thanks again Laura - just seen your nice comments on 'white feather' - I think more CO's in the world would mean less or no wars ;-) really enjoying getting into these war story characters - it's been enlightening and a great challenge. Just posted a balade royal - Chaucer - watch out! lol

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thanks for the comments on White Feather MC - I know what you mean about CO's - but, if I'm honest, I feel there would be a lot less, or no wars, if the world was full of CO's and not war-mongers - cheers
Ian

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Thanks for your very complimentary comments on white feather Cynthia - it means a lot - good to see you last night, an enjoyable evening I thought :-)
cheers
Ian

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thanks for the comments on Craiglockhart Daniel - now recorded it as a very up tempo punky song - really suits those fast rhythm repeats - posted it to my FB page - cheers

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thanks for the comments on Craiglockhart Lynn - now recorded it as a very up tempo punky song - really suits those fast rhythm repeats - posted it to my FB page - cheers

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thanks for the comments on Craiglockhart Laura - now recorded it as a very up tempo punky song - really suits those fast rhythm repeats - posted it to my FB page - cheers

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Bel - Thank you very much for your very kind words and appreciating my blog profile.
Wales is the land of song and as you said in your biography - a captivating landscape.

As stated by Briony Goffin you have some great projects and songs on your web link.

www.belblue.co.uk

Welcome.

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Nothing like a Mothers Pride Helen... and I don't mean the bread ;)

'With an infectious beamer
All gummy and pretty
My darling daydreamer...'

Great work.

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'These shores are my medicine,
a coastal playground,
for
the spaces
in my mind..'

A great scene-setter before the storm changed it forever. A sense of great loss.
Really like this Bel.

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Harry - To make it shorter would not have done it justice.

'They arm-in-armed it to the upstairs snug,
While I stood there, the new world champion mug...'

Cracking read!

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Original item by Harry O`N eill

Thanks for looking, Andy.

I used to agonize over poetic punctuation, being a comma and semi-colon fiend myself, but gradually I find myself steering my words less and less. I do really like interpretive ambiguity permitted to a reader. I'm hoping it is progression and not regression in skill.

There is no such thing as a clear blue sky anymore, that 'unblemished canvas' of prior years. I've had to tell myself to 'get used to it', find 'new beauty'. Like wind turbines marching across the hills, or poking up from the sea - an entirely new 'appreciation' needed. But it is damn hard!

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Harry, maybe you only thought they were about women. I have read literature written by homosexual men where the object of description is another man.

Interesting, though, since this poem is clearly written by a woman, that the 'woman' aspect of the 'other' is still so strong. Lesbianism has made great strides.

And to further 'put the cat among the pigeons', I contest that this description could even be that of a child, boy or girl, because there is nothing more beautiful than a naked child, and this poem in no way suggests sex.

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Thank you Natalie, i don't know where you are but if you look towards Manchester you'll see my big head expanding above the horizon.

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I am stunned.

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Well said Daniel, like the spirit of this poem. we have a Night called Rhyme and Real Ale in Cardiff, where all our welcome, all are equal.

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Hello Cynthia, thanks for pointing me towards 'flashback'. The last verse is a blinder. Because you omit punctuation the lines, or so it seems to me, can be read in different ways depending on where one places the emphasis. For instance, i read

...scribbling on ancient canvases
modernity...

as if you meant 'scribbling [modernity] on ancient canvases' which i don't think was your intention. It works either way though. It's a winner.

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Lovely.

Why do you start each line with a capital letter-except the last one?

My friend once asked me the same question.

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I like this poem Natalie. It might need a bit of tinkering but show me a new poem that doesn't? One thing i would add though is that, for all your readers' good intentions, i think they do you a disservice by offering their own alternate lines. Criticism is one thing but suggesting or providing re-writes is inappropriate. Once you incorporate them the poem, as good bad or indifferent as it may be, ceases to be your work. And why else do you write if not to express YOURself?

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Thank you all for your comments. I've dropped two semicolons Ray; but left the last one in. I think the last line needs the two syllables in 'instead' to make it scan properly. I've also changed 'Evaporating' to 'Dissipating'.
As is my wont, i may yet make further alterations; i'm a devil for editing; and semicolons. I appreciate the feedback, Ta.

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Hello Bel

Welcome to Write Out Loud.
I hope you enjoy the site. We're really looking forward to reading some of your work and I know that you will be warmly welcomed by other WOL-ers too.

Thanks for already uploading a picture of yourself.

Have a good browse around, there’s lots going on and if you have the time to make some comments about the work of other poets please feel free. It’s the best way to get some constructive feedback about your own work too.
There’s always someone who’ll help you out with a problem, so just ask and someone will get back to you. It’s a friendly place, so welcome once again.

Graham Sherwood

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Thanks for the comments, Daniel. Apparently they "cruise" the seafront at St Ives on the lookout for dozey gets like me.
Harry - my dad told me that in the navy they used to catch them by tossing them bread from the ships with string attached (to the bread, I mean).

