Liked this a lot Andy

Could I suggest replacing 'over' peoples hats with 'onto'

great emotion great ending.

Hope you are well

Win X

Comment is about My hometown (blog)

Original item by Andy N

Just been listening to the news about those appearing in court post-rioting.
Mother: He was only caught up in it, he was doing anything, he's only young.
Interviewer: Yes but he did have a hammer strapped to his leg!
Mother: Yes but he's only a kid.

Isobel's right, the parents should all be charged with neglect.

Comment is about The Haves and The Have Nots (blog)

Original item by Isobel

this has a kind of background emotion. though it isn't blatant, you can feel it and it is wonderfully moody.

"leaving me feeling
like i had just kissed chaos."
was especially effective and stays in my mind.

however, "like portals of doom" stays in my mind for the wrong reasons, i don't think it was very effective and it feels out of place with the rest of the poem. just a heads up :)

Comment is about My hometown (blog)

Original item by Andy N

Yes! A little more about...we. Very good words!
With best wishes,
Larisa

Comment is about If being obtuse was an art form it would be called poetry (blog)

Original item by Mark Mr T Thompson

Thank you, people. Roger McGough does ads for Waitrose? I didn't know that.
More Midlands than The North, Tone.
I wrote this last winter or maybe even the one before and I only just realised that snow might have a drug related meaning. Not that I ever....
Should I ask about the hairs on the top of your head, Tom?

Comment is about I Live Over There (blog)

Thanks Anthony & Steve

@Ray I'm half Jamaican so the whole 3rd line is in Patois (where I often end up when less than happy) dutty=dirty.
The first line was added as I was trying to explain the piece's inspiration for the purpose of the Blog post and when I saw it rhymed I and liked the way it scanned I left it in. I think the conversation issue is perhaps a little picky (especially if you want the line to be succinct) but do agree your suggestion is more succinct and may even consider editing. (and now have!) Cheers

Comment is about If being obtuse was an art form it would be called poetry (blog)

Original item by Mark Mr T Thompson

I like the poem, especially I liked
Should I discuss dis cuss, or choose to dash it far from us like some kind of dutty discus in disgust?
"dutty" though?
Also, I'd take issue with the opening line on two counts. It isn't much of a conversation - he's only got one line, though it's a good line!.
And it could be more succinct - A summation of a conversation with a local librarian.

Comment is about If being obtuse was an art form it would be called poetry (blog)

Original item by Mark Mr T Thompson

The hairs stood up on the back of my neck when I read this Ray.
Well captured. Tom Mc.

Comment is about I Live Over There (blog)

"Shameless" literary exploitation of the non-working classes Ray. Wait until they suss out where you live! Made me come over all nostalgic for my northern roots. There, but for a brace of clogs . . . Enjoyed the read,

Regards,

A.E.

Comment is about I Live Over There (blog)

And I echo those sentiments as well, Kealan...
Lately you have delved to a deeper level of consciousness without so much anger, and it is powerful. I knew children like this too, and I have always had an affinity for them - to help in any way I could.

Comment is about Early Learning (blog)

Original item by Kealan Coady

Thank you for commenting on my haiku "Anger".
The scary part is that it describes me too well.

Thanks
Shirley

Comment is about Kath Hewitt (poet profile)

Original item by Kath Hewitt

Hi Mark,

I liked the sentiments you express in this - especially:

"It’s about poet expressing a part of who they are."
"Thereby allowing you and me, an opportunity to see, Something that reveals to us a little more about... we."

Well put!

Regards,

A.E.

Comment is about If being obtuse was an art form it would be called poetry (blog)

Original item by Mark Mr T Thompson

Hi Isobel - I was reading what you wrote in your Biography and it struck me that poets wanting others to read their work may need to think about their target audience (the people on each poetry site) and tailor which pieces they post accordingly. Or just realize that some sites have like-minded people that just "don't get" what one has written. I've found that to be true since I've posted on more than one site. Where one group will celebrate you, another will almost ignore you. Ironic, yes?

