Big Sal
Sat 30th Dec 2017 12:29
I'll always steal the complimentary soap! Ha
Comment is about Emma Purshouse (poet profile)
Original item by Emma Purshouse
I had twins first-born, fraternal, and clearly understood the likelihood of twins twice, or more. I said, 'No.' They were the first to survive in three generations of multiple births in both families. A propos of nothing, just a similarity in background, other than Canadian, and poetry.
Comment is about Louis Audet (poet profile)
Original item by Louis Audet
This needs real attention. The rhyming pattern is superb and well handled. I'll come back to it, as it deserves careful reading. The ideas are not simple.
Or, maybe they are simple, but not for the simple-minded, and I don't feel very 'clever' at the moment.
Comment is about Drift away (blog)
Original item by Louis Audet
Well put, eloquent and pressing.I like the twist in the first two lines, very mind grabbing.
Comment is about Earth's sword (blog)
Original item by Rich
Well, this is a cheerful start to 2018.
But the point is both well made and well written, albeit very depressing. Your final line is a philosophical killer, emphasizing weather and landscape as the least desirable standards for the 'quest' of 'Shangri-la'. Surely, a state of mind above all else.
You are having a great time with your own thoughts and words. Is it a kind of new 'freedom'? Self-confidence? Self-liking? Or whatever. Just enjoy it, every word. Sharing is a potent cocktail.
Comment is about There is no Shangri-la (blog)
Original item by keith jeffries
My conviction is: you can't receive what you don't offer, without ties of self-interest. That is actually really hard to do. I think friendship is basically reciprocal; like the notches, both needed and offered, fit well and lock.
A good stimulating work.
Comment is about Friendship (blog)
Original item by keith jeffries
Rich & Kevin, thank you for your kind comments. Keith
Comment is about Friendship (blog)
Original item by keith jeffries
Well said, Keith - when I read this, I can really feel the importance of those few fellow souls I've been lucky enough to know as true friends.
I like this!
Comment is about Friendship (blog)
Original item by keith jeffries
<Deleted User> (13762)
Sat 30th Dec 2017 09:13
If there was a yearly WoL award for opening lines then this would surely be a contender. The first stanza is superb and stands adequately on its own. I'm not sure the second is needed - maybe, maybe not. I can't decide. Either way, well done for working this one out. Cheers, Col.
Comment is about COAT HANGERS (blog)
Original item by ray pool
Thank you Keith &Martin!
Comment is about It is meant for one (blog)
Original item by Alem Hailu G/Kristos
Hello Graham and Patricio,
Thank you so much to both of you for your kind responses to this contemplation.
On your point regarding the first line, Graham, the image of the 'tattered old book' was intended as an opening reference to the relative unreliability of old memories (mine, at least). For me, even with memories of my mother, I find that they become gradually less acute, more afflicted with gaps and shadows as years go by; in one way, these personal defects were catalysts for the piece: I yearn for the bright realities of our mutual past.
All the best for the new year,
Chris
Comment is about Time and Windows (blog)
Original item by Chris Hubbard
Mates are ten a penny, drinking buddies more so. But if you have just one true friend in your life then you're a lucky man. I don't know about "excluding thumbs" i wouldn't have to take my mitten off .
Cheers Kevin
Comment is about Friendship (blog)
Original item by keith jeffries
Hi Ray.
What an unusual subject. Really worked though. Got to agree with David, the opening line was a corker. I liked the way that you brought an inanimate object to life.
Cheers Kevin
Comment is about COAT HANGERS (blog)
Original item by ray pool
Thanks David. I can't pretend you havn't understood me correctly. Sadness leaches out whenever I return to a dream of potential unfulfilled. I'm glad it resonated.
Ray
Comment is about SCHOOL PHOTOS (blog)
Original item by ray pool
Martin, this poem paints a depressing but true picture of suburban life in all its dreariness. It was good for me to read it as it spelled out the words Seasonally Affected Depression something which I was able to escape from. Your use of imagery is captivating. The poem has a powerful quality. Thank you. Keith
Comment is about The endless journey (blog)
Original item by Martin Elder
Leon, I count my friends one one hand excluding the thumb. Thanks for your comment. Keith
Comment is about Friendship (blog)
Original item by keith jeffries
Many years ago a town who's name was in dispute decided to call it Tring as a chap cycled through on a "Penny Farthing".
Comment is about I love Poland (blog)
Original item by Lenford White
<Deleted User> (17847)
Fri 29th Dec 2017 20:52
your true sincerity for my part has not gone unnoticed keith
Comment is about keith jeffries (poet profile)
Original item by keith jeffries
<Deleted User> (17847)
Fri 29th Dec 2017 20:50
and there are as you imply keith not many of these precious people to the pound.
A very rare and extremely important addition to one's life
-for sure!
Comment is about Friendship (blog)
Original item by keith jeffries
Jon and Leon, thank you indeed for your comments. Keith
Comment is about The Cauldron (blog)
Original item by keith jeffries
Jon and Martin, Thank you for your very kind and considered comments. They are much appreciated. Keith
Comment is about Out of Darkness into Enlightenment (blog)
Original item by keith jeffries
Darkness, the temptress seduces the frustration of ambition
is my favourite line which for me sums it all up.
