Yes, the first four lines really stand out because it leaves the reader to imagine so much more...

Comment is about And After (blog)

Awesome - Congratulations, John!

Comment is about My work recognized by the Child Abuse Monument in Canada (blog)

Lovely, true sentiments, Dave.

Comment is about True Love Starts... (blog)

Original item by Dave Dunn

Nice one, Tommy, except clicks and tuts are synonyms as expressed with 'expell her breath' - otherwise leaves a lot to the imagination.

Comment is about Persephone's Perpetuum (blog)

Original item by Tommy Carroll

Like first stanza best but a great poem all round. Piccy was super too.

Comment is about The End of Summer (IV) (blog)

Original item by Andy N

oops!
nearly forgot to thank you
for commenting on me 'orsey poem.

can,t wait to see what comes
of my inspiring you.

its not that sexy angel on horseback is it?
oooooh you are awful-
but I like you!

Mad dog.xx

Comment is about Lynn Dye (poet profile)

Original item by Lynn Dye

no probs Lynn.
I,ll catch you tomorrow evening
dont want you standing by
on my behalf as it were.

cheers love.

S&P.xx

Comment is about Lynn Dye (poet profile)

Original item by Lynn Dye

hi Lynn.
was just nicking on and off
in the middle of skyping someone.

yeh,the 'postcard'
is a pikky we took while in Porthmadog
which might give you a chuckle.

what I need to do
while you are on sometime tomorrow
or whenever it suits you
and inbetween changing my poem
is put it on the blog

once you have had a quick look
I,ll delete it
because if I put it on now
the present poem goes off as you know.

so I,ll leave the present poem on till
tomorrow evening
then see if we connect at that time.

aint no big thing
its just to let you know we were
finkin of yer.

until then
au revoir mon cherie!

Stef&Trish.xx

Comment is about Lynn Dye (poet profile)

Original item by Lynn Dye

ok i havent read the poem but now want to see it...mike post it to my inbox? i think its good to keep vigilant about censorship issues :)

Comment is about Tommy Carroll (poet profile)

Original item by Tommy Carroll

Hi Lynn- I stand corrected (the name did look awkward with the foto! :o/) Thank you for your comment. :o)

Comment is about Lynn Dye (poet profile)

Original item by Lynn Dye

Hi Lynn- I stand corrected (the name did look awkward with the foto! :o/) Thank you for your comment. :o)

Comment is about Expression of freedom (blog)

Original item by Tommy Carroll

hi Rachel- maybe I should make it 'clearer' I support the right to express 'anything' a poster wished to post, but I reserve the right to 'knock seven kinds of shite' out of the post as a consequence. I am then subject to the 'right' of others to support or attack my so doing. I think we are mostly in agreament on this...:o)

Comment is about Expression of freedom (blog)

Original item by Tommy Carroll

SEPTEMBER:

We had another full room of 25 poets and audience members including 4 newbies who we all really hope come back again!

Good Points: Supportive environment, great poetry, great spot by Robin, enjoyable, Robin'ds 15 minutes was brilliant, good poetry, a fun night again, good stuff again, newbies, very enjoyable, great, good night, great variety, first time for me very good, welcome and friendly and welcoming atmosphere.

Suprisingly all of the 'Areas For Improvement' dealt with the noise form the quiz downstairs so we are going to be starting at 7pm from now on so we finish before the quiz starts at 9pm.

See you next month for the other half of the 'Just Poets' duo, Norman.

Review is about Write Out Loud - Middleton on 25 Sep 2011 (event)

try u later Lynn.

love

Stef.xx

Comment is about Lynn Dye (poet profile)

Original item by Lynn Dye

hi Lynn
going to put a quick flash 'postcard'
on the blog for you.
when you tell me you have seen it
I will delete before I put my poem on
I await your reply

yours sincerely
Mad Dog Wilde.xx

Comment is about Lynn Dye (poet profile)

Original item by Lynn Dye

Well Done John. Had a loo at Dr Irvins work and your reading on his projects page, Great work in both respects, Win

Comment is about My work recognized by the Child Abuse Monument in Canada (blog)

..hello Marianne..thanks for your comments..I wrote it quickly before going to work that morning after finding old photos of Victorian slums..cheers..mick.

