It's short but it's strong, slamming home a vital truism that needs a clear voice.
The 'half' sentence is interesting - capitals but no punctuation.
Comment is about Some people have it, some don't (blog)
Original item by joe ranter
I was thinking of you only on Saturday. It's weird how thoughts flash up, mine probably tickled into being by the Cornish 'recognition'. I've missed you.
This poem is simple, and simply haunting, in its philosophical thought and embracing universality. 'queen memory' is a very original image. Or, at least, I've never met it before. You are really gifted.
Would you consider no 'capitals' whatsoever, since they aren't consistent?
Comment is about queen memory... (blog)
Original item by Ann Foxglove
Jeff, I'm so sorry to have missed your slot at Sale, Waterside. My allergies knocked me flat - tree pollen probably. I haven't heard you in ages.
Comment is about Jeffarama! (poet profile)
Original item by Jeffarama!
Ian, I'm so sorry to have missed your slot at Sale, Waterside. My allergies knocked me flat - tree pollen probably.
Comment is about Ian Whiteley (poet profile)
Original item by Ian Whiteley
Mike no offence meant to your comments. I just remember the furore that followed MT's funeral here on WOL. The bottom I refer to is the vehemence et al. Sorry if I have offended you. I'm not an old Tory either lol!
Comment is about The Judgement of History (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
<Deleted User> (4172)
Mon 28th Apr 2014 10:57
As well as talk out of it. And it's interesting Mr Sherwood that you think because i'm not a lover of Thatcher or the Tory's (or even dare to have an opinion that differs to yours about them!) that i should be something 'stirred from the bottom.' Just the sort of 'mightier than thou' remark i'd expect from you old right wingers.
Comment is about The Judgement of History (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
Oh no! here we go again. Did you really have to stir the bottom again JC?
Comment is about The Judgement of History (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
<Deleted User> (4172)
Mon 28th Apr 2014 09:06
The latter, i think. A monstrous, destructive individual and it is of no surprise that her death was so widely celebrated. Still, it's sweet that you still love her so.
Comment is about The Judgement of History (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
You're very generous Harry, many thanks. Graham.
Comment is about Harry O`N eill (poet profile)
Original item by Harry O`N eill
Love to know the feelings behind this. Nice to see you back on here Ann.
Comment is about queen memory... (blog)
Original item by Ann Foxglove
Lovely Anne,
(maybe `that` instead of `this` in line eight?)
The picture `goes` with it.
Comment is about queen memory... (blog)
Original item by Ann Foxglove
What an unusual and striking poem!
Comment is about queen memory... (blog)
Original item by Ann Foxglove
Hello Alex
Welcome to Write Out Loud.
We're really looking forward to reading some of your work. I know that you will be warmly welcomed by fellow WOL-ers on the site.
If you haven’t already added a picture to your profile please try and do so. It’s good to see what our fellow poets look like.
Have a good browse around the site, there’s lots going on and if you have the time make some comments about the work of other poets please feel free. It’s the best way to get some constructive feedback about your own work too.
Any problems, please ask. There’s always someone who’ll get back to you. It’s a friendly place, so welcome once again.
Graham Sherwood
Comment is about Alex Frankel (poet profile)
Original item by Alex Frankel
Sun 27th Apr 2014 10:34
classic material. thanks for sharing!
if you made a video of this it could go "viral"...
Comment is about UK GIN DEPENDENCE PARTY (blog)
Original item by Attila the Stockbroker
Kenneth Eaton-Dykes
Sat 26th Apr 2014 20:09
thanx for reading. yes, its an ok poem. nowt special.
Comment is about Where Will We Be Tomorrow? (blog)
Original item by NICK ARMBRISTER
<Deleted User> (11518)
Sat 26th Apr 2014 08:48
I adore Wilfred Owen. Such an exceptionally gifted young man
Just had to say.
