<Deleted User> (18980)
Tue 4th Dec 2018 15:54
Hugh - a really good piece, not too heavy, and a distinct change from your usual style which shows you have more than one string to your bow.
Comment is about The wonder of the worm (blog)
Original item by hugh
Just checked in Cieran following your comment on Auburn Hair. Your technique really makes for poetic form and satisfaction, repeating first lines to take us at a lovely pace through the muse .
This is something I fear I may poach in the future, having seen it in action!
The very best . Ray
Comment is about TODAY (blog)
Original item by Ciaran Cunningham
<Deleted User> (18980)
Tue 4th Dec 2018 15:51
Hi Ray - as Sir John Betjeman is my favourite poet I can't help but like this and the way you read it. Perhaps he would have have put one or two more rhymes in?
Comment is about AUBURN HAIR (blog)
Original item by ray pool
An evergreen theme down the ages, with a popularity frequently
found in films for the widest audience. Cue: boo...hiss for the
femme fatale - or the cad and bounder! We like to think that "true
love" will prevail for the happy ending. Sadly, not always the case
in true life. Divorce lawyers smile a lot, I'm sure.
Comment is about The Huntress (blog)
Original item by Taylor Crowshaw
Big Sal
Tue 4th Dec 2018 15:48
The juxtaposition of ideas and flow of the rhythm combine to make this piece one for the books.
Very well done on this.?
Comment is about Trilogy --- (hybrid) (blog)
Original item by Pagan Poetry
Big Sal
Tue 4th Dec 2018 15:47
Great choice of words here, Ray. Glad to have read it. Each successive piece reveals more than the last in terms of poetic diction and range of ability.?
Comment is about AUBURN HAIR (blog)
Original item by ray pool
Which takes me to a question I have about the Saturday theme blogs.
When it's five past midnight here in the UK
On each and every Saturday
What time (and day?) is it, I wonder,
With our poets hard at work down under?
Comment is about Wake Up Brian. It's 7am (blog)
Original item by Don Matthews
I enjoyed this imaginative analogy of the music of nature and the
music of mankind. There is a genuine history of the influence of
one upon the other, with some of the most memorable still played
today - e..g. The Moldau (Smetana) and "Fingal's Cave >The
Hebrides Overture" (Mendelsohnn). And, of course, we have the master - Beethoven - with his country wanderings giving us his famous "Pastoral" Symphony.
Comment is about Rhythm of the Winds (blog)
Original item by Suko Waspodo
An informative and entertaining foray into farmland and wider pastures. I've occasionally wondered about the direction taken by
these rarely considered life-forms - does a worm turn? (recalling
an old saying).
Comment is about The wonder of the worm (blog)
Original item by hugh
Thank you for reading The Huntress Khaled..
Comment is about Khaled Selem (poet profile)
Original item by Khaled Selem
Thanks Big Sal. I get deja vu quite often. It was included in my second book? Not on WoL prior to this.
So pleased you enjoyed it..?
Comment is about The Huntress (blog)
Original item by Taylor Crowshaw
An engaging vignette of an everyday incident from the past, with its
characters and the setting springing to life before us in these words.
Hold very tight please! It's well worth the ride.
Comment is about AUBURN HAIR (blog)
Original item by ray pool
John - my point basically was that "poverty" has changed its meaning
from other days - when it was a killer - and even when it became
less so, it still saw kids without shoes here in the UK. My childhood
knew a milder form - when in postwar Britain, rationing still continued
for some years before the days of central heating and winter fuel
allowances et al. Out of interest I enquired about the "official"
current definition but failed to obtain to obtain an answer. I note
from a media report that it is seen as 60% of an average income
(then, of course, we have to ask what THAT is!). But there is no
doubt that poverty in its older sense is far removed from today's
version.
Comment is about A judgement of conscience (blog)
Original item by John E Marks
Loved this, I could listen to you read all day ?
Comment is about AUBURN HAIR (blog)
Original item by ray pool
Thanks Big Sal & poemagraphic. Your kind words are appreciated ?
