For My Unloved

by Max Wallis

Friday 2nd April 2010 10:48 am

For My Unloved

I will not write you a poem, for it is likely that you do not read.

I will not perform a song for you, for I cannot sing

or bring myself to learn these things.

my voice is that of a washing machine gurgling.

Let it be known!

I will not crush the stars into lanterns to light your darkness

don’t be stupid.

Nor will I make the rains take leave in your walk

one

does

that

No.

I will not give you everything and take nothing from you

nor can I promise to be quite sane –

(for what is the pleasure of that?)

But

know

this:

and out of this, and of this, all be true,

that I shall and I will fall for you.

M. R. Wallis

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Fkx

Thu 21st Apr 2011 14:58

The appeal over other pronouncements of love and such affections is its total lack of mushiness or mooshiness; no promises just the truth, no crying for the moon or crossing the oceans or mountains, no serenade nor waxing poetic... pure poetry.

Cate Greenlees

Sat 3rd Apr 2010 22:35

But a literary heritage does.... one absorbs different influences from different genres as one goes along, and this poem could almost be in the classical vein if you took out the line "my voice is that of a washing machine gurgling"...yep your youthful face could really have written this.

Max Wallis

Sat 3rd Apr 2010 20:18

I don't think age really comes into it. If you can write then you can write. I am almost twenty-one, I've collected many experiences. But thank you all the same on the comment about my youthful face :)

Isobel

Sat 3rd Apr 2010 19:29

I like it too - the line Cate quoted is superb. It is a quirky piece - it has echoes of something but I can't think what. An enjoyable read.

Cate Greenlees

Sat 3rd Apr 2010 18:15

So do I. There are some lovely lines in this . I particularly like "I will not crush the stars into lanterns to light your darkness" This is a very mature piece of writing from someone so young looking... I look forward to reading some more
Cate xx

<Deleted User> (6292)

Fri 2nd Apr 2010 17:23

I like this poem very much... accertive yet appealing.

Augusta x

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