Good poem, Nima, I like this, especially the final message that it is the tormentor that is the clown. Enjoyed your sample poems too.
Comment is about Nameless by Nima Stone (blog)
Sawubona Zethembiso. Wemukelekili to Write Out Loud. Ngiyabonga Kakhulu for the comments you made on Fathers 4 Justice. It is good to know that some people can look upon objectively and realize that yes, Men do after all have hearts. There is difficulty in the UK for children at the moment. And men are being given the blame for all societies ills.
I hope that you enjoy the site, and that your writings go from strength to strength.
Further, Black is beautiful! : )))
My wife is from Durban, a strong Zulu woman who knows how to (fairly), keep me in place.
I have visited Africa several times and know her to be a beautiful continent, I wish more people realized that.
One love Zethembiso, i believe in it. I believe in ubuntu.
Best wishes
Mike
x
Comment is about zethembiso mkhize (poet profile)
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Nice poem, good rhythm, which is difficult in something fairly long. I know not why "pickles, home-made" rather than home-made pickles.Is it over the pass? Not "around the pass"?
Comment is about A Poem for Bernard (blog)
Original item by STEVE RUDD
Thanks Kath
Been missing your words around the place...any new pieces on the go? :)
Comment is about Kath Hewitt (poet profile)
Original item by Kath Hewitt
hi left you a note on my latest poem x
looking forward to your next poem.
would you be able to write me one to order? im thinking of including some of your words with my art??
Comment is about Laura Taylor (poet profile)
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Thanks all - and very funny Rach, I did as it goes ;p
Comment is about Clear Blue Air (blog)
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Hi Laura;
Aye - if all goes to plan will be at tyldesley in a few weeks time (No a clue yet what I am going to read however currently). Hope to see you there xx
Comment is about Laura Taylor (poet profile)
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Hi Kath;
on the jobs front - not much sadly.. My job is due to finish off soon and I ain't looking forward to what comes next.. Certainly there isn't much out there - I keep getting agencies offering me jobs on hours and shifts I simply ain't willing to do.. x
Comment is about Kath Hewitt (poet profile)
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Hi Lynn - glad you like the end of summer IV - has been a interesting and changing series for me to do this and hopefully will reflect in what comes next and you are correct on the typo.. it should be 'necessary' - i'll have to get it amended.. thanks again - Andy N x
Comment is about Lynn Dye (poet profile)
Original item by Lynn Dye
Hi Lynn - glad you like this - it is a typo.. it should be 'necessary' - i'll have to get it amended.. x
Comment is about The End of Summer (IV) (blog)
Original item by Andy N
Thx for the comment on the 9/11 Haikus.
My Best
Chris
Comment is about Isobel (poet profile)
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Thx for the comments on the 9/11 poem Jeff.
My Best
Chris
Comment is about Jeffarama! (poet profile)
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Thx for the comments and for reading
My Best
Chris
Comment is about 9/11 (blog)
i like it.. it does convey the feeling well the incessant nature of disruption. cant help feeling the inherent contradiction of writing a poem like this..why not go out and stop going on, get the wind in your hair or something, im talking here ;)
i believe the secrets of meditation can only be found in practice, but the simplicity of the colour blue in this poem can be a release x
Comment is about Clear Blue Air (blog)
Original item by Laura Taylor
You have captured the feeling well... So annoying - isn't it?!
'To talk is to torture
You butcher my peace'
When I go to the beach... : )
'just silence and sunshine
and wind in my hair
and purity found in the clear blue air'
Comment is about Clear Blue Air (blog)
Original item by Laura Taylor
Chris
Missed this....very true
Once, as delegate in the seventies in Hungary, we boned the student interpreter to give us the lowdown on the revolution.
As he gave the official version loudly (for fear of a mike) his hand and facial gestures gave one of the most hilarious de-bunking performances of his words that I have ever seen....The people were never completely fooled by the lies.
Comment is about Animals (blog)
I am so chuffed! It was a great night, lovely atmosphere and loads of people turned up. I think twelve people read, poetry and prose, and some songs too. Loads of friendly nattering in the interval, a lovely venue. Here's to the next one (Nov 1st) and a huge thank you to all who took part. You are all stars in my book!
Review is about Poetry Mine on 4 Oct 2011 (event)
Yes, somtimes it is just so much better to be alone! xx
Comment is about Clear Blue Air (blog)
Original item by Laura Taylor
You know what they say, Anne:
Hare today, gone...?
How`d your gig go?
