mar 2018 19:20
why? because you opened up yourself to the possibility of a forever love.. and in the grand perspective of love and of life that is a very good thing...
Comment is about Why~Why Did I (blog)
Original item by Chiari Warrior Soldier
thanks for commenting on 'Elbow Yard' Ray - once again you have my sentiments and undercurrents nailed - you really are very perceptive. I'm, hopefully, moving way from this period of grieving - and this felt like a full stop - before moving on. I really appreciate you taking the time to analyse and comment - it is very much appreciated
Ian
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<Deleted User> (18980)
Thu 22nd Mar 2018 18:40
Picking up on Laura's comment...my initials are BWM which according to the Urban Dictionary is 'bitter white man'.
You couldn't make it up!
Comment is about The Doctor (blog)
Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas
<Deleted User> (18980)
Thu 22nd Mar 2018 18:33
Don't give up . Ur emotions can reach me .
Comment is about Anxiety (blog)
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<Deleted User> (18980)
Thu 22nd Mar 2018 16:35
Chicken nuggets, chips, sweet yoghurt, haribo...thank God you threw in a few carrot sticks for good measure!
And go easy on the gin!
Comment is about The Battle of a Knackered Mum (blog)
Original item by Nik Fabro
I have had no need or experience of therapy/counselling so perhaps shouldn't comment further. I just know that all of those qualities that Laura mentions are available to me via a friend if needed.
It occurs to me (and WOL is perhaps a good example) that the Internet is a well-used form of therapy/cartharsis too, with plenty of anonymous, non-judgmental counsellors all willing to offer advice support and reassurance.
But please do not let our comments bury the quality of CBT's piece.
Comment is about The Doctor (blog)
Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas
Thank you both for the lovely comments - appreciate it.
Comment is about Precious (blog)
Original item by Nik Fabro
Re Graham's comment - the whole point of counselling is that you get to pour everything out to a person who is not in any way emotionally connected to you. In that way, there is no 'burden', no judgement, no change of behaviour in order to appease, or subdue anything at all.
Anyway, interesting piece Cynth, and I realise via Graham's comment that your initials are the same as the acronym for cognitive behavioural therapy. How neat is that? I'm sure you have already thought of that though, it being you.
Comment is about The Doctor (blog)
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<Deleted User> (18980)
Thu 22nd Mar 2018 12:58
For me, the key reference is the word 'friend'. Psychiatrists are successful because they are are a surrogate friend, sincere, non-judgemental and discreet. If we had such friends we wouldn't need psychiatrists.
Comment is about The Doctor (blog)
Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas
This a thoughtful piece CBT. I have to say I have enjoyed this recent productive period of yours.
On the matter of counselling/reassurance, I think one of the problems these days is few of us have really good friends who will "say it as it is" and not just passively reassure, brow mopping etc.
We all need a strong support structure but it needs to be two sided not just tea and sympathy!
Good piece Cynthia (I hope the productivity continues too).
Comment is about The Doctor (blog)
Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas
This is likely the last of my 'strange journey of words', this particular March of 2018. But it has certainly been interesting.
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Hi Ray Glad you liked my Washing poem!
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<Deleted User> (13762)
Thu 22nd Mar 2018 08:19
no audio Ray? Did you not fancy impersonating the Hawk? Too soon perhaps? I'm sure you could have done a decent Doddy though. There's been a lot of internet imaginings of the Prof's hereafter - walking away from his wheelchair towards the stars for example. I think that one annoyed some disability campaigners. He was an atheist and Doddy was a Christian. All good crazy mixed up fun! You capture it well. See you on the other side one day....well maybe.
Col.
Comment is about SEEING THINGS FROM THE OTHER SIDE (blog)
Original item by ray pool
Lovely Ray,
Funnily enough Ken Dodd had a mad scientist vibe about him. Kindred spirits?
Suki
Comment is about SEEING THINGS FROM THE OTHER SIDE (blog)
Original item by ray pool
thank you for this! i needed a reminder to myself.
Comment is about Shouty Face (blog)
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Big Sal
Thu 22nd Mar 2018 03:09
Lovely poem of remembrance, and such a shame it took someone so long to tell you so. Very passionate readings.
Comment is about My grandma (blog)
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Big Sal
Thu 22nd Mar 2018 02:17
Bad Joke #4 made me laugh. Good choice of words in this.
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Wed 21st Mar 2018 23:00
<Deleted User> (13740)
Wed 21st Mar 2018 22:00
Tina love your writing, xxxx
Comment is about Chiari Warrior Soldier (poet profile)
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I think this is fine stuff Ian; it has a "do and die" quality with a sort of gritty ethereal undertone. It'll do for me - I think it has a bravery in it which I admire. Well constructed like a folk song format. I won't try too much to analyse it. I don't think it needs too much probing.
Ray
Comment is about Elbow Yard (blog)
Original item by Ian Whiteley
A salutary tale Cynthia, hard on the back of The Dive - they do as you say show a good flow - this was obviously hard earned, and great to read!
Ray
Comment is about Alpha male (blog)
Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas
You can almost feel the weight of activity and slog in this poem David; it takes us back to cobbled backyards and rudimentary needs, with no refinements. Wives treated as horses. I love the idea of the mangle's tight - lipped throat, and the whole sag and soak of it.
Great writing. Ray
Comment is about Washing (blog)
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<Deleted User> (18118)
Wed 21st Mar 2018 20:02
This is an amazing piece of work.
The soldiers so optimistic in the beginning, so willing.
Not aware of the deception, the pain and tragedy that awaits.
Powerful.
Hannah
Comment is about The Veteran (blog)
Original item by Jennifer Malden
<Deleted User> (18118)
Wed 21st Mar 2018 19:57
Intriguing.
Is it a pet, an imaginary friend?
Read it three times, loved it.
Hannah
Comment is about For Timmy (blog)
Original item by Jennifer Malden
Thanks everyone. I think it's a little rushed and needs some filler when the witches chase the children.
Comment is about Three Witches Brew (blog)
Original item by 220August
@Big Sal thank you for the kind words. Much appreciated.
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<Deleted User> (18980)
Wed 21st Mar 2018 18:55
Actually, reading it again probably not a student. Who is it David?
Comment is about Washing (blog)
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<Deleted User> (18980)
Wed 21st Mar 2018 18:54
I like it David. I guess it's based on a student home from Uni. The scene you describe could be straight out of Orwell's Wigan Pier. Aye lad..it's grim oop north!
Comment is about Washing (blog)
Original item by David Cooke
220 i LOVE IT i found very amusing , if thats you uninspired what would you write when are inspired , its veryy good
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Cynthia Buell Thomas
Fri 23rd Mar 2018 16:41
Laura, it never crossed my mind. How hilarious!
BWM is superb! I've got to remember that one. And share it with my husband, to see if he knows it. But he's totally into Snooker right now, and I wouldn't interrupt for the world. He's an addict! I enjoy it too, a tad more moderately; I love the 'Maths'!
How wonderful that you all have chosen to share some similar experiences.
Comment is about The Doctor (blog)
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