Hi Andy, thank you for kind comments on Teardrops in my Coffee. You may be right, it would work without the first verse, considering this, thanks. xx

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It's a lovely poem, Ann.You a fan of Ted Hughes? I wonder if removing the two "Likes" might make it even better.

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Hello Ann, thank you very much for kind comments on my latest, much appreciated. xx

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Thanks ever so much, Cynthia.This will sound ungrateful, I guess, but I'm not all that fond of this poem! Now the previous one, Leprosy, that's a good poem.I think!But it's all very subjective, this poetry lark.

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Anne,
excelent use of soft words to sheath the razors...Also the use of children at the end. The whole thing has a downey feeling about it...good stuff!

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Cynthia! You make it worse.

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I don't miss mediocre, though suspect it misses me.

Can't fault Rachel's reply.

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Hi Dave, thank you for kind comments on Teardrops in my Coffee. Fortunately not autobiographical at all, thanks for asking. x

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Thanks for kind comments on Teardrops in my coffee, John, also your comment on my profile which made me laugh - typical man! Lol. x

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I reckon that the effluvia of liposuction could be put to better use by shipping it over to africa in those giant oil tankers to make cakes and biscuits and sweetmeats to feed the starving millions - you'd feed a village on your own (and me another )

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love it John

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Enjoyed this very much, Ann, love your descriptions. xx

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reminds me of all of us. we were all stars. till we got smashed by a ton of bricks. i think the trick is to know it and keep fighting and remember that stars are light years away and theres no rush to die in.

Its also a bit mariliyn....the voice therefore sounds sleazy..

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I just like the words and their magic. The first stanza is outstanding. I do not find depression here - realism, maybe - existentialism - excitement - but not sadness.

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Balderdash! Besides, it was a stupid question. But very fetching poetry - in the 'short and punchy' style.

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'up to my ankles in twilight' is one of those genius lines that make reading poetry a sheer joy, and also 'every conceptual surface'. plus -- plus! This is great poetry in concept, imagery, diction and social reverberation. (I'm pretty sure that's the word I want.)

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Thanks, Neil. I guess "almost up to my ankles in twilight" is something akin to "not dark yet, but it's getting there."
I'd like the same tolerance and latitude extended to those who don't need it, to be extended to those who do.I'm a socialist.
What I bemoan most is the fracture of communities.At least graffiti is "home-grown", not purchased or downloaded.
I reckon you're right about the last line. I had my doubts beforehand, so it's going.

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Thank you so much, how lovely you all are! xxx

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Howdy John

I was made up to find it there, was only looking for The Bidding and must have missed it first time around.

Aye, me other half is a Leonard Cohen nut, and played it to me :) I love that 'we are ugly but we have the music' line - making me fill up just thinking about it!

I shall look up that band you mention :)

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'Ey up, Monkey!
Thanks for reading Janis.
She was a bit special, wasn't she?
We have a kid in our village who reminds me of her. I first saw her about 3 years ago when she was 13 at a school talent competition. So shy she didn't speak or look up. When the music started this huge voice opened up from the bowels of the earth. I shuddered.
She's in a local band now called the Lucettes, which you can find on YouTube.
On another front (and pulling in the thread of sexy songs) did you know that Leonard Cohen's Chelsea Hotel was about his relationship with JJ?

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"up to my ankles in twilight". I like this line, not sure what it means though. I think I know what you're getting at in this well conceived poem, but I'm not sure whether or not you think that it is a good thing that the safety net is being removed. Are you sympathetic?
"every conceptual surface'. Irony? Or a recognition of graffiti as art? This is clearly a very thoughtful poem and there are enough clues in the title and the text without the final line. Good thought provoking stuff.

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Enjoyed this Lynn and agree with all comments thus far.

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Some really powerful images here and the poem has the reader wanting to know more about the realities of the situation which is always a good sign.

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I likewise enjoyed this Ann - skilful use of comparisons and language.

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This reads like the writer is depressed - not sure exactly why but there's a muffled quality to it, an 'outside' feel. It might be the last 2 lines of the first stanza that does it.

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I like this - and can understand your feelings in this. 'Weird delirium of pride' - well summed up that line.

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Ha - only just seen this John. Janis is incredibly important to me. She totally got me through being 15 and 16 - still can't listen to Little Girl Blue without being transported back to my achingly lonely teenage bedroom.

Don't suppose you went to the Summer of Love exhibition at the Liverpool Tate a few years back did you? I was browsing around, and then saw this Porsche...looked at the notice...and it was her's! I seriously just welled right up there and then - couldn't stop looking inside, imagining her sat there, driving round.

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Like the observation of detail in the second verse, Lynn, and the flatness of the final line.

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Like this very much, Ann. Getting limbered up for your trip to Lumb Bank? ...

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No, I have no liquidity problems at the moment, Ann! and I think I noted a comment from someone else that you have really been on top form recently. Concise and on the money. Keep it up!

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nice stuff, kealan... agree with rachel over the disturbing images although my personal favourite is the 2nd stanza.. A

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Hello Ann. Thanks. We've millions of Kizzys addicted to their mobile phones.

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Enjoyed this, Lynn... Have you considered starting it from the 2nd stanza? Has a real power in it either way.. cheers - andy n x

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Ah, cutting off your nose to spite your face - I'm sure we've all done that! An honest read, and a good one too!

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Really lovely poem Lynn.xx

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Wow - thanks for recent kind comments on my poems Dave (you're not wanting to borrow a fiver are you?;)

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A good one Lynn - has a kind of flatness in the style which reflects well how you must have been feeling. I hope it was a long time ago.

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Hi John - thanks for commenting on 'There be fairies' - I must get you to relate the story you hinted about! :)

Best wishes, Dave

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hey up!!!!
its only a cracker-thats all!!

well done you clever girl!!

me'n'her.xx

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Dry your eyes, Lynn.
Loved the 2nd and 3rd verses best.

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Thanks Isobel.

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Hi John
hope you are back in poetical flow.

kindly thanks are yours
for your welcome comments
on my poem 'Wife'

both she and I thank you.

Patricia & Stef.

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well chuffed Marianne
for your approval of 'Wife'

really appreciated.

Stefan.

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Hi Lynn.

as always,we are grateful
for your kindness
to us both
in particular on this occasion
for comments on 'Wife'

Tricia and I send you
loadsa...xxxxxxxxxxxx

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Another gem. I must apologize, Anne, while you were so generously responding to mine I was overlooking how good all your recent poems are. So poignant and so unaffected. Lovely!

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Catching up with your recent poems, Ann, it seems to be that somewhere along the line you have taken them to a whole new level. This one like 'Peace' is really excellent: affecting and authentic. It seems to me to be a question of inspiration rather than just technique. Greg, is right. The precision and concreteness of the last stanza are excellent.

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I think this is brilliant, Ann.

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Hi Ann your comments on 'The Home' are fine by me!

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See you're getting straight to the point here John, well hopefully, give me a giggle! Thanx for comment on Time after time, I won't bark it out, I can deliver some in a refined manner! cheers Jeff

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Hello John (Townships) many thanks for commenting in your positive way.

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