A very poignant and moving piece of writing drawing on obviously personal experiences to give it such impact. A poem that can, like Gus says, be accessed on various levels. No one could ever call you a "non person" now sweet pea!!!
Cate xx

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Orrrr... at least your senior moments have not lost their Sharp wit! I love your humerous slant on things!
Cate xx

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Thanks Greg!

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Thanks Win!

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Thanks Ann, what would you suggest instead of societal?

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Hilarious, and rather touching too! Bet it reads well live. x

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I do love the snow and it's ironing effect, everything becoming rounded. Though its hard to get around after snow I'm always sad to see it go and there's something about it being washed away by rain that for me feels wrong. Almost as though, since it took the time to cover everything it should be allowed to melt in it's own time rather than be sluiced lol! Lovely poem.

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Hello Alison
Just read "Wife and Mother" and was touched by its poingancy. I especially liked the last lines where "hope still glimmers" x

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Hello Loviness

Its so good to hear you again ,

I have signed on especially to reply ...

I have listened to this wonderful poem three times and read it many more times and it speaks to me in differing voices. Mainly of the intelligent modern woman buried by the busy man, once buried ... belittled, be valued and bewildered...

I can well imagine the molton lava of frustration that you discribe as Angry Lazerus....

I don't think I agree with Dave... but I wish I did .... Shite marks on many of the blogs should be gifted by admin... they probably haven't enough.


anyway back to your poem ... it was superb and thought prevoking.... and as usual beautifully performed.

Hope to see you soon and dont worry about being cold at Jeff's gigs... I'll keep you warm.


Gus x

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Hi Isobel, thanks for your comments on Rewind.

I enjoyed "Upon Disappearing" I'm almost at that disappeared point myself and clawing my way back with "poems, other people's poems..."

I especially liked, "this graphite emptied page / of scratchings blown away" what wonderful lines and how poingnantly they express the nothingness. Touched me deeply.

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Thanks Tommy, I have slightly reworked, hope you like!

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What a contrast. If I read your last poem correctly, it is about the way that poor quality poetry is dumped on WOL like spam email in our inboxes. By contrast, this one is about the extraordinary effect that a good poem can have on us. Connecting with our most potent memories and stirring us deeply.

A vivid description of an extreme case of a common and painful experience - we've all felt at times that we're disappearing but it doesn't often get written about.

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a new take Mark on the Pastor's. To answer your (rhetorical) question-I will stand shoulder to shoulder with you on these issues.

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this quite amusing in parts and I enjoyed reading it - I'll bet you enjoyed writing it cos' it shows - liked especially My hairstyle resembles a sparse shredded wheat I can’t stand the cold and I can’t stand the heat - flows very well

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I know the feeling chuck - but where would be without those precious memories eh - liked especially Gone the feet that minded well the gap, gone the grip that firmly shook Director’s hands - flowed smoothly and a nice piece to read

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roaring with laughter at your comments on my poem. Sorry it moved you to anger!!

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Hi Greg - much obliged for your kind comments on Sargasso Remembered and glad you enjoyed it - best regards

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Yes there is that to snow - it makes things look pretty for a while. I'm not sure my neighbour welcomes it much though - having had his fence knocked down twice this year and once last year by cars sliding on it...
Your poem reminds me of how I would love to bury dog foulers in ten tons of something very ugly and steaming.

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Isobel
Many thanks for your comments on Haircut

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Greg. Yes, you're absolutely right about Beeching/Betjeman.Just don't like "Efficiency!". Trains and poems suit each other somehow, I suppose. About getting my poems published - unless someone is going to pay me, and that's unlikely, it's not a big deal for me. I'm happy enough publishing online, I guess.I do enter poems in competitions now and again. The gambling man in me likes the idea of winning hundreds, even thousands of pounds in return for a few quid.

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Thanks for your comment on SPAM Cynthia. I think you got it well enough. Your comment brought to mind for me the song 'I wish it could be Christms every day-ay' ;-) x

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Good Morn Cynthia


Thank you for taking the time to read and comment on my latest posting.


The poem relates:

lady to lady as one spins out from spell bound dream sleep.The other unable to reach or find her.

Once again many thanks.

Augusta x

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Good Mornig Cate
Thank you for taking the time to read and comment ..Re Dark Mystic Waters.... Yes indeed it conjures up all of those magical chills.