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Only a'Lady'would be so kind as to take the advice of a middle aged serf!..;0)

I thank you,your Grace

(without losing one iota of respect for the poem)

I kiss the hem of your gown Lady Elliot.x

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Cynthia,
wowza!
(but the words - the curve, the thigh, the trumpets...particularly the nakedness and all
the poems I`ve ever read about bodies say it is a woman.

Comment is about Six-fifteen on a Rainy Evening (blog)

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I'm more than sure that a certain six million will be rolling in their graves-how easily and quickly is the past forgotten.

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I used to feed them half my chips in Southport.

(at least I wasn`t dozy enough to let them pinch
them)

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Hi Helen-can't understand why you have changed the lines that Patricia and Stef mention-?

they hold sooo much self sacrificial meaning
which a lot of Mums worth their salt are best at.

Nevertheless,tis a very moving poem.x

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A heartfelt poem.
I was a soldier in Egypt when we were getting out of what was then Palestine. I fear that the next - drag everyone in - world war
will start there.

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This strikes me (like some of your other stuff) as a kind of alternating reluctance to `plant its flag` anywhere definite. It is `soothing` but in a sort of uncaring manner.

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Witty - man - witty!

And how much more of a `punch` that excellent rhyming gives to it.

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I`m sorry this is so long.

I did try the Longpoem magazine first without any
luck...(to be fair they do advise to read their magazine before submitting...and I didn`t)

Anyway, it looks better on here.

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Cheers DD for your appraisal of 'Tour De France' I feel like I'm at the back each time I read it :/ Tommy

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Ta Cy for the look-see at the 'Astronomer...' and appraise it. Tommy

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Thank you Isobel for appreciating my poem.

Nelly x

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Thank you for appreciating my poem.

Nelly x

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Thank you Daniel, that's really very kind of you, I'm really happy to hear you have enjoyed some of my work :)

I recently visited the Imperial War Museum in London and took the picture you see alongside the poem. The plaque was tucked away almost out of sight in the exhibition area, but when I saw it I couldn't believe how powerful and how poignant the words were - which therein inspired the poem you see.

Thank you again for taking the time to read :)

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I tried to get the irony across of those looking through the said 'rose tints' that everything was rosy.. yet their inner thoughts were contrary to what they wanted to portray for the sake of their own image, and the dislike of some popular lyric and perfomance poetry.
I see what you mean though Ray. No problem.

Thanks Helen and Ray for your kind comments. Appreciated.

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Thanks for telling everyone know about the Heaton Arts Trail John.Maggie you missed a good night it was pure gold!Cheers for the mini poetry Andy N and good luck with the play.Doing a short poem about my first job calling it Play Safe!

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Simon - This is superb. This is why it I personally can never throw a book away. I read your poem 'Above, Beyond' the other week but did not comment as I still feel pain, (after surgery), and the inability to enjoy a run anymore. The poem was excellent by the way.

It lead me on to reading this on your most excellent website. I find your work is very enjoyable and poignant. I had to read 'Jedem das Seine' (knowing my version of this translation) many times before my realistion that it was two dimentional, one side and the other side. Hope others will check your website after reading this.

Back to 'Burning Books'.. your take on Heine's words lived on to haunt the world.

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Another great piece of work fitting to any tribute Terry. They may be gone... but not forgotten. I love the analogy of the childs sandcastle with the flags in it.
Thought provoking and heartfelt.
Beautiful.

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Hi Daniel
thanks for comments on thirst for light: I hadn't thought of the canal angle, but you're right, actually this one recalls a sunny day on the Hungerford section of the Kennet & Avon. all the best,
Dom.

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I'm sure they can detect Roskilly's Ice cream with Rodda's Clotted cream from the edge of space before zooming in. Drones with wings!
Sorry about the cone but your words have made my day. Nice one.

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Seeing an adults world from your own eyes as a child. Feeling your pain (and hurt in the possibility of heaven's non-existence), in this piece Helen.

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Another cracker. Soothing, truthful and calming.
Wonderful piece of poetry.

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Original item by Twilbury Wist

'but all that you
had taken from you'

so relateable
when it comes to the effort
some people put in.

very good albeit sad poem Helen?/Helene?.
Thank you for sharing.

xx

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wonderful,moving poem.Cheers Terry.xx

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Original item by terry ireland

it was my pleasure Natalie and your better decision.x

Comment is about Traffic Jam (blog)

Grit is it;
it is grit.

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Original item by Stockport WoL

excellent poem Natalie.One suggestion-


'I,treading THE LIQUIDITY OF THOUGHTS...?


Please keep writing.x

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Cynthia-a well overdue appraisal-I have enjoyed putting this fabbo in my pipe and smoking it.x

p.s. will probably have a refill-to boot!

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Ha - it was the curve of the thigh that did it Cynth!I don't view or think about men as having curved thighs. I don't really think about men's bodies at all. Must be projecting, eh? ;)

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