Thanks for giving this one a look-over, Ray. I wrote it a few years ago at a poetry workshop at Surbiton library run by Alison Hill. I attended the workshop partly for sentimental reasons - I used to frequent the library as a sixth-former many years before, bunking off school to read poetry instead. Gary Snyder was one of my favourites at that time.
Comment is about The oak tree (blog)
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Thank you Dave.
There's something about remote islands and this one is very special...
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Thu 18th Jan 2018 16:10
welcome to WOL Manisha ( beautiful name) we hope you enjoy your time on here.
Our best wishes
Patricia and Stefan xx
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THANK YOU! I AM GLAD YOU LIKED MY POEM!
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THANK YOU! I AM GLAD YOU LIKED MY POEMS..
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Big Sal
Thu 18th Jan 2018 12:37
The Cuckoo poem as your sample flows very well. Enjoyable to read aloud.
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Kevin Norrest
Thu 18th Jan 2018 09:15
English is my second language. But the poem is actually making sense to me. I tried to consult http://essaywriting.ninja to write a review on it. The steps require to have a full bio of the author though.
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Thu 18th Jan 2018 08:26
and one day we will all most likely look similar again.
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Thu 18th Jan 2018 08:19
thanks for the explanation Douglas.
Comment is about Legacy (blog)
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I loved this. It took me back to one very special day being there. It is indeed a place where time seems to stand still.
Comment is about Lindisfarne (blog)
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For some reason this made me think of my family. This poem definitely triggers an emotional response.
Comment is about Know (haiku) (blog)
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A quick and interesting comparison of Past and Future.
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Well Stu I take that as a compliment. I think we all sweat over our work - sometimes inspiration comes , other times its just an itch. I was thinking too it would be great to meet the source of all your thinking . It's such a small world online - I hope you and your family are faring well my friend.
Ray
Comment is about AMNESTY (blog)
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Thank you for your review
It means a lot x
Comment is about Boxes of life (blog)
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This is a terribly sad poem, but I liked it very much. So many disappointments in a life well-captured here in the repetition of "box."
Comment is about Boxes of life (blog)
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i used to live in the adjacent village to wetwang. did you know the mayor was richard whiteley? amazing fish and chips too.
i enjoyed this, very romantic and took me back to the places i used to frequent.
Comment is about York station (blog)
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a very powerful short piece ray. i do love how you are able to switch up your moods and themes so well. maybe 2018 will finally be the year we meet!
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how thoroughly lovely
Comment is about 'Song for the old year' by John Marks is Write Out Loud Poem of the Week (article)
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Oo i ow
This affected me so much, Dave, very emotional...
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Indeed, MC. I think we are saying the same thing. They could come from any direction, paying no mind to our concept of which way up our globe is.
Comment is about A WORLD TURNED UPSIDE DOWN (blog)
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Hi Colin! Thanks very much for your remarks -- very appreciated.
When I wrote "screens" I meant literal window screens: something that lets the air in but is not quite fully "open" in that you cannot pass something back and forth between two people on both sides.
But I like your interpretations, too. Especially the idea of a smokescreen.
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Thanks to Rose, Colin, Leon and Ankita for reading and commenting. Thanks Nigel for liking You are all very kind
Thanks Leon for your encouragement with the profile, I do hesitate to call myself a poet and like to leave it to others to make up their minds.
thank you all again in easy so encouraging to find positive comments from such esteemed writers of the word
cheers
Martin
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Ah - but my use of "extra-terrestrial" refers to its meaning
"outside the earth or its atmosphere" - using the human
viewpoint as seen in the famous photographs taken by
astronauts. Why should any other lifeform utilise any
reference to our own invented compass points when
viewing or approaching our planet?
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Thanks so much for your comments, chaps. Glad you enjoyed. I've been fascinated by that map ever since I first saw it while commuting from York to Leeds back in the day. (There's a similar one at Scarborough, I've discovered). All the destinations listed in the final stanza were for individual trains that came up on the departure screen during the hour and 20 minutes I spent there on Monday.
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Thanks Martin for your comment over my poem.
I am really glad to know that you liked my poetry.
Ankita
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"Let me show you the world from a distorted view where the lights become shadows from this darkened room."
