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Fairy Tail

 

Manchester's gay hamlet

has long since been a sanctuary

for parlor princesses to sway their tits free

from thick veined impalers who skirted the moat;

their hot swords smoking from pint piss.

 

One often forgets that

cemented with the secret elixir

 of man's love for man's folly;

it was a safe and sordid Avalon.

 

Often lulled by the music

or some other bullshit,

stone age suitors were enchanted

and bent at dusk

scuttling under the bridge

lavender laden,

longing for lads.

 

My tea bag tea shirted contemporaries

could end each evening

suckling the nob of some yob

and there am I

clip clopping the slick stocking in charcoal grey

laddered by desperate ducks;

teetering on the bank's slimy lips,

holding the chips.

gay villagesanctuary

◄ Raineth

Fibonacci on the last school run ►

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Cathy Crabb

Mon 1st Sep 2014 10:56

Thanks so much for the comments you three. I am reflecting back on a brilliant time, I know people get fed up of hen do's in the village these days, but girls know they can be free with themselves there- and I guess that says a lot about society.

Cynthia- it is tea bag yes, a la Right Said Fred, as was the regalia of the time for some friends of mine.


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Greg Freeman

Sat 30th Aug 2014 13:07

Clever, high-spirited poem, and the final two lines, always very important, are wonderful: "teetering on the bank's slimy lips, / holding the chips." Thanks for posting, Cathy.

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Sat 30th Aug 2014 12:39

I have not read the comments below. So - I'm influence free. And probably so far in left field I'm out of the ballpark.

I think this poem is terrific - a topic targetted with empathy and superb gear control of poetic craft. Your imagery is outstanding - like 'stone age suitors...''lavender-laden longing for lads', just as one example. I just fell through the lines. Hilarious title.

Did you really mean 'tea bag tea shirters' instead of 'tee shirters'? Only curious.

OK, now for the other comments, including your own. I shudder.

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Dominic James

Sat 30th Aug 2014 09:06

Hi Cathy, stick up for your poems, this is a good piece of work and if you love it that's good enough for me. (-:

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Cathy Crabb

Fri 29th Aug 2014 12:50

Thanks for your comment Dominic. I love this poem myself and will be keeping it exactly as it is. It isn't that I don't value your opinion, I really do! It's just that it is an ode to a specific place and time that I loved, and I love how it looks, and sounds and the words I've used. It's about a time when I used to escape to Manchester's gay village with friends of mine, dress in very little with the freedom that no one was going to think I was doing that to attract them, and dance and drink the night away, only by the end to be holding the chips for one of my friends as they would be getting on with someone at the far end of the canal, as was the popular cottage of the time. I use Macbeth and fairytale and myth and legend because is seems so long ago, and bullshit to reflect the ill thought through excuses of those who wanted to get off with men, but be secretive about it. I like it. It makes me happy! Hope you don't find this er...shirty, it's just me sticking up for me poem xxxx

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Dominic James

Fri 29th Aug 2014 12:37

I think styles are mixed here Cathy, and I didn't understand it all,[ eg. the situation of a girl friend left holding the chips... what ducks? ... are they after the chips, where are you taking us with the bank's slimy lips?] But this is strong writing, and the cement pun is a good one. Not for me I guess, but funny I'm brought up short not by the smoking swords of the first stanza but the too lazy "bullshit" of the third. You're on to something though, best wishes Dom.

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