Sorry Larisa - spelled your name wrong!

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Original item by Larisa Rzhepishevska

Hello Larissa
I agree with Win. The stanza about love is a cracker! The first three lines are wonderful.
Have you tried non-rhyming poetry? It must be awfully difficult to write in a foreign language within the constraints of rhythm and rhyme.
I always check your work because I recognise the unique challenge it poses you.

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Original item by Larisa Rzhepishevska

I’ve learnt to understand that….
Love can't be found where it doesn't exist,
Love can't be hidden where it is.
And... always has it’s own sound .

I have been pondering this part for some time... (And listening for the sound). Maybe I should be feeling its sound? Loved this section Larisa,

Win x

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Original item by Larisa Rzhepishevska

Hi John. I always thought "now then" was just a kind of Yorkshire greeting, like "hello", but with more of a challenge to it.

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You are a woman of great insight Laura. ;o)

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Thank you, dear Stella!

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Original item by Larisa Rzhepishevska

I’ve learnt to be patient,
Though not everyone knows it.
It’s better to be absent
Than to throw a stone into a shit.


Larisa I think this so far is my favourite poem written by you..most enjoyable :-) x

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Original item by Larisa Rzhepishevska

guitarnverse 4 doggers wipeeee

Comment is about Vernon from Bolton way (blog)

Nice one Rach, yes the general Bolton mindset is not to be arsed, keeps us chilled, most of the time! Wish Bolton could win a few more cups!

yes I can still be arsed and will be organisin a Guitar n verse 4 Doggers so will give you and Laura a shout! Great poem Jeffrey Vernon Dawson X

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...gave me shivers - marvellous !!

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Original item by Marianne Daniels

Norick Abe was a motorcycle GP racer of some distinction...

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Original item by Dave Bradley

I have used verse in some letters to my local
MP when it seemed appropriate. There are times
when a few pithy lines can be far better than
anger indulged in at length!

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Original item by Greg Freeman

Hello John, 'Undermined' guess the insect world is pretty gory eh? A sort of mass Hoovering device for recycling. Can't help being mesmerised by it though - often think of comparisons with human heirarchies.

Thanks for commenting.

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Hello Ann, 'Te Deum' much obliged for the kind words.

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Original item by Ann Foxglove

Just think Stella, you invented Narapho. Don't let the film producers own your copyright for less than a million.

Nice poem. Banter priceless .......

Comment is about Hope (blog)

Thanks all.I can't really decide how best to arrange this. Four verses of 5 lines was a last minute alteration. The urge to spit should be on its own, for instance.

Comment is about Sunday School (blog)

Dear Elaine,
Thanks for the comment on the haikku - absolutely loved the last verse of your poem 'The Old World' (and that's not something I get to say very often...)oh dear that sounds so .. (word beginning with 'p')...parsimonious but it's a beautiful stanza
Steve Smith

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Original item by Elaine

thanks stella, i took the jarring verse out :)

yes 15th your on. crap date has been sacked so ill be there with nobs on.
you neednt have give up, 'grim revenge the night' is a cracking line

bye for now xx

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Ok fess up!! Narapho will not be found on google cept for the one in my mind..ha!

Dave pleased it summoned up a mood, that is what I was aiming for

Rach cheers m'dear for liking xx

Laura..first title was Sacrifice but decided to change it :)

Ha John..I shall make Narapho into my lover and luckily I won't be the woman sacrificed! Well sometimes we can be just a tad stubborn can't we?..

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Nice one Laura, I like the clipped form very much here..this Nurikabe explains a lot and it is a great thought to work with..hence two great reads, similar but so very different too..can that be lol ?? anyways I enjoyed your take very much..xxx

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Original item by Laura Taylor

Great to read both Dave..Like the way that others offer strength when another is struggling..lovely write :)

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Oh Rachel.....still laughing here, well done you I read it a few times and nuffin jars for me..can't wait for the performance and it better be on the 15th lol and yes they still have the venue at La Gondala too...I had a bit of batman but gave up..hold on a mo..

You thought the 60's
one big party,
an exploration
of sexuality, rarely
did you grim revenge
the night.


You can see why I gave up lol..x

Comment is about Vernon from Bolton way (blog)

OOz this Narafo then? Google just refers me to some stella fella.
...and another thing....
women??? stubborn??? where do you get that from?

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Hi Larisa, really enjoyed reading these. (I'm a bit slow catching up because I broke the screen on my laptop!) These are funny, and I have to agree with Stef's comment about not knowing what to expect - and like you, I don't always know where mine are taking me either!!
Love, Lynn xx

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Original item by Larisa Rzhepishevska

Agree with all the comments, Terry, I enjoyed this.

