the quiet room

there is a room in minnesota that is so quiet

you can hear your blood trickle through your veins

no one can stand it, but I wish I was there

to hear my body shut down

     here is a liver

     here is a lung

     here is the panicked thrum of a heart that is dying

     here is the piss and fuzz of the brain

     realising it is alone

 

what does hope sound like?

is it the sound of a sunbeam?

◄ shedding velvet in monochrome/a field in england

haiku - jasmine ►

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elPintor

Sun 27th Jan 2019 18:46

I considered moving to the twin cities, Minnesota, but thank goodness I didn't. It has a booming tech industry, but the hell-on-earth-cold of the US midwest winter is like a cyclical death sentence to a seed that's just begging to thrive.

And, yes, hope is the sound of a sunbeam when it's 30 below...

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Stu Buck

Tue 22nd Jan 2019 13:35

thanks hazel. while i do like the rev of an engine, i can confirm its a sunbeam from the sun!

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Hazel ettridge

Tue 22nd Jan 2019 12:45

This is a poem. Thank you. Last two lines turned the whole thing around for me (or is the sunbeam a motor bike and I've got it all wrong?)

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raypool

Sun 20th Jan 2019 10:37

All is clear Stu thanks. The last two lines are paramount to the mindset. In the UK there is similar facility, can't tell you more but cameras have shown it on telly. I loved the fact that Harley use it as a test centre. Bollocks to that - give me the old leaky exhaust sound of a triumph anyday.

Good that you have redeemed the site albeit briefly.

Ray

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Wolfgar Miere

Sun 20th Jan 2019 09:57

Ah, a poet returns. Thank fuck, how long you staying. You might get recruited into the new Waco County Crew...they even have a messiah...call the fucking ATF.

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Stu Buck

Sun 20th Jan 2019 09:54

hi ray!
its an actual room. the quietest in the world.

https://www.atlasobscura.com/places/orfield-labs-quiet-chamber

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raypool

Sun 20th Jan 2019 09:35

Hi Stu. A sort of forensic sense pervades. Don't know where the Minnesota ref comes from but the power and the glory tell their story. Hope all your projects are ok. Ray by

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Stu Buck

Sat 19th Jan 2019 18:03

quite accidental i can ensure you!

hope your well martin glad you liked the poem

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Martin Elder

Sat 19th Jan 2019 17:53

Another winner Stu. Good to see your post. I noticed that you have some rhymes in this one which is unusual for your good self.
love it
Martin

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