Comment is about End of month deadline for poems 'in the spirit' of Wilfred Owen (article)
Original item by Greg Freeman
<Deleted User> (11518)
Fri 25th Apr 2014 16:44
Wonderfully refreshing. I loved your expressions. Vinyl soul everything clean and digital. This laid visions of blurred reels of the past. A sad and in depth write. Wonderful. Ty
Comment is about remembering the terrible lizard (blog)
Original item by Ian Whiteley
<Deleted User> (12166)
Fri 25th Apr 2014 16:33
"Your life, in every corner of my hands,
the epitome of my dreams,
in the suns, in my thoughts,
drenched in glory"
The whole poem, especially the lines above this that I just pasted, are immensely powerful to me, it brings me to my own experiences and makes me think of how love is blind because truly new love consumes your every thought. Great poem!!! :)
Comment is about I only asked... (blog)
Original item by Noris Roberts
Eggseptional use of repetition David, well done!
Comment is about Eggsciting Easter (blog)
Original item by David Lindsay
thanks for your kind comments on the 'Somme' poem MC - glad you liked it. It's part of a bigger piece I'm working on at the moment - and started to record some of the segments (although not all written yet) I think it will be a 'fitting' remembrance. I, like you, have relatives buried here (and there) who were scarred by the great war
Comment is about M.C. Newberry (poet profile)
Original item by M.C. Newberry
thanks for the kind comments on the 'Somme' poem Jeff - it's part of a bigger 'work in progress' I'll speak more to you about it next time I see you - yes, really enjoyed Sale and your set was predictably wonderful as always :-)
Comment is about Jeffarama! (poet profile)
Original item by Jeffarama!
<Deleted User> (9882)
Thu 24th Apr 2014 22:51
<Deleted User> (9882)
Thu 24th Apr 2014 22:47
thank you for checking out my work. i like your work as well. I can feel and connect to each and every word you have written. Keep up with the good work :)
Comment is about Tribute To Kurt Cobain (blog)
Original item by LEE JAMES BLUNT
Been a while since I been on here.
welcome.https://m.facebook.com/profile.php?id=291530884245272
Comment is about Starr Steele (poet profile)
Original item by Starr Steele
Hello Starr and welcome to Write Out Loud. We're really looking forward to reading some of your work. I know that you will be warmly welcomed by fellow WOL-ers on the site. If you haven’t already added a picture to your profile please try and do so. It’s good to see what our fellow poets look like.
Have a good browse around the site, there’s lots going on and if you have the time make some comments about the work of other poets please feel free. It’s the best way to get some constructive feedback about your own work too.
Any problems, please ask. There’s always someone who’ll get back to you. It’s a friendly place, so welcome once again.
Graham Sherwood
Comment is about Starr Steele (poet profile)
Original item by Starr Steele
Beautiful in its power and its sadness.
Comment is about the knock (blog)
Original item by steve pottinger
<Deleted User> (5011)
Wed 23rd Apr 2014 15:00
you are pretty amazing Joe. Hats off to you.
Comment is about Joe Nodus (poet profile)
Original item by Joe Nodus
Fine poem, Steve. Thanks for posting it here, too.
Comment is about the knock (blog)
Original item by steve pottinger
<Deleted User> (12152)
Wed 23rd Apr 2014 05:11
You're welcome John! Have a look at the page I sent it'll be a great opportunity for you.
Comment is about The Wars Between the Sexes (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
<Deleted User> (12156)
Wed 23rd Apr 2014 04:18
The Foundry's closed down...
Review is about Touching Earth on 22 Apr 2014 (event)
I liked this. For all the reasons the others have given.
Comment is about In the Sea (blog)
Original item by David Blake
Lillian
Tue 22nd Apr 2014 20:42
This is very deep reasoning and it brings up many intreaguing questions. I liked your tone in the poem and I enjoyed the way you used simple words but brought great images and power through them. This is a great poem.
Comment is about Where Will We Be Tomorrow? (blog)
Original item by NICK ARMBRISTER
Lillian
Tue 22nd Apr 2014 20:37
Your imagery was incredible and the way you talk about darkness in a light mood is very impressive. I quite enjoyed your poem.
Comment is about In the Sea (blog)
Original item by David Blake
Many thanks for your kind comments. Katherine.
Comment is about The Wars Between the Sexes (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
I wrote this poem on the 25th anniversary of the Hillsborough tragedy. Poetry24 were kind enough to publish it the next day.