"Just my thoughts for the day...."

Hope all is well,
Lisa

Comment is about Isobel (poet profile)

Original item by Isobel

Hey Debs, Izzie, I'd be up for that!!

Comment is about Join fellow poets for a walk in Ted Hughes' stamping ground (article)

Original item by Julian Jordon

I found this very moving Kealan. I too think your recent work has been interesting and good!

Comment is about Early Learning (blog)

Original item by Kealan Coady

Thanks Ann.

Comment is about Ann Foxglove (poet profile)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

hello Scott, hope you are keeping well ,I really like this poem.

Comment is about ? (blog)

I am greatly concerned about those who were tipped out of their 'sensible heads' by the stimulus of 'mob mentality'- a once-off, terrible mistake, genuinely out-of-character. It happens.

Comment is about An abstraction of events (blog)

Original item by Tommy Carroll

Thanks, Andy, for taking the time to read and comment on "Pink Tulips". If I had to guess, you probably don't think I need a stanza on "heart" AND "soul"....?

In any case, I appreciate what you had to say and I'm so glad you enjoyed it!

Lisa

Comment is about Andy N (poet profile)

Original item by Andy N

there are reasons ray, the lower cases are not accidental

Comment is about Early Learning (blog)

Original item by Kealan Coady

Thanks for your contribution David and congratulations on your win. I'm certainly sending off for my copy right now.

Comment is about Welsh Poetry Competition anthology launched (article)

Original item by Greg Freeman

Think I`ve `rumbled`it!

It`s a `sonorously vehicular`

Should Slvie Rose be read as `Sylvie Rosey`
(or did she touch the brakes?)

What a great `performer`!

Comment is about Eddie (blog)

Original item by John Coopey

Call me old - fashioned but why capitalise the beginning of each line then fail to capitalise coady, lustral, ritalin?

"so he leapt" would rhyme with step.

It's "receded". I think to finish on "instead." would be neater.
Enjoyed the poem.

Comment is about Early Learning (blog)

Original item by Kealan Coady

More excellence from you Ray.

Comment is about I Live Over There (blog)

Well it's gonna have to be Tuesdays or Fridays or Sundays. Tuesdays sound boring to me. Fridays sound more exciting! (Except to Harry of course!)

Comment is about help please :) (blog)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

Fridays tend not to be good nights for the pub/mechanics institutes and difficult to ge tpeople out for poetry because there are other distractions available; but, prove us wrong!
there is on other thing that is vitally important to the success of a night. Damned if I can remember what it is.

Comment is about help please :) (blog)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

You didn't use to be in the Boomtown Rats did you Harry? (Oh sorry - that was MONDAYS!);)

Comment is about help please :) (blog)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

just don`t like fridays...pay no noticeto me
....Julian`s told you all the essential stuff

Comment is about help please :) (blog)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

comment to Philip Fletcher.

I'm slightly older than you,
gave up selling my poetry years ago.
I have written about 23 collections over the years. yet, i have many readers on different sites on the net.

Comment is about The beat of our hearts: how to combat poetry phobia (article)

Original item by Greg Freeman

there is much poetry about,
plenty of it is terrible.
Often a would be poet uses
an artificial language
and write constantly and without
humour about their suffering.
I only wish poets would write using the language they speak daily

Comment is about The beat of our hearts: how to combat poetry phobia (article)

Original item by Greg Freeman

I was fortunate to win this years competition and have already received my copy of the anthology. It's excelent. The production values are great and the range of poetry is astonishing. But I'm not posting this comment for any sort of self-publicity - I'm posting it because the future success of this prize rests, in part, on the sales of the anthology. There is NO external funding for this prize, it is funded purely from entry fees for the competition and sales of the anthology. No one is making a profit, in fact certain individuals frequently lose money. So why not be two things at once, a poet AND a philanthropist and, if you can afford it, buy a copy to support this prize? I'm sure Picador and Faber will be selling lots of books this week, but why not support genuinely good - but unpublicised - poets, and purchase a copy. After all it's keeping a quality prize going for the benefit of everyone who shares our passion for poetry!

