falling out with the crows...bad move.
thanks for your comments. that is the best stanza. it is good to be writing again.
might get chance for a read soon. i ve missed reading here. one week left of exams then yayyy. just got to be careful not to fall out with the crows. fall out with anybody else..but not the crows. x
i am always welcome in the black. you black, are always welcome to comment here :)
additional stanza
i had at once taken heroin
beneath trees
had come round
to be surrounded by the cold dead of dusk
and without realisation
i had taken that one wrong turn
into Addiction.
It is not as obvious at it seems
The dead of night
anytime.
It didn't strike until
a lot later.
Comment is about A crow landed on the rail. (blog)
Original item by Rachel Bond
Cynthia
Thanks for your comments on How dark and all that you said. Much appreciated. I look forward to seeing you on Tuesday at Sale
Comment is about Cynthia Buell Thomas (poet profile)
Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas
Evidently, MC.
I like the ambivalence of who is being told to "FU2"
Comment is about QUESTION (blog)
Original item by M.C. Newberry
<Deleted User> (9882)
Sun 17th May 2015 21:12
Katy-if ever I was blown away,it was after reading this epic masterpiece.
Thank you.
Rose.x
Comment is about Masquerade (blog)
Original item by Katy Megan
Well spotted Greg. Some may take offence, but I hope not, as we all share life , some more equally than others no doubt..!
Comment is about BEDOUINS AT LARGE (blog)
Original item by ray pool
He's right! But then, if you'd have done it perfectly, what memory does that leave for him?!
Great moment captured x
Comment is about The Egg (blog)
Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas
Ha ha Steve yes, I did think to myself 'you're being a smart arse'
thanks Cynthia just corrected that- grammar is like an annoying little brother to me; tripping me up when I try and show off.
But in case you didn't know Cynthia- applause in sign language is hands up in the air waving (kind of like 'jazz hands')
This is a version of a set of seasonal haikus I am doing for a public art commission.
Comment is about Summer Awhaikuing (blog)
Original item by CathyLCrabb
<Deleted User> (13762)
Sun 17th May 2015 19:11
when they are taking a break from knitting Shreddies, yuk!
Comment is about Graffiti Grannies (blog)
Original item by Daniel Hooks
Imitation might be a form of compliment but there is a
marked difference between derivative work and lifting
stuff wholesale from the lines of others. Once might be
coincidence; more shows a policy of deceit that deserves
to be challenged and exposed in open forum so that
all may put their case and be judged accordingly.
I recall reading paragraphs in the work of a certain
biographer that seemed familiar - only to discover they
were virtually lifted from another author's work. The
former was subsequently brought to book (no pun
intended!), his activity identified.
Comment is about Poet apologises for 'appropriations' as poems are withdrawn and book is pulped (article)
Original item by Greg Freeman
Thanks Rose - at the very least, politics owes us a chuckle!
MC
Comment is about QUESTION (blog)
Original item by M.C. Newberry
I'm accepting this as a true situation. Either way, the poem is very good, thought-provoking.
Comment is about Missing Words (blog)
Original item by David Lindsay
Great little poem. I smiled at 'I tender....' such a good choice of word in this context.
Comment is about SELL BUY DATE. (blog)
An excellent read, personal experience putting out a powerful message with fine execution. I really enjoy this.
Comment is about New Farmer (blog)
Original item by Alex Smith
Good one, Martin; very effective.
Comment is about All that you said (blog)
Original item by Martin Elder
God knows what rubbish is rattling around my head JC.
Bad state of affairs about Jimmy Greaves eh?
I think the Europa is a bit Mickey Mouse at best of times. Why the hell can't we get a top four spot??
Comment is about John Coopey (poet profile)
Original item by John Coopey
Ah, Graham. I never knew that. Some stuff inside that gnarled and lived-in bonce of yours!
Is it a poisoned chalice to earn a Europa Cup place? I think qualification even goes down to 7th if the Arse win the Cup.
Comment is about IT'S GOOD NEWS WEEK! (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
O.K. Consider, just for interest:
When you come to me
problems on a plate
with tears in your eyes
looking to me
desperately
for some miraculous reply
that I cannot give
do you forget that I too
struggle with how to live.
