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Time after time

This is a poem about why I don't ever want to retire (again), it isn't about one real-life person but loosely based on a number of people I've known over the years. 


Time After Time


Thirty years ago

They were all there

From the shop-floor

From the salesroom

From the office

And from his secluded

Segregated suite

Even the boss himself


The polite applause

The empty speeches

Slipping from the bosses mouth

Slipped just as fast

From his mind


As well rehearsed words 

Drifted over his head

Faithful, hard working

Valued, respected

Gratitude, long service

He remembered only

Long

So long

So very long


The watch in a fancy box

“Real Gold”

They said

“Two hundred quid”

They said

“Should be proud”

They said

“Should be grateful”

They thought


They handed him his watch

Shook him by the hand

“Keep in touch”

They said

“Don’t forget us”

They said


Then left him

At the door

Alone

Retired

Finished


He won’t forget

Every day



As he drags

His aching bones 

From bed to chair

And chair to bed

He remembers them


He remembers when

he was so alive

So very alive

And they retired him

Abandoned him


“You’ll need a rest”

They said

“Take it easy”

They said

He just needed something

Something

To fill his time

Too much time

Too much empty time


He must rest now

Marking time

Waiting

Interminable

Uncomfortable

The heavy watch


Weighs on his wrist

And he remembers

Two hundred quid

For fourty years

Not even tuppence a day

Wouldn’t even feed the birds

Not a couple of bob

Per sleepless night

Just twenty pounds per

Blistered and calloused finger


He remembers

Again and again

Too much time

Too much empty time

Time after time

Re-awoken ►

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Seamus Kelly

Sun 12th Oct 2008 12:23

Janet and Lauterra (may I call you Lo?) - Thanks for your feedback it is much appreciated. Its funny that you can write something and then it takes others to tell you how you made it work. You guys really help with the continual learning process. Hope to see you soon.

Seamus

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Sat 11th Oct 2008 13:00

Hi Seamus,
I'm in agreement with the others .
I feel the way you've stretched the length by repetition and short lines strengthens the long, drawn out process of life after retirement.
The boredom and tedium of nothing to do.

Well captured sentiment and makes me think of so many people i've known in similar positions.
Very poignant reminder.

Love Janet.xx

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Sat 11th Oct 2008 12:10

really enjoyed the sentiment in this. I agree with Darren on the repetition
super.

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Seamus Kelly

Sat 11th Oct 2008 10:06

Thanks for that Darren - God I hope I was never like the bosses I wrote about.

Hard to believe that this poem was sparked by the not too inspiring theme for National Poetry day 08.

darren thomas

Sat 11th Oct 2008 09:08

I like this Seamus - I like this a lot. Repetition used as reinforcement to good effect and statements that are well, so true.
That rhetoric uttered from 'line managers' is stomach churning. From my background I hated it when a senior officer would roll out the superlatives about an officer killed on duty - when it was obvious that they didn't even know them. Senior Managers? I've s**t 'em.

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