Comment is about Welsh Poetry Competition anthology launched (article)

Original item by Greg Freeman

Hi kealan, I love this poem.

Comment is about If Women Grew On Trees (blog)

Original item by Kealan Coady

luv it Scott... great!



....was offered a dozen ex riot Argos Catalogues in the pub last nght, very popular, people were fighting over them...


Hope to C U soon

Gus

Comment is about ? (blog)

Hi Isobel

I HAVE a Jag....and I Have NOT got a problem with my pleasently cheeky rotundity.....

Chill... give us fat Kats a break!

Missya

Gus x

Comment is about The Haves and The Have Nots (blog)

Original item by Isobel

Hi Anthony

Many thanks for your response. I entirely agree with what you say about freeing poetry from the page and the need to create a more general demand from the public. The money will only follow when that happens.

Comment is about The beat of our hearts: how to combat poetry phobia (article)

Original item by Greg Freeman

Well that's something I suppose! ;)

Comment is about diamante love (blog)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

i like the first and last lines!

Comment is about diamante love (blog)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

Thanks for your comment Ann. Enjoyed your samples. Will check out the blogs too.

Comment is about Ann Foxglove (poet profile)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

great idea, kealan for a piece.. you really are cooking brilliantly with your pieces nowadays.. you just keep getting better! A

Comment is about If Women Grew On Trees (blog)

Original item by Kealan Coady

excellent stuff, rach.. very skillfully done.. particularly like the last two stanzas but there is a slightness throughout the full piece that i really enjoy.. hope to see you end of the month x

Comment is about Beyond The Green Gate (blog)

I really enjoyed listening to this - thank you - a good start to my morning! Be nice to see your words.

Comment is about Wax Equestrian and CB 2004 (blog)

What a romantic poem - and totally true of course! Mind you, I wouldn't want to be married to Alan Titmarsh!

Comment is about If Women Grew On Trees (blog)

Original item by Kealan Coady

i like the idea of being a nightshade brunette, decorated in tempting red!! great poem :-)

Comment is about If Women Grew On Trees (blog)

Original item by Kealan Coady

Just saw this on Facebook, looking forward to it.

It'll be my first poetry thing since I come back from America so I'm looking forward to it.

I'd be happy to get Ben to film if you like n_n

Comment is about Bolton becomes bi-monthly (article)

Original item by Greg Freeman

Ah! like the poem she will always be a beautiful memory.

Comment is about (blog)

Hi Larisa, thanks for missing me. I am fine, thanks, but been away from this site too long! I have missed you and some other lovely friends on here as well. Love, Lynn xx

Comment is about Larisa Rzhepishevska (poet profile)

Original item by Larisa Rzhepishevska

This is a Cracking poem John. Did you know that
Ann Foxglove gave me credit for writing it. No such luck. but I told her it must have been some other trucker.
What-a Mistake-a to Make-a.
Blogs away. Tom Mc.

Comment is about Eddie (blog)

Original item by John Coopey

no thats fine by me Lynn
you pose a fair and sensible question.

ta chuck.

Stef.xx

Comment is about The Aftermath (blog)

Original item by Lynn Dye

Thanks for comments, Stef, you are so right about the real victims. I do not mean to excuse the rioters at all. Ta, Lynn xx

Comment is about The Aftermath (blog)

Original item by Lynn Dye

guess who again!

just to say
on the other hand
many of the rioters
would not change places with
a third world person who has to walk
thirty miles or more for water
and in most cases carrying a child as well

we should never forget those-real-victims.

thanks again Lynn-take care-Stef.xx

Comment is about The Aftermath (blog)

Original item by Lynn Dye