lets all fall in love with star wars again
on a sunday
my legs
drape across
a lover
we close
the curtains
and the sofa
sits soft
and here, we are
as we
drink
ginger beer
and watch
star wars movies
full
of stars
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darren thomas
Tue 23rd Jun 2009 09:22
This is great. Simple is as simple be.
In the title Emily, you tell the reader about 'Star Wars'. I think that's enough for a reader to fill in the blanks if you later say 'and watch movies full of stars'. It's leaves a little something else for the reader to do - and maybe, bring on one of those - 'ahhhhh' moments.
Nice to see (and read) you back.