If the sky falls
And the world ends,
I’ll be there with you.
If the stars fade
And the moon dulls,
I’ll be there with you.
If the sun holds
An eternal eclipse
And the black night consumes,
I’ll be there with you.
When your hearts’ last beat
Has been and gone
And your eyes are blank inside,
I’ll be there with you.
This prompted me to listen to Led Zeppelin's Thankyou. which is always good stuff. maybe you should go into lyric writing?
This is a strong poem, Kath. For me, stanzas 2, 3 and 4 are the poem. Stanza 1 could be a little gem all by itself; but I don't think it sits well with this poem; it's a bit too 'Chicken Licken'. Well, while I'm here - I would make three-line stanzas; this format would 'sit' so well on the eyes.
Beautiful words, Kath...
'I'll be there with you.'... both loyal, and eternal within the context of your poem.
top stuff, Kath.. Are you going into writing songs as this is very close to it but the repeating use of i'll be there is subtle but sweet x
Lovely :)
(think the apostrophe in hearts in the last verse should be between the t and the s though)
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Chris Dawson
Sun 23rd Jan 2011 17:48
Rather lovely this, but yes - I too can see it making good song lyrics.
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