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Glyn Pope

Mon 14th May 2012 20:44

Good.

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Glyn Pope

Mon 14th May 2012 20:42

yes, this is good.

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Glyn Pope

Mon 14th May 2012 20:40

I love this one as well.

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Glyn Pope

Mon 14th May 2012 20:34

I love it.

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nick armbrister

Mon 14th May 2012 19:03

in loving memory of Lynette Hammond, RIP my dear angel xxx

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Chris Co

Mon 14th May 2012 18:39

7pm as a start time makes it near impossible for anyone outside Manchester. Really want to come along but...just never likely to be able to.

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Chris

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Chris Co

Mon 14th May 2012 17:11

Hi Lynn,

I like the gusto of your poem and I'd certainly agree with you on the call for the lib-dems to leave the government.

Political views aside (though I dare say we agree on quite a bit) very flattering to hear my offering had such an effect.

I can see that your poem is based in metre and on that note I had a little go at trying to round a few edges off for you; to try and help the sonic lines. Have a little look and see what you think.

Keep or leave any offerings as you see fit.

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I don’t think much of the Conservative press,
I think they are responsible, more or less
For indoctrinating normal working folk
Into wearing the tallest and saddest joke
that voting Tory is the way to go,
When workers’ foe is Cameron and co.
They continually berate the loony left
Forging decade old lies bygone and bereft.


So called New Labour is just right of centre,
Thatcherist policies just a bit gentler,
But no big cuts to the public sector jobs
that was down to the Tory scissored-knobs,
Who picked on the poor and the disabled too
For they need to give more to the privileged few.
Austerity just heads on a downward spiral,
Contracting lives while poverty goes viral.
Workers voting Tory – now that's preposterous!
Turkeys want no stuffing even at Christmas!!



Now as the recession hits a double dip,
I think it is time the Lib-Dems jumped ship.
A centrist pledge never seemed like a theft
but there was no party left on the left!
The only real options – what a dynasty!
We need a change; can we call it Honesty!

My Best

Chris

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M.C. Newberry

Mon 14th May 2012 16:12

Hi Lynn - thanks for the kind comment about "So Broken Hearted" (demo version). I admire the singer Marcie Summers (from Bristol) immensely and she can be found singing on my latest post "When You Walked Into My Life". Back to SBH for a moment: the commercially released recording has just spent 8 weeks ina country DJs' list/chart across Europe and Australia. One day I may even be big in Albania!! :-)
Finally, I totally agree with the comments applauding "Teardrops In My Coffee". A great song-title
and a lyric that is worth someone's tune!

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John Coopey

Mon 14th May 2012 12:14

Glad you liked 'you won't batter anymore', greg. A minor hitch with the cd is i cant sing and cant play.

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John Coopey

Mon 14th May 2012 12:07

... And while we're on the subject of selby chippies - mr c's on finkle street displays the name of the boat that caught your fish! That's traceability! 'course it's probably the ho chi minh from the mekong delta. But glad you liked 'you won't batter anymore'.

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John Coopey

Mon 14th May 2012 11:58

Hello lynn. Glad you liked 'you won't batter anymore'. A classic by bluddy helly!

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John Coopey

Mon 14th May 2012 11:49

'Turn in his gravy'? Ha ha, very good. I see i've got competition!

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Laura Taylor

Mon 14th May 2012 09:51

The cord is 'broke'? Dunt sit right that, for me. Cords are cut, not 'broke'.

I like the title, and the piece overall* - another one who can identify with it. It's a bit like smellevision this, but poetry :D



* BUT - I would take these two verses and reduce them into something that makes more sense:

The cord is broke

and blood sponged up



the wedding robes

are coarsely cut.

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Mon 14th May 2012 00:27

Thank you so much, Yvonne for the feedback on my poems. I agree with you reg;"Grief Stricken" and have decided to amend accordingly. Many thanks. xxx

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Joshua Van-Cook

Sun 13th May 2012 23:34

Lynn,
Thank you so much for your comment on "Surreal". It is, in fact, very true. The reason why it is more of a rant than anything else was because I needed to get my thoughts on the event penned down or typed up.
Thank you

- Josh

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Lynn Dye

Sun 13th May 2012 23:01

This is very good, Joshua. I like the way it goes from questioning the sermon to the whole sadness of the event to the "party" afterwards being a distasteful dream. And finally, it is in the night time that the full weight of it dawned.
So true and real, well done.

