eat eat
till all is done
and tell the story
in the shape of a bun

Comment is about Lunch Box (blog)

Original item by Belinda

feel for the ordinary
and the sublime
as time becomes a
hindrance
as we wait in line

Comment is about STOP. . . . . , a m e r i c a (blog)

Janet and Lauterra (may I call you Lo?) - Thanks for your feedback it is much appreciated. Its funny that you can write something and then it takes others to tell you how you made it work. You guys really help with the continual learning process. Hope to see you soon.

Seamus

Comment is about Time after time (blog)

Original item by Seamus Kelly

Ha ha. Very good.
That's all folks'. The game is up?
Or is it just beginning?
Some people never seem to recognize when they're onto a good thing. Both sides buttered or not.
Love Janet.xxx

Comment is about internal wails of protest (blog)

Hi Janet
Definite and not!
x

Comment is about she is strontium 90 (blog)

Errr. Do you think, maybe. Just maybe, Pete should have posted this one darling?

My ex-husband wouldn't agree with you for this poem.
Love Janet.xx

Comment is about she is strontium 90 (blog)

Do you like pizza by any chance then Rodney?

I say send him to his paradise then, he's not welcome in my house. ha ha.
I can live with or without pizza. Although if there's nowt else, i'll make a meal of it.
After all, wouldn't want to starve myself to death now would I.

Thanks for the read and many thoughts of what i could do with or without pizza in my life.
love Janet.xx

Comment is about AND THE WORD WAS PIZZA (blog)

Original item by Rodney Wood

Hi Rodney,
Love the "cheap as chips" line.
But sorry, i feel you didn't need the repetitive verse in between and cabbages, potatoes and peas would have been better served up as "vegetables."
That would allow a eader to create their own imagery?

Love Janet.xx

Comment is about MOORE, EMIN AND KOONS (blog)

Original item by Rodney Wood

Hi Seamus,
I'm in agreement with the others .
I feel the way you've stretched the length by repetition and short lines strengthens the long, drawn out process of life after retirement.
The boredom and tedium of nothing to do.

Well captured sentiment and makes me think of so many people i've known in similar positions.
Very poignant reminder.

Love Janet.xx

Comment is about Time after time (blog)

Original item by Seamus Kelly

really enjoyed the sentiment in this. I agree with Darren on the repetition
super.

Comment is about Time after time (blog)

Original item by Seamus Kelly

Thanks for that Darren - God I hope I was never like the bosses I wrote about.

Hard to believe that this poem was sparked by the not too inspiring theme for National Poetry day 08.

Comment is about Time after time (blog)

Original item by Seamus Kelly

I like this Seamus - I like this a lot. Repetition used as reinforcement to good effect and statements that are well, so true.
That rhetoric uttered from 'line managers' is stomach churning. From my background I hated it when a senior officer would roll out the superlatives about an officer killed on duty - when it was obvious that they didn't even know them. Senior Managers? I've s**t 'em.

Comment is about Time after time (blog)

Original item by Seamus Kelly

The hell of dark mornings eh?
Rodney

Comment is about Up with the lark (blog)

All a bit vague and generalsed.
Rodney

Comment is about Dream revised (blog)

Original item by Phil Golding

Dear Melissa

The poem is written with many feeling and emotions from your heart. Well done, quite descriptive with lovely metaphors which make the poem sounds beautiful. We do not have much rain here so it is quite different from you. But most of the time we do have a cold and blue sky. I love the mixture of feelings and the connections with the weather.There are a little melancholy in your words. But the write is wonderful.

PS: Thank you for the comment and your concern. Yes, I had some problem with my Internet and my computer, other then that I am fine.

Kind regards,
Zuzanna

Comment is about Stains of Rain (blog)

Hi Louise,
just to let you know, i think you did a great job of compering with Jeff at Wigan last night.
I know i told you that already but thought it might be nice to show appreciation in your profile.
Love Janet.xx

Comment is about Louise Fazackerley (poet profile)

Original item by Louise Fazackerley

Hi Jeff,
just to let you know, i think you did a great job of compering at Wigan last night.
If you do as well at your own gig, it will be brilliant for you.
love Janet.xx

Comment is about Jeffarama! (poet profile)

Original item by Jeffarama!

Hi John,
Love the poetry in your profile samples.
The etc.. poem took me through a range of emotions. I was quite shocked at how the change from laughter in truth of your words came so easily to sadness of auntie margaret and the friend with a tiny coffin. Then back to laughter with the cat imagery.