Comment is about the knock (blog)
Original item by steve pottinger
leah
Tue 22nd Apr 2014 11:53
AN 'EVENTFUL' APRIL WRITE ANGLE EVENING
How often do you get to hear what goes on ' inside' a professional performer's mind. when he suddenly stops mid-stream saying 'I can't go on. I didn't want to come tonight...nothing to do with you....It's me...' and 'I'm not comfortable performing live'.
It's happened to famous Hollywood stars throughout time, (often leading to drink and drugs). Even Sir Laurence Olivier admitted he got 'sick to his stomach' everytime he had to get up and perform - and it happens at Write Angle. The fear, shaking, self-doubt, nerves,...but they get up and do it! Sometimes a drink, prayer or deep breath can bring out courage.
April's guest performer was Patrik Fitzgerald, icon punk musician/poet of the 70s, who brought in a packed house, including fans from Portsmouth, Southampton, Chichester – everywhere. After showing his great talent, giving the guitar a thousand voices, and singing, 'Here Comes The Bus Again', 'Dance Music Late Night, and 'Benefit Schemes' (written when he was 16), he suddenly stopped. Someone suggested the lights be turned down to 'create atmosphere'. In spite of saying 'I can't see, Patrik attempted some more songs in the dark. With the lights back on, Nicola-Ann Ross, first timer, got up with Patrik, and everyone sang 'Hallelulah'.
Many of his fans still have his records from the '70s, (Mark Cassidy; 'I waited 35 years to see Patrik perform'). Their enthusiasm filled the room, and they got more than just songs and music - they got Patrik - the man, the introvert - baring his innermost feelings; how he creates his music. He was asked; 'Who inspired your style the most? How do you perform with Attila the Stockbroker?', and 'What would you rather be doing than performing?'. Patrik answered each with honesty. There's no doubt most would have preferred hearing him just play guitar and sing but knowing more about the artist certainly gave a greater understanding of him as a man as well as performer.
It's obvious he's going through a rough time and Write Angle hopes he will get through it to the other side and back up on stage where his talents can be seen again - if he wants it. He certainly has a huge and enthusastic following and we doubt that will disappear.
The evening went on, and with a third of the audience left, an intimacy developed. Speech Painter, doing his beloved 'Jehovah Baby' and his guitarist Will, adding good humour singing 'Audi's Strange Guitar' and 'I found my freedom'. Audi Maserati and Chris Sangster then teamed up as 'Ensemble Acoustique' – (they were really good)! Chris had performed earlier, reading his 'Mad Mary', Rock Star diva queen who became a drug and booze addict, finally found dead in the bath. (Amy Whitehouse and Whitney Houston).
Audi 'uked' 'Dan Dare's Best Chat-up Lines: No 1, his shortest ever poem, 'Usually takes 3 hrs to get into the zone but I'll do it in 3 seconds!' 'Get your helmet, You poof!' ; then chat-up lines 2 &3. Also, Dexter Morgan did 'Poetz', crediting Write Angle in poetry, for giving him the courage to 'perform his writing' so now '(he's) proud to come out of the closet'.
Other open mikers were Sven Stears, 'Turn your brain off. Turn your body on. Turn off the TV!' strong slam poet, with audience participation. David Roberts did his 'favourites', 'Danny Rose' and 'Celebrities'.- people obsessed by celebrities. Gareth Toms did 'Cycling Takes The Mute Out of Commute' – (cursing allowed), then 'Kafka on the Moon' and 'Lump', (used to be food – a lump of sugar. Now the word has become ugly'). Barry Smith talked of scams and 'Educating Juliet where you put financial details on the email – (no thanks!) His last was 'Isle of Wight', wonderfully descriptive, (In the shadow of the valley, skulls with shrouded faces mourn).