Comment is about TO CHOOSE (blog)
Original item by Ciaran Cunningham
This article warms my heart and those young voices need to be applauded and encouraged. All of us, all poets need to write and speak out loud and confront injustice and pejudice.
A very interesting and enlightening article. Thank you
Keith Jeffries
Comment is about Meet Rwanda's Rising Young Poets (article)
Original item by Mike Took
Big Sal
Tue 4th Dec 2018 11:56
Obviously as long as the poem fits the literal definition of a sonnet - it is in fact by definition - a sonnet.
Twisting it may make a new, unheard of type of sonnet however. Eventually someone will name it, and life will go on.
Honestly, they most likely endure through the ages because as a style, they are easy to learn, hard to master, and even a child could formulate one. As with other types of art, they are often the best and worst way to showcase the outer limits available on itself. Best being the fact that when done correctly they can be some of the best poetry to grace a page. When worse however, people overdo them, don't do them correctly, or never bother to perfect their current skill. The same as with fixing a car, lugging a nut, or anything else that requires mild thought and flexible fingers.
Comment is about The Enduring Appeal of the Sonnet Form (article)
Original item by Mike Took
Big Sal
Tue 4th Dec 2018 11:49
The titles, the substance, the wordplay, you have some fucking excellent work on this.
Great job, it really is something else.?
Comment is about December musings (blog)
Original item by Mark Harris
Big Sal
Tue 4th Dec 2018 11:48
Now I know why I keep seeing Poetry Foundation advertisements. Other than the blatant commercialism that is.?
Comment is about American Life in Poetry: The Girl From Panama (article)
Original item by Mike Took
Big Sal
Tue 4th Dec 2018 11:46
"Never pay the piper unless his songs can make you cry."
- Micheal "Eyedea" Larsen
Great piece, Martin. The ruminations it brought forth from the quote above cannot be overstated. ?
Comment is about Pay (blog)
Original item by Martin Elder
Big Sal
Tue 4th Dec 2018 11:44
Second to last stanza sticks out like a sore thumb. ?
Well done on another one with film-like descriptions.
I don't know why, but I got deja vu while reading this piece. Regardless, it is always a treat.?
Comment is about The Huntress (blog)
Original item by Taylor Crowshaw
Led across icy plateaus of white bedecked folly
I think this is my favourite line. Although it is hard to choose in this poem because there are so many which are nicely rounded off with
and no one thinks to ask
Nice one Keith . Love it
Comment is about The Non Event (blog)
Original item by keith jeffries
Through all you have said here I can understand your desire to be alone. This poem puts me in mind of Rodin's the thinker who seems to me is a person left on their own with time to enjoy their own thoughts.
Nice one
Comment is about Alone (blog)
Original item by Joey Nelson
I love the empty clarity of this poem. I fill my life with too much stuff and therefore admire others that don't. Sometimes there is a comfort in the silent nothingness that this provokes for me.
Nice one
Comment is about Standing in the crowd (blog)
Original item by David R Mellor
Thank you Martin it is always encouraging to read your comments on my poetry. I appreciate them greatly..?
Jon, Hope is the one thing we cling to even in times of sadness. Although a spark of hope does sometimes bring feelings of guilt too..thank you for commenting your voice is always valued..?
Comment is about The Huntress (blog)
Original item by Taylor Crowshaw
David, thanks you for your comments.
There is no need for apologise. My ego likes to see 'likes' and 'comments', but I try to let that go. Not always successfully, I hasten to add. ?
Comment is about No Silence (blog)
Original item by Jon Stainsby
Wonderfully put John.
Nice one
Comment is about The Doors of Perception. (blog)
Original item by John E Marks
This brings up emotions of sadness and of hope in me. A lovely poem.
Comment is about The Huntress (blog)
Original item by Taylor Crowshaw
I like this a lot Taylor. I think your poetry is going from strength to strength not only in format but in choice of subject which you really seem to get to grips with here. None of us like to be hunted and I am guessing that for some who are more vulnerable it can be a nightmare.