Comment is about "The last remaining Mara hare . . . " (blog)
Original item by Ann Foxglove
A sort of "found" poem. Much info taken from the Newquay Zoo newsletter. Visited Newquay Zoo today - and I did miss the Mara hare. So there!! :)
Comment is about "The last remaining Mara hare . . . " (blog)
Original item by Ann Foxglove
This has a nice gallop to it - broken up a bit by the 'going on and on and on and on' bit. Perhaps that is the effect you were after. I get the feeling of a horse champing at the bit to get away. Won't go on anymore ;-) x
Comment is about Clear Blue Air (blog)
Original item by Laura Taylor
Hi Andy - thanks for your note on Hasta. Aye, will be seeing you soon at Tyldesley if you're going? Take care x
Comment is about Andy N (poet profile)
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Thank you Dave and Andy for your kind comments.. xx
Comment is about Old Shoe Box (blog)
Original item by Lynn Dye
Hi Andy, I have enjoyed all of your End of Summer series, and this one is no exception, some great lines once more. x
p.s. did you mean "necessarily" in the last line or should it be "necessary"?
Comment is about The End of Summer (IV) (blog)
Original item by Andy N
Oh Larisa, I just love this poem, and can you please send me some of this perfume - I get the feeling that A La Larissa is JUST what I need! ;)
With love, Lynn xx
Comment is about A La Larissa Perfume (blog)
Original item by Larisa Rzhepishevska
Thank you Lynn. A heart of a child has everlasting joy! who would not want to have that joy?!
Comment is about the heart of a child. (blog)
Original item by zethembiso mkhize
Hey, I really like this one, Laura. Well written. x
Comment is about Clear Blue Air (blog)
Original item by Laura Taylor
Hi Zethembiso, welcome to Write Out Loud.
I really like this poem, I know how you feel on this one, to have the heart of a child would be wonderful...Lynn
Comment is about the heart of a child. (blog)
Original item by zethembiso mkhize
hello Nick...excellent poems..you can paste your work into a 'blog' to be read by more people...mick.
Comment is about Nick Coleman (poet profile)
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Thankyou for the comments.
I do wish I could monitor the comma, I get quite tangled up sometimes and am obsessed with controlling pace now.
Comment is about Silentium (blog)
Original item by Marianne Daniels
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Thu 6th Oct 2011 10:38
Great words Isobel. Very captivating.
Comment is about Isobel (poet profile)
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Thanks Nima.. I love this one too... Typical of the way my poetry goes sometimes - it was one of the quickest I've wrote recently - wrote mostly between feeding two very hungry cats! lol x
Comment is about Escape (blog)
Original item by Andy N
hi, yeah, i'm good thanks. not writing but good, can't seem to find words i like lately.
good luck with the job hunt, i hope you fare better than i! It's a dire situation i have to say ha ha xx
Comment is about Andy N (poet profile)
Original item by Andy N
Hi Shirley;
Will take a bit more time to explain this to you than I really have time but I'll drop you a proper note probably next week-end when I have a bit more time and explain what I mean.
Hope you are good
Cheers x
Andy N xx
Comment is about Shirley Smothers (poet profile)
Original item by Shirley Smothers
Hi Kath;
Busy at the moment looking for a new job etc but good.. When I have a bit more time - probably next week-end and into the week after - I'll have time to sit down and do a review for you.
Hope you are okay
A x
Comment is about Kath Hewitt (poet profile)
Original item by Kath Hewitt
Hi Win;
thanks for your comments over The End of Summer I - III, m8. (Part IV is now up too, the big finale too - lol).
All four are a change I think a little bit in style and is something I itend developing further over the coming months.
Hope to see you soon.
Andy N
Comment is about Winston Plowes (poet profile)
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Part 3 and Part 4 of the End of Summer are now up, Jennie.. Hope you are good and hope to see you soon at Stockport! x
Comment is about Jennie B (poet profile)
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Part 4 is now also up, John.. Hope to see you next week @ Stockport.
Comment is about J F Keane (poet profile)
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thanks to all who commented here on this piece also... Out of the four, it's probably my personal favourite but looking back at them now, i am dead pleased how they came out.. A
Comment is about The End of Summer (II) (blog)
Original item by Andy N
Thanks Win and John for your comments here.. Been a change in style for me and I am really pleased you both and lots of others have enjoyed them.. A
Comment is about The End of Summer (I) (blog)
Original item by Andy N
Hi Win;
I hope too we are spared the mustard gas.. I think I had Wilfred Owen in mind when I wrote that last line.. lol
Cheers
Andy N
Comment is about The End of Summer III (blog)
Original item by Andy N
excellent, Marianne.. particularly enjoyed the last stanza and the line that is broke away from it at the moment - adds a lot of power.. top stuff xx
Comment is about Silentium (blog)
Original item by Marianne Daniels
i agree with dave here, Lynn... lot not said here, but i like it and the way it is structured etc.. x
Comment is about Old Shoe Box (blog)
Original item by Lynn Dye
Isobel
Fri 7th Oct 2011 15:21
What about a long, hard, comfortable screw up against a wall?
Comment is about Shortlist (blog)