This gut-fat-prick-fat-gut-fat-prick thing - shouldn't we all be recycling more?

Comment is about Isobel (poet profile)

Original item by Isobel

It's alright for me to be a Dirty Berty - I'm a bloke! (just kidding).

Comment is about Lynn Dye (poet profile)

Original item by Lynn Dye

Shame, Foxy?
I remember shame.
It came alongside guilt and puberty.

Comment is about Ann Foxglove (poet profile)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

Excellent John.
I had to look up the reference but I'm better for it.
Good on ya.

Comment is about Mutemwia (blog)

Original item by John Embley

I caught one once.

Comment is about There Be Fairies... (blog)

Original item by Dave Dunn

Interesting, informative, raises a lot of issues. And very well-crafted. I'm sure this would / does go down very well live, Ray.

Comment is about Leprosy (blog)

Re: Townships, thanks very much Laura, I know people have very strong views about RSA and I did attempt something similar to this a while back but varied the theme because I am leading a group on African poetry in October. Your kind endorsement has more value than you may have realised.

Comment is about Laura Taylor (poet profile)

Original item by Laura Taylor

Oh this is goood. Not only a great story (I looked it up), but the way you've expressed it is noble, and to my mind, one of your better ones. I know you like to rhyme a lot, but this has lots of internal rhymes, which I prefer to the more obvious ones these days. There's a moral tone to it as well, that kind of 3rd person observation that can see and dissect the skewed approach of the white doctor.

Love that last line

Comment is about Leprosy (blog)

love the second verse. Powerful captions.

Comment is about Everything I Am Not And More (blog)

Original item by Kealan Coady

Thankyou, its a good thing :) x

Comment is about The end of an era (blog)

Thanks :) that was lovely xx

Comment is about Just a little birdie. (blog)

Thanks for kind comments, Stef and Tricia. Hoping to win the euromillions myself this week!!!
(Apostrophes? Am I being thick again??)
Lotsa love from this scroat, Lynn xx

Comment is about Consumerism (blog)

Original item by Lynn Dye

Well written, I can associate with this, too.

Comment is about Everything I Am Not And More (blog)

Original item by Kealan Coady

oh! well said Mother Dye!

you need money?

ok,ok-call me
after I,ve won euromills this Friday-

might give you a few quid-but!
it comes with 100% interest-haha!

very very good poem blondie!

(lots of apostrophes eh Lynn!!!!!)

and lotsa love girly
from the scroaties

Tricia & Stef.xx

Comment is about Consumerism (blog)

Original item by Lynn Dye

Hello Andy :)

thanks for taking your time with my Joan..

Comment is about Andy N (poet profile)

Original item by Andy N

Ha ha Ann nice take on my poem...Nev (next door neighbour) cannot start his car without revving it up for about ten minutes..honestly he drives me potty at times!

Comment is about Ann Foxglove (poet profile)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

hiya Isobel..interesting take on my poem Joan..tis difficult sometimes to format a poem that has not got two people in it but two parallel thought lines going on..

Comment is about Isobel (poet profile)

Original item by Isobel

maybe...

Comment is about A Morning Ritual (blog)

Original item by Marianne Daniels

He shut his eyes. June dawns, July noons, August evenings over, finished, done, and gone forever with only the sense of it all left here in his head. Now, a whole autumn, a white winter, a cool and greening spring to figure sums and totals of summer past. And if he should forget, the dandelion wine stood in the cellar, numbered huge for each and every day. He would go there often, stare straight into the sun until he could stare no more, then close his eyes and consider the burned spots, the fleeting scars left dancing on his warm eyelids; arranging, rearranging each fire and reflection until the pattern was clear....

So thinking, he slept.

And, sleeping, put an end to Summer, 1928.

Comment is about The End of Summer (II) (blog)

Original item by Andy N

The personification reminds me of Keats':

'Who has not seen thee oft amid thy store?
'Sometimes whoever seeks abroad may find...'

The books this reminds me of are Ray Bradbury's Dandelion Wine and The October Country:

It was a quiet morning, the town covered over with darkness and at ease in bed. Summer gathered in the weather, the wind had the proper touch, the breathing of the world was long and warm and slow. You had only to rise, lean from your window, and know that this indeed was the first real time of freedom and living, this was the first morning of summer.

Comment is about The End of Summer (I) (blog)

Original item by Andy N

I like this one a lot. It reads as well as it sounded on Monday night.

Comment is about The End of Summer (II) (blog)

Original item by Andy N

a little birdie told me, the notes were so heavy it set them down on the ground and prayed for new wings, for all its company of coloured birds had shed their feathers and the crows were coming...

i like these short short stories :)

Comment is about Just a little birdie. (blog)

Thx for the feedback on my latest Isobel appreciated X

Hope things are good.

Missed 3 Tudors in a row with differing problems one way or another...grrr. If the M58 still exists I wont miss next months lol.

My Best

Chris

Comment is about Isobel (poet profile)

Original item by Isobel

Thx for the feedback on my latest Laura- appreciated X

Hopefully catch ya at the next Wigan.

My Best

Chris

Comment is about Laura Taylor (poet profile)

Original item by Laura Taylor

Thanks for the compliments. This poem is actually very old I first wrote it in 1981 after watching some hares play in a field near to where I used to live, it was during a very hot late summer and very dusty. It was during my 'Ted Hughes' period.

Comment is about Hares (blog)

Original item by Peter Asher

Love it!