Nice one Keith
Comment is about Out of Darkness into Enlightenment (blog)
Original item by keith jeffries
Very, very nice Alem
Comment is about It is meant for one (blog)
Original item by Alem Hailu G/Kristos
I've been telling friends for weeks, Graham, that somebody was going to get a 4 or 5 goal kicking. The difference is that Man city hand these out every other week.
Comment is about HATS OFF TO HARRY (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
Hi Keith,
Much to be enjoyed here, and the poem describes the inconsistencies of the world we live in with passion and clarity.Well done.
Jon
Comment is about The Cauldron (blog)
Original item by keith jeffries
Hi Keith
Great poem that has much truth witihin its words. I especially enjoyed the first two stanzas which set the tone for what is a very well worded, insightful poem.
Great stuff mate!
Jon
Comment is about Out of Darkness into Enlightenment (blog)
Original item by keith jeffries
I see my mother in my minds window, I see her speak and feel her presence, I wish I could get closer.
Comment is about Time and Windows (blog)
Original item by Chris Hubbard
Alem, brief but beautifully said. Thanks. Keith
Comment is about It is meant for one (blog)
Original item by Alem Hailu G/Kristos
<Deleted User> (9882)
Fri 29th Dec 2017 11:53
All hail the Harrykane!
Made his most recent hat trick all the better when watched in the presence of an Arsenal season ticket holder JC
although I thought both Son's and Dele's goals were better!
Here's to an optimistic 2018 runners-up place
Comment is about HATS OFF TO HARRY (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
Chris there is so much of this that I like but for some reason I keep getting stuck on the first line which for me seems in discord with the rest of the piece. I don't get the tattered book thing.
The rest however is VERY sensitively done, the last verse particularly.
Well done!
Comment is about Time and Windows (blog)
Original item by Chris Hubbard
The bastards won't let go of me, Steve.
Comment is about HATS OFF TO HARRY (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
Sounds risky Col. Happy new year mate.
Thanks for stopping by Des.
Ray.
Comment is about SCHOOL PHOTOS (blog)
Original item by ray pool
As someone who's about to have a go at repairing a garden wall, this poem resonated with me, Mike! Love the sentiments, too. ?
Comment is about Brick by Brick (blog)
Original item by mike booth
Reading between the lines, John, I'm guessing you're a Spurs fan? ? Thanks for this, it made me chuckle!
Comment is about HATS OFF TO HARRY (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
<Deleted User> (13762)
Fri 29th Dec 2017 08:40
Nicely read and constructed Marianne. Well done.
Comment is about Befriending Fear (blog)
Original item by Marianne May
Fri 29th Dec 2017 07:58
Thank you so so much for your generous comment on my profile Cynthia. It meant more to me than you can imagine ??
Comment is about Cynthia Buell Thomas (poet profile)
Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas
Happy new year to you too.
And kind regards to the Gay Manta Ray. I hope he finds what he's looking for.
Cheers Kevin
Comment is about keith jeffries (poet profile)
Original item by keith jeffries
Kevin, Thank you indeed but four quid is required for submission and I don´t have a UK Bank Account and it is too late to send anything now as the dead line is 31 December. Not to worry my aim is to enjoy writing and reading poetry. Money or popular acclaim are not up my street. Thank you for your encouragement this year and also your very special brand of poetry. May I wish you a very Happy, Healthy and Prosperous New Year. Keith (the gay manta ray sends his regards also)
Comment is about Out of Darkness into Enlightenment (blog)
Original item by keith jeffries
Hi Keith. I've been trying to write a poem on the theme of "out of darkness" for a couple of months now, for the Wolverhampton original literature festival. I couldn't think of anything.this one would have been perfect for the competition. As it fits the criteria perfectly.i think you would have had a good chance if you entered this one.
Nice write
Kevin
Comment is about Out of Darkness into Enlightenment (blog)
Original item by keith jeffries
I was inspired by the admonishment that the greatest
of human traits is not faith or hope but charity - and what
we are if we lack that quality.
Comment is about KIND (blog)
Original item by M.C. Newberry
Thanks Martin. I'm going to have to think about this cartoon idea.
Cheers Kevin
Comment is about 'Embassy Christmas' by Kevin is Write Out Loud's Poem of the Week (article)
Original item by Greg Freeman
<Deleted User> (9882)
Thu 28th Dec 2017 12:37
something that is easier said than done Mr N. no matter how hard one tries. To be kind is one thing but if that kindly
offering falls on hate-filled ears and hardened hearts it can make those doing the offering wonder if it is worth the effort
there again I'm sure there is no harm in trying!
Rose ?
Comment is about KIND (blog)
Original item by M.C. Newberry
I totally agree with Colin and Hannah with this one Kevin, it definitely as that admirable cartoon like quality to it. I certainly remember my parents collecting those embassy tokens before they eventually gave up smoking. I remember they had enough to get a monopoly board.
Marvellous Kevin
well done on POTW
Comment is about 'Embassy Christmas' by Kevin is Write Out Loud's Poem of the Week (article)
Original item by Greg Freeman
<Deleted User> (17847)
Thu 28th Dec 2017 10:31
doubtlessly a much hard worked piece of brilliance Marianne
Comment is about Befriending Fear (blog)
Original item by Marianne May
Cynthia Buell Thomas
Sat 30th Dec 2017 12:30
I'm in queue here for pouring praise into your rising cup. I also salute that opening line, and agree that the four line first stanza could be totally enough. But I do admire the extension into another complete idea that invokes the reader's further imagination.
Comment is about COAT HANGERS (blog)
Original item by ray pool