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Mr BRAITHWAITE and Mr. KHAN

looking down at the twisted streets of slate

that ride the open sky

where doors are closed in privacy

avoiding nature's bracing eye

in the yorkshire terrier's spiritual home,

where corner shops survive:

 

a tiny figure is seen to wind

with solemn step descends to find

a well trod way since but a boy.

 

Mr Braithwaite as he is known

insisting on the formal tone

once headmaster at a local school

obeys a ritual, rain or shine

to buy his paper from Mr.Khan

 

and marvel at the profileration

of Khans at various destinations.

He isn't sure, once more at his door

 

about the shrinking world,

but blesses the streets he knows of old

just in case a future he fears

in dreams may soon unfold.

national identitychanging times

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raypool

Mon 16th May 2016 15:51

Thanks Stu; glad you picked up on this....cheers.

ray

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Stu Buck

Mon 16th May 2016 12:10

lovely and clever ray as ever. poignant and topical also.

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raypool

Sun 15th May 2016 22:40

Thank Rob. I'm delighted that the spirit of this has not been hijacked by opportunism or ulterior motives. The truth is I started with the vision of Yorkshire and began a journey not knowing what would follow. It just seemed natural and all fitted together; and I wanted to look down on this all in miniature if you like. Quite sad and simple to be honest.

Thanks Mark. Your simple lines do illustrate a point. Sadness and helplessness do belong in society as well as the darker undertones, worse luck. At my primary school we had an indian pupil who was highly intelligent and was introduced as a kind of guest. He was gracious and slightly aloof , which nobody really minded !! Ray.

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M.C. Newberry

Sun 15th May 2016 17:09

I'm sure that those of a certain vintage will identify more
readily with these lines than others...especially in what
are called close knit communities.

How quick familiar things can go
How soon it changes all you know.
You look around for what you knew
And know to you they've said adieu.

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Robert Mann

Sun 15th May 2016 12:13

Ray - shades of Dvorak's New World Symphony as the soundtrack to this one (how appropriately titled). Why you singled out Yorkshire I am not sure, unless it was for the pathos of those cobbled (and slated) streets. This piece is a subtle treatment of the headmaster's borderline fears of change - not necessarily racist, but in some way resentful all the same. That said, it has resonance with the feelings of many in this county and country. Enough said!
Rob

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raypool

Sun 15th May 2016 11:31

Thanks Dave. I feel exonerated as I trod on dangerous ground and wanted to express the unsettling nature of change in a self contained environment.

Grateful for your enlightened interpretation.

Ray

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Dave Morgan

Sat 14th May 2016 22:46

I'm glad I caught this Ray on an infrequent visit to the blogs. Like it very much for a number of reasons. Very profound in an understated way. Thanks.

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