Once again many thanks.

Augusta x

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Oh John what a lovely invitation....so kind...with offers like that I shall never dry up. Thank you for caring.

Many thanks once more .

Augusta xx

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Happy Christmas anticlimax-and WOW!! are your poems getting more dead good?!?!?...you betcha! all blowaway treasures!!! the Crown must be yours..if only I couldst verily attend the coronation! bazzin regards shipmate-(do not venture too near to crumbling cliff edges dearie...Mr S(jacket)Wilde.xx

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Great last blog entry Ann, They say the most rewarding things come when least expected! we will see, there are lots of us looking out to sea. Win X

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your best posting so far Charlene-excellent! thanks-Stef.x

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Hi Ron, Welcome to Write out Loud, Lots to explore on here. Have fun. Winston

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Aw, glad you liked East Budleigh, Isobel. We stayed in a camping coach there for a number of Easters in the early 60s. The train went past us on the next track. The last time we went I got pneumonia and spent a week in hospital, and soon afterwards graduated into long trousers and to grammar school, and to being bawled out by my surname. The line was closed about three years later, and thus became a perfect symbol of early childhood: something you can really never go back to. I've tried writing this poem in a number of ways and never got it quite right; this is the version I'm happiest with.

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Keep singing, Ann, and keep beating that drum! Greg x

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theres nothing wrong with that we all on the whole do as we have always done or more accurately what we feel most comfortable doing, comfort zones etc

we only change when something catastrophic or generally life threatening happens is it not such a bad thing to never be put in that position apart from whence our time comes? ill stop now as im just waffling.....

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you mean the space time continuum is bullshy ? you will be telling me star trek was fake next pffft...
i do agree though time is entirely a man made obsession in my opinion, mans quest for absolute control of everything is begining to wear more than a little thin. anyways cheers banksy ;-)

cheers stef and i too feel your opinion nice that we have all congregated here to agree, there seems to be so little of that these days :-)

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love storypoems and this is a good un, enjoyed

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excellent

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so, so sad, although i live in manchester i remember this tragic event, i wish you well and give you my support forever it is worth for bringing this back, it's far to easy to forget my friend.
bernie

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Funny - your poems are a hoot! x

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I started off not liking the theme and then realised I had at least 2 half written ones that could be very loosely tied to the theme. Perhaps I'll drag them out and dust them down!

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you are so spot on Charlene-we really do have to stay positive for the sake of coming generations moreso-great poem-hope you keep posting-many thanks-Stef.

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love to hate, hate to love...thats me. at least at times.

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and are we not very lucky reaping all forthcoming 'rewards?(yeh right!)moving to the brink in ever increasing footsteps is my H.O.-good piece Alan-thanks-Stef.

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Maybe once the child becomes a commuter some of the magic in life is lost, tarnished. Life, routine, responsibility kill that sense of wonder - make us too busy to take it on board.

Nice reflective piece Dave. x

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Well done you for pulling one out of the bag so quickly!

I like the way you manage to convey that life is a journey and the fact that none of us really 'grow up' - just move on.

I'm assuming the last verse is about after-life where we finally become connected to what is important and leave all the materialism behind.

I like it Janet! x

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your fantastic work always blows me away Josh-a very much enjoyed poem-thanks-regards-Stefan.

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Yes, I mean send it off to a magazine, along with some of your others, dear chap, if you haven't already done so. Well, I suppose I mean soft covers if you're going to pin me down ...

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time is most definitely a man-made entity & this is where even Einstein went wrong, factoring in a 4th dimension where none exists.... (IMHO) :)

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Cate
Thanks for your thoughts on Hircut.

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good to see you up and blogging Charlene, liked this one, keep posting. Winston

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Hi dave, thanks for your comments, I think I am getting the hang of these ghazals now, Win x

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Hi John, thanks for your kind remarks on Ghazal (In snow). Also, maybe you are even right lol! Win x

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Ann, thanks for reading Ghazal (In snow), Of course it is the hardest thing to get enough rhymes before the refrain and more difficult still to make them sound 'unforced'. In a traditional performance the audience would be all attension waiting to see how clever or inovative the poet is when each rhyme is revealed, rather like a punch line in a joke. Win

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