Hi Isobel great sentiments in this poem and love the photo I have one like that !!xx

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sod the cartridges- it's 'madam Guillotine'!

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Jane, you 'man' the barricade, I'll read you works of Federico Garcia Lorca, and pass you the cartridges.

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love this Isobel I too love the things that children say so innocent and accepting of our explanations on life and yet we at times are more insecure than they are brill xx

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Hi Adele, just entered your comp. Thanks for the heads up. Win

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Hey John, with regards rhymes, if you think about it, at that period of time language was much simpler so perhaps it's right that you didn't use rhymes ;) x

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welcome abroad adele.. enjoyed your sample piece. x

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your verse serves well!

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Hello Ann.
Thanks for the comments on Red Lady of Paviland.
I think if you studied about the Red Lady you'd know that the supposition on which I base the poem (killed by a mammoth) is a bit of a stretch. More likely a regal ritualistic burial.
Also, the cave was miles (perhaps hundreds of miles) from the sea.
Anyway, once again, thanks for your thoughts.

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Hello Cynthia.
Thanks for your thoughts on Red Lady of Paviland.
The pressing rhythm I tried to achieve by the unremitting trochaic metre and then vary the line length using alternate full and truncated tetrameters. Simples!
I bet Lomgfellow would be awed to be in the same sentence as me!

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Thanks for your thoughts on Red Lady of Paviland.
I was inspired by the recent Neil Oliver programme on Ancient Britain.
There's bit of a poetic licence stretch in that the cave is at the bottom of the sea cliffs, where I set the poem whereas when the Red Lady was alive the sea was miles away, probably with South Wales continuously joined to the West Country (maybe even Brittany).

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I dont know about cute, but I sure am "cuddly" - since I stopped smoking 6 yrs ago !! xx

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Lots of rich imagery in here Jane and some lovely ideas. I don't as a rule enjoy nature poems, preferring things that engage more of an emotional response. However I can see that a lot of effort and craft has gone into this. I enjoyed reading it. xx

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Hello you! Long time no hear...
Thank you for your comment. Hope to see you at a Bolton gig some time soon. Can't make tomorrow but hopefully next month, if I can write something. x

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Hi Isobel, Just found this and thinks its good fun. Poverty of many sorts is always with us but some relative poverty can be nauseating!! Hoping you are well and inspired, much love, Jane

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Hi Jane THanks for the comment on Empty Nests. Glad you liked it. I'll have to check out some of yours. David

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Thanks for your comments on Solar Energy, Cate, much appreciated. This is good. I had lots of dens and good friends too. I'm not sure whether a Wii and a mobile phone substitute for the exploration you describe, but then I'm not a child today so I couldn't say. The poem runs into the last verse wonderfully. Best, Jane

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I'm afraid it's more the orthopaedic shoes these days Mr Banksy! ;-) xx

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Lovely poem, I think there might be another series about that path( if he finds it) and where it leads judging form this one! best, jane

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This is great and I absolutely agree with the sentiment.Jane

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Hi Cynthia,
It is lovely to hear from you. I very much appreciate your comments. Many thanks. I got caught up in producing a childrens poetry performance last summer and then looking at script writing. I have now entered a parellel universe of "space" and hopefully will write more. I love tea( really and really!) and I like this a lot- what an ultimate "to live beyond evil"

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I bet you've still got them corsets, haven't you ? - you know the pink perforated rubber ones with wire & rubber suspender buttons - you have, haven't you ? go on, tell me you have :p

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Win- thanks for the comments
(retro-fitted smile)
to be honest, playing devil's advocate, I'm probberly just all bitter'n twisted :D

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Cyn- thanks for the comments
(retro-fitted smile)
to be honest, playing devil's advocate, I'm probberly just all bitter'n twisted :D

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mope not
poem emits time
love evolves
earth takes heart

Excellent idea Cynthia. Playful.

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I like this a lot. When I studied archaeology I did my disertation on the Red Lady. I used the picture you've got here, and I went to the museum in Oxford and was able to draw some of "her" accoutrements, which included a pendant made from a deformed growth from a mammoth tusk. Brought back memories. I always meant to go and see her cave, but never did. Maybe one day!