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Lynn Dye

Sun 13th May 2012 22:54

Good one, MC! Enjoyed this, I am in awe.

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Harry O'Neill

Sun 13th May 2012 22:17

M.C.About the ending of your last comment:

It made me go back into the bewilderments of demography and the pension problems of aging populations. Including (would you believe it?)China.

The forecast (pension saving?) increase in Britain`s population appears to be mainly due to immigrants, as apparently -they say- we are not reproducing ourselves sufficiently.

Maybe we (and maybe even China!) will have to rely heavily on the people from those lands which are `unproductive` if only to finance our pension needs in the future.

Demography is scary...I hope there is some hidden self-regulating feature in it all...but
it`s got me scared! (and why should I be the only one to have my sunday spoiled?)

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Lynn Dye

Sun 13th May 2012 21:52

Harry, thanks for your comments. It is a complex world out there and I agree with some of your comments.

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Lynn Dye

Sun 13th May 2012 21:32

Thank you everyone for your comments :)

MC - did you read that story about Gordon Brown in the Tory press? ;o) Not that I'm defending the plonker, I wouldn't even call him a socialist!
You could be right about the Labour voters having their pensions squandered by him (chickens coming home to roost) but that would be no worse than any voting Tory to have their jobs axed by them months after they got in!
Maybe they are not always the big bad wolf? Well, I was prepared to give Cameron and the coalition a chance, but now... well, lets just say - perhaps I would have more time for them if we truly were all in this together!

Thank you Joshua for your approval :o)

Tommy, I completely agree about your misnomer of "the country". Thank you for your comments, you have given me some food for thought there! :o)

Yvonne, you are right, an honest MP an oxymoron!

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Harry O'Neill

Sun 13th May 2012 21:27

Missed this,

Reminds me of Hopkins (something sprung rhythm-ish about it).

Admire the hard-syllabled adjectival attack of the first three stanzas tapering off into the `explanatory` ending and the alliteration in the final line.

An excellently workmanlike piece of poetry.

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John Coopey

Sun 13th May 2012 20:58

What ho! MC.
Glad you liked "You Won't Batter Anymore". Even the great Buddy can be improved on!
I think you're right about the repetitons in "Together" being overdone bu my own preference is to retain the 4-phrase chorus line after each verse but dispense with the final "envoie".
We (that's Richard, my co-writer and I) wanted something very simple lyically and musically for the kids, and also strong in Christian ethic but without being "god-y"

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John Coopey

Sun 13th May 2012 20:42

Hello Yvonne,
Glad you liked "Together". We recorded it in school on Wednesday (its world premiere!) and I posted it the same day (I think).
We (that's Richard and myself) wanted something simple musically and lyrically for the kids; also, something Christian in tone(together/caring for others/strong helping weak etc) but not "god-y".
Anyway, the kids seem to like it.

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Sun 13th May 2012 18:29

King James 2000 Bible (©2003)
''It is easier for a camel to go through the eye of a needle, than for a rich man to enter into the kingdom of God.''

Are NOT most of the following 'Christians' ?


