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John Aikman

Mon 7th Dec 2009 16:01

I'd love to tag it...but I don't know how...being a fusty old fuddy duddy 'n all. What does it entail?

: )

Jx

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Graham Sherwood

Mon 7th Dec 2009 15:43

Hello Cynthia, many thank you's for reading and commenting on Copse. I think your comments are very flattering as I am not the most technically astute poet that you are likely to meet. Once again many thanks and regards.

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John Aikman

Mon 7th Dec 2009 15:38

I'd like to thank my mother and father, who are no doubt looking down proudly through the holes in the floor of heaven, my brothers for their ceaseless encouragement, my wife, who has stood by me through the dark years and my children whose pride shines through their eyes. My agent, Lenny, for putting me forward for this award and my OU tutor and mentor for his guidance and kind words, but, most of all I would like to thank you, the voting public, for this recognition of the toil and effort, and sheer blood sweat and tears that is this thing that we all love...poetry.

'Ere, hang on, whaddaya mean I came equal third?

: )

Thanks Isobel for all your efforts and your ceaseless good humour. I can see the twinkle in your eyes from here!

: )

Jxxx

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Isobel

Mon 7th Dec 2009 15:18

John, darling. if I may use that word - tee hee - could you please tag this poem with WOLOP.nov so that people may read it as part of a group. It was nominated as a favourite poem in the informal competition that I run. Thanks.

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Marianne Louise Daniels

Mon 7th Dec 2009 14:33

sorry to be dense isobel, but how do I tag the poem as a Wolop poem?? thankyou.

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John Darwin

Mon 7th Dec 2009 14:32

Fizzobel, I have no idea how to tag a poem, could you enlighten me?

thanks
John

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Isobel

Mon 7th Dec 2009 14:27

Hi Debs - please could you tag this poem with WOLOP.nov so that people can read it as part of a group. It was nominated by a fellow poet. Thanks.

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Isobel

Mon 7th Dec 2009 14:24

Please could you tag this poem with WOLOP.nov so that people may read it as part of a group. I run an informal monthly competition and this poem was nominated by a fellow poet. Thank you.

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Isobel

Mon 7th Dec 2009 14:11

Please could you tag this poem as WOLOP.nov since it has been nominated as a favourite poem. Thanks.

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Mon 7th Dec 2009 13:06

I love this, it has a mystical feel to it, like an echo from a magical age.
TC ;-) X

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Mon 7th Dec 2009 12:56

Hello Sian ;-)Thankyou for your appraisal of The Enigma poem, I thought John had a point, then when I read your comment's I was pleased with the way you interpreted it, as that was the way it was intended to be read.( I guess it's all in the perception ;-) ) So you get 2 Thaumaturgically Charged browny points and a free Tarrot read for liking my poem as is ;-) .TC X

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Graham Sherwood

Mon 7th Dec 2009 12:22

Hello Sian, thank you very much for reading and commenting on Copse (I seem to be gawping at nature a lot lately, must get onto people stuff again soon). Noticed your new work, will read and comment as always. Great to see your creative juices flowing again and in a different style I think. Well done and speak soon. Graham

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sian howell

Mon 7th Dec 2009 10:44

what an incredible poetry talent you are ....really special sian x

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sian howell

Mon 7th Dec 2009 10:42

I think a poem should make you feel...and yours always does my lovely...so whether it has a dark edge or a sunny tint is absolutely fine and yours inspires feeling in others and thats what all good poetry should do. Sian X

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Mon 7th Dec 2009 10:25

Love ya Mia... Poem is ace x

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Ann Foxglove

Mon 7th Dec 2009 07:27

I love this too, so haunting! "I am departed from the day". Wonderful and sad.

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Ann Foxglove

Mon 7th Dec 2009 07:19

Thank you so much for your comments on my poem about my mum, from one daddy's girl to another! It's taken me about forty years to realise how I took her for granted. I really love your poetry. I hope you will put some more up soon This one (above) touched me very much, particularly the last verse "for on my own I don't know how" indeed! I think it's the time of year, but I have been feeling very much in the past and sad because of it, the last few days, missing those who are gone. Hope you are happy, you sensitive soul. Lots of love AFxx

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John Coopey

Sun 6th Dec 2009 23:19

Hello Allan
I really enjoyed your spot at the Trafford Arts Centre, Sale, the other week. Sorry I had to dash off part-way through - I was frightened to death of getting fenced in the car park which shut at !0.00!
I thought your poem "That's
Me" was really good - all the better for the performance although I'm sure it stands up in writing.

