This positively bounces along all on its own. Love it
Comment is about A Limerick (blog)
Original item by mona s
I love the line ' your knife carves me' in particular. great poem Adam
nice one
Comment is about Chiaroscuro (blog)
Original item by Adam Whitworth
HI Vautaw. I can imagine an additional field of play here if you included a theme of the Abbess as well as the Abyss. That would body out the spiritual commitment such a person might experience. Thought provoking in any case!
Ray
Comment is about Moral Abyss (blog)
Original item by Vautaw
I had to read this piece a number of times to let the words sink in which for me makes it all the richer for doing so. A thoughtful and provoking piece. Thanks for posting Damon
Comment is about Chemicals (blog)
Original item by Damon Blackery
I am reminded of a politician's use of the word spin Peter. Here you have us in your grasp as your story and thoughts unwind with attention to detail . It is a clever transition to the human soul's wanderings and umbilical chord back down the return to safety , if that makes sense.
Beautifully formed work; I hope you are in a better place than I feel you may have been in recently.
Ray
Comment is about BRIDGES BACK HOME (blog)
Original item by Peter Taylor
Often in your poems there is a moment of revelation or pause for consideration of the "current of time" and it always seems to draw us along in a persuasive way. This is a fine example of that. A sense of experience shared Tom.
Ray
Comment is about This Morning (blog)
Original item by Tom Harding
Without sounding like the party pooper, I think it is a shame that most (if not all) Limericks are written to be funny.
Try writing a serious one. It's not as easy as you think.
Comment is about National Limerick Day (blog)
Original item by Jason Bayliss
Yes MCN one never knows what a ring may bring ????
Comment is about Ding! Dong! (blog)
Original item by afishamongmany
Hi MCN - Yea, Doomed! Doomed! We're all dooooomed! Launch the life boats! Women, children and poets first.
The panic confusion maintains the illusion.
Go well ><>
Comment is about HOUR BY HOUR - a modern day limerick (blog)
Original item by M.C. Newberry
Really like this Tom, particularly the clever use and positioning of the words, "in different," to also suggest, "indifferent."
J.
Comment is about This Morning (blog)
Original item by Tom Harding
Thank you all so much for your likes and comments, I really appreciate it. Especially with this one, 'cos, as I said I quite like it.
J.x
Comment is about Little Birds (blog)
Original item by Jason Bayliss
Thanks Jennifer.
I mean, you just have to don't you, it is national Limerick Day ?
J. x
Comment is about National Limerick Day (blog)
Original item by Jason Bayliss
Beautiful homage to motherhood.. Loved it..
Comment is about How Many Kisses (blog)
Original item by d.knape
Sun 12th May 2019 16:59
Sun 12th May 2019 16:58
the poem is well constructed...
along with the mother,
my wife!
hahahaha
Have a great day also!
just think of all the things a mother does as routine
that she never gets applause for.
let's give her a round of applause Today,
in fact , a standing Ovation!
Comment is about keith jeffries (poet profile)
Original item by keith jeffries
Sun 12th May 2019 16:46
was that a Limerick?
it failed to rhyme.
what happened?
Comment is about Jason Bayliss (poet profile)
Original item by Jason Bayliss
Sun 12th May 2019 16:35
HAPPY MOTHER'S DAY TO YOU
(assuming you are, if not have a Happy Day anyway!)
Comment is about mona s (poet profile)
Original item by mona s
I enjoyed the perceived connection about what we respond to in this
life...its demands and expectations. I will add:
Aha - who's that at my door I see?
Are they there for what they want
Or are they there for me? ?
Comment is about Ding! Dong! (blog)
Original item by afishamongmany
d.k
You paint the picture of the ideal mother and do so in a well constructed poem.
Keith
Comment is about How Many Kisses (blog)
Original item by d.knape
Sun 12th May 2019 15:16
Thank you Keith your comments are very much appreciate.
All the best des
Comment is about Didactic (tanka) (blog)
Original item by DESMOND CHILDS
Thanks Keith! Glad you had a giggle. Thanks also to Adam Brian Jason and Keith again for the likes. Wasn't sure if I would be blackballed for posting Limericks, but see Jason was courageous too!
Jennifer
Comment is about Four Limericks (blog)
Original item by Jennifer Malden
Loved this one! Glad someone else produced a Limerick!
Jennifer
Comment is about National Limerick Day (blog)
Original item by Jason Bayliss
Oh, I was fine with 'mundane', totally. 'Seemingly' would probably have been better.
I think I usually apply it to things like 'washing the dishes'and 'clearing out cow shit' etc. etc. Chores mostly, that HAVE to be done in the interests of health and safety. For me, I guess any interaction with a living thing, fauna or flora, lifts any task out of 'mundane'.
Although, a pile of poo is very 'active', isn't it! Ho! Ho!