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Dave, it has been a privilege to read this 'series' of poems. Your poetry 'journey' has been inspirational to me.

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Oh! Gnarled! I wondered why my spell check thingy underlined it in red (and slapped me on the wrist!) I kept thinking it must be narled, but that didn't look right either. Silly me! Anyway, thanks so much for kind comments! xx

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John, this is super. The subject development is totally engaging. I really like the chanting, hymn-like motion of the poem. The opening four lines have a Longfellow feel, like 'Hiawatha'.

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I so like your unorthodox imagery that just captivates your readers.

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I am reading two books simultaneously, one on science and the other on spirituality. I suddenly realized I was bridging the two ideas with 'density/destiny' and 'earth/heart' etc. Then the other words just kept leaping out at me. The one I liked the most was 'Love/Vole'.

Later: I have just read the poem 'the Decline of the Fishing Industry'. 'Vole' here and 'voles' there is purely an interesting chance.

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I think this is very good, Ann. I like twine and time and frame, and brittle and little. And maybe I'm stretching it here,! but corsets and realistic. These words give it a structure, a bit of whalebone. I reckon it should be gnarled rather than knarled, but maybe you prefer it that way.

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Hi Isobel,
Many thanks for your kind comments X

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Hiya Melanie, thanks for your brief visit! ;o)
Tommy

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Thanks, Isobel. The oddness of the rhyming scheme is probably the result of all the revisions.

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Brilliant. My friend who I wrote a book with (posthumously) wrote a similar one. I am now best friends with his son. I will post it now. It is called Things I Remember.

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Hello Christine - these poems are excellent. I write about mental health as a service user. I also write about nature as I have a qualification in Environmental Studies. At the moment, amazingly, I am writing love poems! Please get in touch if you want to know more

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No worries - I don't keep a tab :)) x

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Hi Greg, yes am afraid I am old enough! I was about 14, stood on the Great Lever End, Chelsea fans came in, it kicked off then I think there was fans on the pitch from both sides, chaos but great game, yeah those were the days mate!

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Having met your wife, I can say that she looks nothing like this vile picture you paint! Love the humour John - I imagine there must be women and men stuck with such partners and lurching towards death. What a cheery thought! You and Chris always manage to keep us entertained! x

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Love the macabre twist Kenney - I thought this performed well. x

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Yes I love both prior comments and would thoroughly agree with the quirkiness of using old language and very modern themes.
You are a master of stand up comedic poetry Chris. I so envy your ideas and ability to write this stuff - it is so entertaining, especially heard live.

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Well done Chris! A very powerful poem delivered with a lot of power when I heard it perfomed. How lucky are we to live where we do? Something has to change for women elsewhere and we need to scream it from the rooftops. x

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I like the humour in this Ray. I find the rhyming scheme a bit odd, but maybe that was your intention.

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I love the sound of the sea as it comes through into the cave, can smell the mustiness too - great, I do so love being transported - thanks John x

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Lovely line,

"Those that stand their ground,
hold up the lowering sky."

Fantstic image, well done x

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Cheers Jeff & thanks for coming over to introduce yourself, there'll be a few more friendly faces to focus on next time I'm on that big stage ;) I was on cloud 27 all day Friday, kept grinning & feeling proud of myself, overall a great experience, good to hear other people too and meet people I'd read & enjoyed on here.
Have a fantastic weekend, see you soon,
Petrova.
xXx

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Hi Jeff. Can't believe you were at that Bolton v Chelsea match - surely you were too young?! I'm talking about the 1976-77 season when both teams were pushing for promotion. I do remember it being fairly lively at the ground - those were the days! I was living in York at the time and I recall even more clearly driving across on the M62, and how beautiful the snow on the tops looked in the January sunshine

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Very evocative and really really interesting. Any more where this came from?

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Nice one or six Dave love the line about the gaudy parrot, cheers for comment on Nat of the Wanderers, Boltons Dixie Dean! good to see you at wigan last night, cheers Jeff

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