<Deleted User> (6895)
Mon 17th Jan 2011 19:00
one did indeed have said gee gee doing a plop all over the proceedings-and the bugger still aint stopped galloping! ta for concern-Mr Grrreygrumps.xx
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<Deleted User> (6895)
Mon 17th Jan 2011 18:40
you are right Dave-holy wars?definitely a contradiction in terms-as for Norma Jean-they don,t make or break 'em like that anymore-rock on Mr D!-my best to thee-SW.
Comment is about She Sang... (blog)
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<Deleted User> (6895)
Mon 17th Jan 2011 18:19
Good poem Mr Alan!being open to lottsa interpretation-suits me sir!-SW
Comment is about In task (blog)
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I can connect with this so much! And what a good poem!
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<Deleted User> (6895)
Mon 17th Jan 2011 18:15
I,m pondering over this poem in a very nice slow way-SW.x
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<Deleted User> (6895)
Mon 17th Jan 2011 18:08
good poem Ma Dye-I can actually speak two languages-English and rubbish-can you guess which one I speak more fluently? shhh! ta Ma D-Stefano.xx
Comment is about I'm Sorry, I'm English (blog)
Original item by Lynn Dye
'Only the presence of an absence'
Fab line. It captures that feeling so well...
Thank you.
Jx
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Tricky indeed. Lots here to paint half a picture and get the imagination going on the rest
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Beautiful words, Kath...
'I'll be there with you.'... both loyal, and eternal within the context of your poem.
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<Deleted User> (8753)
Mon 17th Jan 2011 17:14
liked this, got me wondering who"she" is?
Comment is about A funerals review (blog)
Philipos
Mon 17th Jan 2011 17:14
Laura - fancy you being at Freshfield Sands as recently as you were - wow - I'm quite sure it looks heaps better than on my last visit - nature trail and all lol x
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Philipos
Mon 17th Jan 2011 17:11
Dave - so glad you and your friends enjoyed Freshfield Sands and for taking the trouble of saying so
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Philipos
Mon 17th Jan 2011 17:04
Hi Ann - re; Freshfield Sands - yes places do move our thoughts and usually because of who we're with at the time - appreciate your getting in touch x
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<Deleted User> (8753)
Mon 17th Jan 2011 17:03
Ray, this is a well considered well observed and thoughtful piece, loved it. Loved the slipstream bit and the outliving at last our patience especially. Win x.
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<Deleted User>
Mon 17th Jan 2011 16:57
Ray, this is a well considered well observed and thoughtful piece, loved it. Loved the slipstream bit and the outliving at last our patience especially. Win x.
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<Deleted User> (6895)
Mon 17th Jan 2011 16:56
hey fingy!beastie-Barlow ta for sparing me a serious view(almost)on me poo-im 'unseen foe'-el mucho thanko,s squire-Wotsisname.(me am just back from the gremlin wars...bloody so called technology!)
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<Deleted User> (8753)
Mon 17th Jan 2011 16:55
<Deleted User> (6895)
Mon 17th Jan 2011 16:53
hi Ann-thanks for all recent comments-just back from warring with the computer gremlins-big lot of dead good regards-SW.XX
Comment is about Ann Foxglove (poet profile)
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Hi Kate, both Sunday Morning TV and the sump hunt made me smile - I think our 'escape' video when the kids were teeny was Postman Pat, lol. Best wishes, Dave
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Vampires get tooth decay all threw the night and threw the day.Werewolves fleas, bring them misery. There claws too sharp to ich them free.However zombies don't use prosthetic knees just one dark nght to make them free.Fairy tale princesses hardly ever say please, behind the curtain there full of greed.Can witches have white weddings is a trick question. For a white which is really quite pleasent.Mummies have concreate for their bedding without a duvet or no linen.Do Orcs have to shave to ask this question is quite brave.Angels never misbehave there, there to watch us throughout are days.A goblin’s average height is 2ft tall to be a nuisance they can never get tall.Giants never start off small?Now here are your answers i've answerd them all, I had no money for a stamp. So i posted it on this wall.
thourght youll like this Dan Marcus Burns
Comment is about I have a few questions? (blog)
Original item by Daniel Hooks
These ceremonies seldom match expectations; I recall a similar one in Spain which involved an eight-hour round trip. And yet we felt we had done our duty; and my wife felt strangely comforted. Your clear-eyed view doesn't dispel the beauty of pink and purple petals entwining into a garland.
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Hi andy, than ks for reading my Ghazals... 'the north sea rolls'I think this is the best bit too, (if it has a best bit) and yet they are all really simple words in that line (maybe that tells us something eh. Also like long words too .lol ,Win X
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We won't get fooled again, as Pete Townshend said. More in hope than expectation
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<Deleted User> (8943)
Mon 17th Jan 2011 14:16
Hi Andy, thanks for your comments on "Empty" the repeated no could be seen as a refusal of the fact as well as the fact...