Internal dialogues - I shit 'em. They are a constant - I have to find 'ways' of dampening them down cos they drive me insane if I don't.

Nice rhythms in this too

Comment is about Everything I Am Not And More (blog)

Original item by Kealan Coady

Hi Lynn, thanks for commenting on 'There Be Fairies' - I always enjoy those little flights of fancy that we can employ while writing for children (of all ages). :)

Best wishes, Dave

Comment is about Lynn Dye (poet profile)

Original item by Lynn Dye

lovely poem Pete.
has a 'watership down'
feeling to it.

anything at all to do
with nature is fine by us.

thanks.

Patricia & Stef.

Comment is about Hares (blog)

Original item by Peter Asher

'aint history fascinating John.
I,like a lot of people can relate to
the feeling of 'connection'
when we visit museums and the like.

the one exhibit that blows my mind away
is the Bayeux tapestry-wowsers!

neat poem-glad you are back
between the shafts.

Stef & Patricia.

Comment is about Mutemwia (blog)

Original item by John Embley

Hey, cheers Andy me love for your comment on Gordon, much appreciated :) Hope you're feeling on the up now mate, take care x

Comment is about Andy N (poet profile)

Original item by Andy N

Nice little poem, Dave. I must admit to a soft spot for fairies...

Comment is about There Be Fairies... (blog)

Original item by Dave Dunn

I like the line "Autumn burst through without reason". You can almost taste the season's chill.

Looking forward to seeing the other 2/3 poems in the sequence x

Comment is about The End of Summer (II) (blog)

Original item by Andy N

Thank you Stef'n'fingy for commenting on my little ditties, just a little fun really, oh and hey, my socks don't get dirty, ha! (Yeah, right....)
Lorra lerv back,
Lynn xx

Comment is about New Bed (blog)

Original item by Lynn Dye

Thanks Andy, was ace to see you in Stockky on Tues (after a long time).

I think it makes more sense as a written rather than performed piece. (And please excuse the rather poor art.)

Glad you enjoyed it! x

Comment is about "Damage Limitation" in The Ritz Toilets, 1997 (blog)

Original item by Jennie B

i think we should have a poem in an anthology do. i think its better that your works going out like that. you can see its standard in relation to the other work. I spose online books are all the thing these days but it proves to me how new writers have all the fresh talent x well done x
ps i love that its got something to do with me...ah my young protege miss taylor is doing so well...particularly as sometimes you cant see why youre reading, what is the point. when your on stage and the lights in your eyes and its a circus. Im so glad i got the message of that poem through. makes it all worthwhile. i may have said this aready but i am now ready to retire ;)

Comment is about Laura Taylor (poet profile)

Original item by Laura Taylor

Thanks Neil - chuffed that you think so :) Hopefully see you at the next Tudor?

Comment is about Neil Fawcett (poet profile)

Original item by Neil Fawcett

Thanks Isobel for the notes on me profile and No One Called You...

You know, Biting the Bullet wasn't saucy at all. It really wasn't! But it proper tickles me that you can find such a different meaning in it than my original :D :D I was gobsmacked that one was chosen - but the publisher specialises in 'funny', and as you know, I don't DO funny very much! :D

Comment is about Isobel (poet profile)

Original item by Isobel

Thanks Anne!! Am proper chuffed :D :D

Comment is about Ann Foxglove (poet profile)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

I agree with Jo here as it does seem a little sad. Love the first line however possibly as I can relate to it.

A image could be a good idea I think however.

Comment is about Ever After (blog)

Original item by Kealan Coady

I agree with Jo here as it does seem a little sad. Love the first line however possibly as I can relate to it.

A image could be a good idea I think however.

Comment is about Ever After (blog)

Original item by Kealan Coady

nice stuff - have you considered swapping the second and third stanza around as it could work and give it a slight different touch.. otherwise, enjoyed it - keep em coming x

Comment is about Missing your dead heart (blog)

Original item by kayberley

not sure what is the end of an era for you, but good luck x

Comment is about The end of an era (blog)

Hi Jennie; - remember you doing this at Stockport the other night and really enjoyed it - it's certainly amazing how long it can take to get a final draft of something sometime.

I like a lot of this - in particularly the use of italics.. excellent stuff x

Comment is about "Damage Limitation" in The Ritz Toilets, 1997 (blog)

Original item by Jennie B

Cheers for the comments, y'all!

Comment is about One Bum To Another (blog)

Original item by David Mac

thats great laura, your poetry is quality and your a great example for new comers to the art.

are you having a book launch do?

great great news xx

Comment is about Laura Taylor (poet profile)

Original item by Laura Taylor

Thanks for commenting Ann and good luck with The Poetry Mine.

Comment is about Ann Foxglove (poet profile)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

oh Mr Dye!!
put a sock in it!

make sure its not one of Lynns dertee ones

loved em both Lynn.
ta chuck.

lorra lerv

Stef'n'fingy.xx

Comment is about New Bed (blog)

Original item by Lynn Dye

Yes - but you'd probably end up with a very wobbly prick that wouldn't do the trick and then you'd start relying on liposuction again...

Comment is about Liposuction (blog)

Original item by John Coopey

Lol, had to laugh at this, John, and you called me a dirty gerty!!!

Comment is about Liposuction (blog)

Original item by John Coopey

Thanks, Isobel.I don't know how I think them up. If I did I might stop. It's kind of automatic....but you still have to be there.

Comment is about Tipping Point (blog)