Never alone

If the sky falls

And the world ends,

I’ll be there with you.


If the stars fade

And the moon dulls,

I’ll be there  with  you.


If the sun holds

An eternal eclipse

And the black night consumes,

I’ll be there with you.


When your hearts’ last beat

Has been and gone

And your eyes are blank inside,

I’ll be there with you.

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Chris Dawson

Sun 23rd Jan 2011 17:48

Rather lovely this, but yes - I too can see it making good song lyrics.
Cx

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Marianne Louise Daniels

Fri 21st Jan 2011 08:55

This prompted me to listen to Led Zeppelin's Thankyou. which is always good stuff. maybe you should go into lyric writing?

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Mon 17th Jan 2011 19:52

This is a strong poem, Kath. For me, stanzas 2, 3 and 4 are the poem. Stanza 1 could be a little gem all by itself; but I don't think it sits well with this poem; it's a bit too 'Chicken Licken'. Well, while I'm here - I would make three-line stanzas; this format would 'sit' so well on the eyes.

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Francine

Mon 17th Jan 2011 17:25

Beautiful words, Kath...
'I'll be there with you.'... both loyal, and eternal within the context of your poem.

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Andy N

Mon 17th Jan 2011 13:55

top stuff, Kath.. Are you going into writing songs as this is very close to it but the repeating use of i'll be there is subtle but sweet x

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Laura Taylor

Mon 17th Jan 2011 11:34

Lovely :)

(think the apostrophe in hearts in the last verse should be between the t and the s though)

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