I like it Dave-very cute! oh those Aunties eh-having said that,my Aunty Molly(and Uncle Vic)were life savers-always there with a lovely Sunday dinner and half a crown spends-in our days of having bugger all never mind food-I can still see my little sister and I walking down the little whitewashed hallway into Aunty Mollys tiny living??room-Billy Cotton blaring away and the old cast iron range emitting the most wonderful meaty aromas-those most memorable times even if we did have to walk ten cursed miles(not having bus fare)to get there-good lessons for the future I can assure you-good poem Dave but Aunty Mollys Sunday dinner beats it....tongues hanging! ta matey-Stef.

Comment is about The Very First Time (blog)

Original item by Dave Dunn

...quarry

cruel but beautiful
in its persuasiveness
imprisoning,albeit temporarily
the awaiting metamorphosis
of spring

lifting the sheeted ghost
dissipating the shrivelled air
melting the stilled
ledge and bough adorned
jewellery.

begone glare-white mornings!
away yawnings misted!

Comment is about Fancy adding to this??? (blog)

Original item by Kath Hewitt

great poem, i really like the repitition and i can easily empathize with the theme

Comment is about Standing close (blog)

Original item by Dermot Glennon

hi Kath-just blimped this posting-would be a pleasure to add to this brillantly started poem-off to rack my little brain and get back to you one this one-ta chuck-Stef.x

Comment is about Fancy adding to this??? (blog)

Original item by Kath Hewitt

Good afternoon Ann-sorry for late response to your very encouraging comments on my last three poems-was busy-driving for four droning hours down(or up?)too many miles of motorway-hence the long lie in-the consolation of the drive was the accompaniment of a lovely lovely yellow(cheeses coloured you would say)Moon,smiling ever so sweetly-wowsers! thanks again darling-means so so much..Stef.xx

Comment is about Ann Foxglove (poet profile)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

"thats all folks"
Hi - Good one Kealan - but what you omit to say is that we're ALL dead already ;)

Comment is about Kealan Coady (poet profile)

Original item by Kealan Coady

if people keep posting - where's all my F***ing mail??
the post office are shite.
...is this about people then ?

Comment is about La dee da dee da (blog)

Original item by Isobel

Stone me.

Glass screams shatter through the cold, stone walls,
echoed by a cruel wind.
Outside the snow-blanketed ground is harsh,
it's fleecy coverlet hiding a frozen, unforgiving
quarry - and it's not easy hiding a quarry.

Comment is about Fancy adding to this??? (blog)

Original item by Kath Hewitt

people self-publicising

Comment is about La dee da dee da (blog)

Original item by Isobel

Dave, Re Ghazal (your hair) Thankyou for the comments of your kind self and your anonamous friend! :-) Win

Comment is about Dave Bradley (poet profile)

Original item by Dave Bradley

welcome my friend

Comment is about Burns (poet profile)

Original item by Burns

I agree with Steve. It's the nature of the electronic world that people become invisible more easily than in the 'real' physical world. A powerful, raw poem. The beat goes on, it sweeps us up, but every now and then a different mood comes along, and we stand aside and ask what is happening to people

Comment is about La dee da dee da (blog)

Original item by Isobel

Hehe - wisdom and a little wry humour :) Best wishes, Dave

Comment is about Reward (blog)

Original item by Kealan Coady

And he looks the spit of that chap that plays James Bond!

Comment is about Wrong Road Roun' - An Urban Villanelle (blog)

Original item by John Coopey

Struck a chord here - very deeply. haven't yet made it to point of re-entry myself - but yes, writing and sharing experiences helps.
Well done.
Cx

Comment is about Upon Disappearing (blog)

Original item by Isobel

Many thanks, all, for the comments.
Afficionados among you will have spotted the deliberate mistake in the photo - one of the fillers is indeed himself "wrong road round". That it was posed is given away by the one on the right sporting starched white collar and cuffs - the mining equivalent of Spartacus' wristwatch.

Comment is about Wrong Road Roun' - An Urban Villanelle (blog)

Original item by John Coopey

Many thanks, J, for your comments on Wrong Road Roun'. Much appreciated.

Comment is about John Aikman (poet profile)

Original item by John Aikman

thankyou.

Comment is about Untitled Bubble (blog)

Original item by Marianne Daniels

I mean a revolution of every part of existence. Social, moral, sexual, political, poetical, symmetrical, geographical, autotraumatical....

Comment is about now (blog)

Original item by Kealan Coady

Hi,

Thank you for reading and commenting :-)

Comment is about Marianne Daniels (poet profile)

Original item by Marianne Daniels

Hi Clarissa, Nice to see you here. keep posting and commenting. Winston

Comment is about clarissa (poet profile)

Original item by clarissa

This is deadly. Theres a structured carelessness to it that I appreciate.

Comment is about Untitled Bubble (blog)

Original item by Marianne Daniels

It's a gift, Steve.
Don't know where you get the "totally beautiful" from, Ann.But thanks anyway.

Comment is about Evanescent (blog)

Nice stuff man i like the idea of regressing soldiers. Vivid imagery throughout and an enjoyable read

Comment is about Before the Curtains Open (blog)

Original item by Andy N

Nice one Andy. Hope you had a balcony to sit on and enjoy the scene together.

Comment is about Before the Curtains Open (blog)

Original item by Andy N

Neat, neat, neat!

Fabulous poem and a great example of using a structure to drive the narrative creating double the impact. There's altogether too much 'free verse' chucked out on WOL in the name of poetry...it seldom is.

