Now your talkin' am there
Comment is about Things that make me smile!! (blog)
Original item by Burning Aspirations
<Deleted User> (18118)
Wed 25th Oct 2017 17:21
Sounds great.
Hannah
Comment is about Things that make me smile!! (blog)
Original item by Burning Aspirations
Thanks Eric, I do take that poem as a compliment ; it tells its story neatly and reveals what is a personal experience. As for the last few lines in my case this would be straying into a grey area. I usually apply a few drops of fantasy to relieve a monotonous situation.
Ray
Comment is about LOOKING BACK (blog)
Original item by ray pool
Abhishek Shankar
Wed 25th Oct 2017 16:18
Awesome.. Usage of perfect and beautiful words according to the context. U have really made it delicious ❤
Comment is about Smile- the facet curve (blog)
Original item by Ankita Srivastava
ha, so true. I couldn't help myself, so here is my rejoinder:
https://www.writeoutloud.net/public/blogentry.php?blogentryid=71473
If this sort of thing isn't allowed or is considered bad form in the forum (cross posting), just send me a note and I can remove this comment. Really, it's meant as a compliment for compelling me to write ?.
Comment is about LOOKING BACK (blog)
Original item by ray pool
This is a was inspired by /meant as a companion to:
https://www.writeoutloud.net/public/blogentry.php?blogentryid=71323
Comment is about Knighthood (blog)
Original item by Eric Maynard
<Deleted User> (9882)
Wed 25th Oct 2017 12:59
and I echo Fred's word's Wendy.Take care love.
Rose ?
Comment is about Why (blog)
Original item by Wendy Higson
Linda, we all believe in you. You're an extremely talented and an altogether amazing lady. I'm proud to call you my friend!
Comment is about Learning to write better poetry - and having a drink - with Carol Ann Duffy (article)
Original item by Greg Freeman
great imagery martin and a beautiful recollection. bet this sounds excellent live.
Comment is about Tramping (blog)
Original item by Martin Elder
very clever piece, reeks of nostalgia and heady notes played joyfully on well strung instruments. as it were.
Comment is about DUO (blog)
Original item by ray pool
this really is quite wonderful. powerful and heartbreaking. the battenburg is a clever metaphor and i like the way it sits in the background while the straightforward language conveys the strength. beautiful. read it twice.
Comment is about Remembering James (blog)
Original item by Jon Darby
brilliant. i'd vote this for POTW if such a thing was permitted. sort of john cooper-clark meets the divine comedy (the band not the book of course). witty and sad. the perfect match.
Comment is about Drunk in the museum (blog)
Original item by Robert C Gaulke
excellent. reminds me of the band Sikth and the lyrics that are throughout their album The Trees Are Dead & Dried Out Wait for Something Wild. great atmosphere here and i love the brevity of it, says what it needs to say then slips back in to the shadows. excellent. said that twice now.
Comment is about Limbs (blog)
Original item by Sara Dombrosky
this is my favourite kind of POTW. i hardly ever read past the first line or so of 'relationship poetry' (my own snazzy phrase) and had to bring myself to read this through. i found it hugely rewarding once i did so, and thats what POTW does i think. lovely piece.
Comment is about 'Cooling Towers' by Tom is Write Out Loud's Poem of the Week (article)
Original item by Greg Freeman
Great work here Tom, brought back many memories for me of the 60s. Many thanks
Comment is about 'Cooling Towers' by Tom is Write Out Loud's Poem of the Week (article)
Original item by Greg Freeman
Thanks Emer and Malika for liking and Thanks to Colin, Lan Ray and David for commenting
Glad you appreciated it Col it does in fact have memories of the south Downs as well as other parts of Sussex near my Gran's house just outside of Burgess Hill for me. I still like to go on the downs when I can if I get the opportunity to visit my mum.
yeah Lan
I am afraid I could never leave those blisters alone. If I am honest I still can't!
Ray I am glad you liked it . You are right I do seem to be rather caught up with the past and my boyhood at the moment
Thanks for your reading and comments David it is always a pleasure to get comments from yourself as well as all the other fine poets who are listed below.
Thank you all once again I am humbled by your acceptance of my work
Martin
Comment is about Tramping (blog)
Original item by Martin Elder
Really enjoyed this down to earth realistic piece. Thank you.
Fred
Comment is about Why (blog)
Original item by Wendy Higson
Tue 24th Oct 2017 18:56
Thanks Col,I’m on a paddle steamer,steaming somewhere down the river time.
Comment is about Traveller (blog)
Original item by DESMOND CHILDS
Tue 24th Oct 2017 18:15
Hi Saniya
Well crafted poem...I especially love the line " I can be ,I can find me, I can breathe and I can live."
A real sense of hope here.
Well done
Comment is about Light (blog)
Original item by Saniya
As Nicola says, we are all proud of you (and always were). Excellent piece too. I look forward to the next instalment.
Comment is about Learning to write better poetry - and having a drink - with Carol Ann Duffy (article)
Original item by Greg Freeman
Ray, when this happened to me it was the headmistress
.She produced the cane, bent me over a little chair, and gave me a good whacking (for sagging school for six weeks)...sadly it was fully deserved.
Comment is about DUO (blog)
Original item by ray pool
And you, Judy, when reviewing, are like Greg Freeman with a scalpel. Terrific piece. Glad I wasn't there.
