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Dave Bradley

Sun 29th May 2011 22:07

class!

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Larisa Rzhepishevska

Sun 29th May 2011 18:33

It's just super!

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Francine

Sun 29th May 2011 18:15

Brilliant indeed!
Quite a catchy tune there, Ann - you had me moving and singing along - LOL

P.S. Joyeux Anniversaire - quelques jours de retard !


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Graham Sherwood

Sun 29th May 2011 17:55

Brilliant Ann.

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Ann Foxglove

Sun 29th May 2011 17:52

My version of "when I'm old I won't wear beige" or whatever it is. And maybe a rant at being another year older (and nearer that boneyard!)

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Graham Sherwood

Sun 29th May 2011 17:47

Be careful Cynthia. You'll be getting the headline writers job on the back pages of The Sun next.

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Sun 29th May 2011 17:45

It's fabulous, Ann, brief and beautiful. You sure are blessed to see stars; I miss them terribly.

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Francine

Sun 29th May 2011 17:18

This has a very dreamy feel to it.
I also like the lines:

'the tip of the slanted ocean
or underneath the deserted pier.'

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Francine

Sun 29th May 2011 17:10

This has a nice ambiance.

I like these lines...

'I see a coathanger of stars
as Leo crouches.'

'A distant roundabout is lost
on the horizon.'

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Francine

Sun 29th May 2011 17:05

You have a gift for beautiful, rich language that expresses such deep felt emotions.

I love these lines especially...

'shifting zephyrs whisper requiem'
and
'The velveteen succor of night
abandons without regret'

You need a title for this! It is too good to go without...
Perhaps 'Unfolding Obscurity' ?

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Ann Foxglove

Sun 29th May 2011 16:57

Thanks guys. I would have liked to add a bit more but it was my description of last evening and I thought writing about getting me hot water bottle ready didn't quite cut it! Mind you, my fingers aren't tawny - that was poetic licence!

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Sun 29th May 2011 16:44

Hi John

Thank you for your lovely comments on my poems. You are very generous.

Lynda x

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Sun 29th May 2011 16:27

you're at it again.... writing great poems.
I never saw the first version & wanted more of this.... but maybe Greg is right - luv it anyway.

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Sun 29th May 2011 15:54

I,m very grateful to you Jean for the kind comments on my poem'Beloved,he waits'-still think your photo is really nice-sooo peaceful!-lotsa love-Stef.xxxx

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Greg Freeman

Sun 29th May 2011 10:50

This poem has been shortened since I first looked at it, Ann. I believe it's all the better for it. Enigmatic, draws you in. "Coathanger of stars" is wonderful.

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Ann Foxglove

Sun 29th May 2011 09:38

That's one reason I commented so fast. (Escape 2)- I thought you might change your mind about posting and it would disappear. It moved me so much, and it shows your strength. As you know loads of what I post is stuff that's very personal. If it's in your head and heart, it's hard not to mention in when you write poetry!xx

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Graham Sherwood

Sun 29th May 2011 09:31

Your strongest piece yet Kath!
I particularly like the first line-loam is clever.

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Ann Foxglove

Sun 29th May 2011 09:12

Another powerful poem from you Kath. I love the "shifting zephyrs whisper requiem" and the "grieving thunderheads" images particularly.x

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Isobel

Sat 28th May 2011 22:57

I think what you describe is common where those who have died are deeply loved and missed. One of my sisters experienced the same with her husband - could even smell his breath - it does make you wonder.

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Greg Freeman

Sat 28th May 2011 22:04

Hi Isobel, thanks very much for taking such an interest in The Clackety-Clack. Funnily enough, I found myself talking to a poet who had read a very moving poem about her father in the interval at the South magazine reading last week. I spoke about this feeling of my dad being close to me a couple of times in the first three months after he died, and then really never experiencing that feeling ever again. She said she had experienced exactly the same thing after her father's death. I was quite startled by this. I wonder if there's anyone else out there with similar experiences? The final two lines of my poem are really about my realisation about us both taking the same tube and rail line home towards the end of our working lives, and feeling quite comforted by this.

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Greg Freeman

Sat 28th May 2011 21:48

Thanks very much for your comments on The Clackety-Clack, Simon. You know as well as anyone how much I write about railways. I'm sure there are some who think, Oh no, not another one! Apologies to them. But I suppose I do find trains, railways, stations rich in meaning and metaphor.

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Ann Foxglove

Sat 28th May 2011 15:00

I like this too Andy. Your poems always have a freshness about them. And Isobel - of course you aren't a miserable bastard! I haven't even come up with a poem at all for the theme - so that makes me a double miserable bastard - but I don't think the word bastard seems to apply to women. Maybe we're miserable bastardess's - like shepherdess's only different! ;)

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Mike S.

Sat 28th May 2011 13:54

Thank you :)

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Isobel

Sat 28th May 2011 12:40

Watching a lover sleep is a beautiful thing to write about Andy. It's not long since you posted another poem on that subject - you must do a lot of it!

It is lovely to see the Escape theme interpreted in a happy way - where the escape is into happiness and bliss. I've been completely incapable of doing that cos I'm a more miserable bastard.

