thanks hazel. while i do like the rev of an engine, i can confirm its a sunbeam from the sun!
Comment is about the quiet room (blog)
Original item by Stuart Buck
Really love this. Great message, lovely tempo. Just makes me smile because it's so well written.
Comment is about A Fine Line between Living and Death (blog)
Original item by April Emmeline
Big Sal
Tue 22nd Jan 2019 13:02
A mind is a terrible thing to waste, but the thoughts within are always worth saving if they will aid a journey or two. >
Self-preservation is a universal need for animals, but the want to destroy is distinctly human (or simian). >
It takes more strength to build a bridge than it does to bring it down.
^^^?
Great poem, Hazel.
Comment is about A Living Hell (blog)
Original item by Hazel ettridge
Big Sal
Tue 22nd Jan 2019 12:59
Here's a tip for your rhyming, Don: Feel free to try it and see if it helps.
- When I come up with a rhyme or a line that is too good to not put into a poem, I always put the thought up line as the second line of the couplet.
The more powerful a rhyme is, the greater effect it has when ended upon.
For example:
"The blue walls and the blade will turn a soul to a sound,
The roof falls from the 'scape and burns a hole in the ground,"
OK so maybe this is not a good example, but my point is that the second line = "The roof falls. . ." is the one I wrote first, then I added the first line = "The blue walls . . ." Of course rhyming is subjective, but this device helps me when writing them.
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Comment is about Golly Gosh Big Sal (blog)
Original item by Don Matthews
I really like this, Hazel. I can relate to it.
Comment is about A Living Hell (blog)
Original item by Hazel ettridge
Thanks, Jason. No I won't be taking my own life. I want to die in the same way I want to win the lottery - no real sense that it's going to happen.
Comment is about A Living Hell (blog)
Original item by Hazel ettridge
This is a poem. Thank you. Last two lines turned the whole thing around for me (or is the sunbeam a motor bike and I've got it all wrong?)
Comment is about the quiet room (blog)
Original item by Stuart Buck
I really like that poem, I just hope that you don't actually want to die today, or anytime soon because it seems like you have plenty to offer to the world.
Comment is about A Living Hell (blog)
Original item by Hazel ettridge
And once again, thank you. It's deeply appreciated ?
Comment is about Tears (blog)
Original item by Jason Bayliss
Thanks big Sal, much appreciated ?
Comment is about A Notion Of Love (blog)
Original item by Jason Bayliss
Big Sal
Tue 22nd Jan 2019 02:44
You hold rhythms extremely well with the syllable counts and cadences.
Some great pieces you have.?
Comment is about Tears (blog)
Original item by Jason Bayliss
Big Sal
Tue 22nd Jan 2019 02:43
Sorry it took this long but thank you. It means a lot.
Comment is about Hey pops (blog)
Original item by Brent
Big Sal
Tue 22nd Jan 2019 00:50
Thank you Martin, yes, these are series of sketches I am working on...
Comment is about Anthem of Life (blog)
Original item by Xoanxo
Don, are you trying to say your wood is well seasoned !
Good on ya mate.
Comment is about All I saw was trees (blog)
Original item by David Gabriel Caplan
David let me elaborate
I might help you some good
Yes, while I'm Australian
I wood if I could ?
Hmm...
Comment is about All I saw was trees (blog)
Original item by David Gabriel Caplan
very funny. doesnt need to be added to or taken from. perfect as it is!
Comment is about All I saw was trees (blog)
Original item by David Gabriel Caplan
Thank you Big Sal.....you made me realise the last line was entirely superfluous, so I deleted it.
MC You are a mine of information.
It's a long time since I lived in Australia, but I seem to remember them also using that expression?
Comment is about All I saw was trees (blog)
Original item by David Gabriel Caplan
I do apologize to all if I came across in any way rude or offensive.. irish slang differs from most.. And my sense of humor sparks more with topics that may not be laughable in reality.. But that's what I love about myself.. Nothing is ever to serious for myself.. If I can make light from my fathers passing, I can make light from Brexit and Trump.. I can not take credit for this though, I did not create it.. I just shared... Love and light to you all x
Comment is about Piggy in the middle (blog)
Original item by Lysa d
Hi LD - all words can be taken up and enjoyed - and used for
individual extemporization...that's the positive aspect of a site of this
sort. These lines are neat and deserve their wider availability via
appreciative attitudes such as your own. Thanks.
Comment is about Piggy in the middle (blog)
Original item by Lysa d
I also found that quote clever and amusing.
(Does anybody remember the 'Humblebums'?
Comment is about Piggy in the middle (blog)
Original item by Lysa d
Big Sal
Mon 21st Jan 2019 19:39
I thought you would see something else. I really did.?
