good stuff, dave - like the use of the really, really short lines in particular.. keep em coming, bud

Comment is about A need (blog)

Original item by Dave Bradley

interesting piece, martin.. i liked it but it felt maybe a stanza or two 2 long and also one or two of your beats in the stanzas sounded a little long maybe..

enjoyed it however.. keep em coming!

Comment is about Contact sport (blog)

Original item by Martin Miles

close to a song in bits this i think and i found myself trying to work out what instruments would suit it also.

nice stuff! x

Comment is about Sighs of Miles (blog)

wow...interesting. ill read again, read and learn!
first read I wasnt aware i could pull those amazing arrangements of words together but I really enjoyed that sensation, of an unusual gathering of scenes and images enticing the brain to make real the images grounded in a real earthy foundation. yet complex. like a natural 'golden rule' expression in nature. a hopeful message that the dull resonates a deeper shine xx

Comment is about Versus (blog)

Hi Ann its lovely to hear from you hope to chat soon. I have posted comment on your < little cardboard box > by the way you are lucky to have such a lovely surname. take care my friend lots of love ..Bernadette x x

Comment is about Ann Foxglove (poet profile)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

Ann what a wonderful beautiful tribute poem for someone who was so obviously truly loved..hope to chat with you soon my friend lots of love ..Bernadette x x

Comment is about little cardboard box (blog)

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Hi Lynn just read your latest comment on my profile . glad you are going to carry this new romance on < 17 1/2>. ive not read angels but am so keen to do so soon as i can and looking forward to reading stefs comments on it.love bernadette x x

Comment is about Lynn Dye (poet profile)

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How odd Tommy, Belting piece all the same. Even better for revisiting just now. :-) Win

Comment is about Tommy Carroll (poet profile)

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ha ha fanny!! penny dropped lolx

Comment is about Isobel (poet profile)

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Ha ha - maybe my mind isn't quite so smutty. You have changed coniphany to coniphony - maybe without realising it - that little vowel accounts for a lot...

ps I see now that you have only done that on the comment you left me - not in your poem - the wonders of the english language eh? Pronunciation accounts for a lot and I concede that I must have a dirtier mind LOL x

Comment is about Kath Hewitt (poet profile)

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GOOOOOOOD EVENING!Benji,s Mammy-very pleased you like'Biding my time'hope new four legs is being a good boy-pat him on the nut for me-thanks Lynn see you later-lotsa&potsa love-Mr.Wilde-xx(B-xx)

Comment is about Lynn Dye (poet profile)

Original item by Lynn Dye

Hi Isobel,
Thanks for your praise, i agree that porm is a little too close to porn to conjure much else from, but in my mind coniphony came to me as almost a silent cacaphony. Does that make sense? I can't seem to make it rude, even though i can be rather smutty! x

Comment is about Isobel (poet profile)

Original item by Isobel

Good on ya Kath - I really admire you for taking the challenge and making such a good job of it. Ray is right about the porm word - I also find the coniphany one hard to get my mind around without tittering... I think I must have a really crude sense of humour!

Comment is about Workshop exercise of the month (blog)

Original item by Kath Hewitt

What a beautiful city, Larisa, no wonder you are so proud of it. Thank you for sharing this with us, the virtual tours are really good. Looking forward to the poem xx

Comment is about MY BEAUTIFUL ODESSA (blog)

Original item by Larisa Rzhepishevska

Mmmm - I like that last line - it throws everything open to interpretation. Is it dangerous because it separates the two of you - allows you to hide from problems rather than deal with them. Or is it dangerous because of what you get up to in your shed?

Comment is about A need (blog)

Original item by Dave Bradley

Oh, yes! I forgot to tell you. It will be the poem about the Odessites and....certainly about me, as far as I was born here in Odessa.