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ste, i am a big fan of polly..i went to college in warrington where duffy did her music studies. i dont know what they taught her cos that coke advert was abysmal.

peter kay,paddy and them are ok but they dont look like vernon, swoon.

thanks guys x

ste the market is pants. they do sell pants, big belly warmer variety.

Comment is about Vernon from Bolton way (blog)

laura how could you say that of our vernon, he is a cheeky cherub of the north ;)

yes jeff is far too busy dogging lately to bother to read my poems ;D

yeh last verse doesnt fit in...i might lose it. i should dedicate a whole different poem to my pakistani boyfriends really. all i can say is they were very keen and the white guys i know are just not (wxept jeff who is always keen to go up to rivvie :D :D

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No worries - hope you enjoy it :)

I did my first open mic at just about this time last year, and SHIT myself. Then couldn't sleep when I got home because of the massive buzz :D

Careful now, you might just get addicted to it!

One other tip, take your paper up with you. It's all well and good thinking you've memorised it, but you'll kick yourself if the nerves win and you forget some of it. Pretty much everyone takes their words up with them. I still do, even though I try to memorise my stuff.

Hey, if you're Northern, you might want to come along to the Wigan WOL held at the Tudor House pub, 2nd Thursday of every month. Very supportive crowd (of pissheads, shirkers, and general miscreants) ;)

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Am liking your biog Tommy :) :)

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Nice shot - Dave - at unsaying the unsayable.

Maybe needs the first line repeated at the end?

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Original item by Dave Bradley

Good luck for your first time! Practice practice practice, and a nice big deep breath when you get up there!

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Ha - I have just googled too and nowt! It does send out tons of images though - feels like sacrificial ancient custom sorta thing.

I love this line: Men kiss at the river mouth, unborn shift.

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Is that doggers line not about Jeff then? ;D

I really like this - always fond of references to local places and it reads like it would perform well. That last verse jars a little though - but I bet you can hear it in your head and it sounds bang on :)

Can't stand Vernon though. Would sooo smack him in the chops the smug little shit

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Thanks all

Elaine - would love to see it!

Phil - not been too clever mentally lately - in wrong place to come on here.

Thank you Anne and Francine :) I am getting better every day now :)

Ray - strip the meaning? I don't see it like that at all. Condense, yes. Also - that middle verse turns it right around, so you have the two first verses that describe what the wall could be and its effects, and then that middle one turns it around by using the middle line to MENTION the actual wall (it almost IS the wall), and then the next line to show how to see the way through the wall :) The last verse was kinda sorta meant to be structured like ancient sayings :) But as always, thank you for your time and comments :)

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Original item by Laura Taylor

ps. incase you get vexed, this doesnt include you our jeff xx

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this is very good. x

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Morning Neil

Thanks for your note. I'm getting there, but it's all been very 'on top' for a few weeks, one fucking horrible thing after another, and it all kinda battered my head into submission. But - my chi is rising with each day :) I just saw very familiar thought patterns in your poem :)

Next Tudor?

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Original item by Neil Fawcett

All sort of allusions and hints, but Google no help with Narapho. I like this Stella. It summons up a mood.

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Hi Ann

Thank you for commenting. The competitions have only ever been a matter of individual initiative. If you wanted to get the ball rolling on another round, the field is open! Though running the open mic evening may be taking as much time and energy as you have for poetry. Good luck with that.

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Like it, congrats x

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Original item by Andy N

Reads well Ray.. x

Comment is about Sunday School (blog)

Aww that is disapointing isn't it when you have yourself all ready then whoosh the carpet is swept from under your feet...I am sure Salford will be wonderful for you though...and good luck :)

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Safety pinned and tilted,
they had the world at the tip of their cigarette.

One of many fab bits!

I think I'd leave out the first "their" in the honey and apron line. (Love your stuff!)

Comment is about Season (blog)

Original item by Marianne Daniels

I found this very uplifting. And the idea of you and Laura both writing on the same subject - made me pine for the days of our WOL competitions - what happened to them? They brought the site together I think.

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Original item by Dave Bradley

Your poems are always worth reading Laura. And I hope you are well :)

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Original item by Laura Taylor

Good poem!

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This is good news Julian, biggupz, big thanks and big respects to the WOL people.

Best Wishes.

Mike

x

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Original item by Greg Freeman

the thirst becomes you...

Comment is about Laura Taylor (poet profile)

Original item by Laura Taylor

Just browsing through Ray and found this gem of a write..I worked with a couple of lads a few years ago with this condition.. I think the last word 'super' is a wonderful end to it..

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Education. I work part time as a TA so hopefully they won't bug me too much! I'm not going to lose sleep over it.

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