Comment is about All I saw was trees (blog)
Original item by David Gabriel Caplan
Every body needs to relax... If you check first comment I did say... NOT MY WORDS... (haha)
I just found this absolutely hilarious and felt the need to share, im assuming my sence of humor does not match any lovely soul who uses WOL... But its ok ' I shall laugh by my lonesome in my funny little bubble...
I dont do politics guy's, and it was not supposed to offend... I just found it " and still do..... F##ki## hilarious. ?
Comment is about Piggy in the middle (blog)
Original item by Lysa d
Congratulations, Ruby
Comment is about The Write Out Loud Poem of the Week is ‘Half-hearted’ by Ruby (article)
Original item by steve pottinger
Big Sal
Mon 21st Jan 2019 19:26
On a side, this is a perfect example of how PROFITABLE it can be to pander to the youth. No matter the oil you're selling, they're still your CUSTOMERS.
Most people think poetry cannot be profitable in the slightest, and if the greatest poets here and elsewhere could get a fraction of exposure, spotlight, and audience that Rupi Kaur got over 'Milk and Honey', they could all reap the rewards - not just a single person mind you.
Much like most the money on Earth is concentrated in an extremely small percentage of people (most are families/descendants), the same can be said for the act of poetry.
Anyone that knows who Rupi Kaur is surely knows who Atticus is? Another Instagram "star" to be sure. Probably 2 of the most popular "poets" on Instagram. Funny thing though? Several news stations recently ran a story about uncovering Atticus' true identity. Turns out, the popular "poet" was nothing more than a well off racist charading as a poet to really mock how easy it is to get famous and rich doing poetry on Instagram.
Don't believe me? Look it up. I know Huffington Post still has the story in their archives somewhere. Check mid or late 2018 stories. Couple other places ran the story too. Eventually some people doxxed his racist ass after he tried to sockpuppet another poet on IG named, Chen Chen.
If any of you doubt this, please just look it up and save me the trouble from citing it. Instagram is not a breeding ground for poets, it's a hunting ground for gullible youth and malleable minds.
Comment is about Bestselling poet Rupi Kaur leads way as poetry sales soar by 12% (article)
Original item by Greg Freeman
Ho-ho...more welcome fun.
The tree makes a wondrous connection
That makes the mind feel good;
And in America, men with an erection
Called it "getting wood"!
Comment is about All I saw was trees (blog)
Original item by David Gabriel Caplan
BM - hence my reference to "two well known forms of entertainment": a certain song reprised in a certain film.
Do I have your ear now? ?
Comment is about Piggy in the middle (blog)
Original item by Lysa d
Big Sal
Mon 21st Jan 2019 19:17
Yes poetry is more popular because of her, but then that's what people come to expect ALL poetry is.
Nothing against her, but there's at least 5 or 6 poets on WOL alone that would blow her out of the water.
But then again the poetry boat doesn't check for barnacles does it?
Some of these famous poets could go to school by coming down to earth. Until more poets that deserve the spotlight get it, all I can do is give her a congrats and demand more people read more people's work.
I guess like Attila said huh, "Most people ignore most poetry because MOST POETRY IGNORES MOST PEOPLE."?
Comment is about Bestselling poet Rupi Kaur leads way as poetry sales soar by 12% (article)
Original item by Greg Freeman
<Deleted User> (18980)
Mon 21st Jan 2019 17:53
Can no-one see the derivative of this? Gerry Rafferty's STUCK IN THE MIDDLE WITH YOU.
Comment is about Piggy in the middle (blog)
Original item by Lysa d
DK if you want to cash in on the death bandwagon you have to aim a little higher. I mean why write obits when it's the undertakers who are creaming in the cash?
All you need is a black suit and a mournful expression.
If you have at least one of those you are halfway there !
(only joking)
Dave
Comment is about Another Line Of Work (blog)
Original item by d.knape
A combination of Ogden Nash and Spooner. Welcome!
Comment is about Disorientated (2) (blog)
Original item by David Gabriel Caplan
Nice one Trevor. We (well, maybe most of us) know just what you mean.
But revision is a decision
That might defeat derision.
Comment is about Self-Doubt (blog)
Original item by Trevor Alexander
The origin from whatever source - has welcome wit combined with a
contemporary take on two well-known forms of entertainment.
My family research reveals old connections that existed between
this side of the Irish Sea and Ireland back in the day. These are
missed over here when the right of Ireland (Eire) to be self-governing
and free from the "yoke" of control by Parliament here stands as a
reminder that the same right is sought by England from the yoke of
the EU....now that enlightenment about how membership has been
foisted upon it via lack of truth and ongoing dissembling from the
past and present occupants of Parliament. Give them all lie-detector
tests!
Comment is about Piggy in the middle (blog)
Original item by Lysa d
The world always has a place for fun - and when that also includes
wit - a rare commodity in today's vulgar times, then so much the better.
Spare us the pretentious...the pseudo-serious,
That seem designed to bore and weary us. ?
