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keith jeffries

Sun 1st Sep 2019 22:03

Does the old flame still burn? The poem implies a sense of hope, not entirely abandoned.
A good poem
Thanks
Keith

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Mae Foreman

Sun 1st Sep 2019 21:30

I've always been a tad self conscious for having kind of a husky voice for a girl but "chocolatey" makes up for a lifetime of "Hello son, It's Mr. Whatshisname from Whereverton, could you pass your mother on the phone please?"
Thank you Jason ?
Mae

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Mae Foreman

Sun 1st Sep 2019 21:22

Love the structure and the story!
Thank you?
Mae

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Mae Foreman

Sun 1st Sep 2019 21:06

Every single word of this poem is impeccably placed, sharp as a razor, universal notions. I have no words. This is a masterpiece! You seem to be writing many of those lately. But of all of them this definitely stands out as a timeless reflection of the human soul. Excellent ?
Mae

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Jason Bayliss

Sun 1st Sep 2019 21:06

Yes Mae, I definitely saw this as a musical piece, wild, orchestrated violence and melodic soothing.

J. x

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Mae Foreman

Sun 1st Sep 2019 21:02

Ingenious inception! Well planned and crafted! Contact Tom Waits? Very well done my friend!?
Mae

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Jason Bayliss

Sun 1st Sep 2019 21:00

And I'd just like this opportunity to thank Mae so much. I've always loved the beautiful rich chocolatey tones of your voice Mae, and I was the one who felt a bit cheeky for asking if you'd do it. Thanks again my friend, I absolutely love your recital.

And thanks Rob and Fish for your kind analysis and comments.

J. x

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Mae Foreman

Sun 1st Sep 2019 20:59

Fascinating! The idea of those two hands belonging to a conductor, an actual man a maestro, master of the universe conducting a celestial and earthly orchestra, harnessing the forces of nature; turning thunder to percussions and silence to violins...music is as haunting, as exquisite and as wild as creation! And a conductor is pretty much God holding all that in his hands! Excellent! ?
Mae

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Tommy Carroll

Sun 1st Sep 2019 20:55

But Chrystel why the "rhyme" or the "rhythm"?

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Mae Foreman

Sun 1st Sep 2019 20:51

I am loving these comments almost as much I'm loving this ingenious poem! Kudos Jason?
Mae

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Mae Foreman

Sun 1st Sep 2019 20:49

A masterpiece dear Jason, master of rhyme and rhythm. Loved it ?Inhave always been bad at analyses, words are not enough here, alt least words would sell my mind short. I'll be reading this again and again. Lovely, staggering. Kudos ?
Mae

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afishamongmany

Sun 1st Sep 2019 20:44

d.k. you speak plainly, straightforwardly of one of the greatest causes of why 'civilisation' is where it is today. The two great wars meant that for generations there just were not enough fathers to perpetuate fatherhood as a core component of society. Then seeped in the wholesale denigration of patriarchy and 'Jack the Lad' become the dominant male role model.
Thanks for your gentle male voice.
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Mae Foreman

Sun 1st Sep 2019 20:42

Thank you so much dear Jason for the honor of trusting your poem with me!
Thank you Robert, it is such a beautiful poem one or Jason's best! It was a great honor to recite it and I'm glad you like it!
And thank you Fish, I tried my best! I'm relatively new at this and I always try to improve but mostly I hope to do justice by the poet's work. I hope I did.
Thank you all, but mostly Jason!?
Mae

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afishamongmany

Sun 1st Sep 2019 20:26

Yes Jason - well written, thought provoking. Well read Mae, right pace and rhythm for the piece.
Go well
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Robert Mann

Sun 1st Sep 2019 20:15

Jason - this is a beautifully written piece, made more so by Mae's sultry tones. There are so many outstanding lines throughout that I don't know which are my favourites. It somehow reads differently to Mae's rendition, but to me, this only makes it twice as good. Congratulations on the writing Jason and thank you Mae for adding another dimension.
Rob

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M.C. Newberry

Sun 1st Sep 2019 17:48

My own final comment on this "interesting" situation is that this is
less about democracy and more about its manipulation to suit a
purpose. The most ground-breaking example of the word in its
proper sense was the majority vote in a national poll on staying in
or departing from the European Union - granted by Parliament
itself. The result seems to have been against expectations.
To disenfranchise that same vote now by raising non-existent
inclusions/conditions applicable to that vote is a manipulation of democracy.