This is a poem! And a damned good one at that.

Thank you.

Jx

Comment is about Wrong Road Roun' - An Urban Villanelle (blog)

Original item by John Coopey

Interesting, nice rhymes

Comment is about RZHEPICKS (blog)

Original item by Larisa Rzhepishevska

Well done Andy, very romantic and very in the moment and mindful

Comment is about Before the Curtains Open (blog)

Original item by Andy N

Good poem,but why the snigger?

Comment is about The moon weeps (blog)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

Andy this is a beautiful poem,I really enjoyed reading it.I especially liked the last verse brilliant.

Comment is about Before the Curtains Open (blog)

Original item by Andy N

its almost like being under hypnosis...

Comment is about Before the Curtains Open (blog)

Original item by Andy N

Thanks for your thoughts on Wrong Road Roun'. It's a phrase I heard often enough in my youth on first dates!

Comment is about Laura Taylor (poet profile)

Original item by Laura Taylor

Thanks for your thoughts on Wrong Road Roun'. I confess I never did a stint underground although I had 21 years in the industry.
Incidentally, it's not so bad being in a confined space - I'd hold your hand.

Comment is about Ann Foxglove (poet profile)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

Same as Andy I like how it breaks down at the end. The first 2 lines of 2nd verse speak to me - grew up in a house that had ice on the inside of the windows in winter.

Strong, and haunting...quite scary too in places...those dolls eyes...

Comment is about I cannot write. (blog)

Original item by Marianne Daniels

Some lovely lines in here, cracking opening.

who knows what anybody does to another? quite.

and 'but not' :) nice ending

Comment is about Untitled Bubble (blog)

Original item by Marianne Daniels

Good stuff John - I do like how you portray these historical events. Terrible conditions back then. But humour to be found :)

Comment is about Wrong Road Roun' - An Urban Villanelle (blog)

Original item by John Coopey

Awww...what a gorgeous poem Andy. What a bloody lovely thing to read first thing. Love it, it's beautiful xx

Comment is about Before the Curtains Open (blog)

Original item by Andy N

This prompted me to listen to Led Zeppelin's Thankyou. which is always good stuff. maybe you should go into lyric writing?

Comment is about Never alone (blog)

Original item by Kath Hewitt

Hi Andy, thankyou for your comments. x

Comment is about Andy N (poet profile)

Original item by Andy N

this is almost as good for me, Marianne as the piece i have just commented on...

lot of excellent stuff here, but i like the way the sentence structure breaks down at the end of the poem...

top notch stuff again x

Comment is about I cannot write. (blog)

Original item by Marianne Daniels

Particularly like 'The sun streams my lifted arm, dressing me with winter petals' but i think the full piece is lovely.. has a out of worldness feel to it which i can really relate to.. one of my favourite pieces of yours x

Comment is about Untitled Bubble (blog)

Original item by Marianne Daniels

Hi Win,
If you copy and paste a youtube url, e.g. http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=N0e4ZqxJSnM&feature=related
into your text when you are creating a blog, it will automatically turn into an embedded video
'My friend comes from Manchester' was filmed in Blackpool - we did about 3/4 poems and they use 2/3 of them. At one stage we were messing about on the beach with the crew and somehow got some sand into an incredibly expensive camera lens :(

Comment is about Winston Plowes (poet profile)

Original item by Winston Plowes

I like the line "Time swings on this rolling boat". And I LOVE words like evanescent. But I'm not sure how that word fits in here either. Unless someone was totally beautiful while they were popping their cloggs?

Comment is about Evanescent (blog)

I enjoyed this very much John, especially your reading of it! And I can't think of much worse than being in this sort of confined space. I went pot-holing once - nightmare!!! xx

Comment is about Wrong Road Roun' - An Urban Villanelle (blog)

Original item by John Coopey

very very nice poem Larisa-thank you-and thank you for making me laugh with your funny comments-catch you soon Odessa girl-love to you-Stef.xx

Comment is about The Epiphany (blog)

Original item by Larisa Rzhepishevska

This is haunting. Every time I think you could do no better, somehow you do, with new relations between ideas and diction that are entrancing. The second stanza is amazing, but hardly more so than the entire poem. Love 'I stood with the cold...that would follow me', almost a poem in itself.

Comment is about I cannot write. (blog)

Original item by Marianne Daniels

This is lovely, Marianne. I do like: 'Every day, you are' using the verb 'to be' as 'existence', and also 'Who knows what anybody does to another?' - among many lines. I enjoy the metaphysical feel of the whole poem.

Comment is about Untitled Bubble (blog)

Original item by Marianne Daniels

Thank you, All. I was moonstruck last night, and felt as though I were born with the universe. I'm pretty sure George B. Shaw used 'snigger' in Pygmalion (certainly in My Fair Lady); so, I'm following the suggestion given as the two words are very close. 'Chocolate' never crossed my mind; and even now, my spellcheck is trying to kick out 'sniggers'. I guess I always thought 'snigger' was even meaner than 'snicker' which is mean enough as a covered laugh behind a hand, very derogatory. 'ashen' stays as the perfect word I want with all its connotations of sight, touch, taste and smell, plus the acidic residue of burning.

Comment is about The moon weeps (blog)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

interesting piece Charlene

Comment is about Thieves can be good (blog)

Cynthia?snikers?, liked the piece but don't get snickers

Comment is about The moon weeps (blog)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas