Gritty subject matter well conveyed.

Comment is about Tomás Ó Cárthaigh (poet profile)

Original item by Tomás Ó Cárthaigh

oy oy Jeff
Yes I agree a capital W would benefit. Bang on the money my man.

Bruce Forsythe toupee mower...- Now then.
what have we here?

this is an example of stream of thought, just the immediate words that spring to mind.

I would say that the girl appeals to all levels as she is so sexual in her way, so attractive and fiery. Bruce was known for his leggy gorgeous girls and I thought yes, they would slay him, lap him up and kinda devour him, the blades of sexuality reach all spaces and cut.

they may wish to bring him down to earth, hence the cutting of grass, the toupee like a grass clump on someone's head if fitted bad, she just mows it off.

veracious.

Comment is about Catherine wheel (blog)

Pete, fantastic mate, as ever I would love your ability to look at the extreme perverse side of things as you do!

You could do this as a comedy sketch, for now I will look forward to see you at the self scam checkout in action!

Comment is about self scan (blog)

Great stuff Pete, one for the stage, love the way you exagerate the numbers like in White Goods, or maybe you're not exaggerating!!

Comment is about not allowed to smile (blog)

Hi Pete!

A Bruce Forsythe toupee mower? Not heard that one before, sounds interesting, you can tell me more when I see you!

Enjoyed this mate, just one thing should it be a capital W on wheel? sorry to be pedantic but if you mean it to be her name, of course I might have got it wrong! cheers Jeff

Comment is about Catherine wheel (blog)

thank you very much for reading and taking time to pass comment on this radiation poem Clarissa.

Comment is about Studies in Pripyet (blog)

Genius writing.
'liver must be punished' bloody brilliant poem
well done

Comment is about Mia Darlone (poet profile)

Original item by Mia Darlone

pete , you forgot the raspberries , can you just call back .......

Comment is about self scan (blog)

Thanks Andy. Just trying to be a bit more versitile! Not sure re performing it, I'm far more comfortable doing nob poems as a charactor.

Comment is about Andy N (poet profile)

Original item by Andy N

Thanks Daniel

Comment is about Bikini To Peace (Two Piece!) (blog)

Original item by Malpoet

Well I knew it was not a true story. however it could be to a point. I have been totally red faced, at the check out, in line and the bar code does not work, and they cant find the price, and the loud speaker goes off, and some little pimple faced kid, runs to get the exact product, and over speaker tells everyone what it is and the cost.I have not had to purchase anything, in years that made my face turn red, and have not had to worry. But Im sure the day will come. I guess if I was to feel like an adventure, Id purchase over the internet, thus no bar codes, and no loud speakers, for price /product checks. lol your so funny xx good poem!

Comment is about self scan (blog)

This is an interesting poem, We have atleast one place like this here.However the east coast is riddled with cancers, of one form or another. I saw the pictures of this place, wow its ghost town. I could still see children playing there.Part of me thinks it would be cool to get some outfit that keeps you safe from the effects, and go in and video the place.Thanks to Monsanto, we have mutants all over the place. I wont say whom I thank for the science behind some of the problms. But you could bet your bottom dollar if I came up with stuff like that, Id never tell anyone. Sick people. I hope nature can clean it all up. I hope the grasses and trees take over, let the fingers of the vines engulf.Great poem, I still say you need to look up Monsanto, your blood would boil, and it could be the best rant of a life time. My blood pressure goes up just thinking about it, so I cant. I dont take the pills they want me to, for it. I just try and stay calm, hahaha.great poem!

Comment is about Studies in Pripyet (blog)

great poem i love the sentiment!

Comment is about Bikini To Peace (Two Piece!) (blog)

Original item by Malpoet

Blimely.. that is a bit shorter than your normal stuff.. I love the reference to instruction leaflet at the end of the poem in particular - good twist!

Comment is about White Goods (article)

Good stuff, Pete. If I had wrote it, I would personally split it up into a few stanzas as it left me a bit of breath reading it, but good stuff still!

Comment is about now that it has all gone cold (blog)

I like this, Mia - nice change off style I agree! I would like to see more in this style too! Do you see these more of a page poem or a performance poem too?

Comment is about Rose Cheeks (blog)

Original item by Mia Darlone

not based upon a true story ;-) but my thoughts at a till one day honest guv

Comment is about self scan (blog)

thanks Clariss and Andy, yes theres so much more you could write on this, but I suppose I just have put the first things that came to mind

Comment is about not allowed to smile (blog)

Good stuff, Pete.. I could certainly see you reading that one out at performances! The last three lines certainly ring him home!

