Thank you for your considered feedback on 'Love is...'. I only posted it because of the Wonderland thread in 'discussions'...have you been following that one? You are right about the rhyming, which is all over the place. I wrote this ages ago but didn't dare post it because I think it's a cliche...and I'd been such a tit about criticising other people's cliches I hadn't got the nerve to post it until the 'Love is...' thread on Wonderland appeared.

Thanks again

:-)

Jx

Comment is about Laura Taylor (poet profile)

Original item by Laura Taylor

Ethylene !
they're shipped over unripe & stored in cold nitrogen until needed. Once released back into normality, the natural ripening process of bananas (and some other fruit & veg) gives off ethylene gas which sort-of acts like a wake-up call for the rest telling them to ripen-up pronto. Yes - I'm a mine of F***ing useless informashun :)

Comment is about why do bananas (blog)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

Congratulations everyone! I love these themed poetry writing projects/competitions. It is fascinating to see the different ways each poet approaches them.

Thank you Thom for oranising it. x

Comment is about Childhood Competition - And The Winner Is... (blog)

Original item by Tom

Cynthia!
You always amaze with your in-depth analysis of poems...
You seem to pick up on things others do not, yet it is so interesting how people interpret your work... I was thrilled that you saw the spirituality in my poem 'Languid running wild' as it was a huge part of my childhood.
Thank you so much : )

xxx

Comment is about Cynthia Buell Thomas (poet profile)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

This was my favourite Kath, a really powerful, affecting write.

Comment is about My childhood rainbow (blog)

Original item by Kath Hewitt

Thanks Isobel. Now you also know why some of us don't accompany our comments with photos. The facial adornments were applied by my daughter at The Big Chill last year. She felt they were necessary to make me look cool. Poor kid.

Comment is about Isobel (poet profile)

Original item by Isobel

I love all this poem John. I particularly liked

'Love starts with a smile
and becomes a wild flower
tucked behind your ear'

It is all so evocative of a loving physical relationship. Absolutely beautiful. Absolutely amazing that it should have survived kids and so many years of marriage. xx

Comment is about Love is a Stranger (blog)

Original item by John Aikman

I agree completely re religion. Am reading the bible for the first time in my life (was always atheist, now agnostic, for what its worth), and it keeps striking me how different the stuff that Jesus says in it, to what certain 'Christians' would have you believe. Total eye opener.

Oh, and the reason you won't remember Lot's wife's name is because she is never directly named! How's that for controversial!

Comment is about Isobel (poet profile)

Original item by Isobel

This is delightful Cynthia. It skips along like a child and it is so lovely to read about happy childhood.
I'm just having a quick reccie - can't believe how much childhood poetry I haven't read or managed to comment on!

Comment is about Apple Blossom Song (blog)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

Of course - now you explain it... there was the pillar of salt for just turning round to take a peek - now what woman wouldn't do that? I think that was Lot's wife - I don't even remember her name.

I've never used salt to get blood out but I have used it on many a red wine stain... shame on me for not thinking about that!

Comment is about Laura Taylor (poet profile)

Original item by Laura Taylor

'lo again

Salt - big thing in the bible, but I initially put it in there because it's the best thing to get blood out of clothes (cold water and salt - never used it?). It's also a purifier, in essence. Hope that helps :)

oh - hehe - just got your last message :D very topical ;D See ya there then lass x

Comment is about Isobel (poet profile)

Original item by Isobel

Glad you liked my deconstruction LOL - that reminds me of decomposition in maths...
I liked my version better than Win's - you have to have a laugh with all this experimental stuff, don't you? x

Comment is about Greg Freeman (poet profile)

Original item by Greg Freeman

Will I be attending the Tudor next week? Is the pope catholic? x

Comment is about Laura Taylor (poet profile)

Original item by Laura Taylor

Hi Greg re; Moods - plenty of those SA memories in the stewpot of yet to come - pleased you liked the most recent one - appreciated your comments too

Comment is about Greg Freeman (poet profile)

Original item by Greg Freeman

Thanks for your comments on Hierarchy of Evil.
To nose it is to lop off the best end gooey bit before anyone else. It's a crime of humongous proportions.
As every gentleman knows (some ladies too!) you should cut along the side of your wedge so everyone gets a bit of the nose.
So let me know if you need any help with your wedge. Noblesse oblige.

Comment is about Ann Foxglove (poet profile)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

Ann: (Threesome) Always nice to have your company albeit imaginary and so pleased you enjoyed the poem x

Comment is about Ann Foxglove (poet profile)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

Brilliant Social History. The 1970's was my childhood and the music up to punk was naff. I love the line That Band With The Stupid Name - that's so true. Do you remember Jilted John or The Piglets. Both one hit wonders. Both mesmerisingly catchy.

I feel the need to write a poem about my musical tastes, Bruce Springsteen, Reggae, one hit wonders....

Comment is about Plotinus and the Gnostics (blog)

Fantastic, Ray. So many great lines, so much humour and swagger. This has got to be one of my favourites of yours, if not numero uno

Comment is about Plotinus and the Gnostics (blog)

Hi Cyn - thanks for the comments on "whispers" - I dont really know why its "tomorrow" either only "today" didn't seem right & leaving out the timeline altogether also didn't work :)

Comment is about Cynthia Buell Thomas (poet profile)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

Haha! Love this Ray! So much in there...that 4th verse reminds me of a song by Alex Harvey, 'Satchel and the Scalphunter'.

Anything which alludes to music as much as this does has my vote anyway, with being a lifelong music anorak.

The second to last verse reminds me of Creme Brulee - remember that? From the League of Gentlemen lot?

