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The End of Summer (I)

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Soon Autumn 
will be here
with it's dusty
and driving breeze
across fields
from the back of your house
where poppies would
previously dance with you
now spit in your face. 

Autumn will hold your hand
when you run
to the train station
every morning
jagged with purpose
like it was
famous for 15 seconds.


Soon Autumn will be here
and on the road again
with leaves dangling
in the middle
of your garden
like a radiogram
of a old film.

Summer will be
dangling from a distance
just slightly out of reach
almost like a party
you had not been invited to
before the cold weather comes,

leaving,

leaving,


you wondering had it gone
before it had really started
returning to the small ads. 

summer

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John F Keane

Thu 17th Nov 2011 11:25

Autumn will hold your hand

I love that line, so haunting. On a more pedantic note,

'of a old film'

would read better as:

'of an old film'.


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Andy N

Thu 6th Oct 2011 09:04

Thanks Win and John for your comments here.. Been a change in style for me and I am really pleased you both and lots of others have enjoyed them.. A

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winston plowes

Sun 2nd Oct 2011 21:49

Enjoyed this Andy, This bit - jagged with purpose, like it was famous for 15 seconds. I thought particularly poetic and the ending interesting and original. Win

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John F Keane

Wed 14th Sep 2011 20:21

The personification reminds me of Keats':

'Who has not seen thee oft amid thy store?
'Sometimes whoever seeks abroad may find...'

The books this reminds me of are Ray Bradbury's Dandelion Wine and The October Country:

It was a quiet morning, the town covered over with darkness and at ease in bed. Summer gathered in the weather, the wind had the proper touch, the breathing of the world was long and warm and slow. You had only to rise, lean from your window, and know that this indeed was the first real time of freedom and living, this was the first morning of summer.


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Andy N

Sat 3rd Sep 2011 00:40

thanks cynthia for the comment here.. it's one to think bout which i hadn't thought about so all suggestions are welcome x

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Thu 1st Sep 2011 21:37

Andy, I like this a lot - unusual, fab images. IMO, I would consider whether the first stanza is needed at all - only because it is so ordinary, in a poem of extraordinary ideas.

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Andy N

Thu 1st Sep 2011 13:18

Hi Philipos; - Cheers for the note. Yep, Autumn shall soon be here defo although oddly enough it's lovely outside my works today where I am typing.. Surely it can't last however - lol - thanks again... A

Philipos

Sun 28th Aug 2011 22:57

Hi Andy, minds that think alike eh? Yes Autumn will soon be here and unpicked blackberries will freeze on bramble bushes once again.

Hints of melancholia in your poem to get us in the mood although I didn't find summer too bad this year which is good for me because I can't handle too much heat these days.

Nice one.

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