1
Carlos Slim Helu & family
$69 B 72 telecom Mexico
2
Bill Gates
$61 B 56 Microsoft United States
3
Warren Buffett
$44 B 81 Berkshire Hathaway United States
4
Bernard Arnault
$41 B 63 LVMH France
5
Amancio Ortega
$37.5 B 75 Zara Spain
6
Larry Ellison
$36 B 67 Oracle United States
7
Eike Batista
$30 B 55 mining, oil Brazil
8
Stefan Persson
$26 B 64 H&M Sweden
9
Li Ka-shing
$25.5 B 83 diversified Hong Kong
10
Karl Albrecht
$25.4 B 92 Aldi Germany
11
Christy Walton & family
$25.3 B 57 Wal-Mart United States
12
Charles Koch
$25 B 76 diversified United States
12
David Koch
$25 B 71 diversified United States
14
Sheldon Adelson
$24.9 B 78 casinos United States
15
Liliane Bettencourt
$24 B 89 L'Oreal France
16
Jim Walton
$23.7 B 64 Wal-Mart United States
17
Alice Walton
$23.3 B 62 Wal-Mart United States
18
S. Robson Walton
$23.1 B 68 Wal-Mart United States
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Mukesh Ambani
$22.3 B 54 petrochemicals, oil & gas India
20
Michael Bloomberg
$22 B 70 Bloomberg LP United States
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Lakshmi Mittal
$20.7 B 61 steel India
22
George Soros
$20 B 81 hedge funds United States
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Michele Ferrero & family
$19 B 85 chocolates Italy
24
Sergey Brin
$18.7 B 38 Google United States
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Larry Page
$18.7 B 39 Google United States
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Jeff Bezos
$18.4 B 48 Amazon.com United States
27
Thomas & Raymond Kwok & family
$18.3 B 0 real estate Hong Kong
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Alisher Usmanov
$18.1 B 58 steel, telecom, investments Russia
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Prince Alwaleed Bin Talal Alsaud
$18 B 57 investments Saudi Arabia
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Lee Shau Kee
$18 B 84 diversified Hong Kong
29
Georgina Rinehart
$18 B 58 Mining Australia
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Berthold & Theo Jr. Albrecht
$17.8 B 0 Aldi, Trader Joe's Germany
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Iris Fontbona & family
$17.8 B 69 mining Chile
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Michael Otto & family
$17.6 B 68 retail, real estate Germany
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David Thomson & family
$17.5 B 54 media Canada
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Mark Zuckerberg
$17.5 B 27 Facebook United States
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Ricardo Salinas Pliego & family
$17.4 B 56 retail, media Mexico
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Alberto Bailleres Gonzalez & family
$16.5 B 80 mining Mexico
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Rinat Akhmetov
$16 B 45 steel, coal Ukraine
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Cheng Yu-tung
$16 B 86 diversified Hong Kong
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Michael Dell
$15.9 B 47 Dell United States
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Vladimir Lisin
$15.9 B 55 steel, transport Russia
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Azim Premji
$15.9 B 66 software India
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Steve Ballmer
$15.7 B 56 Microsoft United States
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Alexei Mordashov
$15.3 B 46 steel, investments Russia
46
Vladimir Potanin
$14.5 B 51 metals Russia
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Phil Knight
$14.4 B 74 Nike United States
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Paul Allen
$14.2 B 59 Microsoft, investments United States
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German Larrea Mota Velasco & family
$14.2 B 58 mining Mexico
50
Carl Icahn
$14 B 76 leveraged buyouts United States
50
Birgit Rausing & family
$14 B 88 packaging Sweden
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Forrest Mars Jr
$13.8 B 80 candy United States
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Jacqueline Mars
$13.8 B 72 candy United States
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John Mars
$13.8 B 75 candy United States
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Joseph Safra
$13.8 B 73 banking Brazil
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Vagit Alekperov
$13.5 B 61 Lukoil Russia
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Mikhail Fridman
$13.4 B 47 oil, banking, telecom Russia
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Mikhail Prokhorov
$13.2 B 46 investments Russia
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Susanne Klatten
$13 B 49 BMW, pharmaceuticals Germany
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Francois Pinault & family
$13 B 75 retail France
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Mohammed Al Amoudi
$12.5 B 67 oil, diversified Saudi Arabia
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Anne Cox Chambers
$12.5 B 92 media United States
61
John Paulson
$12.5 B 56 hedge funds United States
64
Robert Kuok
$12.4 B 88 diversified Malaysia
64
Luis Carlos Sarmiento
$12.4 B 79 banking Colombia
64
Viktor Vekselberg
$12.4 B 54 oil, metals Russia
67
Antonio Ermirio de Moraes & family
$12.2 B 83 diversified Brazil
68
Roman Abramovich
$12.1 B 45 steel, investments Russia
69
Donald Bren
$12 B 79 real estate United States
69
Jorge Paulo Lemann
$12 B 72 beer Brazil
69
Ronald Perelman
$12 B 69 leveraged buyouts United States
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Len Blavatnik
$11.9 B 54 diversified United States
72
Leonid Mikhelson
$11.9 B 56 gas, chemicals Russia
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Leonardo Del Vecchio
$11.5 B 76 eyewear Italy
75
John Fredriksen
$11.3 B 67 shipping Cyprus
76
Aliko Dangote
$11.2 B 54 sugar, flour, cement Nigeria
76
Stefan Quandt
$11.2 B 45 BMW Germany
78
Gerald Cavendish Grosvenor & family
$11 B 60 real estate United Kingdom
78
Harold Hamm
$11 B 66 oil & gas United States
80
Savitri Jindal & family
$10.9 B 62 steel India
81
Andrey Melnichenko
$10.8 B 40 coal, fertilizers Russia
82
James Simons
$10.7 B 73 hedge funds United States
83
Ernesto Bertarelli & family
$10.6 B 46 biotech, investments Switzerland
84
Jack Taylor & family
$10.4 B 89 Enterprise Rent-A-Car United States
85
Abigail Johnson
$10.3 B 50 Fidelity United States
86
Robin Li
$10.2 B 43 Technology China
86
Eliodoro, Bernardo & Patricia Matte
$10.2 B 0 paper Chile
88
Ray Dalio
$10 B 62 hedge funds United States
88
George Kaiser
$10 B 69 oil & gas, banking United States
88
Johanna Quandt
$10 B 85 BMW Germany
88
Hans Rausing
$10 B 86 packaging Sweden
88
Tadashi Yanai & family
$10 B 63 retail Japan
93
Serge Dassault & family
$9.9 B 86 aviation France
93
Ananda Krishnan
$9.9 B 73 telecoms Malaysia
95
Klaus-Michael Kuhne
$9.8 B 74 shipping Germany
96
Pallonji Mistry
$9.7 B 82 construction Ireland
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Alejandro Santo Domingo Davila
$9.5 B 35 beer Colombia
98
Horst Paulmann & family
$9.3 B 77 retail Chile
99
Gennady Timchenko
$9.1 B 59 oil & gas Russia
100
Laurene Powell Jobs & family
$9 B 48 Apple, Disney United States