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Ruth O'Reilly

Sun 1st Sep 2019 17:23

Don I hope you aren't going to be in need of a hearing aid soon we'll get Leon a loudspeaker in the meanwhile

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John Coopey

Sun 1st Sep 2019 15:57

The most alarming thing for me is that so many people are not alarmed by the fact that they went to bed one night in a democracy and woke up the next morning in a dictatorship.

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M.C. Newberry

Sun 1st Sep 2019 15:39

Timely indeed and full of old but perennially relevant wisdom about
the importance of a "dad" in life. I lost my own father before I was
old enough to know him (I was five) and my step-father sadly
suffered by comparison in retrospect, perhaps because he had previously brought up a family of his own and was old enough
to be my grandfather when I was moving through my formative
years and he became a distant figure in my own life. However,
I was to become more self-reliant, so there can be a positive
side to some negative aspects experienced in growing up.

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Robert C Gaulke

Sun 1st Sep 2019 15:35

Cheers.

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M.C. Newberry

Sun 1st Sep 2019 15:16

It's pleasing to see considered if conflicting views about this most
important chapter in the history of these islands. To get a proper
perspective we need to go back to the immediate post-war days
when the looming perceived threat from the arrival of the Russians
in Germany, with their "foothold" and (for the Yanks especially)
communist idealogy, suddenly the atrocities and would-be
enslavement of the free world by Nazi Germany were sidelined:
the new enemy was Russia! Encouraged by this thinking, certain
mindsets in Europe were encouraged to see a political buffer
of strength in a "united Europe", actively endorsed by the USA
with its huge financial interests and investment via the Marshall Plan and its own chosen position as the enemy of communism.
The "Common Market" became its innocuous innocent "front" and
the plan proceeded with participation by politicians/powerbrokers
willing to adopt stealth, deceit and want of truth (the latter
especially goes against our UK way of thinking!), Ted Heath
was warned by Geoffrey Rippon that the British people would never agree if they knew what was ahead and the decision that
they would not be told has haunted the Tories (and the
subsequent public trust in Parliament) ever since). After all,
if the occupants of that place were willing to indulge in conduct
that gave away its sovereignty to become a yellow star on a
made-up flag and to all intents and purposes be controlled by
rule from elsewhere, then the very word "sovereignty" is a risible
abuse of its real meaning for us here in these islands. Only by
a consensus within Parliament NOW to comply with the essential
example of democracy via the recent one-off/no second chance
national referendum can trust in Parliament be restored to its
rightful place. The real danger is that those in Parliament are
still bedevilled by thoughts that their own conceits and convictions
take precedence over that monumental public decision and that
only serves to exacerbate a fraught situation. It is said that
Cromwell meeting similar behaviour in his own time, dismissed
them: "Get ye gone for all the good ye do here" (or something
similar). Temporary parliamentary suspension seems a very
logical step under present circumstances and it also has a place
in the system with a new government seeking to "set out is stall" despite its opponents accusing the government of ulterior
motives e.g. actually seeking to do what the referendum
required of it - to LEAVE the EU and forego the endless self-deception that "they" (its opponents) know what is best for us.

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Don Matthews

Sun 1st Sep 2019 14:15

I like the photo John......

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Don Matthews

Sun 1st Sep 2019 14:10

Ruth, I know Leon wasn't singing it for me but I could feel what was left of his voice after traveling 10,000 miles down the wire under the sea. That is some feat! Maybe Leon if you could sing a bit louder next time, the signal might not be so feeble the time it gets to me...?

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Ruth O'Reilly

Sun 1st Sep 2019 13:57

Captivating us with your rhythmic tone Jason, love your heartfelt expression of the unequal distribution of power in society,

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Ruth O'Reilly

Sun 1st Sep 2019 13:48

Thank you so much Kate I really do appreciate you reading my work?

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Ruth O'Reilly

Sun 1st Sep 2019 13:48

Don I love a bit of song of the south's zip a dee doo dah the only song I believe I can sing in fact!

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Ruth O'Reilly

Sun 1st Sep 2019 13:46

Cheers Leon I did enjoy that song , being called a poet and how beautifully you sang it?

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Don Matthews

Sun 1st Sep 2019 12:59

Jason - interesting comments. Rhyme to me just tumbles out. I don't have to think much. As you say the structure and rhythm forces you pare down and focus. Prose, to me, takes more effort....

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Jason Bayliss

Sun 1st Sep 2019 12:55

Thanks Kate, very much appreciated.

Also thanks for liking Bon.

J. x

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Sun 1st Sep 2019 12:53

LOVE the rhythm and message, and juxtaposition of ideas. Really great Jason.

