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Stu Buck

Wed 10th Apr 2019 19:57

this is excellent ian. i used to buy cider lollies for that very reason. can never find them any more. makes me long for days not long passed.

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John Coopey

Wed 10th Apr 2019 18:26

Strewth, Graham. Give it chance to cool down!

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Graham Sherwood

Wed 10th Apr 2019 18:23

None needed!

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mona s

Wed 10th Apr 2019 17:58

Don, Thank you.. Appreciate your comments.. ?

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raypool

Wed 10th Apr 2019 17:56

Thanks Des, jeronth and Dorothy for stopping by !

Hi martin. Always good to get your feedback knowing that my stuff can appeal over time!

Thanks Steve. You must enjoy weird perhaps. that's me.

David, you look different today! All astute points thanks. Any dark place will do for me. I like the analogy of the Pharoahs, obviously on a more modest scale and either way impossible in actuality - but why let the facts ruin a good belief system? The jazz background was variations on French classical themes, hardly audible but it stopped half way through. Not really planned. Cheers..

Rachel, Hi. In the psychic canon there are the Akashic records, a sort of imprint in detail as you describe. Worth checking out while some sanity remains.

Thanks Hazel - glad you liked it and the afterthought!

Ray

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Wed 10th Apr 2019 15:35

Last line is perfect, ominous. I'm guessing the immediate pre-Thatcher period?

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victoriavautaw@gmail.com

Wed 10th Apr 2019 15:21

Thank you Dorothy! I keep playing with the last few stanzas. Sometimes a poem never feels finished, which is probably a good thing on the subject of mortality!

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Wed 10th Apr 2019 15:20

Thanks Don. I love the way line breaks affects the rhythm of a poem.

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Laura Taylor

Wed 10th Apr 2019 14:59

Haha Trev - I kept meaning to do one anyway ?

Yeh, I like the first one best too, but thought I'd be a smart-arse and cycle through the seasons, keeping in sight of the prompt ?

Also - I can't decide between this last line, or

'in bleak midwinter'

Whaddaya reckon?

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John Marks

Wed 10th Apr 2019 14:10

they or we or ep?

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John Marks

Wed 10th Apr 2019 14:03

Fate or chance at the root of things? But certainly not human volition. This argument has been with us as long as the plum trees. Well-penned Becky and well done. John

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elPintor

Wed 10th Apr 2019 13:57

Thanks for your support, Martin--reader's response does make communication a bit less pointless.

Rachel ;

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Laura Taylor

Wed 10th Apr 2019 13:56

You have perfect rhythm Trev ?

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Tom Doolan

Wed 10th Apr 2019 13:48

Hi Laura
A nicely woven and well-crafted Celtic tale.
Sláinte Tom :)

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Laura Taylor

Wed 10th Apr 2019 13:14

I really loved the build up of this, and in a weird way it reminded me of Nick Cave lyrics.

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Ian Whiteley

Wed 10th Apr 2019 12:54

blimey - has 'things we buried in the garden' finally silenced you Don? I suspect not ?

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Nigel Astell

Wed 10th Apr 2019 11:53

Awakening Immortality

Mythological travelling begins
poetic musical surrealism
colours illustrious mind
don't get left behind.

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Hazel ettridge

Wed 10th Apr 2019 09:23

Your comment "the music has stopped now..... sadly" definitely felt like the perfect ending to this beautiful poem.

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Laura Taylor

Wed 10th Apr 2019 09:17

Thanks very much Dorothy and Trevor ?

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Laura Taylor

Wed 10th Apr 2019 09:16

Fab! Totally in synch with the original ?

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Wed 10th Apr 2019 07:29

Vautaw
i love this haunting poem
Dorothy

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DESMOND CHILDS

Wed 10th Apr 2019 05:53

Thanks Don, very much appreciate that you think it is.

All the best des

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Don Matthews

Wed 10th Apr 2019 04:45

Vautaw. I'm an experimenter. I like people who try new things. I like the 'pause-absorb, then carry on' approach. Chanting' does just this. Separated in it's own line it makes you pause, absorb the 'chanting' idea before carrying on. Mixed up in a line with everything else it would get lost.

To me

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John Marks

Wed 10th Apr 2019 03:48

Thank you!

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victoriavautaw@gmail.com

Wed 10th Apr 2019 03:32

Thanks Don! ? I’m experimenting with prose poetry/essay which is a switch in form for me. It’s good to change things up once in a while!