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Yvonne Brunton

Sun 13th May 2012 17:42

It's a bit long but I like the way it slides laterally from idea to idea.

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M.C. Newberry

Sun 13th May 2012 16:45

I have always admired the effort that creates a school song. A purely fictitious - and favourite - example is Richard Addinsell's school song for the Robert Donat film version of "Goodbye Mr Chips", to my mind, on an equal footing with the more famous real-life "Eton Boating Song".
Lovely stuff!

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M.C. Newberry

Sun 13th May 2012 16:22

The Tories are hardly immune to proper and just criticism, but the idea that they are alway the Big Bad Wolf, contemptuous of opportunity and self-improvement for others, is risible. Work and working practices/opportunities change - witness the emergence of the vast online market - and any government must keep up and adapt as best it can...often, sadly, some way behind what is needed. To stifle business or those who seek to create it is folly by any political party. But today's workplace is a hugely diverse arena, with creators and entrepreneurs coming from across the social spectrum. There will always be those who make possibilities and those who make their living by helping that process to successful fruition. In between come those who are content to receive the income provided by others without doing either. Whilst sorting out the properly deserving from the rest, no government serves its people by false spending and scant saving. There is no easy fix and even Christ himself was supposed to have remarked that "The poor are always with us". "Poor" is relevant to the times in which it exists and today's definition doesn't compare with what was known to and suffered by previous generations. There can be no age that provides so many "safety nets" for those enduring hard times, with and without official help. This has to be a worthy and laudable situation in an increasingly global and competitive world, with a worrying rise in population - especally in "unproductive" lands, that, ultimately, might threaten the existence of humanity itself.

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Harry O'Neill

Sun 13th May 2012 16:14

Lynne,
I wonder if we all live in the same world.Under a Tory goverment, I:

1...(for free) went to Uni and got a couple of geriatric degrees.

2...four of my children (all left school at the age of sixteen) looked at their decrepit old fart of a father and decided to do the same.

3...Three are now teachers (one a head) and one is a probation officer.