Comment is about Marianne Daniels (poet profile)

Original item by Marianne Daniels

Hi lynn, nice to see you again. You been here for some time now, i always treasure your comments. thanks for commenting on Harlequin. to be honest i think the music says it all. i have loved that track since the mid nineties. if you like it you can purchase just the single track from amazon.co.uk. it lasts for about 12 minutes. I always try to imagine myself as the eagle flying in the track, which led me to write that poem.

stay well lynn

Sven Vath - Harlequins Meditation.

Best wishes,

Michael

xxx

Comment is about Lynn Dye (poet profile)

Original item by Lynn Dye

re 'infinitum' my thanks Jeff regarding your kind comments.they are very inspiring.Patricia Wilde.x

Comment is about Jeffarama! (poet profile)

Original item by Jeffarama!

thank you John.am I right in saying this is to
do with the assumption of parallel existences?
in a lot of recent revelations many scientific
discoveries have been turned on their heads
so although fascinating its fairly doubtful
we will get the real 'truths' until we do a lot
more'stepping stoning'of our neighbouring
planets-maybe.My thanks to you John-Patricia.x

Comment is about John Embley (poet profile)

Original item by John Embley

That is a nice karmic prayer. I hope you're not considering anything drastic.

A nice karmic prayer.

Stay well

Mike

x

Comment is about BE STILL (blog)

Original item by M.C. Newberry

thanx chuck re the comments
on our profile page.means a lot.

Patricia&Stef.xxxxxx

Comment is about Lynn Dye (poet profile)

Original item by Lynn Dye

haha Jeff.
had a giggle at your comments
on-'on the way upstairs'

moreso when I saw you in 'recent comments'
as it read..Jeffarama on the way upstairs!

should have told me Jeff-
would have waved you off-haha!

grateful.
Stef.

Comment is about Jeffarama! (poet profile)

Original item by Jeffarama!

Hi again Lynn.I,m very appreciative of your
comments on my poem'infinitum'.all our love to
you as always.Patricia and Stef.xx

Comment is about Lynn Dye (poet profile)

Original item by Lynn Dye

Thanks, Isobel and Steve. Did you apprehend the narrative arc?

Comment is about Shortlist (blog)

Thanks, Rachel. Yeah, you surely went off on one there. It's a good poem, though I do say so myself, apart from the last line, which even I don't understand now - I think I meant "escape a penalty" though fuck knows why.

Comment is about Versus (blog)

Thank you Lynn and Thomas for taking the trouble to comment so kindly. I always enjoy
a bit of fun in verse and what better to find
anywhere than the excuse for a chuckle? As a
newcomer to the site (but not WriteOutLoud) I'm
delighted to note kindred spirits in evidence.
The more serious stuff may follow!
M.C.

Comment is about The Spider (blog)

Original item by M.C. Newberry

tommy, its a tough one. i believe that if something is written and posted and it offends which all sorts of material is likely to do on all sorts of grounds..i think the writer should be held accountable to their readers as would be with published work. here a comments system operates.so if i were to offend i would personally feel obliged to defend, explain my writing. sometimes its an agree to differ situation. if someone were to post something inciting hatred be it racial, concerning disability, whatever i still beilieve it should stand and be criticised. As such it offers an exampler of its inadequacy as an idea. if someone were to post sexually inapropriate material i believe there should be a standard of censure based on the accessibility of this site to young people as a moral obligation.
concerning freedom of speech once blogged this goes out to the world potentially. Its a gift but just a medium. free media..is up for exploitation like anything else. I think we can only measure our own writing. I have only ever once been offended by a slight comment on this site and ive been a member for years. I think that a sign of its credibility and the level of responsibility of its writers.
Thanks for posting this.

Comment is about Expression of freedom (blog)

Original item by Tommy Carroll

Thanks for your comment on 'Murphy's War,' M.C.
I'm about to put it on audio. I think you should do as well with'The Spider': Very subtle and amusing. we need more of this.
I was also a fan Of Milligan. I read a Xmas Card
of his once, the greeting was:

"Christmas may come and Christmas may go,
There's nothing to stop it as far as I Know.

We could learn a lot from Spike. - Cheers mate.

Comment is about The Spider (blog)

Original item by M.C. Newberry

I like this, good one!

Comment is about The Spider (blog)

Original item by M.C. Newberry

Well, I'm hardly allowed to touch our remote control, Stef!
Welcome back to you and Tricia.xx

Comment is about Domestic Goddess (blog)

Original item by Lynn Dye

hi its been a while since you posted this, but i wondered if you were still working with this project? it sounds really interesting, please get in touch if you would like to discuss.