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Andy Williamson

Sun 6th Dec 2009 22:09

Hi there Mia. You completely vented your spleen on this one. Highly charged, full of venom, but I can empathise.

Deep breaths...........and.............relax !!!

Take care
Andy x

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Andy Williamson

Sun 6th Dec 2009 21:27

Hi Cynthia. Many thanks for your comments about "Patience". Regarding the last line - you are indeed fortunate to feel in a position that your life is complete. I realise that it is a state of being, rather than a set of circumstances, but the sad truth is that there are many people who do not feel there, to greater or lesser degrees. And is often felt to be the ultimate goal.

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Greg Freeman

Sun 6th Dec 2009 21:16

Beautiful, tingly. I'll say no more

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Isobel

Sun 6th Dec 2009 19:27

A very sad one Debs. The fact that you are talented and capable of such great imagery is secondary to the feelings the poem evokes - being lost - beyond control - quite literally drifting through life. I think we can all feel like that at times. I would certainly steer my life differently if I was really at the helm. Just how much of our life is spent like that, I guess varies from one to another. I'm hoping that your and all of our summers come this year - cos I'm an optimist....xx

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Alison Mary Dunn

Sun 6th Dec 2009 17:29

Ann, I know just what you mean. I was always a daddy's girl and often the trips to the country involved dad, my brother and I. Mum didn't join in so much in the outdoor activities. You've captured your awareness of your mum so well in your poem. It's so honest and heartfelt. I felt it x

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jane wilcock

Sun 6th Dec 2009 11:38

Thanx for commenting on West Window, Cynthia. I enjoyed writing it and it took at trip to York at Christmas to get a feel for it.

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Ann Foxglove

Sun 6th Dec 2009 11:30

Hi Steve, found your poem, thank you, and for your email too. I can't imagine how it would feel to experience an illness like this with the one you love, for you are both going through it together. My partner and I were lucky in the sense that he died instantly and unexpectedly, a heart problem that had never been detected and had never affected him until that last few seconds of his life. Makes it more of a shock, but easier to know they knew nothing about it and did not suffer. I think your "topping and tailing" of the poem makes it!

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Andy N

Sun 6th Dec 2009 11:00

phew... powerful, very well written stuff, mia.. don't know what else to add there except i hope it ain't true

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steve mellor

Sun 6th Dec 2009 10:20

Dear 'quiet widow'
Hospital; Bereavement; Ghost House? catharsis?

My/our old house is let, and I don't want to even look in the window.

Beautiful poems though.
Steve M.

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Tommy Carroll

Sun 6th Dec 2009 01:03

er..........use slate to scrawl on 'tpavement!

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Sat 5th Dec 2009 22:12

Your poetry and words melt like butter upon warm toast
But I feel that you are in pain of sorts.
Gain strength from your writing you are truly a very talented poet.

Augusta x

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Sat 5th Dec 2009 22:06

Oh Mia .. What a superb piece of shadow boxing criss crossing metaphors and spitting such bile ...yet still retaining a gentleness, very clever and honest, a sister of some strength indeed.

Augusta x

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Sat 5th Dec 2009 17:33

Marianne, it's like getting on a roller coaster cum roundabout, a bit dizzying but always energizing. I liked it - didn't understand all of it, but that's irrelevant. Wish I were part encyclopaedia.

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Sat 5th Dec 2009 16:58

Is this the pulsing rhythm of the famous 'Hiawatha' by Longfellow? I memorized reams of lines from this in school, and walked in its cadence for weeks, mesmerized by its very sound.
This is a lovely poem, really enchanting, hypnotic.

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Sat 5th Dec 2009 16:48

A tale told with vivid imagination and verve, well-hooked together with a crafty eye for the vast picture and the telling details, like a camera zooming and panning. I also enjoyed the time warp. Reminded me of the York legend about the sightings of the marching Roman legion. This must have taken much thought.

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Sat 5th Dec 2009 16:36

I enjoyed this, Andy - great list that kept me smiling all the way through. Except for the last line.
I cannot imagine living each day hoping that tomorrow one's life will feel complete.

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Sat 5th Dec 2009 16:08

Keep writing. Just keep writing such very good poetry.
You might enjoy 'The Last Verse' which I posted months ago.

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Sat 5th Dec 2009 16:02

I think this is a great poem - really honest in its exposure of the individualism of grief. I believe it's the flip side of the 'love - nobody knows but me' syndrome. And that's how it should be - constant reinvention. Superb ending.

