Golly Gosh Big Sal
Golly gosh Big Sal
You've gone and found another
One I had forgotten 'bout
My young and lost young brother
I'm sorry my dear readers
To see my brother's pic
'Dog Day Afternoon' by Sal
Is where you'll have to click
Sal tries to pass my brother
Off as Stephen King
But surely I, his brother
Would know our own offspring?
Big Sal and all you WOLers
Keep distracting me
From trying to find my first one
The one who did, yes, flee
Don Matthews January 2019
If I had a relative who looked like that
I'd be a damn sight bolder
About leaving family behind
Without looking over my shoulder! ?
Big Sal
Tue 22nd Jan 2019 12:59
Here's a tip for your rhyming, Don: Feel free to try it and see if it helps.
- When I come up with a rhyme or a line that is too good to not put into a poem, I always put the thought up line as the second line of the couplet.
The more powerful a rhyme is, the greater effect it has when ended upon.
For example:
"The blue walls and the blade will turn a soul to a sound,
The roof falls from the 'scape and burns a hole in the ground,"
OK so maybe this is not a good example, but my point is that the second line = "The roof falls. . ." is the one I wrote first, then I added the first line = "The blue walls . . ." Of course rhyming is subjective, but this device helps me when writing them.
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Beautiful rhyming Po ?
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Don Matthews
Tue 22nd Jan 2019 23:33
MC you now know 'bout three brothers
Who make looking at them us cringe
(Unfortunately one is still missing)
Embarrassed he's come off his hinge?
Sorry MC I got sidetracked
Was meaning to tell you 'bout another
Have you guessed what goes rhyming with 'tother'?
I've yet to scare you with their mother
I'm sorry there Po if you're nightmaring
But all creatures great/looking shit
Have equal opportunities of sharing
There place on WOL site, each one bit ?