Comment is about not allowed to smile (blog)

Interesting idea, Dermont.. I'll have a think myself!

Comment is about New feature - What I Do That's New (article)

Original item by Dermot Glennon

its a great religion , no guilt just the pleasure of the next purchase . . . . . .

Comment is about White Goods (article)

amazing!! Really? Big brother goes to far. I just got my passport out, to take a look, I was kinda smiling. I read the fine print, I was allowed to be there 6 mo, with no work or public funds allowed. I was granted this on march the 9th 06, and left on the 23 0f march 06. It seems much longer ago. gee almost 3 years ago.One world government, a citizen we will be/are. great poem!

Comment is about not allowed to smile (blog)

one word lights a touch paper , remind me to stand well back

Comment is about Catherine wheel (blog)

Hi Dermot
Refreshing Idea.
I need to think about this.
How to respond.
I too will get back to you
I shall ponder upon what reveals if said panels are removed.
I once was of the opinion or belief that if I were a machine (the cogs perhaps Imply) then yes would reveal the mechanisms in the forms of brass cogs, counterweights, worm gears and the like.
I have since changed this opinion and fear that the workings are not mechanical or even binary but are organic, so the wheels are the shapes of cells and the whole system changes from one second to the next and unlike the symmetry of cogs and gears, unlike the predictable kinetic decay of clockwork, I fear my poetic process woudl be revealed as an entire organism. Its for this reason I find this concept you are exploring interesting. So many permutations so many inique people out there

but to share our secrets?
will they become disolved?
less potent
would we slay the dragon
kill the light if we let the real day inside?

Comment is about New feature - What I Do That's New (article)

Original item by Dermot Glennon

ps NOT GIRLS!!!!!

Comment is about New feature - What I Do That's New (article)

Original item by Dermot Glennon

Its a great idea Dermot, and I will give it some thought myself, but although it might seem strange to you, I prefer to be referred to as a woman, or woman poet, rather than a lady, which is an outmoded form indicating elite status which I have never aspired to and certainly have never achieved. That remains true even if some other female persons would like the term lady. I dont got a lot of modesty anyhow and have no problem with the idea of trying to big myself up. I'll get back to you.
Freda

Comment is about New feature - What I Do That's New (article)

Original item by Dermot Glennon

Cleanliness is next to Godliness

Loved it
Gus

Comment is about White Goods (article)

Great stuff as ever Pete. I sometimes think there is an unsettlingly soothing allure about white goods - I note the DIY megastores place them very visibly at the end of aisles, perhaps to induce trance-like states ...
Love to Loretta

Comment is about White Goods (article)

Ta for your comment. Yeah, 'what now.......' Agree with point re cliches - didn't really think of it, just wrote what was messing my head up. Anyway, if you mess things up you have something to write about. And if there was nothing to mess up in the first place then you look like a twat for writing such a poem!

Comment is about Steve O'Connor (poet profile)

Original item by Steve O'Connor

The photograph of myself (David Andrew) is by Seamus Kelly.

Comment is about Bill Doran at Hole in the Wall, Hebden Bridge, November 2008 (photo)

Photographs by Seamus Kelly www.shaysart.co.uk
If anyone wants a full size copy of their image Seamus will be happy to email it to them if they contact him on mail@shaysart.co.uk

Comment is about Sean Kavanagh comperes at Stubbing Wharf, Hebden Bridge September 2008 (photo)

Oops, that is what happens when one forgets the tonic...

Comment is about Rod Tame (poet profile)

Original item by Rod Tame

Photos by David Andrew, if you would like a larger copy contact david@writeoutloud.net

Comment is about Bill Doran at Hole in the Wall, Hebden Bridge, November 2008 (photo)

Oh Fuckin ell, I forgot the bleedin caftan. You clever sod.
Can you dig me one of them graves? Barry's only 9 months so I'll give you a quid. 2 quids a rip off.
Yeah, see ya on the bench, grab us some chips will ya. No vinegar - it well mings.

Comment is about Steve O'Connor (poet profile)

Original item by Steve O'Connor

Ahem...

It's 'Self-proclaimed' not 'Selt-proclained'!

And with your education! Tsk, tsk. (Probably one gin too many).

I like your poetry.