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Sat 5th Dec 2009 15:55

Hi, Ann. Especially with 'jokes' poems, keep your rhythm clean. Quite "Suess-y' this one. And I'm not sure I've spelled that name right. Good grief!

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steve mellor

Sat 5th Dec 2009 14:28

Ann
I keep making a resolution that I won't even look at Discussion groups; then I think "ok, I'll just risk one eye" and then, before you know it, you're sucked back in.
I shall resolve to keep my resolve.

Steve M.

ps
I neither smell of oil/engines, nor am I able to put one foot in front of the other. What chance I?

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steve mellor

Sat 5th Dec 2009 13:25

Ann
It was a quick 'in and out' military operation, trying to save young lives.
;-))

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Greg Freeman

Sat 5th Dec 2009 08:50

Ann, thanks for sharing this poem with us. I particularly like these lines towards the end ...

"leaning against her legs

at the bus stop, the harsh street light

making her lipstick blue

on our way back from grandma’s.

I’m so tired that I can hardly move.

I look up and see her face against

a dark blue Ealing sky.

my mum was hard to spot, but then,

some people are all talk.

compare the wren’s sweet song

to the peacock's ugly squawk."

Greg

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Ann Foxglove

Sat 5th Dec 2009 06:40

Hello Cynthia, how are you? Meant to thank you earlier about your comment on my foxy poem! I loved your tale of the huskies! (I wonder if she remembers you too!) xx

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Ann Foxglove

Sat 5th Dec 2009 06:31

Thanks guys for lovely comments. My mum died over ten years ago and that grief was a normal, gentle sadness. All my angry raging grief poems are for my partner, and he died nearly two years ago. This is probably "too much information" (don't want everyone to be all sorry for me, that's not my intention) just wanted to put my Bereavement poem in context. That's why this one has a held back feel.Yes Stef, she does look lovely doesn't she, and her character was just like her face, gentle, shy and sweet.

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Sat 5th Dec 2009 02:10

Read this a couple of times before I could pluck up the courage to comment, it is a very stongly descriptive poem which more than adequately describes your feelings, some of the metaphors you use are clever too. I think you brother on reflection had a lucky escape.
TC

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Sat 5th Dec 2009 02:05

Really beautiful Ann, all the way through.
TC X

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Sat 5th Dec 2009 02:01

Thanks for the feedback Jane ;-) My Mum used to sing in Gilbert and Sullivan when I was a wee nipper ;-) I took at shuffty at the lyrics, there may well be a faint echo there ;-) Please stay off the line of neutrality ha ha ;-)
TC X

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Sat 5th Dec 2009 01:51

John thanks for your more than amusing blog on ' The Enigma of Perception' Far from getting up my arse, I thought your constructive suggestions quite acceptable, in fact if I write a peice like that again, I will structure it in the way you suggest. By the way you missed out super symmetry, 'The Anthropic Solution' and most importantly 'The Grand Unified Theory'. But you knew that didn't you ? ha ha Cheers TC

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Fri 4th Dec 2009 22:38

oh Ann! was,nt your Mother beautiful! I honestly think you held back a lot,considering your loss.And what a loss.the poem puts a lovely brave face on your association with her and Dad too-lovely-thanks Stef

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steve mellor

Fri 4th Dec 2009 20:41

Hi Ann
In entering the Discussion forum, I hope you are aware that, under H&S guidelines, you have to wear fire retardant under-garments.
There is often some of the most personally vitriolic c**p posted, claiming to be 'discussion', that there are some (I mean me and at least one other) who will no longer join in.
I wish you a joyous journey thru the WOL site

Steve M.
p.s. I don't smell of oil and engines (just thought I'd mention it) ;-))

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Fri 4th Dec 2009 20:27


Good evening Katie

I enjoyed this sample poem. I thought of Bradbury's "Fahrenheit 451" and it reads like a good performance piece. Loved 'rehab ... kebab'.

And you are making a really good point also. It seems few are able to operate outside the superficial appearance of everything these days even if they think they are above it.

Recent chat with Politics grad. 'Brown, nah he'll never win the election ... look at that jaw problem for a start and he's only got half an eye'. No mention of policies and the economic disaster.

Anyway, mwoar please.

Joseph


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Fri 4th Dec 2009 18:10

Good evening Jeff

I would just like to say how inspiring I found your 3 sample poems. I have to confess to sharing the views in the Glastonbury one particularly. At the point when freedom from the machine became a weekend going TO the machine, like you, I chose the radio. Some great truths in your poems.

not perturbed at all!


Joseph

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