Thanks for a great read,
love Janet.x

Comment is about John G.Hall (poet profile)

Original item by John G.Hall

Hi Phil,
I really quite like this poem.
It has hidden qualities, just like our dreams have.

"free to move from image to image,
like a raindrop down a window pane."

Love those lines.
love Janet.xx

Comment is about Dream revised (blog)

Original item by Phil Golding

the saddest thing is that this is the only sample of your work - it's good though. :)

Comment is about Katie Sandham (poet profile)

Original item by Katie Sandham

Hey lovely, looking forward to seeing you in two weeks! Yay!
Hope all's well xXxx

Comment is about Mia Darlone (poet profile)

Original item by Mia Darlone

Yay! Nice to see you on here, Mr. B :)
xXxx

Comment is about Pete the Temp (poet profile)

Original item by Pete the Temp

Hi Melissa,
Sometimes i love to watch the rain from my window.
I even imagine the break in the clouds, and you know what?
Invariably within a half hour, there's a break in the clouds.
Sleepless nights can be troublesome though.

God bless, take care.
Love Janet.xx

Comment is about Stains of Rain (blog)

Hey Antonionioni,
Where you been?
But i do know what you mean. ha ha.
I too despise early mornings if i have to go to work. That's why i choose nights.
That preacher best stay away from me too.

Just chillin' after work.
God bless.xx

Comment is about Up with the lark (blog)

Hi Richard,
Just a quick post.
Hope you're ok. I presume you are back into studying as we haven't seen anything new from you lately.
No pressure! Get some work done. ha ha.

Love Janet.x

Comment is about Richard Brooks (poet profile)

Original item by Richard Brooks

Hi Jeff,
I really did go for a meal with my family.
If you take a look at Tara J Mendes.
My little secret's out of the bag.
At least
( I think ) that's what the first poem was about in "honour" of me. The second one?
Well, maybe one day i'll find out for sure.

Sorry it took so long to reply.
Hope your gig organizing is going smoothly.
love Janet.xx

Comment is about Jeffarama! (poet profile)

Original item by Jeffarama!

How very true this is.
I've lost count of the people i've spoken to who
think the grass is greener, only to realize, sometimes too late, that it was
a lack in their own make-up.
A weakness for a boost to their ego.

Love Janet.xx

Comment is about the removal men (blog)

Hi Phil,
I love the imagery of the first four.
But i'm sorry to be the one to tell you, there is a specific number of syllables which should be used before it can be calles Haiku.

The ruling states. Five in the first line,
Seven in the second and five again in the third.

Keep on practising though. If you can't juggle with what you already have, at least try to use your images in other work.
Nothing should go to waste.

Love Janet.xx

Comment is about High Haiku (blog)

Original item by Phil Golding

reminds me of this Darren, a puzzle perhaps

I was always a sycophant for these tendencies
And to suppress it
Delayed the inevitable
The inertia had been building
For long enough
I divorced myself from the feeling
But alcohol illuminated it every time
And so I found myself showered
Oblivious to the superheated steam
That was supposed to cleanse every pore
He lowered his stance
So I advanced towards him
He was full of sophisticated vignettes
And yet
I can’t recall a single one
My velocity of thought
An arrow
I wished to pierce him
But his confident armour deflected
He was massive
Part of the attraction
His Adonis was married to intelligence
And that eased the uneasy moment
The more he played it down
The more I drowned in the inevitable
Course of events
The angels turned their heads
Perhaps distracted
leaving
Guilt in the green room
All cocky, all confident
With a smirk
Yet another devil on my shoulder
waiting the chance to mock me
To hang heavy on my back
gloating at the stains
Once it was all over.

Comment is about I am a Skeleton (blog)

Hi Pete - this is different from you. It does however, have the many layers that I associate with your work. I feel a sense of insecurity. Two different ways to view a person, who is perhaps two different people inside. The skeleton represents an alter-ego or the flesh personified represents everything about ourselves that we can manipulate to suit our environment. Whereas our skeletons (obviously) vital to our survival and an integral part of us is somehow only revealed long after our soul has disappeared.
I personally have very 'big bones' in my skeleton which accounts for both my beer belly and collection of chins.
As usual, Crompton makes me think.

Comment is about I am a Skeleton (blog)

Hi Attila, great stuff!!

Couldn't make your Mcr gig but was great to meet you at the Shay in Halifax. Just started reading your book, been busy writing and performing! Hope you have chance to have a gander at some of my work.

All the best, Jeffarama!

Comment is about Attila the Stockbroker cleans up the City! (blog)

Original item by Attila the Stockbroker

Thanks Andy.

