Golly Gosh Big Sal

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Golly Gosh Big Sal

 

Golly gosh Big Sal

You've gone and found another

One I had forgotten 'bout

My young and lost young brother

 

I'm sorry my dear readers

To see my brother's pic

'Dog Day Afternoon' by Sal

Is where you'll have to click

 

Sal tries to pass my brother

Off as Stephen King

But surely I, his brother

Would know our own offspring?

 

Big Sal and all you WOLers

Keep distracting me

From trying to find my first one

The one who did, yes, flee

 

Don Matthews January 2019

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Don Matthews

Tue 22nd Jan 2019 23:33

MC you now know 'bout three brothers
Who make looking at them us cringe
(Unfortunately one is still missing)
Embarrassed he's come off his hinge?

Sorry MC I got sidetracked
Was meaning to tell you 'bout another
Have you guessed what goes rhyming with 'tother'?
I've yet to scare you with their mother

I'm sorry there Po if you're nightmaring
But all creatures great/looking shit
Have equal opportunities of sharing
There place on WOL site, each one bit ?

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M.C. Newberry

Tue 22nd Jan 2019 15:57

If I had a relative who looked like that
I'd be a damn sight bolder
About leaving family behind
Without looking over my shoulder! ?

Big Sal

Tue 22nd Jan 2019 12:59

Here's a tip for your rhyming, Don: Feel free to try it and see if it helps.

- When I come up with a rhyme or a line that is too good to not put into a poem, I always put the thought up line as the second line of the couplet.

The more powerful a rhyme is, the greater effect it has when ended upon.

For example:

"The blue walls and the blade will turn a soul to a sound,

The roof falls from the 'scape and burns a hole in the ground,"


OK so maybe this is not a good example, but my point is that the second line = "The roof falls. . ." is the one I wrote first, then I added the first line = "The blue walls . . ." Of course rhyming is subjective, but this device helps me when writing them.

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Don Matthews

Tue 22nd Jan 2019 07:02

Beautiful rhyming Po ?

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Tue 22nd Jan 2019 06:44

I am having bloody nightmares
looking at these pics

Its like drowning in the river
some call the Styx

Avatars peeping from the corner of the page
who they are I do not care, my senses are enraged

The stuff of scary stuff that is for certain
take um down at once, my bloody head is hurt'n

Can't we have some tranquil shit, like a setting sun
I can't even post one when all is said and done.

Perhaps its just as well as anon is my name
As for posting up a picture … what care I for fame?

Po

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