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Sun 1st Sep 2019 12:50

Really wonderful Ruth. I could adopt this as a war cry. Love your work.

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Don Matthews

Sun 1st Sep 2019 12:26

Why did you stop at the chorus Leon?.....?

Oh? you didn't know the words? Sorry to embarrass you....?

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Sun 1st Sep 2019 12:04

# For Ruths a jolly nice nice poet, Ruths a jolly nice p-o-e-t Ruths a jolly nice p-o-e-t and so says all of me! ?

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Jason Bayliss

Sun 1st Sep 2019 11:53

Thanks Keith and Don. There is something about the structure and rhythm of rhyme that forces me to pare down the rattling thoughts in my head. It helps me to focus. That's not to say that I don't like prose mind you, I love prose, but to write it I'd have to have a really clear thought or image present itself, and that doesn't happen too often for me.

J. x

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Don Matthews

Sun 1st Sep 2019 11:27

Thoughts from a simple lowly rhymer:

ee endings I liked.

The funneling lines, and end tumbling into insanity I liked.....

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keith jeffries

Sun 1st Sep 2019 11:18

Jason,

This poem is the world at a glance, a myraid of unravelled emotions and juxtaposed concepts. It has a strong element of despair but a glimmer of hope comes from it also .It is a poem for the reader to decide and draw conclusions from. I shall have to read it again soon as it merits some meditation.

Thank you for this
Keith

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Don Matthews

Sun 1st Sep 2019 11:16

Yep, it looks like I'm onna roll Ruth on WOL
Zippety zippety aye
I hope that I'm putting a smile on your face?
I'm chuckling away here Sunday

Say 'onna roll Ruth on WOL' 10 times quickly......betcha trip over ya tongue. ?.. get it? ???

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Ruth O'Reilly

Sun 1st Sep 2019 11:03

Thanks Jason a bit of New month motivation ?

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Jason Bayliss

Sun 1st Sep 2019 10:56

We all need a warrior spirit. Loved it.

J. x

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Ruth O'Reilly

Sun 1st Sep 2019 10:53

A round of virtual applause you're on a roll today Don?

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Don Matthews

Sun 1st Sep 2019 10:47

I did take your advice I did
Injected me with silly
I thought this silly investment would
Help me serve more willy

Willy-nilly ha ha....

Willy makes us happy
Nilly's opposite sad
This is such a silly rhyme
I'm such a silly boy, er lad

I hope my warrior spirit
To chuckle on a while
Has lifted all your spirits and
Put on your face a smile......

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Jason Bayliss

Sun 1st Sep 2019 10:19

Ok, I'm going to tentatively Wade in here. The European project had the potential to be good, however, as I've stated before, as far as I'm concerned, a true democracy is a mutually binding contract between leaders and people, i.e. you can send me to war to die and kill, and if I don't like you I can vote you out at some point, we are accountable to each other. My vote has to count right to the top. In the EU this was not true, and if it had been I'd have voted remain. But between one civil war and two world wars I think too much blood has been spilt by free democracies to give that up.
I don't like Boris but I think he may have actually played a blinder. The EU have laughed at our negotiating stance from the beginning thinking that whatever the leaders say parliament will stop it happening. Now he can go to them and say, "Right, no more f***ing about, you're just dealing with me and me alone, and I am prepared to walk away."
I mean, you could be right John, he might just be a mental megalomaniac, or very clever, I suppose only time will tell.

J. x

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d.knape

Sun 1st Sep 2019 10:03

No, you are not crazy
just of a different bent,
a life that is poetical
enjoy the Difference!

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keith jeffries

Sun 1st Sep 2019 09:48

And why not Don
Honestly said
Keith

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John Coopey

Sun 1st Sep 2019 09:26

A question for you, Don; would you have supported Hitler when he dissolved the Reichstag?

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Ruth O'Reilly

Sun 1st Sep 2019 09:07

Thank you for reading Raypool, Adriana and Don

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Ruth O'Reilly

Sun 1st Sep 2019 09:05

Definitely, Maybe...No I mean yes
You know you're a poet,
You must now confess
Bless what your given
Then your muse
Gives you more
Keeping writing
What's never
Been seen
Before ?

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Sun 1st Sep 2019 09:01


A question Don...would Australia allow itself to be governed by an alliance of NZ, Tonga, Fiji, Samoa etc? I thought not.

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John Coopey

Sun 1st Sep 2019 08:51

Wounds that won’t heal in our lifetime, Don.

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Raj Ferds

Sun 1st Sep 2019 08:50

Thank you Keith. Glad you connected with the poem. Yes, there is the divine in each of us.

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