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Rose Cheeks

In a slight veer away from the feel of 'Bob's your uncle...and your lover', here's my attempt at some serious poetry.....

 

ROSCHEEKS

 

Wake up in the morning with Rose cheeks

Don’t want to let go, he looks so sweet

Temptation resisted cause I don’t want to lose

Could have been different if it weren’t for the booze

 

Cold-fronted, dismissive, I brush him aside

Mixed messages hiding what’s really inside

If I was just honest I’d probably come unstuck

But I’d rather be friends than a Friday night fuck

 

I can’t let it start

Cause I’d fall in to deep

I stick to my side of the bed

Then kiss his face whilst he’s asleep

 

Downed in 2 at 7am

Drowned in the blue of his blood streaked phlegm

A shared self-destruction, common fears

2 seperate nights always ending in tears

 

Wake up in the morning with Rose Cheeks

A false sense of security – deluded that it tastes so sweet

It’s not me. So they keep telling me.

 

Kidding myself, I’m weak and naive

A made-up fantasy I want to believe

But he’s an addiction I want

And in attempt to forget

My mouth meets the bottle and leads to tears of regret

 

Inbred rejection and oblivious acts

Never knew if he cared.

Make my assumptions with no proof of the facts

 

A friendship I fear is now null and void

The temptation I thought I’d learnt to avoid.

And given a chance I’d ignore head over heart

But what draws me in, would tear us apart.

 

◄ Driven

Bliss ►

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Andy N

Sat 8th Nov 2008 12:55

I like this, Mia - nice change off style I agree! I would like to see more in this style too! Do you see these more of a page poem or a performance poem too?

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Steve OConnor

Wed 5th Nov 2008 13:07

Hiya

"Downed in 2 at 7am
Drowned in the blue of his blood streaked phlegm
A shared self-destruction, common fears
2 seperate nights always ending in tears"

Very powerful. Paints a vivid picture, as does the rest of the poem. There's a very strong sense of 'What now?' to this poem. It convinces. It's stark and honest.

There's a couple of cliches in there - 'tears of regret' and 'head over heart', but it's written from 1st person so there's a whole counter-argument that I won't go into on that point.

It's good to do different stuff. It's good that you're good at it too. I'd like to see more.

Steve

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Jeff Dawson

Tue 4th Nov 2008 21:26

Hi Mia

Very serious but very good and deep as I like it. Well written and look forward to more. It hit a nerve with me though as me drinking caused me to lose a special girlfriend and that I will always regret, take care hope to see you soon, Jeff X

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Mon 3rd Nov 2008 23:25

Hi Mia,
you win some, you lose some.
Either way, you can't do right for doing wrong by yourself, them or even worse, both.

I really like this new style of writing of yours.
It's reality. Sometimes we're too scared to ask for the facts for fear of being hurt too much.

Good luck for the pre-watershed gig.
Have confidence in yourself. You can do it, you know you can!
Love Janet.xx

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