Comment is about Posh new publisher, same brilliant Hollie McNish (article)
Original item by Greg Freeman
Thanks Colin.
With the tanks emptied,
At the first break of day,
You'd muster up courage
And swim, swim away?
Comment is about Dolphins (blog)
Original item by Simon King
Written in response to a theme of alienation. The Church can sometimes isolate the people it says it's reaching out to.
The person this poem was inspired by thought he'd found a place of acceptance initially after many long,sad,lonely years.
Sad to say this kind of treatment is far more widespread than we sometimes understand it to be.
Comment is about Remembering James (blog)
Original item by Jon Darby
Hi Andy
Love this poem...great picture too. I find family memoirs like this fascinating. It made me laugh and made me reminisce similar times in my own family.
Love this part in particular, " I had been crying my eyes out, wanting to be in one of those boxes". Also,beautiful language here; " Each tear imprinting itself in the shadows of the alleyway,At the back of where we once lived".
A touching piece.
Comment is about Sister in a box (blog)
Original item by Andy N
Coo blimey Col. I couldn't possibly comment - on the other hand though - maybe more possibilities? Thanks.
Comment is about GROSS ENCOUNTER (blog)
Original item by ray pool
Blimey I missed your comments Col and Hannah, sorry. Col, I feel Larkin is a strange one , but he props up the floor of St. Pauls so owzat!
Thanks Hannah glad you liked this one. He may have been just an eentsy weentsy bit narcissistic, I wonder?
Ray
Comment is about LARKIN ON FILM (blog)
Original item by ray pool
<Deleted User> (13762)
Tue 24th Oct 2017 08:42
nice one Ray - you had me walking the corridors of my own primary. My headmaster was a lovely chap who probably never owned a cane but instead instilled a different sort of discipline based on hard work and respect and religion. That last one only rubbed off on me for a sort time. He also helped me through some dark times so I have much to thank him for. I was crap at the recorder though. C?L
Comment is about DUO (blog)
Original item by ray pool
<Deleted User> (13762)
Tue 24th Oct 2017 08:36
empty the tanks
is what I would say
if I was a captive dolphin
made to play human games
Comment is about Dolphins (blog)
Original item by Simon King
<Deleted User> (13762)
Tue 24th Oct 2017 08:29
ooh, like this Desmond - kinda fits nicely with my current writing mood. Ta for posting. C?L
Comment is about Traveller (blog)
Original item by DESMOND CHILDS
Sorry to hear that, Philip. Especially as I always thought it was Man U fans who got a monk on when they lost.
Comment is about ...but lost to Huddersfield (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
Hi Ray,
Isn't it amazing how childhood memories stay with us, so much so that we can easily evoke such times as if they happened yesterday. It's a cliché, but it's true.
Wonderfully read; the right side of wistful. A beautifully descriptive piece, and a lovely story too.
in trepidation I ventured forth
through unfamiliar blunted corridors..
Top of the class!
Suki
Comment is about DUO (blog)
Original item by ray pool
Thanks to David and Stu for their generous and encouraging words. I honestly do not know how I generated this image, but in any event, it seemed like an excellent way to start a new day!
All the best,
Chris
Comment is about The Eye of Morning (blog)
Original item by Chris Hubbard
A sort of eulogy on a past youth with its frustrations and expectations, and the heat adds flavour to those surly feelings. You seem to be a master of this retrospective stuff Martin, and we all love it. It gives us something to cling onto.
Ray
Comment is about Tramping (blog)
Original item by Martin Elder
Rose DiGregorio
Mon 23rd Oct 2017 21:41
I love this poem- so much feeling. A true love story.
Comment is about Matching Hands and Hearts (blog)
Original item by Reese
Loved this. It created great imagery. Thank you.
Comment is about The Song Of Trees (blog)
Original item by Ian Whiteley
Nicola Beckett
Mon 23rd Oct 2017 21:21
Every gun to a knife fight yeah like that
Comment is about Sweatshirt Weather (blog)
Original item by Reese
thanks for commenting on 'Safety Off' Harry - you got it
Ian
Comment is about Harry O`N eill (poet profile)
Original item by Harry O`N eill
What a lovely atmospheric poem. Paints a picture on several levels.
Really bitter/sweet.
Jx
Comment is about 'Cooling Towers' by Tom is Write Out Loud's Poem of the Week (article)
Original item by Greg Freeman
<Deleted User> (18118)
Mon 23rd Oct 2017 20:14
<Deleted User> (18118)
Mon 23rd Oct 2017 20:13
That is great. I am sure a lot of people could identify with that.
In my case, why do I always say 'sorry' to my laptop when I make a mistake, it never says sorry to me.
Hannah
Comment is about Technophobic Dream (blog)
Original item by Duncan McKenzie Ross
<Deleted User> (18118)
Mon 23rd Oct 2017 20:10
It must be one of the most difficult jobs.
Comment is about PITY THE MANAGER (blog)
Original item by M.C. Newberry
<Deleted User> (18118)
Mon 23rd Oct 2017 20:07
<Deleted User> (18118)
Mon 23rd Oct 2017 20:04
A beautiful wistful poem. Enjoyed reading it.
Thank you so much for your comment on my recent poem, very much appreciated.
Hannah
Comment is about An Angel (blog)
Original item by David T Jones
Wardah
Wed 25th Oct 2017 21:40
Thank you Hannah ?
Comment is about Dreamy Dreamer (blog)
Original item by Wardah