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Big Sal

Wed 12th Sep 2018 18:40

I had a friend that once wrote a book and compared go-getters to eagles, and those that wait for opportunities to chickens. I love all birds, but this piece reminded me of that, and couldn't help but share this fact.

Great piece.?

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Taylor Crowshaw

Wed 12th Sep 2018 18:33

Peace and beauty..a beautiful relaxing poem transporting me right there Ray..I am on the side of the pond just stood quietly watching. Thank you..?

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Damon Blackery

Wed 12th Sep 2018 18:23

Me too.

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Taylor Crowshaw

Wed 12th Sep 2018 18:14

I really relate to this poem. Poetry came looking for me to it knocked on the door until I had to let it out. ?

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Taylor Crowshaw

Wed 12th Sep 2018 18:09

great imagery... Mondays yuk..

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Taylor Crowshaw

Wed 12th Sep 2018 18:08

Nice Hayley...?

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Taylor Crowshaw

Wed 12th Sep 2018 18:07

I enjoyed this poem thank you..?

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Taylor Crowshaw

Wed 12th Sep 2018 18:05

Last stanza says it all Keith.. Good poem thank you for sharing. ?

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Tapashree Roy

Wed 12th Sep 2018 16:58

❤ the sample

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Laura Taylor

Wed 12th Sep 2018 13:33

Cheers Big Sal!

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HayzTee (Hayley)

Wed 12th Sep 2018 13:20

poem i wrote in college ages ago ?

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Wed 12th Sep 2018 10:56

Very clever Becky...

Nice one!


Cheers

DJB

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Wed 12th Sep 2018 10:55

Wow that is something else Ian

I absolutely love the opening Stanza... (it was so good the whole poem could have stopped there, but thankfully it didn't).

Cheers

DJB

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Wed 12th Sep 2018 10:53

Wonderful Ray

I love the simplicity of the event and how vivid and exciting you make it sound.
I love the 'tiny spread of time' and the thought of the 'heat sighing in the glade'


Great!

Cheers

DJB

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Wed 12th Sep 2018 10:47

Sound advice that I can relate to.

Cheers

DJB

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Wed 12th Sep 2018 10:41

Great poem - I echo the words from Becky.

Well spotted - I don't think I had ever noticed the little man in the corner before and would certainly not have thought to look at the words on his page.

Cheers

DJB

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Don Matthews

Wed 12th Sep 2018 10:16

I like this. Particularly as Becky says with Poetry coming looking for you and not vice versa. ?

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Becky Who

Wed 12th Sep 2018 09:59

Me too! The first couple of stanzas speak to me particularly. I love the idea of poetry coming looking.

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John Coopey

Wed 12th Sep 2018 09:15

Thanks, Don. I think when he becomes Prime Minister he will find a telephone booth, rip of his clothes to reveal himself as the new Superman of British politics and lead the country to glory. Or else he’ll continue to be the entertaining, devious, self-serving oaf that he is.

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Greg Freeman

Wed 12th Sep 2018 08:01

Many thanks for your generous comments, Taylor, David, and Ray. I was moved to write this poem earlier this year after being invited to take part in a Remembrance Day event in Twickenham as part of the Richmond literature festival. Sunday November 11 also marks the centenary of the end of the first world war. I'm very happy to be involved in something on the actual day, and in that way to be paying tribute to my great-grandfather - and my mum, too. This poem didn't make the final cut for the event, so I thought I'd share it here.

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AVISHEK GHOSH

Wed 12th Sep 2018 07:44

Excellent

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AVISHEK GHOSH

Wed 12th Sep 2018 07:41

Thanks Taylor.I want to express my deep gratitude to you.Your comments are so encouraging and helpful.I often think to stop writing poems but comments like yours always prompt me to write.Thanks again.

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Becky Who

Wed 12th Sep 2018 05:39

Hi, thanks for commenting "I hope the sleep function is working". Your comments and feedback are always appreciated. I wrote it when arriving into bed a few hours after my husband, as I often do, as the dead of night is the only really poetry oppportunity for me. How poetry fits into couples' lives could be an interesting discussion thread...

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Don Matthews

Wed 12th Sep 2018 05:16

Why not just forget the last line, hey? Would solve so many problems Eden. Ah, but we humans are suckers. I blame it on the chemicals racing round inside us. Win some lose some. Such is life hey Eden? ?

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Timothy David Ashe

Wed 12th Sep 2018 03:56

Thank you Rose !

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AVISHEK GHOSH

Wed 12th Sep 2018 02:44

Beautiful. Love the lines.

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AVISHEK GHOSH

Wed 12th Sep 2018 02:43

Excellent.

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Don Matthews

Wed 12th Sep 2018 02:25

What a pity
Me Down Under
Missing all this
Boris wonder

Yes I wonder
What I read
Things start good
Then go to seed

Trouble is
So far away
Can get things wrong
Did Boris play?