When my factory closed, I was almost crushed in the rush of those people wanting to take redundancy (pay)

I am a lifelong socialist and trade union official.

The most important thing we should recognise about the popular press is that it is popular.

When Socialism says `from each according to their ability, to each according to their need`It is indisputable...But we must remember that Stalin was helped to kill millions of people in pusuit of that desireable end.

When Capitalism says `Leave individualism alone` this also has much to commend it...but leaving the bankers alone has led to the present disaster.

For me, the crux of the matter lies in the old saying that: `WHOEVER HAS THE MANAGEMENT WILL HAVE THE MONEY` ( I visited Hungary in it`s communistic decline and saw how true that was)That`s how the bankers ended up with all those millions.

Again - for me - At a time of the emergence of huge, new, united economic power-centers, for Britain to remain outside of central decision taking in the Euro is very foolish.

Finally...I think it`s about time we all woke up out of our `Up the workers!` and `Little Englander` dreams and took a good, hard look at what is really going on in the world around us

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Antony Owen

Sun 13th May 2012 16:13

Hi Cynthia
Thaks a million for your review on The Blooding. I was going to ask if you would consider reviewing my 2nd collection, The Dreaded Boy by Pighog Press?

I'm happy to send you a copy if you wish and I'd be very grateful.

Thanks
Ant

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Greg Freeman

Sun 13th May 2012 15:59

Really enjoyed this account, Julian. Made me wish I could have been there.

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M.C. Newberry

Sun 13th May 2012 15:56

Thanks for the kind comments.
Harry - my only flirtation with an instrument
was with a ukulele years ago. But I have found
that being able to write "in rhythm" can in
itself create a tune and this is "transcribed"
for song recording purposes.
JC - I will see if I can upload the song.
Cheers.

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Sun 13th May 2012 15:34

Your poetry makes me smile...great stuff, Attila

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Harry O'Neill

Sun 13th May 2012 14:53


I get very jealous of those on here who can play instruments (you don`t know how lucky you are) I agree with John, this sounds like a winner.

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Harry O'Neill

Sun 13th May 2012 14:14

Chris and Yvonne,
You were both right,it does end it better...changed it...also deleted the original last stanza as being a bit too braggy and sycophantic...and substituted `differing` for the over P.C. `amiable` in the third.

THANKS for the positive criticism.

For Chris:
Couldn`t find an atheist spire anywhere...and as for Everton?...hold on a minute. I`m all for this ecumenical stuff but some things are just a step too far (do you realise, they might finish higher in the league than us this year...be reasonable man!)

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Yvonne Brunton

Sun 13th May 2012 13:59

Is the term 'an honest MP' an oxymoron?

Why are MPs allowed to stand for anywhere in the country instead of only being allowed to represent their home area ( a bit like the yorkshire cricket player rules)

How has Switzerland survived without joining the EU?

How long is a piece of string?

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Yvonne Brunton

Sun 13th May 2012 13:48

Great theme of 'you don't miss what you never had. I especially like the lines

'Love was a caller disinclined

To come knocking at my locked door'

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Yvonne Brunton

Sun 13th May 2012 13:46

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Yvonne Brunton

Sun 13th May 2012 13:30

Hi Tommy,
Thanks for your comment on 'Kitchen - Made'. I am just waiting for someone to order one as well,now!

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Yvonne Brunton

Sun 13th May 2012 13:22

Hi Cynthia,
Thanks for you comments on Kitchen - Made. I see what you mean about the last line It would be punchier but it leaves me with a missing rhyme and perhaps the possessive 'my' reinforces the volte face. XX

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Ray Miller

Sun 13th May 2012 12:43

Thanks, Isobel.I can see me spending the rest of my life searching for an apt title for this sodding poem.By Poor Poem I mean in the sense of "Ah, poor poem!"feeling sorry fot it. The sentiments apply to any poem, though it's true a lot of mine are poor!I could call it Labour, I suppose, summat like that.

