So busy translating I missed the rhyme scheme at first reading. Lovely, funny and warm. Thank you.
Comment is about A Glesga Kiss (blog)
Original item by Helen
I'm glad I caught this Ray on an infrequent visit to the blogs. Like it very much for a number of reasons. Very profound in an understated way. Thanks.
Comment is about Mr BRAITHWAITE and Mr. KHAN (blog)
Original item by ray pool
MC - your poem, as usual, is a very good rhyme.
However, if I read it and substitute the letters EU for Tories, it ceases to rhyme yet makes much more sense to me.
We are losing everything to the Tories. They are asset stripping and ruining this country. It has sod all to do with the EU, as far as I can see.
Comment is about LOCKED-IN SYNDROME (blog)
Original item by M.C. Newberry
elPintor
Sat 14th May 2016 22:07
Hey, Lynn,
This idea is definitely central. It is almost as the question to move forth and confront conflict or await its approach, the decision made more complicated by an unclear picture of what the conflict may actually entail.
Thank you much for commenting. It's greatly appreciated.
elP
Comment is about shudder (blog)
Original item by nunya
Lynn Hamilton
Sat 14th May 2016 21:28
Thanks David and Ray for commenting.
Turbulent yes, I thoroughly understand the 'clunk click' as it was written, as though a force had come crashing through that little lads wall whilst he ate his cereal, believing he was protected, and yes it smacked right into his mum but it wasn't a car.
Brace!
Lynn x
Comment is about The Kiss (blog)
Lynn Hamilton
Sat 14th May 2016 21:19
Lynn Hamilton
Sat 14th May 2016 21:12
Evening E
The line 'if haste doesn't kill me, this hesitation will' stood out for me.
Lynn x
Comment is about shudder (blog)
Original item by nunya
"Is it a bird? Is it a plane?"
(If we ask, will he do it again?!)
Comment is about He's abseiling: Write Out Loud's John Coopey taking the plunge from tower block (article)
Original item by Greg Freeman
Thanks for the useful link. Do you get a parachute?!!
Comment is about I'M ABSEILING (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
Sat 14th May 2016 19:58
hah! love itttt (my little joke thrown in) thanks Angelica.Jemima.
Comment is about Typo in the First Line (blog)
Original item by Angelica Fuse
This was a poem that came about after another early start at the office, surrounded by silence until the other sounds stir themselves: friends, colleagues, kettles etc.
It's a bit of a departure from my normal style of poetry in that it is inanimate in focus, but I hope that readers find something in it that they like.
Comment is about The Office Waits ... (blog)
Original item by Paul A M Palmer
elPintor
Sat 14th May 2016 10:06
Hey there, David,
Some things are definitely difficult to convey. Maybe more so when there exists reticence because of their unpleasantness.
Thanks for commenting..you're always welcome.
elP
Comment is about shudder (blog)
Original item by nunya
<Deleted User> (6895)
Fri 13th May 2016 23:54
For anyone wishing to pledge to this cause here is a JustGiving link.
http://uk.virginmoneygiving.com/fundraiser-web/fundraiser/showFundraiserProfilePage.action?userUrl=JohnCoopey
Comment is about I'M ABSEILING (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
"Where there's no sense there's no feeling" as they say, Ray
Comment is about I'M ABSEILING (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
Much easier to read than to perform, John. I've tried it off a cliff when the earth was new, but off a tower? no thanks. Good for you and yours!
Ray
Comment is about I'M ABSEILING (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
Wonderful, and as a southerner I just about got the measure of it. God, this north south divide is a real curse, but then again long may it survive ! Ray
Comment is about A Glesga Kiss (blog)
Original item by Helen
I would have been tempted to use Sarah Tonin as a person, but I am a clever dick, Stu. This has all the hallmarks of a master of words, brilliantly and humorously presented and entertaining, tongue firmly in cheek.
Ray
Comment is about serotonin (blog)
Original item by Stuart Buck
Reassuring and philosophical in the nicest way, Trevor. The form has the hypnotic appeal of the Desiderata, and draws us in.
Satisfying . Ray
Comment is about Choices (blog)
Original item by Trevor Alexander
A glimpse into the turbulence - succinctly expressed Lynn. Lovely.
Ray
Comment is about The Kiss (blog)
Yes, indeed, MC, "abstaining" (I might yet - courage isn't my strong suit).
I'll look into the PayPal question. Thanks.
Comment is about I'M ABSEILING (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
I felt very Scottish reading this. Great work :)
Comment is about A Glesga Kiss (blog)
Original item by Helen
In your place, I think I'd be singing...
"I'm abstaining...I'm abstaining..."!!
Can funds be sent via Paypal? (should that be Praypal??) If so, provide the relevant payee address please.
Comment is about I'M ABSEILING (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
Joe - personally I like no.3 for its observational humour, but all are worthy.
Rob
Comment is about Four Limericks (blog)
Original item by Joe Williams
Thanks guys. I think 4 is my favourite too.