Nice one
Comment is about The Huntress (blog)
Original item by Taylor Crowshaw
just the mention of the word Ceasar reminds of the thirties film 'Little Ceasar'. I also like the undercover of mechanical seasons
Nice one Adam
Comment is about Ballad Of The Secret Diary (blog)
Original item by Adam Whitworth
A truly fabulous poem Beno I am sorry to have missed this one before. There is a real vivid richness about this one which I think would go down really well performed live.
A well deserved POTW. Congratulations
Comment is about Our Poem of the Week is ‘Scooter Club and the Lost Boys’ by Beno (article)
Original item by steve pottinger
Hi David,
I really appreciate your comments. Human frailty, I too have been the hunter and hunted. Escape is possible.. Some relationships are just toxic, yet each of the participants with another partner can be perfectly normal and happy.
A lifetime of experiences has taught me that there is always hope. We are the masters of our own destiny..it is about choices.
Interesting take on the word spear...a subconscious message perhaps. ?
Comment is about The Huntress (blog)
Original item by Taylor Crowshaw
Thanks Mr. Keith.
Much appreciation from the other side...
Comment is about Don't Say Goodbye (blog)
Original item by Kporho Raphael Oyeke
<Deleted User> (18980)
Tue 4th Dec 2018 07:56
My sleep pattern's a bit all over the place these days. Sometimes I wake up before I've even gone to bed! Take today for example...this is the earliest I've ever been late.
Comment is about Wake Up Brian. It's 7am (blog)
Original item by Don Matthews
Brian he likes to be on top
When giving Brian-like quips
I'm sure he want's to do this
And still maintain his grip
He'll need to think and put his
UK neurons in action
Coz I have had all day to put
My Aussie ones in traction ?
Comment is about Wake Up Brian. It's 7am (blog)
Original item by Don Matthews
I really enjoyed this David. I was born and brought up yards from the sea. I moved many years ago but always there is a yearning to return. ?
Comment is about NOT REALLY A STRANGER (blog)
Original item by David Subacchi
Like the poem D.K. but I am with Jennifer...not always the case..?
Comment is about The Longer You Live (blog)
Original item by d.knape
Interesting poem Keith like it a lot. Chasing a feeling of security and happiness with little understanding, but a good dollop of nostalgia..as always excellent poem.?
Comment is about The Non Event (blog)
Original item by keith jeffries
Too true Elle ?
Comment is about Be Careful What You Do For Love (blog)
Original item by Elle Shaine
Thanks guys as always. It was fun to try out the challenge of a new structure, but it's not quite there yet - I'm not happy with the ultimate message of the repeating lines. As you say Big Sal, I think these lines need to be really strong, and mine are not quite there. Like my Haiku, I'm still a beginner - but I'm really learning how practice makes...not perfect, but improvement at least!
Comment is about My first-born (blog)
Original item by Becky Who
Great poem - but not always true unfortunately. Italian drivers only stop at pedestrian crossings (sometimes) for old people, but always if you are pushing a pram! Safer to go around with an empty one.
Jennifer
Comment is about The Longer You Live (blog)
Original item by d.knape
Big Sal
Mon 3rd Dec 2018 20:19
Bluntly spoken but nicely done.?
Comment is about TO CHOOSE (blog)
Original item by Ciaran Cunningham
Big Sal
Mon 3rd Dec 2018 20:13
Big Sal
Mon 3rd Dec 2018 20:09
Beautiful piece evoking nostalgia and soft remorse with a twinge of closure.
Very well done, Hazel, I appreciated the message within.?
Comment is about Ghost 3 (blog)
Original item by Hazel Connelly
Congratulations, Randy
Comment is about The Write Out Loud Poem of the Week is ‘Confessions’ by Randy Horton (article)
Original item by steve pottinger
You can find more of my work on Write Out Loud and also on line simply by searching for DAVID SUBACCHI POET.
My 6th collection WHERE IS WALES? will be out in early 2019.
Comment is about NOT REALLY A STRANGER (blog)
Original item by David Subacchi
<Deleted User> (18980)
Tue 4th Dec 2018 16:03
MC - the Aussies know that we Brits are ahead of our time.
Comment is about Wake Up Brian. It's 7am (blog)
Original item by Don Matthews