Surely not?
Politic power
Did not keep
Him in his bower?

You can see
I'm rambling on
Not a clue
What Boris done

So I'll stop...




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Big Sal

Wed 12th Sep 2018 02:21

Give 'em some greens Ray, much better for them.?

Great poem. Brought to mind the blue bill of a Ruddy, and the iridescence of the Cayuga.

Simple yet effective.?

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Don Matthews

Wed 12th Sep 2018 02:07

I like this ?

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Wed 12th Sep 2018 00:14

was just about to get my jim-jammed ariss in pit but decided to have a last root through the blogs....

thank f I did! seeing this absolute gem, I thought holy shit!
the big guy strikes again! and in a f big way!

big enough to get bunged on as POTW....deffo!

top shelf stuff Ian. Big pat on a very big talented back.



Rose ?

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Marie Alyza

Wed 12th Sep 2018 00:11

I agree with Peter. This is so peaceful. Great work. Thank you for sharing.

Take care,
Aly

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Tue 11th Sep 2018 23:54

a fantastically faultless piece that carries with it so many truths that can be easily related to by so many people for sure.

loved the gentle flow, Timothy.




Rose ?

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Tue 11th Sep 2018 23:48

lovely poem Noris and just as lovely to see you back again!






Rose ?

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John Coopey

Tue 11th Sep 2018 23:25

Many thanks, Brian and Marie.

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Peter Taylor

Tue 11th Sep 2018 23:08

A real beauty, well done! A world in a world - and so peaceful. A GREAT POEM.

Peter

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Robert C Gaulke

Tue 11th Sep 2018 23:02

Thanks for the feedback.

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Marie Alyza

Tue 11th Sep 2018 22:59

Thank you, Martin, for the great feedback on my writings. I really appreciate it. ♥

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Martin Elder

Tue 11th Sep 2018 22:47

Thanks Hannah. I am glad you liked it. It means a lot cheers

Thanks also to Mark for your comments. you are right gone are the days when you might see old guys sitting round tables in certain parts of the pub chewing the cud. It was interesting that in some pubs I use to frequent as a young man there would be a real mix of people who dug roads for a living and those who were airline pilots. It seemed to work well. It was probably the village that I lived in where that was able to take place.

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Martin Elder

Tue 11th Sep 2018 22:41

There is an almost casual quality about your work that reminds of 1960's British black and white films that is also very gritty and tender at the same time.
Wonderful

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Martin Elder

Tue 11th Sep 2018 22:39

A wonderful metaphor for love carefully hidden yet there for everybody to see.
Love it

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Martin Elder

Tue 11th Sep 2018 22:38

I love the detail you have applied to this piece. It really sets it apart from other poems.
Nice one

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raypool

Tue 11th Sep 2018 22:07

A sort of nihilism here Robert, but the ideas are novel and ironic. Please excuse me saying but I think the poem would be stronger without the last three verses. Just my view, but it seems to go for a walk...

with respect. Ray

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raypool

Tue 11th Sep 2018 22:03

Incredibly sensitive and considered writing Ian. There is sadness but not mawkishness, and a comfort in its span.
The magic lanterns a perfect idea, and where demons rein we have to be bold and challenge them to find the ties of love. Just marvellous and moving.

Ray

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raypool

Tue 11th Sep 2018 21:57

I think this is a clever play on a simple theme with a twist that makes it well worth considering Becky. The kind of separation that can exist with couples always interests me, as it challenges romantic ideals in poetry, which are always plentiful.

Ray

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raypool

Tue 11th Sep 2018 21:49

A wonderful slice of real life Greg; you breathe so much into your work, and as David has said this has great resonance. A connection with the past is so important in a family context. When my mum passed I took it on myself to find out about her past - a tricky task but a rewarding one in many ways.

I hope this can be read at an appropriate time this year.

Ray

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raypool

Tue 11th Sep 2018 21:41

Yes David. A matter of perspective, observation, borders, possibilities - all these things must bring to bear on any assessment, and I appreciate your own as you know.
Ironically, that line was just an illustration of what one reads on gravestones rather than a pointed reference to any bigger picture. But follow such things we do , and that is right for any poetry. We could just call it a clue....
I think taken as a given, the length of any life and its validity can never honestly be pinned down , except perhaps by the degree of grief it produces.

Poetry can be divisive, and also inclusive. Both need apply.

I need to get my coat.

Much appreciated. Ray

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Marie Alyza

Tue 11th Sep 2018 21:23

I've read this twice. First, I read it quietly so I can fully understand. Second, out loud so I can experience it. This is a great poem. Thank you for sharing! ♥

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Marie Alyza

Tue 11th Sep 2018 21:14

Direct and honest especially the first 3 lines. Thank you for sharing! ♥

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Marie Alyza

Tue 11th Sep 2018 20:49

I enjoyed listening to this. I was smiling the whole time. Great voice! Thank you for sharing!

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