IMO, sometimes the message needs brutal diction, not softened with pretty words like 'wetness glistening your eyes'. It is only a shared thought open to discussion. You may well argue back that contrast is equally your message, and your deliberately chosen words are in character with the other party. I can see that too.
Comment is about The Struggle (blog)
Rose - aw shucks, girl, and I do so try to keep it under wraps. Being a child must still be really hard. He would croak to be called 'cute'.
Thanks, Lea, for reading and finding beauty in this humdrum little tale.
And Steve - you know me from years back - everything in my life is 'relative'. Thanks for the comment.
Comment is about The Egg (blog)
Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas
Sun 17th May 2015 13:41
Hi Cynthia, this is lovely, such a beautiful funny moment, and great ending x
Comment is about The Egg (blog)
Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas
I seem to recall that the name derived form the group being assembled from a unit of American Airmen helicopter pilots! Hence the hedgehopping.
Comment is about IT'S GOOD NEWS WEEK! (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
Sun 17th May 2015 13:32
Wow! Really love the trifle image and that second stanza x
Comment is about cleanup (05/17/2015) (blog)
Original item by Zach Dafoe
Sun 17th May 2015 13:23
Hi Andy, thanks for reading and commenting on Beachcombing - much appreciated x
Comment is about Andy N (poet profile)
Original item by Andy N
Sun 17th May 2015 13:18
Hi Michelle, thanks for commenting on Who Would? We obviously think alike, you pretty much nailed what I was trying to get at :) x
Comment is about Michelle (poet profile)
Original item by Michelle
Indeed, Greg. I don't remember the whole story but seem to recall it was unpleasant. (We betray our ages).
Comment is about IT'S GOOD NEWS WEEK! (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
You do have to watch out for these bedouins sometimes, Ray! Glad you gave a nod to Auden at the end - I didn't immediately spot it, but you can't be too careful these days!
Comment is about BEDOUINS AT LARGE (blog)
Original item by ray pool
Yes, Hedgehoppers Anonymous ... I didn't realise it was a Jonathan King concoction. Now "their" name has faintly seedy undertones.
Comment is about IT'S GOOD NEWS WEEK! (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
I've always been suspicious who those who have certainty on their side, whether they are on the extreme left or extreme right.
"Respect" as they say, MC.
Comment is about IT'S GOOD NEWS WEEK! (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
<Deleted User> (9882)
Sat 16th May 2015 22:25
one of your most cleverest M.C.
Thank you.
Rose.x
Comment is about QUESTION (blog)
Original item by M.C. Newberry
<Deleted User> (9882)
Sat 16th May 2015 21:59
one of two 'possibles' if not both,for the cute little man.
His future might see him as,
(despite your culinary mishaps) a very good cook-or!
most definitely,a great and very well taught poet.
I'm banking on the latter.
Also,so nice of you to have exposed the coochy-coo side of your nature....awwww...;o)
Rose.x
Comment is about The Egg (blog)
Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas
Sat 16th May 2015 21:14
What a story! I can see it all! Precise language and yet the disappointment is sprung like a slap in the face!
Steve Smith
Comment is about The Glaswegian (blog)
Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas
Sat 16th May 2015 21:07
Thank you Cynthia and Lea - i am trying a new direction and appreciate your judgements!
Comment is about Shore (blog)
Original item by stephen smith
Aristotle Onasis used to welcome guests to his private island by saying 'here we live by the calendar, not by the clock' sounds a nice waying of living to me!
best wishes, Steve
Comment is about PASSING FEET (blog)
Original item by M.C. Newberry
This seems a very worthwhile concept - especially if it
allows poets to promote their work in print or sound as
part of the stock carried in any such outlet.
Count me in as a contributor towards that sought-after
total sum.
Comment is about Campaign to raise £5,000 to open poetry bookshop (article)
Original item by Greg Freeman
thank you cynthia.
better to be a chicken than a duck (no one really gives a duck ;p)
haha nice to hear from you, your comments always appreciated x
Comment is about A crow landed on the rail. (blog)
Original item by Rachel Bond
Differences are fine as we can always change our minds
IF good old British common sense comes into play.
Democracy seems less in accord with sympathies that
exist left of centre in UK politics - the word losing
currency when more conservative mindsets takes power.