The poem sort of dates me though!

Mark

Comment is about Sade’s Boyfriend (blog)

Original item by Mark Niel

My mind like the microwave, is efficient.
It pings like the oven does when it gets a new idea.
ha ha ha. Really funny image.
But what happens if it blows up? Ouch!

Hi Pete.
love Janet.xx

Comment is about Half tin Loneliness (blog)

Yeah, c'mon Louise, these are very lame for Haiku - buck up!

Comment is about Potry Brew- Haiku (blog)

Original item by Louise Fazackerley

Hi there,
Over the last day or so, i've read this a few times. It reminds me of my dad too.
There's some great imagery and i particularly love the dreamy quality of a fisherman, waiting for that tug on the line.

For me, there's a few glitches in some of the way your story is told, but i do know how difficult it is to write poems and prose in the space provided. From experience, it doesn't always transfer the way we've written it.

Thanks for the memory. My dad used to love fishing. Stream, lake, river or sea. Didn't matter to him.
Ooh, you just gave me inspiration for a family poem. Thankyou.
love Janet.x

Comment is about Time Spent Fishing (blog)

Ha Ha - I love the last line in particular

Comment is about Sade’s Boyfriend (blog)

Original item by Mark Niel

Enjoy reading about your fishing,takes me back
to when I accompanied my dad. "The deep plop brings me snapping back" great line. Dad used to often nod off too.

Comment is about Time Spent Fishing (blog)

Hi Louise,
Your Haiku's brought a little smile of knowing about modern living.
Sorry you missed it Thursday.
Hope to see you next time.
Love Janet.xx

Comment is about Potry Brew- Haiku (blog)

Original item by Louise Fazackerley

The main thing about haiku is there should have a wow factor but these are rather subdued.

Comment is about Potry Brew- Haiku (blog)

Original item by Louise Fazackerley

Informative. Witty and fast moving poem.
Great stuff.
Love Janet.x

Comment is about Attila the Stockbroker cleans up the City! (blog)

Original item by Attila the Stockbroker

Hi Mark,
( yes, i read your profile)

I like this poem. It's rhythmic and tells a good story. Very funny in parts, with a shocking twist in the middle.
Love Janet.x

Comment is about UXB (blog)

Original item by Horace Thespider

give me a call when you are handing out the hoses and lets wash all this scum off the street.
nice one.

Comment is about Attila the Stockbroker cleans up the City! (blog)

Original item by Attila the Stockbroker

Attila

Your fourth stanza's an absolute blinder. Love it

The sentiments in this poem totally appeal to my personal politics. In a more balanced world we'd have more of this point of view (given that we've only recently had to endure party conference after party conference).

I won't rant.

It's a sharp, insightful, funny and punchy poem. It's cracking stuff.

Cheers
Steve

Comment is about Attila the Stockbroker cleans up the City! (blog)

Original item by Attila the Stockbroker

welcome aboard Emma

warm hands cold heart is great.

the poems are sounding enticingly performance eligible

Comment is about Emma Purshouse (poet profile)

Original item by Emma Purshouse

This is about the current poem of the month.

I thought lines 3 & 4 of the first stanza were part of the same sentence.

Ok, line 4 does start with a capital letter but it is then followed by a stanza break and my poor brain parsed it wrong.

Comment is about Steven Waling (poet profile)

Original item by Steven Waling

Hi Pete,

Just to confirm what I said the other night when you performed this one in Midd. You have the kind of insight into life that means we all recognise ourselves and our feelings in your writing. You say what many of us want to say, and you say it with style. Love it. Keep em coming

Shay

Comment is about slowly becoming a disaster (blog)

Nice one Pete - good to see you mentioned me- cleavage loving pervs!! Ha cheers Jeff

Comment is about slowly becoming a disaster (blog)

Hi Belinda

Hungry, Hungry, better get fed; soon she’ll wake up Human mule, crawling out of bed!

Great stuff love part III Belinda, Dream catchers in human foliage, it could be us!!

Nice one and thanx for your support, Jeff :-)

Comment is about Zombies III (blog)

Original item by Belinda

Neither have I Pete its a nightmare and its becoming an epidemic, great lines here and stark reality and fear -

Every sodden gin
Every alcohol thing justified
Every false moment intensified

brilliant couldn't have said it better, Jeff

Comment is about tip it in (blog)

Kate, Marilyn, make your mind up man!! Ok have as many as you want - like the statistics say you are unlikely to meet them, like it, good stuff mate, can I have my Kate Bush CD back!

Comment is about I shall have to make do (with videotape) (blog)