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Wed 10th Apr 2019 03:23

Thank you Don! ?

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Stu Buck

Wed 10th Apr 2019 01:56

like this kealan. nice to see some concrete poetry on here as i know formatting it isnt the easiest!

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Jeannot

Wed 10th Apr 2019 00:04

Don, thank you very much for taking the time to read and like

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Don Matthews

Tue 9th Apr 2019 23:35

This rhyme is interesting
For what it does forth bring
Stalking Brian in the wings?
Ring-a-ding-a-ding ?

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Don Matthews

Tue 9th Apr 2019 23:28

I like this Jeannot

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Don Matthews

Tue 9th Apr 2019 23:25

Very good Vautaw

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Don Matthews

Tue 9th Apr 2019 23:23

I like this Mona. Good rhyming. You caught me out on 'cerebration' though. Thought it was meant to be 'celebration'. Guess relates to cerebral.

T'other night I had a dream
A visit from the Queen
I had to sweep the leaves away
From entrance, don't want seen

I must be extra special
For her to fly so far
My mind was cerebrating
Acting quite bizarre

When I awoke in morning
Relieved, when out of bed
On looking round discovered
All house flowers were dead ?

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Don Matthews

Tue 9th Apr 2019 23:04

Slousol down, I see it
Plural 'cross I see
What the heck are slousol's?
C'mon tell me please ?

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Don Matthews

Tue 9th Apr 2019 22:56

Very good Desmond

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Jason Bayliss

Tue 9th Apr 2019 22:12

Thanks Dorothy, I'm really pleased you like it.

J. x

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Martin Elder

Tue 9th Apr 2019 21:01

Some powerful lines here Rachel in so few words, Particularly the last line.
Fabulous poetry

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victoriavautaw@gmail.com

Tue 9th Apr 2019 20:46

What a view to behold. Beautiful John. Your poetry never fails to deliver. ?

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d.knape

Tue 9th Apr 2019 19:06


what happened to Don Matthews?
if found, tell him his mother
wants him to call.

?

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Tue 9th Apr 2019 17:52

Have you been stalking me Trev?

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Jeannot

Tue 9th Apr 2019 17:27

David,

Thank you for your insightful comments, I really appreciate them. Although the poem refers to coming back to writing poetry, I am afraid your view is still relevant!

You gave me too much credit for layout, I just made a mess of the cut and paste process.

Looking forward to continue exchanging with you.

Regards,

Jeannot

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DESMOND CHILDS

Tue 9th Apr 2019 17:18

Thank you Steve for the comments much appreciated, thanks Dorothy, Anya and Rachel for the likes.



All the best des

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Trevor Alexander

Tue 9th Apr 2019 16:32

Title with a nod to Ian Dury.

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John Coopey

Tue 9th Apr 2019 16:21

Thanks Don.

The judges agree as we speak
A sure fire winner for Poem of the Week

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elPintor

Tue 9th Apr 2019 16:20

"..it was really with him somewhere amongst the stars..."

They say time is really a figment of our imaginations--a feeble attempt at placing parameters through which we can wrestle some understanding of the universe. It's said that every moment that ever existed, or ever will, is captured within a frame like a photo, though we aren't prepared to perceive.

"We are stardust..."

Rachel

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Don Matthews

Tue 9th Apr 2019 15:24

Like your rhyme
Back this time
Sweet and simple
Minus grime

Could say fuck
NHS
Instead I'll say
Brexit's mess

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Don Matthews

Tue 9th Apr 2019 15:07

I'm sure there's something here and I'd like to say something but I don't know what...

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Nigel Astell

Tue 9th Apr 2019 14:49

Never mind cleaning the house!
we had a full one
packed to the brim
more seats to be found
meaning that this collage poem
had much more to offer
as can be seen in
our very own true Stockport style.

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Nigel Astell

Tue 9th Apr 2019 14:31

thanks for your like on Soul Searching Jeronth

looked at My Demons

Most times I can taste my soul

a good poem with so much inside that is not revealed

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dorinda macdowell

Tue 9th Apr 2019 14:18

Hi John! What do you want for a theme for next time? - could just be "theme"?????? - over to you! - thanks, Dorinda

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Tue 9th Apr 2019 14:06

I do hope that Eve had the orchard part of the garden - the part with all the 'forbiden' fruit. She deserves a bit of fun after being chased by snake.

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