Comment is about Temple Builder. I Do Object (blog)
Original item by Don Matthews
DK -
Unless you're one of the "you know who" -
I have some unwelcome news for you:
If you hope to make cash from prose or verse
Your situation will go from bad to worse! ?
Comment is about Another Line Of Work (blog)
Original item by d.knape
leah
Mon 21st Jan 2019 15:40
REVIEW: ATTILA THE STOCKBROKER AT JANUARY WRITE ANGLE
Was it a tropical storm, earthquake, tsunami - that struck Petersfield Write Angle at its January gig. No. It was Attila the Stockbroker, a different kind of force of nature.
As usual, Attila filled the room - “Dom (landlord at The Townhouse), had to bring up more chairs. And, he was up there for close to an hour and a half with lots of new material to add to his favourites - and the stamina to go on for hours more!
This was a particularly political evening, starting with the announcement that Teresa May's Brexit deal had been voted down by a large margin - “Now for a General Election,” exclaimed Attila, an ardent left winger.
Much of Attila's poetry dealt with the injustices visited upon ordinary people by the rich and powerful - from diggers, ranters and levellers of the Cromwellian period up to the present day- such as Aberfan, Hillsborough and Grenfell Tower, with people failed by the National Coal Board, the police and the local, Tory Council. He declared himself a ranter, a present day reviver of that old group, inveying against Oliver Cromwell who, having deposed and executed the king, himself became king in all but name and whose officers persecuted ordinary people who protested the status quo of the mighty exercising power.
It was not unremitting politics – Atilla, born and bred in Southwick and still living there, recounts happy memories of fishing for flat fish, collecting creepy-crawlies; visiting the pub converted into a gospel chapel; and acting as a DJ for Brighton and Hove Albion.
He's not only a master of the spoken word but also a gifted musician – demonstrating his skills on the mandolin, violin, pipe and crumhorn (a curved woodwind instrument of the restoration period!)
Several of the audience, known to Write Angle, were excellent poets but this time, they were there for just one thing - to see their favourite performer – it was Attila’s night -and there’s no doubt, they were once again taken by his fabulous talents. They thanked us over and over, for having him as a guest.
With not much time left, Richard Peirce, did his White Rose, about a group of young people who resisted Hitler and died for it, and One Night in Fratton, where he mused on Pompey people's lack of interest in the revolution he expects to come! Dick Senior's Modern Times, contrasted the concerns of politicians and millionaires with the needs of people and the planet. His Hallelujah dealt with the way in which extreme right-winger tom Robinson's supporters had adopted that song.
Leah's Tweedle Dum and Twee Dee dealt with the 'politics' of marriage; her In My Search had us descended from machines, and If You Can’t Give Me Love, give me chocolate instead. This reviewer read When You Pick at a Scab Does it Bleed? about the contradictions inherent in Brexit and Trumpism.
A moving and exciting evening was topped off with the raffle for a meal for two at the Nags Head in Chichester and a feeling that our musical, political, poetic and comic appetites had been well fed.
Addendum: We apologise there wasn’t more time for open mikers but as it turned out, the timing worked out well as there were few who wanted to perform, however we will provide more time in our future events. Also, although we’d raised the price for the evening, it will go back to the original £6 entry fee.
Review is about WRITE ANGLE POETRY & MUSIC +OPEN MIC on 15 Jan 2019 (event)
Big Sal
Mon 21st Jan 2019 15:01
It's been nearly a year since I commented directly on your profile, so here's to another year of your work gracing the waves, and good luck on all your endeavors for 2019.
Best wishes, Laura.??
Comment is about Laura Taylor (poet profile)
Original item by Laura Taylor
Big Sal
Mon 21st Jan 2019 14:58
Thanks Lisa, it's really appreciated.?
Comment is about Switch On And Tune In (blog)
Original item by Jason Bayliss
Obituaries sounds pretty good dk
People pay lots of dosh for their dead'ns
Make sure that they pay in euros and cents though
You'll make more than invites for weddin's ?
Comment is about Another Line Of Work (blog)
Original item by d.knape
Mon 21st Jan 2019 11:44
Love hides within our families
its whereabouts might surprise us,
when we find love, don't let it go
the prize is loving kindness.
Comment is about David Gabriel Caplan (poet profile)
Original item by David Gabriel Caplan
Mon 21st Jan 2019 11:32
At least you passed
Puberty!
wink.
Comment is about M.C. Newberry (poet profile)
Original item by M.C. Newberry
Big Sal
Tue 22nd Jan 2019 13:46
So, let me get this straight. . .
Just to iron things out a bit. . .
On this narrow path . . .
___________________________
Man that's cool how you pack all these proverbs into your work, and they ALL pertain to the same thing. That shit is harder to do than alliteration OR rhyming.
Hell yeah!?
Comment is about Working The Angles (blog)
Original item by Jason Bayliss