Comment is about Four Limericks (blog)
Original item by Joe Williams
I might try another of these Robert, but another line would need 55 syllables - a daunting task!
Comment is about Me (blog)
Original item by Trevor Alexander
Stu - died and taken to heaven. As if viewing the art somehow absorbed you into the picture and transported you to a better place. Love it mate.
Rob
Comment is about gallery (blog)
Original item by Stuart Buck
Stu - love the concept of a breeze 'pouring'. Nice one.
Rob
Comment is about summer haiku (blog)
Original item by Stuart Buck
Thanks for comment, Rob.
I don't think you are overly cynical at all, or if you are, I must be too! I certainly agree about the media, which I find incredibly biased.
Perhaps I should be getting worried as once again I woke up with words in my head, which went something like:
They want to collectively blame all
for what one person
or one party is responsible for;
worse than this
they want to skew it
so that the innocent or least involved
gets all the spotlight
of blame.
Ah well, back to the drawing board...
Comment is about Questions of verity (blog)
Original item by Lynn Dye
Trevor - I like the idea of this one, but feel it reaches its conclusion too soon. More of a build up please.
Rob
Comment is about Me (blog)
Original item by Trevor Alexander
Thank you very much, Rose and Rob. Have to see what I can do!! x
Comment is about haiku: raindrop blooms (blog)
Original item by Lynn Dye
Lynn - I don't know if I'm overly cynical, but why does it feel like media, politicians, bankers, and 'spokesmen' are all trying to 'SELL' us a version of what they claim is a truth. Sometimes it just gets surreal and I have to take a step back and remember whose version I am listening to.
Nicely considered piece of work.
Rob
Comment is about Questions of verity (blog)
Original item by Lynn Dye
Lynn - I share Rose's admiration of this one and would also repeat the sentiment of 'more please'.
Rob
Comment is about haiku: raindrop blooms (blog)
Original item by Lynn Dye
Whisper to yourself
each meaningful thought
write down carefully
fold paper neatly
making sure that
the next person
can not see
then listen intently
to final reading.
Comment is about May 2016 Collage Poem (blog)
Original item by Stockport WoL
Any money I collect, Graham, I'm keeping till I've done it. I might need it for my flowers.
Comment is about I'M ABSEILING (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
Fri 13th May 2016 13:05
last two lines have embedded themselves in my memory bank,forever.Great poem.Thank you Emma.Jemima.
Comment is about On the suicide of Sally Brampton (blog)
Original item by Emma-Jane Stradling
Thanks Jemima. Yes, we shouldn't take ourselves too seriously in my view, although the purists will disagree (and there are some great verses on this site, just none of them are mine). I mainly write for fun or catharsis, so it will be silly or maudlin. Not much of a middle ground I'm afraid. Depends on my mood.
Cheers for bothering with the feedback, nice to know some even reads it...
A
Comment is about More silly stuff.... (blog)
Original item by Andy Smyth
I like this, Helen. It reminds me of long departed youth in Belfast: slightly different accent, but similar scenario. :-)
Comment is about A Glesga Kiss (blog)
Original item by Helen
They used to speak like that in Corby too. Half the time I didn't know whether the locals were drunk or sober! It took me two years to understand a message was an errand!
Comment is about A Glesga Kiss (blog)
Original item by Helen
Lynn Hamilton
Fri 13th May 2016 11:23
Hi
Just read through your work and enjoyed very much. Then I read your sample which.... well!
Hope your words enjoy their new home.
Lynn x
Comment is about jsburckhard (poet profile)
Original item by jsburckhard
Lynn Hamilton
Fri 13th May 2016 11:05
Hi Phil
You use your words much better than I. Thanks
Lynn x
Comment is about Only Words. (blog)
Original item by mentalelf. Philk.
Lynn Hamilton
Fri 13th May 2016 11:02
Hi Helen
Enjoyed! You've given me inspiration to write about the Salford Kiss.
Lynn x
Comment is about A Glesga Kiss (blog)
Original item by Helen
I read this yesterday and it made me cry. I love the simplicity, the dotted rhymes but mostly the amount of feeling in the piece. This really resonates.
Comment is about TO A FRIEND (blog)
Original item by ray pool
Awwr Ray...christ, I know that feeling. I often think of my two dear friends, now long gone, and it aches inside so much. I grieve for them in a way I never did with my mother.
Love the brevity and simplicity of this, with the emotional punch to the guts that it provokes, as it raises the individual memories of the reader.
Comment is about TO A FRIEND (blog)
Original item by ray pool
Perfect. I hope there's a red cross bloke standing by at the bottom to extract your wedgie!
Comment is about I'M ABSEILING (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
John Coopey
Sat 14th May 2016 23:17
Thanks for the coverage, Greg. I wonder if I might be more successful to promise not to post my shite if people pledged enough?
And to the contributor whom I shall not name for fear of embarrassing them, that was extremely generous and I offer my thanks.
Comment is about He's abseiling: Write Out Loud's John Coopey taking the plunge from tower block (article)
Original item by Greg Freeman