Suddenly, the latter are some sort of fascist goose-steppers, kicking out at the "less fortunate"(?). It is not
lost on me that the Nazis were, in fact, the National
SOCIALIST Party. I think about that each time the great
and good of the Socialist Workers Party spit and snarl
and go on another street rampage to demonstrate their
own high-kicking version of free speech in action.
Yes - I DO recall the song - and that dates me
sufficiently to say - to borrow from another song: "I've seen both sides now". And for a good many years.
Comment is about IT'S GOOD NEWS WEEK! (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
An important news item and a quality follow-up article Greg. Difficult, but well reported.
Comment is about Poet apologises for 'appropriations' as poems are withdrawn and book is pulped (article)
Original item by Greg Freeman
A masterpiece, Ian, where the chosen words and images match the depth and breadth of your ideas and emotions. It doesn't always work like that for writers, however sincere the effort.
Comment is about The Song Of The Wandering (blog)
Original item by Ian Whiteley
Very powerful work, Preeti. You are definitely inspiring a fan club.
Comment is about Apple Carts and Upsets (blog)
I also think this is excellent - even the title and the rhyme of 'Shore' and 'drawer' which draws the reader in at once, almost unaware of the influence of your chosen diction. IMO, the poem shines through your specific images of physical detail and then your imaginative, emotional thoughts - the dreamer versus the pragmatist. Like us all.
Comment is about Shore (blog)
Original item by stephen smith
IMO, seven lines of poetry that I find captivating. The first line is terrific, a total hook, and 'a moment's kiss in a picture frame' is pure beauty.
Comment is about ARRIVAL (blog)
Original item by ray pool
You could well be right. Bodily functions operating well are the epitome of pleasure. But a little bleach would go a long way too.
Comment is about Whats Better? (blog)
Original item by Corr Lens
A pleasure to drown once more in your words.
I was thinking of you only this past Thursday.
Comment is about Now (blog)
Original item by Marianne Daniels
And it must be well-worth following up. This poem is just terrific - such a mood so cleverly created. Good to have you on WOL again.
Comment is about NOT REALLY A STRANGER (blog)
Original item by David Subacchi
A very good read with some intriguing ideas, demanding images and splendid diction - and it's fab to have you back.
Symbolism and 'mediums' are often hard to separate. I have willfully divorced my imagination in favour of my reason - in so far as that is possible - because I think I could be susceptible to very esoteric influences. I'm not sure how many 'personalities' I might have. There's no way I would take mind-altering drugs - way too chicken.
Comment is about A crow landed on the rail. (blog)
Original item by Rachel Bond
When u coming to pontefract
Comment is about Write Out Loud at Marsden library tonight (article)
Original item by Greg Freeman
Interesting idea, Cathy. I love haiku - clever title. You find the 'leaves deaf' and I find them full of sound. So I had to sit and think a bit as to what you might mean.
Check 'spring's' .
Comment is about Summer Awhaikuing (blog)
Original item by CathyLCrabb
You are most welcome my friend, glad you liked it
Comment is about BREATHE (blog)
Original item by THE PEN AND THE PAGE
thank you both its good to post again its been a while...have been busy with art things but will hopefully have chance for more writing over the summer.
'Crows are members of the Corvidae family, which also includes ravens, magpies, and blue jays. Loud, rambunctious, and very intelligent, crows are most often associated with a long history of fear and loathing. They are considered pests by farmers trying to protect their crops and seedlings. Many people fear them simply because of their black feathers, which are often associating them with death. But research demonstrated in A Murder of Crows proves crows are actually very social and caring creatures, and also among the smartest animals on the planet.'
here the bird does represent death, oblivion. heroin.
Comment is about A crow landed on the rail. (blog)
Original item by Rachel Bond
tommyfazz@yahoo.com
Mon 18th May 2015 10:53
Jan hi, If I may disagree with your assertion that "poets do not forget their poems" just a little, I have forgotten a couple of works owing to brain haemorrhage 2009. It not only effected my output but also my recollection of some items. But again I agree whole heartedly with the sentiment. (if you get my gist ) :) Tommy
Comment is about Poet apologises for 'appropriations' as poems are withdrawn and book is pulped (article)
Original item by Greg Freeman