Andrew Wilford, first timer, compiled articles from The Guardian into a poem. (Catastrophic software bug to come. £56m lost in homophobic featured money wasted...). JPF Goodman read of living near an airport, wondering 'will it crash'?, then 'instead of flying off, why not have an intelligent conversation?' Mark Cassidy did 'Scaling The Heights' - as seen from a boat.. about rock climbing – including a white face in a black spread-eagle, a wonderfully descriptive poem . Then, '45RPM', written to celebrate those 7” singles. '(Ignore the limits of long play scratches)'. '(What went before outstrips notes yet to hear)'. Nicola-Ann Ross sang 'Why do Stars Suddenly Appear' followed by 'Stand and Deliver'.
Lastly, apologies to Phyllida Carr who wanted to get up and perform but had already left before Jake, our compere, could call her. No fear! She starts off May's evening! And regrets that JeanAnne Naumcyzk could not be with us. She will hopefully get better soon!
All in all, an interesting evening with apologies to those who came expecting to hear more of Patrik Fitzgerald's music. We do understand your disappointment - and thanks to Patrik who came, in spite of not being sure whether he wanted to or not. We wish him the best, and particularly for his forthcoming new album. Many thanks, as well, go to 'The Seven Fishes' Restaurant, who sponsored the raffle.
Next month, it's Pete the Temp, the comic/poet. More about him in the Press Release to follow!
Review is about WRITE ANGLE POETRY & MUSIC +OPEN MIC on 15 Apr 2014 (event)
<Deleted User> (12152)
Tue 22nd Apr 2014 11:36
Awesome! Enjoyed it lot :) Check out this, http://www.tallenge.com/contest/literaturepoetrycontest.html
It's an online poetry contest on Tallenge, a global talent platform. There is no entry fee and the winner gets $100.
Comment is about The Wars Between the Sexes (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
<Deleted User> (12152)
Tue 22nd Apr 2014 11:21
Wow! thought provoking, loved the lines "It’s a shame When fame Forgets". "Waiting for the flaking bedroom door To swing And bring The next abuser Of her morals There are no laurels, Only losers here." There is an online poetry contest. If you would be interested, check out http://www.tallenge.com/contest/literaturepoetrycontest.html
There is no entry fee and winner prize money is $100.
Comment is about SHAME (blog)
Original item by Pete Slater
Kenneth Eaton-Dykes
Mon 21st Apr 2014 23:25
Thanks Harry
I'm getting maudlin in me dotage
Comment is about Harry O`N eill (poet profile)
Original item by Harry O`N eill
Imagery and lines to get the mind working overtime.
Haunting and stimulating in equal measure - with
its invitation to interpret lingering in the final stanza.
Comment is about In the Sea (blog)
Original item by David Blake
Carefully constructed, with a memorable repeat
last line in each stanza. A proper way to recall
that terrible war and its aftermath.
A maternal uncle lies in that foreign earth,
killed in action with The Rifle Brigade in 1916.
Comment is about Grandchildren Of The Somme (blog)
Original item by Ian Whiteley
Hi Darren, great to see you again at Bolton WOL and great to hear you're back in action! Some great poetry here and it should be heard out loud!
Excellent stuff at WOL, really enjoyed your recollection of class division at Peckforton Castle, and the other ones you did, time to get blogging!
See you soon, all the best Jeff
Comment is about Darren Whitehead (poet profile)
Original item by Darren Whitehead
very poignant Ian, great stuff at Sale WOL, really enjoyed it :-)
Comment is about Grandchildren Of The Somme (blog)
Original item by Ian Whiteley
Thanks, MC. Some of my best work is done on the toilet.
Comment is about The Wars Between the Sexes (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
M.C. Newberry
Mon 28th Apr 2014 16:05
The premise of JC's post is well taken. History
will be the judge when the rest of us are too
close to the times and the personalities in question.
Much is made of the demise of the pits and that's
readily understandable from the POV of those
directly affected. In the wider context, history
recalls how the hugely innovative and important
coaching trade that brought hitherto unknown
contact between communities found itself crashing
to ruin on the arrival of the railways. Those in
many connected trades - including roadside inns -
lost their livelihoods or adjusted, with many
seeking a change of employment, even with the new
powers behind the newly arrived means of travel.
My thought is that "history" will view our own
recent divisive social changes in a similar
light to what has gone before...and how many times...in our Island Story.
Comment is about The Judgement of History (blog)
Original item by John Coopey