Updated: Tue, 30 Jan 2018 10:45 pm
Thank you for reading my writing.
"Broken Seashell" [Lyrics] Don’t hurt your daughter She needs your pride Don’t hurt your sister She breaks inside She feels surrounded by enemies Please don’t hurt the girl That girl is me You sit and gossip that She won’t come around But judgment and criticism Is all she’s found She fights the invisible hands Forcing her to the floor She fights the instincts of survival To run out the door You don’t see her clearly Looking through your clouds Looking at the wrong things Like her bank account Looking at what she should change Not what she’s done Not at the strong, healthy man Her son has become Don’t hurt your daughter She needs your pride Don’t hurt your sister She breaks inside She feels surrounded by enemies Please don’t hurt the girl That girl is me She notices wistfully The pride in her parents' eyes As they behold her siblings' families In which they have pride The look that vanishes As their eyes turn her way The pride that disappears And then her heart frays Broken seashells get left behind Scattered all over the sand Perfect seashells get taken home Precious treasures in the hand
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Blog entries by Lisa Milligan
The Patient (16/08/2011)
Waiting For A Star To Fall (15/08/2011)
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<Deleted User> (9796)
Tue 18th Oct 2011 19:04
Hi Lisa, beautiful and heart touching poem. you write from your heart to touch others.
Tue 16th Aug 2011 16:02
I hope you stick with WOL. Like all places, it can appear to have a clique - those people are just regular contributors though - who have commented on each other's work and lives enough to have a rapport and be able to josh each other.
If you want to get feedback the best thing is to start reading the work of other poets and making comments. That attracts poets to look at your stuff. If you have been on other sites, you probably realise that by now. We have a lot of fun in discussions also.
Doing performance stuff is really good fun - you should try it. The only problem is that it is a hobby that needs feeding. If you're not writing or producing anything decent(which I'm not at the moment) it can get a bit depressing.
Ho hum - I sometimes wish I was a musician - it would be a whole lot easier to perform! Take care for now. x
Tue 16th Aug 2011 12:57
You've really got me thinking about this one.
I suppose page poetry, for me, is from the heart. I wouldn't write it for any particular audience - I'm writing it for myself. If other people like it or comment on it, then that's just a bonus. That may be because poetry and writing is a hobby for me. I have no commercial aspirations at all. If you are looking to make a living out of writing then it probably pays to write for an audience and to know that audience well.
Tue 16th Aug 2011 12:49
Thanks for paying me a call Lisa - nice to hear from you. I hadn't really thought about tailoring written material to a particular audience. The way I see it, everyone on line has options - they can choose to read your stuff or ignore it. Whether you miss the mark isn't quite so critical, like it is on the stage. If no-one likes your written stuff the only person to suffer is yourself - cos presumably you don't get feedback. If you are performing the wrong stuff on a stage your audience gets bored - you cease to entertain.
Having said that, I've only ever been a member of this poetry site. It fulfilled all my needs and I've been too lazy to look elsewhere. I've heard that on other sites more critical feedback is given. I suppose different sites must attract different types of poet, depending on what they are looking for. I like the social interraction that happens on this site. I find it fascinating the way life around us works its way into our poetry and discussion. We are all living it together - if that makes sense.
Sun 2nd Jan 2011 13:25
I like your lyrics, Lisa - including the chorus, where I think any tune should repeat for the first and third, and second and fourth lines (as in "Once in Royal David's City", e.g.).
Tomás Ó Cárthaigh
Tue 29th Jun 2010 01:35
I like the way your poetry rhymes...
Fri 16th Apr 2010 15:18
Hello Again to you too
Yes this poem is very raw but takes a look at the dishonesty of pleasure taken... or does it??
Fri 16th Apr 2010 15:16
Hi lisa 'My Father's Belt
Came to me in a dream... really wierd...yes I do have many of his ways... mostly kindly .... I was trying to write from the side of the aggressor for a change...
Once again thanks for the comments.
Fri 16th Apr 2010 15:06
Thank you so much for taking the time to read A Soldier's Letter...
Most encouraging comments
once again many thanks
<Deleted User> (7073)
Fri 26th Mar 2010 22:41
Hi Lisa ;-) thank you for taking the time to read my works, yes I am inspired by the magical, mistical, the Golden Ratio, the interconnectness of everything, A Universe like a multi dimensional jigsaw puzzle in a cosmic dance, maybe I will get to write a poem about it one day ;-)TC XX
<Deleted User> (7073)
Wed 24th Mar 2010 22:01
It was easy when you have spent most of your life being a missing piece ha ha . Great poem ;-) TC X
<Deleted User> (7073)
Wed 24th Mar 2010 01:18
Hi Lisa, I did wonder where the missing piece for the actual jigsaw came from, But as it is a mystery in the poem, I assumed it was the returning of the son ;-)
All Mums like that ha ha ;-))
Marianne Louise Daniels
Mon 22nd Mar 2010 10:28
thankyou for the little feedback- very humbled.
keep up the good work!
Mon 22nd Mar 2010 00:20
Hi, I'm glad you enjoyed reading 'weeping willow'. Thanks for taking the time out to comment and for the wonderful praise! x
Dave D Poet Rhumour
Sun 21st Mar 2010 21:42
Hi Lisa, thanks for your comments on 'Elusive Old Friend', much appreciated. I do tend to write in rhyming forms more often than not, it's a bit of a family tradition really, my grandfather having written his life story in verse :)
Tue 16th Mar 2010 11:07
Hi Lisa, Thanks for your comment. I dont take comfort in knowing that it summed up your life, but i do take comfort in knowing you survived.Your "Though The Demons are Waiting" is excellent, so much hurt but also the optimism from your son. To a child a caring mother will always be god.love richard
Mon 15th Mar 2010 18:03
Hi Lisa, thanks for your comment on 'my little me'. Much appreciated.
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