Big Sal
Wed 15th Aug 2018 01:59
Wed 15th Aug 2018 01:55
This is wonderful...I would love to hear it read
Thank you
Comment is about FUNERAL FRIENDS (blog)
Original item by Peter Taylor
Always a subject worthy of care and attention in poetry.
Well done.
Comment is about The Language of Trees (blog)
Original item by Christine Renshaw
This brings to mind the "Busy Doing Nothing" song from "A
Connecticut Yankee At The Court Of King Arthur" - (OK,
that dates me!). But as the lyric says -
We'd like to be unhappy but we never do have the time.
To which I'll add -
Being unable to write isn't as bad as it seems
Just let the mind wander and enjoy the daydreams!
Comment is about I can't write today (blog)
Original item by Becky Who
Wed 15th Aug 2018 00:37
Hi Taylor,
Thank you for your kind comment,
Lan ?
Comment is about Taylor Crowshaw (poet profile)
Original item by Taylor Crowshaw
So I guess that Don should know that going down under
has more meanings to consider!
Or, as they say on the Underground - Mine that gap!! ?
Comment is about I NEVER MEANT TO..... (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
Big Sal
Wed 15th Aug 2018 00:02
Being able to do a bilingual poem is a talent all in itself. ?
Comment is about I can't write today (blog)
Original item by Becky Who
At our age, Hugh, we do well to remember where we parked the bloody thing!
Comment is about I made a mistake (blog)
Original item by hugh
Vivid imagery redolent of Dylan's "Chimes of Freedom".
Comment is about One Night (blog)
Original item by Taylor Crowshaw
I confess my guilt to the feeling of always wanting to get away.
Comment is about HOSPITAL VISIT (blog)
Original item by ray pool
One of your best, MC. And all the more effective for its simplicity.
Don't check out yet, old friend.
Comment is about LIFE'S JOURNEY (blog)
Original item by M.C. Newberry
Thanks, Brian. The structure, of course, is one of eight alternate iambic heptameters and pentameters, rhyming ababcdcd. More importantly, it feels quits satisfying.
As for the subject matter, these days he might be described as bisexual. In the rough and tumble of the mining industry we'd say "he'd fuck an old bayonet wound".
Comment is about I NEVER MEANT TO..... (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
Hi, thanks for the likes and comments. For those who are interested, this is actually only the first half of the poem. The second half is in French for some reason (it's not a translation but a continuation). Sometimes one has to do these things to show they shouldn't be done. Not sure bilingual poetry is a genre that is about to take off but hey.
Comment is about I can't write today (blog)
Original item by Becky Who
<Deleted User> (18980)
Tue 14th Aug 2018 21:23
A well constructed poem John enhanced by the subject matter!
Comment is about I NEVER MEANT TO..... (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
Sometimes just being there is enough Ray!
Comment is about HOSPITAL VISIT (blog)
Original item by ray pool
Thank you for reading One Night Jennifer
Comment is about Jennifer Malden (poet profile)
Original item by Jennifer Malden
This was as it happened only yesterday - really hard to find the words.
Thanks for commenting Peter.
That's one way round it I guess Col. Actually there were no notes at the end of his bed - which implied there were no treatments possible.
Obliged, Jennifer - I try my best.
That's true Martin. No point in being clever when the experience is so extreme and harrowing.
Thanks for liking - it's hard to express on a subject like this -
David, Anya, Darren, Becky, Taylor and Kate G.
Ray with love
Comment is about HOSPITAL VISIT (blog)
Original item by ray pool
Thanks so much Ray, M C Newberry, Jane and Taylor. So glad you found something in it which appealed to you all. I had a lot of fun with my grandaughter when she was a child, but now she has other fish, mainly male, to fry. I was like that at her age too, as weren't we all?
Comment is about nostalgia (blog)
Original item by Jennifer Malden
Great writing, and as others have said from an unusual
viewpoint.
Jennifer
Comment is about Man is the Beast (blog)
Original item by Taylor Crowshaw
Big Sal
Tue 14th Aug 2018 19:22
That picture you put to accompany this pretty much sums it up for me. "Think outside the box."
Nice one David.?
Comment is about The Meaning Of Thought (blog)
Original item by David Irvine
Big Sal
Tue 14th Aug 2018 19:21
Spoken like a modern volume of Shakespeare.?
Comment is about Open Market (blog)
Original item by AVISHEK GHOSH
<Deleted User> (18980)
Tue 14th Aug 2018 19:15
I particularly like the two line penultimate verse.
Comment is about One Night (blog)
Original item by Taylor Crowshaw
Big Sal
Tue 14th Aug 2018 19:06
You did an excellent job at imbuing this piece with suspense all the way through until the very last line. Top-of-the-line imagery coupled with your descriptive language on the emotions felt. Reading your work is always like watching a classic, silent film - interesting, thought provoking, and one of the best ways to pass the time without listening to music.?
Well done Taylor, again. ?