Comment is about MY BEAUTIFUL ODESSA (blog)

Original item by Larisa Rzhepishevska

Hi Bernadette, thanks for comments on "A Perfect 10", also thank you so much for lovely comments on 17&half +1day, if you like short stories in poem form, did you see my Angel poems, think the first was in May and the other 4 in June. Probably worth reading even if it's just for Stef's hilarious comments throughout! Yes, will have to do some more on this one too. Thanks again, Luv Lynn xx

Comment is about bernadette herbertson (poet profile)

Original item by bernadette herbertson

It will be the poem about the history of the city, it will be the poem about the city today.

Comment is about MY BEAUTIFUL ODESSA (blog)

Original item by Larisa Rzhepishevska

Hi, Lynn! Look at my Odessa!

Comment is about Lynn Dye (poet profile)

Original item by Lynn Dye

Absolutely beautiful!! thank you for the link-I,m going for another walk round later again! I notice there was,nt one bit of litter anywhere-lovely place-thanks again Larisa-Stef-xx(M-xx)

Comment is about MY BEAUTIFUL ODESSA (blog)

Original item by Larisa Rzhepishevska

tOnce again you have demonstrated a genius for obsevation which you have utilised throughout this brilliant poem... wonderful

love it!

Helen comes with her social worker

who's all brief case and cold shoulder,

Great lines!

Gusxx

Comment is about Speedo Second Thoughts (blog)

Original item by Emma McCourty

Brilliant, caught all the moments ... great observational skills!

well done

Gusxx

Comment is about The Enlightenment 82 (blog)

Original item by Emma McCourty

Enjoyed this,Dave. You really mean shed don't you, rather than den? The insistent rhyming works well here. Maybe "refocusing" rather then focusing?

Comment is about A need (blog)

Original item by Dave Bradley

Thank you, Rachel."humorous yet edgy" that'll do me, that's pretty much the goal. I don't think there is a difference between a verse and a stanza, but stanza seems to have become the norm amongst a certain type....Etymologically a verse was a turn of the plough or furrow and stanza was a waiting chamber - hence line 3(I don't just throw these things together!)

Comment is about Versus (blog)

Well done Barrie!

Comment is about JOURNEY'S END (blog)

Original item by Barrie Singleton

certainly one to make you think, Georgina. I think this would really work in a live environment too.

My favourite bit was:

There was a place where individuals were suspended

Left to float, feed themselves on thin air.'

Keep em coming!! x

Comment is about Now. (blog)

Hi Ann,
Thank you for commenting. I'm not sure i can say that i am back as such but we'll see how it goes!
I got the words from the july workshop exercise of the month on the wol features, i think i knew what they meant straight away ha ha, says much of my maelstrom brain lol Hope you are well xx

Comment is about Ann Foxglove (poet profile)

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Hi Lynn - thanks for your kind comments. Lots of love AF xx

Comment is about Lynn Dye (poet profile)

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Hi Bernie my friend - I have been taken up with visitors and stuff - will get back to communicating soon! xxxx

Comment is about bernadette herbertson (poet profile)

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Well I have now tweaked the third line of that last stanza Stefan, maybe it is a little easier on the tongue - especially as I removed the 'deliberate (lol) mistake' :)

Comment is about In Darker Days We Gather (blog)

Original item by Dave Dunn

oh! you see-you are doing it again-stop worrying about posting-put a poem on when it suits you-not anyone else.keep cool girly! yours truly-Mr Potato head-xx

Comment is about bernadette herbertson (poet profile)

Original item by bernadette herbertson

Yes stef you beat me ha ha ! funny one Lynn lol xx bernadette

Comment is about A Perfect Size 10 (blog)

Original item by Lynn Dye

ah but!its your heart that is the perfect size....without doubt lovely girly,and thats all that matters,eh what! now put that cream cake down-lol!-ugs'n'kisses-Stef-xx(G-xx)psst..beat Herbychops on this!

