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as if by magic.....

 

One, easing the poetry bus down Radcliffe Road, approaching the bridge that spans the mighty Tonge.

Two, its last journey, all decisions made, Metro Salvage assure me they pay “top prices”.

Three, Joe, six, chunnering in the seat behind, goofing about school.

Four, BANG!

Five, brown blur slaps windscreen, disappears as brakes slam.

Six, simultaneous thoughts, (is that possible?) A child? A dog? No MOT.

Seven, bouncing across the bridge, on its back, an adult roe deer.

Eight, more thoughts, road kill, dying animal, handy length of cast iron pipe under seat, child on board.

Nine, Joe, “that was silly”, as animal comes to halt twenty yards away.

Ten, car sweeps round hairpin bend at far end of bridge.

Eleven, prepare for carnage, should I shield child from horror?

Twelve, observe deer struggle to feet (no broken legs then), pauses as if to leap bridge parapet.

Thirteen, think “don’t do it”, thirty foot drop into mighty Tonge.

Fourteen, deer looks at car, looks at van, canters towards us; “see Joe it’s a deer”.

Fifteen, scooting past, dives into the ginnel it came from, between river and  churchyard.

Sixteen, in the mirror, the crossing lady from St Stephen’s stares in disbelief.

Seventeen, pinch myself, count blessings for no road kill or need for kerbside butchery.

Eighteen, drive Joe to school, and the poetry bus to oblivion.

Nineteen, Monday morning, 8.45.  The week starts here.

Twenty, beat Metro up from £80 to £120. Good bye poetry bus.

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Val Cook

Tue 23rd Jun 2009 21:04

A great read Dave, like the way it`s set out. Happy too that the deer got away,it must follow the river.

<Deleted User> (5573)

Tue 23rd Jun 2009 15:27

Sad day to see the demise of the poetry bus and you missed a treat for the barbie.

Dave, why don't you call this 'Radcliffe Road, Bolton' and submit it to http://www.rainycitystories.com

sophie willan

Tue 23rd Jun 2009 15:12

Oh Great! Yes your feedback has really helped!! Thankyou!

<Deleted User> (5646)

Tue 23rd Jun 2009 10:03

Oh the poor deer.
Oh you poor dear.
This comment could get a little confusing so i'll stop, right this second. :-)

Janet.x

sophie willan

Tue 23rd Jun 2009 01:35

Ha No I think there are women like this too....especially at kareoke bars ...Its a real place Charlies in Manchester and a very strange one at that. You always wonder why and how you eneded up there! If you have any constructive critisms please let me know because I am very new to the poetry thing and trying to learn as much as possible. Thanks. Take care.

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Dave Morgan

Mon 22nd Jun 2009 09:27

Perfectly true Winston , all happened in thirty seconds two weeks ago.

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winston plowes

Sun 21st Jun 2009 23:19

Hi Dave, Great story. Now... comeon this can't possibly be true?! can it? You can tell me over a pint on a WOL night soon. This vivid dilema stories reminded me of one by Roger McGough - Funicular Railway. Winston

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