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Sun 13th May 2012 12:09

The term 'loony left' is in the same vain as 'Lazy blacks' and 'stupid Irish' i'm sure readers can add to that list.
Another misnomer is 'the country' in reference to an equality of gains and loss and unity of purpose pertaining to the population as a whole. Any dim-wit (I am most definitely NOT including yourself in this Lynn) can tell the massive disparity that exist between differing sections within society in terms of income and opportunity and social aims.
As for the role of the 'socialist leaderships' of the working class, it (the working class) has a long tradition of 'support' for Social Democratic parties and Unions because of the very many gains made by workers in their support of those organisations.
Very many workers absent themselves from the 'political process' owing to disillusionment in that process and an historical betrayal of them by their 'leaders'. The 'leadership' of the working class have also suffered the abandonment of the said principles that have been forged in battle with the ruling class and the sacrifices made in the defense of jobs, communities and their children's future.
Too many people mock those principles and the sacrifices made by millions of women and men fighting for those futures.
And Lynn, as for 'honesty' to solve those problems, well the Capitalists (and their executive branch the Tory party) backed up with the right wing press would (and do)scoff at such demands. Having said that Lynn I proffered the same demand 'Honesty'(in a discussion with friends) years before the film which starred Jim Carrey in the film 'Liar Liar'appeared.
In closing Lynn I enjoyed reading your poem and welcome the debate it has raised. Tommy :o)

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Joshua Van-Cook

Sun 13th May 2012 09:23

Well done Lynn, I've never seen my thoughts on this matter so well expressed.

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Isobel

Sat 12th May 2012 23:54

I'd say the poem is about what you say in the title - something you've created that isn't necessarily good enough to survive close scrutiny. And no - it doesn't take long before anything drowns beneath the weight of others - particularly on this site :)

It's a metaphor I've seen used in this way before, but maybe not taken to the same extremes.

'After thoughts just rot inside the skin' - I can identify with that. I think we've all released something out into the ether that we are less than happy with. It's hard to work up the enthusiasm to change it, once it has gone - and if we accept the ideas of other people too much, it ceases to feel like our own poem. It becomes bastardised - to continue your metaphor... :)

I struggled with the line 'A cord is broke' I want to add an n.

Other than that, an interesting read.

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John Coopey

Sat 12th May 2012 22:38

Sounds like a winner, MC. Will you re-post when it's sett music?

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Ray Miller

Sat 12th May 2012 20:39

Thanks, Steve and Yvonne. Much as I liked the previous title it was maybe OTT. Anyhow, I've tried to alter the tone a little.

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Andy N

Sat 12th May 2012 20:07

looking forward to reading here matey.. will be a top afternoon.. andy

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M.C. Newberry

Sat 12th May 2012 19:13

My sister has an African Grey parrot - which
is lord of all it surveys from its spacious cage facing out of the window on to the street
a few yards away. Occasionally, she takes him into the garden and gives him a shower and he
seems more than happy to find his way back into
his cage home without any encouragement. These
birds - they walk around in the wild - seem
strangely content and reassured by their defined home surroundings altho' I am not in
favour of other breeds being caged. In other
days and in other countries still, you could/can buy a caged bird for the pleasure of letting it fly free. A worse side to caged
birds is the Italian shooting season when the
latins shoot at just about everything that is
flying/migrating overhead.

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M.C. Newberry

Sat 12th May 2012 19:02

Writing for such a good cause is to be applauded heartily.
It gets better as it goes on. The vocal line becomes more reognisable as the youngsters get
used to the tune, and if I were to offer a songwriter's tip - discard the last two of each
four last line repeats and place real emphasis the 2nd (last) of what remains.
You can have too much of a good thing and it
runs the risk of seeming to be "forced".

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M.C. Newberry

Sat 12th May 2012 18:51

On the subject of long term effects...good or bad -
we are witnessing demonstrations by public sector workers in defence of pensions. Fair
enough, but these are paid for by the private
sector - and who plundered the most admired
private pension system in the world to the
tune - it is recently reported - of many tens of billions whilst harping on piously about "prudence"? Why, a certain socialist
Chancellor/Prime Minister, that's who!
I bet these marchers, with their union banners very much in evidence, happily voted for his Party and its policies before the piper began to call the tune and a little reality set in.
"Chickens coming home to roost" comes to mind.

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Original item by Lynn Dye

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