Comment is about Art By Offenders (blog)

Original item by Alain English

haha i have just reread this poem and all those comments. i have no idea why i wanted to apply the golden number theory to this poem, i must have just discovered it on a late night documentary...it was 1.30 am. so i agree, my comments - rubbish
your poem - ok
best line - filter and ferment into something fruity.
maybe you should stop missing them penalties!

Comment is about Versus (blog)

Thanks Jeff. You're always welcome at the Bards! A few of us from the Wirral do venture further afield, I'll certainly suggest a trip to sunny Bolton in the near future. Cheers.

Comment is about David J Costello (poet profile)

Original item by David J Costello

This is all so true, Larisa. My condolences also, not sure how long ago this was, but all the very best to you, Love, Lynn xx

Comment is about A Message (blog)

Original item by Larisa Rzhepishevska

I really enjoyed this, Mike, it works well with the music which is quite haunting. Good stuff.

Comment is about Sven Vath feat Noetic-fret! - Harlequins Meditation (blog)

Original item by Noetic-fret!

Hi Tommy, it was Julian that removed the poem, though I can see why you would think otherwise.
I am normally one for free speech, yet have to agree with pretty much all you say here. Well written.

Comment is about Expression of freedom (blog)

Original item by Tommy Carroll

Some of the old Tin Pan Alley songsmiths would
have been at home with the rhyming. Very funny
and imaginative in equal doses (oops!

Comment is about Chlamydia (blog)

Original item by Isobel

Charles Dickens used "fizzog" if I remember rightly. Love the Stanley Holloway style...a
a great tradition.

Comment is about "Widening the Circle of Friends" (blog)

Original item by John Coopey

Ever get that feeling - great piece Jeff

Comment is about Jeffarama! (poet profile)

Original item by Jeffarama!

Hello, thanks for your comments.

Bernard actually exists, I met him when he was in the next bed to me in hospital and we kept in touch. He's a great character, 89 and still going strong, and he does have the knack of turning up just when he's needed - as he did the other day when I had been banging my head against the wall, spending time phoning up people who didn't care much if I lived or died.

And he does have an armoured car in his barn on the farm where he lives, it's a Ferret Scout Car that he's restoring. He also found a load of explosives when diving on a wreck off Mull and they tried setting it off on the beach to see if it would still ignite!

Disappointingly - from his point of view - it didn't, so they put it in an oil drum, under water, which apparently stabilises it, and he took it home. When he moved house, he thinks he forgot to take it with him to the farm, so if you hear a big bang from West Yorkshire, it means that the new owners have found it...

Comment is about A Poem for Bernard (blog)

Original item by STEVE RUDD

Great writin Captain, powerful stuff, all the best with your October events, Jeff

Comment is about New poem: Hollow Hymns (blog)

Hi Grahan, Welcom to Write Out Loud. Winston

Comment is about Graham Robinson (poet profile)

Original item by Graham Robinson

Many thanks for your very kind comments Isobel. Born out of writer's block I'm afraid this one. Bit of a desert here at the moment, regards, Graham.

Comment is about Isobel (poet profile)

Original item by Isobel

Thank you for your very generous comments Ann. It's surprising what writer's block can conjure up, regards, Graham.

Comment is about Ann Foxglove (poet profile)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

Thanks for your very generous comments Jeff.

Comment is about Jeffarama! (poet profile)

Original item by Jeffarama!

Hi Zethembiso, welcome to WOL, enjoyed reading your work here. I run open mic WOL nights in Bolton if you're ever in the area! best wishes, and keep writing Jeff

Comment is about zethembiso mkhize (poet profile)

Original item by zethembiso mkhize

Hi Ant, welcome to WOL, I run the open mic poetry events in Bolton, enjoyed your poems, hope to see you soon, Jeff

Comment is about ant (poet profile)

Original item by ant

Hi Isobel, I think you might be asking a lot, but enjoyed reading this, well put together and made me smile, only had the one STD test, thankfully it was clear, all the best Jeff X

Comment is about Chlamydia (blog)

Original item by Isobel

Hi Nima, great poems and powerful lines, obviously some strife behind this, love the line 'I had my song, but couldn't sing', best wishes Jeff

Comment is about Nameless by Nima Stone (blog)