Comment is about STICKS (blog)
Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas
Thank you, gentlemen. I try to live with my eyes, my head, my heart and my arms wide open. I don't believe in 'mundane'. The glory of life is in the details! Just as, I truly think, the opposite is equally true.
What really struck my heart in this little 'story' was 'Do you want to come in, too?'
Comment is about STICKS (blog)
Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas
Dylan Thomas put it better than I ever could: “The Force That through the Green Fuse Drives the Flower”. That is what speaks to me at this time of year.The music by Iron and Wine is beautiful too: “When the time of our lives is all we have.” Thank you Jennifer and Keith for reading and commenting. John
Comment is about The merry, merry month of May (blog)
Original item by John E Marks
jan oskar hansen
Sun 12th May 2019 11:59
I met Armitage in Silves once he was teaching poetry
Comment is about 'I feel it's time to give something back': Simon Armitage is the new poet laureate (article)
Original item by Greg Freeman
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Sun 12th May 2019 10:47
Of course, the son is just one out of billions of stares.
Comment is about Staring at the son (blog)
Original item by Robert C Gaulke
Desmond,
This is excellent with the opening line as a declaration that despite all you have chosen your path. This takes courage in a world where others try to buy your mind with their beliefs or put you down.
A good poem, well said
Keith
Comment is about Didactic (tanka) (blog)
Original item by DESMOND CHILDS
Brilliantly funny and so well rhymed.
Thank you for this
Keith
Comment is about Four Limericks (blog)
Original item by Jennifer Malden
Agree with Keith - an ode to May, the spring and relief that winter is behind us. Something to read again and again.
Jennifer
Comment is about The merry, merry month of May (blog)
Original item by John E Marks
Great writing, as yours always is. One can almost see them and hear the shouted commands and the music.
Jennifer
Comment is about The Parade had formed (blog)
Original item by keith jeffries
Really liked this. Beautiful language and the allegory of our human lives. Leaving behind one known domain, to chance, alone, another as yet obscure. We have all had to do this in our lives, probably with return in mind. Will read it again and again. On a more practical level, was always fascinated by enormous brown and beige spiders' webs we used to find walking on the coast in the early morning. Each strand outlined by sun on the dewdrops, and incredibly strong, almost like nylon. You could pull them quite hard without beaking them.
Jennifer
Comment is about BRIDGES BACK HOME (blog)
Original item by Peter Taylor
Sun 12th May 2019 07:50
Thank you stu and Damon for the likes much appreciated.
All the best des
Comment is about Didactic (tanka) (blog)
Original item by DESMOND CHILDS
Sun 12th May 2019 07:49
You are right there David. I think we all think we know best at sometime or other. It’s just that some people are so bombastic about it and don’t respect others thoughts and beliefs.
All the best des
Comment is about Didactic (tanka) (blog)
Original item by DESMOND CHILDS
Sun 12th May 2019 07:37
Hi Rachel, it is a great word and I am looking forward to reading your poem. Love the phrase, “appropriate derision” good luck.
All the best des
Comment is about Didactic (tanka) (blog)
Original item by DESMOND CHILDS
Thanks Jane & Jason! It’s one of those poems that doesn’t feel quite done, but I’m not sure what to add. Thanks for the virtual flowers Jason! ?
Comment is about Moral Abyss (blog)
Original item by Vautaw
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Sun 12th May 2019 00:12
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Sun 12th May 2019 00:09
Nice poem...I share you sentiment!??
Comment is about Life may go on (blog)
Original item by Hasmukh Mehta
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Sun 12th May 2019 00:02
Wonderful imagery...I too was there enjoying the splendour. Thank you?
Comment is about The Parade had formed (blog)
Original item by keith jeffries
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Sat 11th May 2019 23:57
Lovely sentiment! "the inter webs of eternal bliss"....great line?
Comment is about Moral Abyss (blog)
Original item by Vautaw
<Deleted User> (21818)
Sat 11th May 2019 23:51
Thank you Jason for commenting on my poem. Many wishes for another 75 yrs?
Comment is about Jason Bayliss (poet profile)
Original item by Jason Bayliss
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Sat 11th May 2019 23:48
Hi Jon, thank you for your continued support. Your comments are appreciated!
Comment is about Jon Stainsby (poet profile)
Original item by Jon Stainsby
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Sat 11th May 2019 23:46
Vautaw, Thank you for reading and commenting on my poems! Jane
Comment is about Vautaw (poet profile)
Original item by Vautaw
Martin Elder
Sun 12th May 2019 22:44
This is a fabulous poem that bears all the hall marks of an epic. I take your point about the sea battles of this time but just sailing across the med was fraught with danger. Many ships tended to hug the coastline if they could but that in itself was dangerous when a storm brewed. As a result there are a number of wrecks around the coasts.
Nice one John
Comment is about Mediterranean (blog)
Original item by John E Marks