Comment is about A Perfect Size 10 (blog)

Original item by Lynn Dye

Trust Herbertsons kid to get her twopennyworth in first! jumping the queue in front of old people(like me!)as to having to wait six weeks...no way Lynn..I would have to get a blow up doll,to keep me going-like the one thats in my wardobe...DOH!!..pass the bucket quick! good one sexy Dyechops-lotsa 'thingy'-Stef-xx(B-xx)

Comment is about 17½ + 1 Day (blog)

Original item by Lynn Dye

Good evening lovely Lady-your request,regarding a happy ending romantic poem has been noted and will soon be undertaken.Sincerely hope you have had a nice week-end and that your week goes well-thank you so much for comments on'Biding my time' and all of your kind thoughts,be thinking of you-speak soon-Steffers-xxxx

Comment is about bernadette herbertson (poet profile)

Original item by bernadette herbertson

I think this poem outstanding.

warm, real, moving and beautifully crafted.

excellent x

Comment is about The Enlightenment 82 (blog)

Original item by Emma McCourty

Hi, dear Bernadette! Thank you very much for your beautiful comment on my "Something about me". With warmest wishes to you and your family, Larisa

Comment is about bernadette herbertson (poet profile)

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lovely photograph Larisa you must be so proud of your beautiful grandson..I have 3 gorgeous grandsons and another one due in october so I can relate to your poem very well..love Bernadette x

Comment is about Something about me (blog)

Original item by Larisa Rzhepishevska

Well done Lynn you did it gave us a sequel ..well you've started it off now ! this could end up a book ! or at least a short story please as you can't end it here now you have got our minds racing and bet stef will comment soon ..ha ha I beat him to it .. very good follow on so keep on writing ...love Bernadette x x

Comment is about 17½ + 1 Day (blog)

Original item by Lynn Dye

This is really good and thought provoking. I enjoyed it too.

Comment is about Now. (blog)

Hi Ian just stumbled on your poem somewhat late. Really enjoyed it, some excellent lines.

Comment is about Setting (blog)

Original item by Ian Nenna

Wonderful poem, Ann, so pure and heartfelt. Respectful hugs, Lynn.

Comment is about little cardboard box (blog)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

Hi Bernadette, just posted an answer to you on my 17½ poem. I do remember those coffee ads, they were good, weren't they, but I'm sure Stefan's hoping for a sequel cos I wrote a series on the Angel and the Beachcomber. Anyway, I had fun with writing this sequel, so thanks to both of you for that!! Lynn xxx

Comment is about bernadette herbertson (poet profile)

Original item by bernadette herbertson

So brilliantly different! loved it-thanks-Stef.

Comment is about Now. (blog)

Thanks Bernadette, yes, I do remember the coffee ad, I think Stefan is remembering my sequels to the Angel poem though. As I said, I hadn't originally planned a sequel to this, but what the heck, I am just about to post it now!! xxx

Comment is about 17½ (blog)

Original item by Lynn Dye

Hello again Dave, commiserations on your loss of Griff, and thanks for comment on Max. There has to be something extra special about border collies, I think... Warmest Wishes, Lynn

Comment is about Dave Dunn (poet profile)

Original item by Dave Dunn

What a stunning picture of you both, Larisa, and a lovely poem. xx

Comment is about Something about me (blog)

Original item by Larisa Rzhepishevska

i like this..i found it humorous yet edgy
employed to collect red wine and sushi,

filter and ferment into something fruity -

that's my trickle-down theory of beauty.

i like the trickle down theory of beauty...

I also loved the basement 'verse'. i still dont know the academic difference of the verse and stanza...but i like your explanation better. your choice of objects and place are familiar the poem is tangible and real on cerebral subject...i like work that is grounded. i like its normalcy unlike the pretensiousness of my own loft.

Comment is about Versus (blog)

Hi Ann - thank you for your comments on 'A Certain Lady' :)

Best wishes,
Dave

Comment is about Ann Foxglove (poet profile)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

You have a beautiful heart Stefan. Thank you very much for your comment.

Comment is about Something about me (blog)

Original item by Larisa Rzhepishevska