Anyhoo - enjoyed this

Comment is about Plotinus and the Gnostics (blog)

Late to this - liking the rhymes, the sing-song feel to it...deffo Dury-like, especially 'remoter' :D

Comment is about Kosher (blog)

Some warming lines in this John - loving the bum/peas verse, and 'offers you more lettuce'. Sometimes the rhythm doesn't quite flow, as in 'as we leave the cafe
and never tell you was there', but maybe you reading it out loud would make the difference to that?

Comment is about Love is a Stranger (blog)

Original item by John Aikman

I think this one turned out well Kath! I know you mentioned writing about the canyon and your poem captures the images you showed me really well! :-)

Comment is about Antelope canyon (blog)

Original item by Kath Hewitt

Thank you for your comments - save me some trifle, I'm starving! I'm going to take yet another look at the second stanza. Something about the rhythm is irking me, and I realised my old fault of repeat words crept in.

Comment is about Greg Freeman (poet profile)

Original item by Greg Freeman

I loved this!

Comment is about Love is a Stranger (blog)

Original item by John Aikman

That was breathtaking... the 'breath- sherbert and frightened dandelions' is full of impact and in the moment. I took pleasure in the reading of this and witnessing the unfolding tale.

Comment is about Martin (blog)

Original item by John Aikman

love of this poem says...yeah baby! yeah!

'love is a stranger we meet
on a path
who assumes you are mine'
...wow!

Comment is about Love is a Stranger (blog)

Original item by John Aikman

But what does it MEAN? Sniff it, steal it, WHAT? I am flummoxed!

Comment is about Hierarchy of Evil (blog)

Original item by John Coopey

I really like this, Kath...
I find it ambiguous yet profound.

p.s. Love your new profile photo!

Comment is about Antelope canyon (blog)

Original item by Kath Hewitt

if i'm honest i don't really think much of this but hey ho, in for a penny and all that :-)

Comment is about Antelope canyon (blog)

Original item by Kath Hewitt

Thank you for sharing this Charlene - a nice piece of creative writing on a subject most of us can identify with x

Comment is about Sweet and sour (blog)

Sorry to hear you haven't been well Cynthia - I left a comment to say the same on my poem - but just in case you don't read it... Am hoping you are totally recovered. xx

Comment is about Cynthia Buell Thomas (poet profile)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

You puzzled me for a minute there Winston - I imagined you icking up on some poor child's shirt ;))
Tidelines can be on baths but in my poem I was referring to necks. Scum and dirt marks so thick they could be picked at.

Glad you liked it John/Win - I just read it at Butterflies in Bolton. It seemed to go down well enough - it's easy enough for a non poet audience to understand.

And thank you for your lovely comment Cynthia. Sorry to hear you haven't been well - am hoping you are over it now and fighting fit! x

Comment is about Poverty Is (blog)

Original item by Isobel

Amused me this with the title of 6 words and a title of 2 - I quite like brief poems as it happens

Comment is about People Underestimate The Effects Of Temperature. (blog)

Original item by Kealan Coady

Dear King of Cliches... please blog you love poem. LOL Win x

Comment is about John Aikman (poet profile)

Original item by John Aikman

I appreciate existential pieces and the last line takes it somewhere else again - great stuff

Comment is about This Chair Will Still Be Here (blog)

Original item by Kealan Coady

'I think poor is…
Tide-lines
thick enough to pick at'

Lovely (sorry Dave) triplet...or whatever it is technically?...'thick enough to pick at'...what a lovely tripping line 'thick enough to pick at'...I want to keep saying it.

'thick enough to pick at'

Neat, neat, neat.

:-)

Jx

Comment is about Poverty Is (blog)

Original item by Isobel

missed this, great got me thinking. I was working with some children in a school recently (one day every week) One had a really dirty shirt. I icked up on it . maybe singled them out. This child has been in a dirty shirt every week for 4 weeks now, It was a wrong judgement. Also he is one of the best in the group at what we are doing. A couple of bits -'Tide-lines thick enough to pick at. Whats this, Is it tide-marks as in a bath? Loved Screaming belly and loving arms. Win x

Comment is about Poverty Is (blog)

Original item by Isobel

These recent poems of yours Janet will appeal to a wide readership. Thats good! Win x

Comment is about Should Old Acquaintance Be Forgot? (blog)

a clever style to take the reader on a journey, enjoyed. Win x

Comment is about Here in My Childhood (blog)

loved it!-ta-SW

Comment is about Supplicant (blog)

total agreement with all below-if you,ll pardon the unintended pun.SW

Comment is about Hampstead Heath (blog)

Original item by Dali

Oh many thanks to all of you! It's all I can do these days- a few lines :)

Comment is about Hampstead Heath (blog)

Original item by Dali

simple but oh so effective.SW

Comment is about Dear Diary... (blog)

Original item by Steven Kenny

agree with Jules-your writing is getting better in my humble opinion. thanks-SW.

Comment is about Sweet and sour (blog)

Looking forward to hearing you read this.

Comment is about Dear Diary... (blog)

Original item by Steven Kenny

Very succinct - you packed so much in here.

Comment is about Hampstead Heath (blog)

Original item by Dali

Another very enjoyable & evocative poem. "The wind tugging / The last of the day along" - Just wondered about trying: "the wind tugging along / the last of the day" Maybe. You know best what effect you are aiming for.

Comment is about Love Poem (blog)

Original item by Tom Harding

Ah Steve the delights of wishful thinking - who knows in this life what might happen - a classic optimist in the face of seemingly impossible odds - nice piece of creative writing this

Comment is about Dear Diary... (blog)

Original item by Steven Kenny