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Touching the hem of the robe

I'd never noticed she was left-handed

or how clean were her fingernails

or the repairs on her threadbare, faded robe.

Never noticed her luminous eyes.

Never saw their desperate tears.

Never looked at her properly at all.

Non-person.

The woman with the flow,

made unclean by blood,

now touching the robe of the man

who makes us clean with blood,

some say.

 

It makes a picture,

a frozen sacramental moment.

The crowd jostling and pressing.

Her thumb and first finger gripping his hem.

His suddenly furrowed, frowning brow.

Stopping, half-turning, mouth half-opening,

about to say

Who touched me?”

 

Matt 9:20-22

Mark 5:24-34

◄ It's different

Competition. Touch and go ►

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barrie singleton

Sun 27th Oct 2013 17:54

Oh Dave! A positive blood-orgy! Sooooo neat combining the blood of 'unclean' with the blood of redemption. I wish I had thought of that. So glad I popped in. And a BONUS BALL! Isobel had led me to submit to 'Touch and Go' but, almost blindly, I followed her directions. NOW I understand! What a multifaceted place is WOL!

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Andy N

Fri 11th Oct 2013 12:56

kinda reminds me of hugo williams in this piece, style wise but it's a excellent story and the dialogue at the end really brings it together.

top stuff, m8

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Isobel

Fri 11th Oct 2013 08:26

I'm not familiar with this story Dave - though there's probably a lot about it that a modern woman wouldn't appreciate. I'd like to know the story better before I commented. You seem to have worked it into an effective poem though - with plenty of room for questions at the end - especially for those unfamiliar with Matthew and Marks reflections.

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