Steve

Comment is about Rod Tame (poet profile)

Original item by Rod Tame

Hiya

"Downed in 2 at 7am
Drowned in the blue of his blood streaked phlegm
A shared self-destruction, common fears
2 seperate nights always ending in tears"

Very powerful. Paints a vivid picture, as does the rest of the poem. There's a very strong sense of 'What now?' to this poem. It convinces. It's stark and honest.

There's a couple of cliches in there - 'tears of regret' and 'head over heart', but it's written from 1st person so there's a whole counter-argument that I won't go into on that point.

It's good to do different stuff. It's good that you're good at it too. I'd like to see more.

Steve

Comment is about Rose Cheeks (blog)

Original item by Mia Darlone

Jefferama! Thanks for the comment on the serious stuff - I feel happier with the sarcasm but aware I look like a bit of a bitch taking the mick all the time. The next one will probably be about necrophillia. Delivered in the style of a spanish nun.

x

Comment is about Jeffarama! (poet profile)

Original item by Jeffarama!

Hi Mia

Very serious but very good and deep as I like it. Well written and look forward to more. It hit a nerve with me though as me drinking caused me to lose a special girlfriend and that I will always regret, take care hope to see you soon, Jeff X

Comment is about Rose Cheeks (blog)

Original item by Mia Darlone

Hi Belinda, really enjoyed this, very punchy and good fun! I wrote one called the Funfair (posted 7 June), similar theme but very different structure, takes you back to your childhood! Hope you're okay over there! Jeff X

Comment is about Fairground (blog)

Original item by Belinda

Hi Carol, great words and a fitting tribute to a brave lady, hard to believe it wasn't that long ago in the realms of time. We've come a long way, and improved as a world but I doubt the job will ever be completed, best wishes Jeff

Comment is about Rosa Parks (blog)

Original item by Carol Falaki

Great choice Claire, I liked it when Pete first posted it especially the 64,578 washing machines, brilliant!

Also good to see a recent poem and Pete get recognition as someone who posts work regularly on WOL, puts so much into WOL events and his performances, not to mention the support he has given me! Cheers Jeffarama!

Comment is about White Goods (article)

So true Pete for many relationships,but thankfully not all my love..

Comment is about now that it has all gone cold (blog)

Welcome to WOL AnkSteady. Enjoyed reading your work. You give me plenty to think about.
Womb-man is quite an original thought too..

Comment is about Truth or Lie (blog)

Hi Mia,
you win some, you lose some.
Either way, you can't do right for doing wrong by yourself, them or even worse, both.

I really like this new style of writing of yours.
It's reality. Sometimes we're too scared to ask for the facts for fear of being hurt too much.

Good luck for the pre-watershed gig.
Have confidence in yourself. You can do it, you know you can!
Love Janet.xx

Comment is about Rose Cheeks (blog)

Original item by Mia Darlone

I don't completly agree with Claire's synopsis - "and the difficulties of putting people into categories."
I think people are all too ready to insert others into different categories. It's all part of that 'great chain of being' - and it sucks.
All Pete's poems are like onions. Multi-layered, potentially tearful and not to everybodies taste.
I love onions.

Comment is about White Goods (article)

Hi Steve,
Thanks for your comment.
I like your poem 'The old lie,' very timely.
Interesting question. I like to think I would have spoken out for Rosa, but suspect I may have sat quietly. You have to be there to know.
I believe things have changed for the better and bigotry is not tolerated in the same way now. I suspect if it weren't for people like Rosa then Obama would not be where he is today. I have my fingers crossed for him for Tuesday.

Comment is about garside (poet profile)

Original item by garside

Hi Steve,
Interesting question. I like to think I would have spoken out for Rosa, but suspect I may have sat quietly. You have to be there to know.
I believe things have changed for the better and bigotry is not tolerated in the same way now. I suspect if it weren't for people like Rosa then Obama would not be where he is today. I have my fingers crossed for him for Tuesday.

Comment is about Rosa Parks (blog)

Original item by Carol Falaki

Hi Belinda,

thanks for taking the time to read and comment on the poem

steve

Comment is about Belinda (poet profile)

Original item by Belinda

i have read of Rosa before Carol, and appreciate your poem on the basis of you bringing attention via verse to that moment in time - sorted : )

I have thought of what I would have done if I'd been on that bus... what would you have done?

Comment is about Rosa Parks (blog)

Original item by Carol Falaki

thanks for sharing these feelings.

Comment is about What I Miss (blog)