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Sun 21st Apr 2013 02:19

Thank you so much Cynthia for commenting on my latest offering. Clever is not a brush I am painted with very often! :)

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Hazel

Sat 20th Apr 2013 23:44

Thank you Cynthia for your comment on No Man's an Island, I used to work with elderly people a number of years ago.
Hazel

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Sat 20th Apr 2013 23:21

nice one Dave and nice to see you back.xx

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Julian (Admin)

Sat 20th Apr 2013 22:00

Paul, I find this extremely powerful. As Cynthia says, the Oh sounds dominate. Shades of Theroux's the 'O' Zone.

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David Subacchi

Sat 20th Apr 2013 17:46

Thanks for taking the time to give me feedback Cynthia.

David

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Julian (Admin)

Sat 20th Apr 2013 17:30

Saleema, have I got this right? Is the writing on the right a Panjabi version of the Urdu?

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Paul Sands

Sat 20th Apr 2013 17:04

Cynthia, thank you so much for your kind words

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Dave Bradley

Sat 20th Apr 2013 16:26

Darn, I wanted to say this!

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Dave Bradley

Sat 20th Apr 2013 16:23

Cynthia says it for me. Poignant, soulful and well-written

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alisonsmiles68@gmail.com

Sat 20th Apr 2013 15:55

hey, many thanks for your comments on my latest, always appreciated for the thought you consistently put into them. Sorry to have missed your slot at WOL Sale, I've been nursing a knee injury and not got out much.

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Sat 20th Apr 2013 15:53

Shucks! I missed it, and I did one myself this past winter! But only in rough since I missed the poetry meeting that was 'testing out' the form as a group enterprise. I must find it and compare consecutive lines with the correct 'beats'. I really should have twigged because I picked up your repeated stanza format.

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Sat 20th Apr 2013 15:44

I liked this a month ago. Sorry I did not say so then.

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Sat 20th Apr 2013 15:41

Humorous, and an easy read. We've all lauded something that makes our bellies purr.

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Sat 20th Apr 2013 15:16

This is very well-written, fast and funny, as Newberry says, with potent, political points. It's not easy sustaining such a pitch for so many stanzas. But you get on a kind of 'roll', don't you, like galloping over smooth turf; you just want to 'fly'. Or, another one - like bubbling lava out of the throat of a volcano; you just want to 'explode' with words.

I'm done. Be glad. It's the sunshine today!

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M.C. Newberry

Sat 20th Apr 2013 15:12

Hello Cynthia - thanks for your measured comments on my "little old lady" poem.

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Sat 20th Apr 2013 15:08

This is very touching, Hazel. It sounds like an important personal experience. But, if it wasn't, no matter, because you still have made a very strong, humanistic point for us all.

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M.C. Newberry

Sat 20th Apr 2013 15:08

Hi Steve - thanks for taking the time to comment on my "little old lady" poem.

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Sat 20th Apr 2013 15:04

Very good, Indigo. The punctuation is essential to the expansive thought. Perhaps another font would highlight the marks a bit more, so that they have as much prominence as the words themselves.

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M.C. Newberry

Sat 20th Apr 2013 15:03

Steve - so much emphasis has emerged from certain quarters about the expense of this event that it seemed financially viable to make comparisons. I'm surprised someone hasn't made something of "money to burn" and her cremation!!

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Sat 20th Apr 2013 14:58

This is very effective,well-structured with a fast pace, clear imagery and a shrewd plot. It strikes home to the heart of all women. I really enjoy it.

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M.C. Newberry

Sat 20th Apr 2013 14:56

Interesting! I recall the lines in "Me and Bobby McGee"..."Freedom's just another word for nothing left to lose...". Not that I agree with that but it's a point of view that can be understood. At least there is no confusion here between solitude and loneliness...two different things entirely. One is a state of being, the other a state of mind.

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Sat 20th Apr 2013 14:48

Some very romantic images, whether real or imaginary, a lovely moment. What is an 'aromatic smile'? I am intrigued - Wine? Cigarettes? Cherry-flavoured lipstick? It is an unusual combination.

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Sat 20th Apr 2013 14:38

Looking good. Do you want 'from nights' or 'through nights'? Just curious. 'through' possibly gives the idea of lengthy time passing, like 'getting through the night', as well as 'many nights passing', if that was your intention.

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Julian (Admin)

Sat 20th Apr 2013 14:36

May the iron lady rust in peace.

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Julian (Admin)

Sat 20th Apr 2013 14:36

cheers for your comments on my poem for the iron lady.

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Sat 20th Apr 2013 14:29

This has a certain panache, Andy, perhaps a bit wordy, but still emotionally sincere.

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Sat 20th Apr 2013 14:22

I like this - powerful diction for emotive images - so laden with the sound of 'oh', it is surely intentional, like groaning? 'crone wept bones' and 'pebble-eyed children' are very innovative expressions.