Didn't make it to Wigan, some upset occurred which needed sorting - things don't happen when there's nothing planned! Ah well, Bolton isn't too far, used to live in Farnworth a moon or two ago, I'll check out the details, thanks x
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another good un, dave.. enjoyed this - eye opening certainly! lol
Comment is about Beyond the garden (blog)
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hi dave - bit of a change in voice for you there, but i love it.
good to meet you again on sunday.. i remember meeting you briefly with Isobel at Liverpoetry last Jan - where does the time go?
top stuff anyhow returning to your piece
Comment is about Beyond the Garden #2 (blog)
Original item by Dave Bradley
top stuff, Kath.. Are you going into writing songs as this is very close to it but the repeating use of i'll be there is subtle but sweet x
Comment is about Never alone (blog)
Original item by Kath Hewitt
This is so good, Cynthia, I love it all. x
Comment is about Heat Wave (blog)
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Good fun. Don't know if you are a dad but if you are, or will be, your kids are going to have a wonderful time with bedtime stories.
Comment is about I have a few questions? (blog)
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Hi Tommy, I just logged on to answer your comment, and then saw it had changed. To clarify, my poem is no way meant to be derogatory to the Welsh, Scottish or Irish, I have all 3 nationalities in my family or circle of friends. It is the British government I am really knocking and their political correctness. I am not being patriotic in saying I'm English, I am simply stating a fact.
Comment is about I'm Sorry, I'm English (blog)
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<Deleted User> (8943)
Mon 17th Jan 2011 13:22
Thanks Laura, it was a difficult but also a deeply profound experience which was hell to go through but later provided such immense learning and opportunity for personal growth - which is often the case... xXx
Comment is about Laura Taylor (poet profile)
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Thanks for your observations. I am interested what it means to YOU. So actually you are the person best of all to qualify on my work :-)
Whilst I like some bits, Couplets 2,6,7 & 9. Others are not poetic and are more just like statements. It's ok if they are odd and quirky or dont make complete sense but they need to do something and not be just bland. Maybe I have been reading too many free verse ghazals lately. The disconnected narative is a feature of the Ghazal form and so is ok but strange if you are not used to it. In the hair ghazal the shers are also disconnected BUT they are pulled together by the common refrain "your hair". Here the refrain "By it" makes things more random.
Also interesting that often (and on this page) people liked the shers I didn't particularly like, Hmm.
X H
Comment is about Laura Taylor (poet profile)
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Hiya - just letting you know that you have posted multiple blogs of the same poem - you might want to remove the surplus ones :)
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Cheers ears - title is a biblical reference, Matthew to be precise. Yeh - third verse could do with something else - now changed. Better, do you think? Which line was lyrical?
Tom x
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Hi Tom. Thanks for the comments on Ghazal (your hair), this one was written over a year ago and was never happy with it . rewrote it in pub last week and like it now. The previous ghazal (by it) I am not sure about. Would be interested on your input compared to say, (your hair). Houston
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Loved this - nan who was two...I had a nan like that as well. I love that she bit them back :D
It's got a really nice story-telling feel to it as well, fitting nicely with the childhood theme
Comment is about Heat Wave (blog)
Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas
Just read this and the previous one - these would be brilliant read out loud Dave - would love to hear them. I bet kids would love to hear them too.
Comment is about Beyond the Garden #2 (blog)
Original item by Dave Bradley
Lovely :)
(think the apostrophe in hearts in the last verse should be between the t and the s though)
Comment is about Never alone (blog)
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Nice one Alan. Thank you for commenting on mine. I really don't know whether any more will come on that theme. The Unconscious mind doesn't always do what it's told.
Comment is about The pen is mightier than the sword ? (blog)
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What a good evening at Bolton yesterday. Well done and thanks, Jeff.
PS. Can't make the next one - darn!
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hi dave, did i call you alan tonight?? duh so sorry. jeff informs me that alan bradley was a dirty rotter fro corrie...oops. you are not dirty or a rotter, nice to see you tonight x
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<Deleted User> (6315)
Sun 16th Jan 2011 22:50
Aye, political correctness in all its stupid forms brasses me off too!
Comment is about I'm Sorry, I'm English (blog)
Original item by Lynn Dye
I enjoyed this - I always enjoy your poems but this was very different!
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<Deleted User> (6315)
Sun 16th Jan 2011 20:52
Hiya Dave! Thanks for reading 'softly.' This actually arrived not long after i had watched the life story of Edith Piaf..so there you go! (course i altered the original to make the read more ambiguous, lol i always do!) Anyways hows yourself?.not seen you for a while.
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<Deleted User> (6315)
Sun 16th Jan 2011 18:09
well i just couldn't resist Dave..and for me you have done it again (ha you used the stand alone again, again!) Yea I do like the thought provoking original ideas within these garden writes and look forward to reading more..gets the thumbs up from me.
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alan barlow
Mon 17th Jan 2011 19:01
cheers wild thing there were a number of themes and contortions running through my mind at the time i must admit plus i hadnt slept for over 24 hrs so it probably added to the mess i was trying to create lol
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