Like Caducus, I like the 'tip of the slanted ocean line' - it is unusual and works well.

x

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Greg Freeman

Sat 28th May 2011 08:27

Thanks for your comments on The Clackety-Clack, Andy

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Greg Freeman

Sat 28th May 2011 08:26

Thanks for your comments on The Clackety-Clack, John;. Sorry to hear about the heron.

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Ann Foxglove

Fri 27th May 2011 17:27

Happy Birthday Larissa - it was my birthday yesterday! xx

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Deborah Jordan Bailey

Fri 27th May 2011 16:36


"To live on the Earth is really nice."

I quite like it here too Laura and I hope you have a very happy Birthday here on this blue planet of ours : ) Deb x

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Andy N

Fri 27th May 2011 14:09

phew - that's good going for 15 years old.. I'll dig up my one from when I was 17 but I was in a goth phase and I know it's defo not as good as this.. top one x

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Andy N

Fri 27th May 2011 14:07

The last stanza works really well here, Kealan.. top one m8... If you are coming down to G & V next week - you should defo read it out.. A

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Andy N

Fri 27th May 2011 14:06

Nice poem, Dave.. the last stanza gives it a really good balance and leaves you thinking which I think is the point behind it.

Good One, bud

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Fri 27th May 2011 13:08

thanks dave - much appreciated. B
(birth of the night time)

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Antony Owen

Fri 27th May 2011 12:00

slanted ocean is a good image. I don't think 'spluttered' curtains works but as you wrote dawn I thought of 'switchblade' curtains as I imagined the light cutting throguh on you both.

This is one of those poems that you feel kind of cool reading, it has an edge and you're getting polished at meter,images,tone and finish.

If you're always editing then its become out the owrk and not you, that's the most important thing I think.

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Jeff Dawson

Fri 27th May 2011 11:16

Hi mate, nice poetry, felt the escapism and almost being hidden from the world for a while. Just couple of typos - should it be 'being struck from the skies', and 'watch the morn wink at me' not mon, unless you had another man in the room! cheers Jeff

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alisonsmiles68@gmail.com

Fri 27th May 2011 09:57

I really liked this. Loved the meandering build up and the final line bringing it all into context.

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Dave Bradley

Fri 27th May 2011 08:13

Hi Mike

Sorry to read that things are such a struggle at the moment. Hang in - we'd miss you if you stopped writing - your heart-felt poems are powerful.

The world is a complete mix. Mladic has been caught, we're out of Iraq, Sudan voted to split in two - just 3 examples of good stuff, and there are lots more. But there are lots of appalling things as well, as you say in the poem. The challenge is how to take it on board, and even do somthing about it, without losing sight of all the good things in life. Not easy, and perhaps that's right, it shouldn't be easy.

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kath hewitt

Fri 27th May 2011 01:43

like this :-)

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Fri 27th May 2011 01:07

Really enjoyed the poem it was a pleasure to read

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Fri 27th May 2011 00:59

It's a yes and no from me - cynicism is not ideal and we should all look on the bright side. Unfortunately the cynics are often seen to be right after the event whereas as the optimists are sadly disappointed - as a Libra
with bipolar it ponders many questions for me.

Interesting subject, well penned - David

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Fri 27th May 2011 00:51

What a lovely poem. Very touching.

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Noetic-fret!

Fri 27th May 2011 00:33

I should have said, Increasingly Unwell. typo there! I really am suffering so much. take care of yourselves. Michael

xxx

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Steve Regan

Thu 26th May 2011 22:58

Nice one Dave. I think this is a fascinating subject. Perhaps every generation thinks the world is jaded and so people feel compelled to see all life's machinations with an eye that is suspicious and perhaps has a jaded filter fitted.

I think the distinctly cynical British sense of humour is definitely a plus though. I like it, even though it does lend itself to these lines from your poem.

"the familiar unspoken conspiracy of superiority,

the familiar stale charm and shallow cheer".

Cycnicsm, smart-arsery etc are good laughs most of the time. And they are closely related to the brilliantly human actions of smirking and sniggering. But when the smirk slips into a sneer we lose something of value, I'd say.

I think many people are capable of sniggering and smirking while also having great positivity and spiritual insight.

Any road, your poem made me think!




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Thu 26th May 2011 20:45

Lovely well written poem Alison - David

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Julian (Admin)

Thu 26th May 2011 20:44

I once spent a lovely afternoon chatting to Jeff Nuttall, famous as the author of Bomb Culture,in a café/bar in Abergavenny, where he lived and gigged.

Not a lot of people know that.

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Thu 26th May 2011 20:44

I love this Cynthia - I like the dark stuff as you know - great imagery!! David

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Thu 26th May 2011 17:55

Thanks for your comment. This afternoon I have written ten poems about airports! The first is called Arrivals....

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Dave Bradley

Thu 26th May 2011 15:36

Only 15? This is good, Cynthia - lots of vivid imagery. The roller-coaster teenage experience is strongly present, but let's face it that continues for many of us.

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Thu 26th May 2011 10:49

Please don't gag over some of the words; I was only 15, steeped in Early Poetry and the Romantics. Much of that Period Work was beautiful stuff, and I never regret that it was, and is, part of my esteemed Poetry Heritage. Besides, the title is absolutely true.

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Lynn Dye

Thu 26th May 2011 10:35

I enjoyed this too, John, and agree with Greg's comment about Lidl etc. Good flow, and a good abab too! ;) x

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