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Rachel Bond

Sat 20th Apr 2013 14:10

thank you marianne, so glad you like it. your comments are always valued xx

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Rachel Bond

Sat 20th Apr 2013 14:10

thank you marianne, so glad you like it. your comments are always valued xx

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steve pottinger

Sat 20th Apr 2013 09:21

I enjoyed this too. :-)

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Julian (Admin)

Sat 20th Apr 2013 09:11

Superb, dangerously infectious writing, yet superbly controlled. Thank you.

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steve pottinger

Sat 20th Apr 2013 09:08

I enjoyed this, Ged. Nice work, beautifully expressed.

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steve pottinger

Sat 20th Apr 2013 08:58

A proper good rant. Well done, sir!

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steve pottinger

Sat 20th Apr 2013 08:56

I enjoyed this, MC. Despite my politics. ;-)

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steve pottinger

Sat 20th Apr 2013 08:53

I especially love the punch of the first two lines, Julian. And chuckled at the reference to her turning....

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Ian Whiteley

Fri 19th Apr 2013 23:33

Another good one David - there's something very mysterious and other-worldly about historic sites - and you've captured that mythical air really well
Good 'un
Ian

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Fri 19th Apr 2013 22:37

very good poem.xx

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M.C. Newberry

Fri 19th Apr 2013 21:11

So accuracy of definition becomes semantics = to suit. The problem with much that is posted.

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Fri 19th Apr 2013 20:48

Blimey!that corner shop image
reminds us so much of our old one
where we used to spend Uncle Vic's
half-a-dollar on Jubblies
and Uncle Joe's mint balls.xx

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Julian (Admin)

Fri 19th Apr 2013 20:23

Harry, thank you for your comments on my review of Cynthia's performance. YOu are dead right about the fact that she clearly rehearsed it and created a themed set, although it was less that I think than a single piece in five parts (not six, got carried away). Whatever, it did demonstrate the difference between knocking out a reading, and preparing for a quality performance. If you got something worth saying, it is worth saying well.
again, thanks for your comments. Much appreciated.

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Fri 19th Apr 2013 20:07

A simple walking pace - like the horses - and an excellent observance - 'a little old lady' was exactly what she was, smothered in that flag.

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Fri 19th Apr 2013 19:35

Delicious. The opening six lines are a quality 'catcher', the hardest skill to hone.

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Shirley Smothers

Fri 19th Apr 2013 17:59

Hi Larisa,
Thank you so much for the comment on my poem "I'm Not Perfect". I wrote this poem because I'm not perfect and I don't want to be. The many mistakes I've made have made me stronger.

Thanks
Shirley

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Isobel

Fri 19th Apr 2013 17:38

Very sad and very moving Tom. especially for anyone who's been there.

'except those hands we gripped
would not grip back'

Those are hard lines to write about one's mother. John's right about the simplicity being powerful. A few words can speak volumes.

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Isobel

Fri 19th Apr 2013 17:30

Whether it was state or whether it was ceremonial is just a question of semantics - the point I'm making is that the tax payer paid for it - not the family - that gives the public cause to air their grievances and their thoughts - that is what is causing the controversy.

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M.C. Newberry

Fri 19th Apr 2013 13:19

Her view at the time was undoubtedly coloured by the deeds which are conveniently forgotten
as history takes charge. But, as the saying goes; those who never change their minds, never correct their mistakes.
Mandela knew enough to be seen with her in
later days in very amicable circumstances that
continued thereafter. He too was a politician,
after all.

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M.C. Newberry

Fri 19th Apr 2013 13:07

Isobel, I don't doubt that the Lady wouldn't have been enthused by my reference to her as a "little old lady" -but, unlike her larger than life personality in her pomp, nature had certainly reduced her to that stature in physical terms - as it does all of us who attain great age. It's just a fact of life that serves as a telling contradiction between what she was and what she became as illness and age took its toll.
Correction: this was a ceremonial funeral. The funeral of that other famous politician, Sir Winston Churchill, was a STATE occasion. I was there and the difference between the two was (and is) obvious.

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Tommy Carroll

Fri 19th Apr 2013 12:50

Thatcher called Mandela 'that grubby little terrorist' She used the Malvinas war to bolster sagging popularity- hey she did ok for her class.

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Tommy Carroll

Fri 19th Apr 2013 12:50

Thatcher called Mandela 'that grubby little terrorist' She used the Malvinas war to bolster sagging popularity- hey she did ok for her class.

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M.C. Newberry

Fri 19th Apr 2013 12:37

Sadly, even in death mis-information is maintained.This was a ceremonial funeral NOT a stateoccasion. I was present at the STATE funeral of another politician - Sir Winston Churchill, planned under the operational title "Operation Hope Not" by the man himself - and the difference between the two was obvious.
As for Mandela's "foe" - cue the photograph of a clearly
delighted smiling Mandela shaking her hand outside
Number 10.
But I like the louche sardonic wit employed in the EM poem in question. Shades of "Private Eye".
Here's another - seen elsewhere.
"What is a socialist?
One who has yearnings
For the equal division
Of unequal earnings.
A dreamer, an idler - or worse,
All too willing
To put down his penny
And pick up your shilling."

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