This line is dope!
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Wed 17th Jan 2018 14:14
yes, Wendy, all we can do is hope.
Rose ?
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I love the way you express the curiosity of children and how fertile that can be. The juxtaposition of hedgehogs seems perfect if not proveable. Do we ever grow up, that is the question, whether 'tis nobler to be old... I have to say it's not bad at all. More please Greg.
Ray
Comment is about The oak tree (blog)
Original item by Greg Freeman
Salut Greg for not only drawing attention to a vital issue but enshrouding iit n the best kind of nostalgia - not mawkish but tangible. Nobody does it like you - and this is from a fellow on the line!
See you soon. Ray
Comment is about York station (blog)
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I see. Thank you. Sorry. Should have just looked it up.
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Thanks MC much appreciated.
After a certain age I suppose we all make preparations for the "long lie in" Might as well approach it with a smile.
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Shubham Kumar
Wed 17th Jan 2018 09:48
A poet with great imagination....I love poetry...
Comment is about Ocean Vuong wins £25,000 TS Eliot prize (article)
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totally agree with you about this one Ankita. I love the way you have ended this poem by asking the question.
nice one
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a mighty powerful poem Ankita of real courage in the face of such adversity
excellent
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Wed 17th Jan 2018 09:04
an interesting mix of the waiting passenger musing and the station announcer announcing. As teenagers in the late 70's on our local railway station we would often imitate the distinctive voice of the announcer and his pronunciation of Littlehampton. Oh what fun we had.....I feel a song coming on! Cheers for the memories, Col.
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Wed 17th Jan 2018 08:53
it's a tragedy of epic proportions that so many birds are shot or trapped in nets on their migratory flight paths. Malta and Cyprus are big offenders in the Mediterranean Sea but it happens the world over. Sadly very few wounded birds live to fly another day. A sad poem and situation. Thanks for posting. Colin.
https://birdlifecyprus.org/news-details/conservation-science/paper-illegal-killing-outside-mediterranean
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Wed 17th Jan 2018 08:38
I very much like this poem Douglas. For me, the road analogy works very well as do the things encountered around the road - the stones, markers, flowers, trees, rain and air - and at the end 'pick you up' seems such a fitting description given the journey and the objects.
I wonder if you could explain your use of the word 'screens'? I'm taking it to mean barriers or as in smokescreen? It seems to stand out as not quite fitting in to the aforementioned analogy but it might just be me making too much of a single word!
I've read this through now several times and it gives a little more with each reading. Thanks for posting. Colin.
Comment is about Legacy (blog)
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Of course, MC, it wouldn’t be slightly tipped if the ET was looking at it from under Antarctica; and who knows from what direction an ET would come.
Comment is about A WORLD TURNED UPSIDE DOWN (blog)
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Oven ready? Love it!
You may never get any contribution to your funeral from Forward but you give us cost-free chuckles that are worth
more.
I start by lying on my back but need to turn sideways to
occupy a sort of get set position prior to starting for the
Land of Nod. It works for me.
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Thanks Douglas,
For stopping by, reading and dropping note over my poetry.
Happy reading,
Ankita.
Comment is about Douglas MacGowan (poet profile)
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This serves as a reminder that we tend to view the world
according to the position that each of us occupies!
But from extra-terrestrial viewpoint, the slightly tipped
world is seen in the overall setting in which compass
directions hold to their meanings...give or take.
Comment is about A WORLD TURNED UPSIDE DOWN (blog)
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I found myself drawn into this tale of a tail-end departure,
recognising all too well the scenario as well as the action,
to borrow from the film world. I'm left wondering how this
was managed into an entry in poetical form (never mind the
other sort!) but it had a terrible fascination through to its
fundamental (ouch) finale.
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Come on you white men- it's a popular acronym used by Bolton Wanderers fans for their heroes dressed in white
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Greg Freeman
Thu 18th Jan 2018 17:26
Never knew that about Wetwang, Stu. We didn't stray that far when we lived in York. But I certainly remember Richard Whiteley from watching Yorkshire TV's Calendar at the time. And reporter Edwina Tarpley, who was always very concerned about "Gwimsby's" fishing industry. Rightly so, as it turned out.
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