Comment is about One Night (blog)
Original item by Taylor Crowshaw
Thank you for your feedback on 'The language of Trees' yes indeedy! Trees are wise!
Comment is about ray pool (poet profile)
Original item by ray pool
There was a similar poem not far back, and it inspired the same thoughts Christine, namely that I made a life changing decision under an old oak - conjecture could knock down the decision, but that's as hell where I made it. I think a tree certainly bestows calm when you engage with one - as it is a microcosm of the way life works.
Ray
Comment is about The Language of Trees (blog)
Original item by Christine Renshaw
The starfish hand is so poetic Jennifer, and engages the whole idea of it for me. The last line brings down the portcullis and becomes so poignant. Nice poem.
Ray
Comment is about nostalgia (blog)
Original item by Jennifer Malden
Thank you so much for positive feedback on 'The language of trees '
Its so encouraging to get feedback on posts (as a newbie on here)
x
Comment is about J R Harris (poet profile)
Original item by J R Harris
thank you for your feedback , I attended a creative playful writers retreat this weekend and we had to focus on something in nature .....I focussed in on an ash tree and when i put my ear to its bark , I kid you not the sounds it shared were loud and magical!
Comment is about The Language of Trees (blog)
Original item by Christine Renshaw
Big Sal
Tue 14th Aug 2018 18:12
Nice one.
Comment is about 'Sex' by Hallielle Rose Dawson is Write Out Loud's Poem of the Week (article)
Original item by Greg Freeman
Agree with Jane B.
But...
Life is what's lost as much as what's gained.
The trick is to accept and be grateful for what is. ?
Comment is about nostalgia (blog)
Original item by Jennifer Malden
To adapt the words from a vintage song I recall -
Hugh, you're driving me crazy
What can I do...what can I do?
Hugh, you make everything hazy,
What can I do - with you...oo...oo?! ?
Comment is about I made a mistake (blog)
Original item by hugh
<Deleted User> (19836)
Tue 14th Aug 2018 17:14
<Deleted User> (19836)
Tue 14th Aug 2018 17:12
Beautiful! I absolutely love this. I have hugged many a tree and each one gives off a different vibe. They have a healing energy which cannot be put in a bottle!!! Great poem, thank you. Jane?❤
Comment is about The Language of Trees (blog)
Original item by Christine Renshaw
<Deleted User> (19836)
Tue 14th Aug 2018 17:07
Thanks for this Christine. As an environmentalist I can very much relate to your words...?
Comment is about The Language of Trees (blog)
Original item by Christine Renshaw
<Deleted User> (18980)
Tue 14th Aug 2018 16:48
Some brilliant words in there...don't know if they're real or made up, but who cares?
Comment is about Slubberdegullion (blog)
Original item by Peter Knaggs
Big Sal
Tue 14th Aug 2018 15:11
Your second sample is an amazing read with words weighted and tethered by heavy emotion. Very well done.?
Comment is about Daryl Sznyter (poet profile)
Original item by Daryl Sznyter
Big Sal
Tue 14th Aug 2018 15:01
Reminds me of an Andrzej Sapkowski novel with the beauty of the trees emphasized particularly well. ?
Comment is about The Language of Trees (blog)
Original item by Christine Renshaw
Big Sal
Tue 14th Aug 2018 14:49
I too am tired of insomnia, but thankfully it doesn't keep me up many nights. On those that they do however, it helps to keep my mind running all day by writing and working. Another good one.?
Comment is about I Am Tired (blog)
Original item by Mari Vee
Big Sal
Tue 14th Aug 2018 14:47
Feels like I'm breaking the fourth wall by commenting on this right now (due to the middle of your piece), but it's sad that the lack of communication has grown beyond phones and electronic devices to include face-to-face interaction as well. The Digital Age of Facebook selling election manipulation, and mindless people jumping on an invisible bandwagon. Good piece.?
Comment is about Digital Distraction (blog)
Original item by Mari Vee
Again an insight into a young mind.I like the brevity of your verse and the way the message is conveyed.
Comment is about I Am Tired (blog)
Original item by Mari Vee
Keep walking ,keep writing.I like the way you repeat the title emphasising your message.An unique poem written by a young mind short but with a message.
Comment is about I Walk (blog)
Original item by Mari Vee
I like your writing! I relate to it on a personal note.
Nice work!
Comment is about Me (blog)
Original item by Andrea Lee
Tis a cloth cap
deliberately thrown awaiting coins
generous payments soon collected
from Stockport club members
who collaborate writing lines
of strange curious nature.
Comment is about 'Cloth and Club' - August 2018 Collage Poem (blog)
Original item by Stockport WoL
Loads of action ,plenty to do.
Another great poem by Becky Who.
Comment is about I can't write today (blog)
Original item by Becky Who
Big Sal
Wed 15th Aug 2018 02:00
"Purple pink pig face flowers" is a tongue twister all in itself. Another one with great imagery and the words roll right off the tongue with this one too.
Comment is about Away (blog)
Original item by Lan