Ha ha, I liked it before I read the comments. Reminds me of a poem I once tried to write with everything rhyming with the same word. You are right about the equation feel. And as Newberry said, very Sherlock Holmes...

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Thanks all for your comments. I'm genuinely glad no-one's liked it.
You might be right M.C. but I still hate it.
And yes Candice that's what I thought except I was thinking more HAL from 2001 a space Odyssey, you know, sinister and detached.
And also yes Dorothy, always write with the heart as far as I'm concerned ?.

J.

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Thank you so much, Mae! Yes it's an extraordinary poem and the rhyming pattern I tend to follow the most. I actually have that quote tattooed on my shoulder, I kid you not.

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Terrifying and so true?
Still to this day I haven't been able to say the things that so easily pour out of your pen.
Thank you for voicing them and so beautifully at that.
Mae

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It's nice to know that "we" over here are not alone!?
Thank you
Mae

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Beautiful! ?
Thank you for that lovely piece
Mae

Comment is about His Eyes (blog)

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Hey Heart of Lead! I saw your buo. It so happens that If is one of my most favorite poems especially that line a d that verse!
Love your sample?
Thank you
Mae

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I'm not so sure about the closeness of the two types, but I enjoyed your poem anyway Mark.

Comment is about HERO AND COWARD (blog)

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HMMMM ? It's a bit of a struggle I think hearts win every time.

Comment is about Poetic Dissection (blog)

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I like this! Often it is the hero and the villain juxtaposed. But perhaps the true opposites are in the one who takes action and the one who runs, but as you say, there is a thinner line between them than we would think.

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Yes! Thank you very much. One of my first and favorite digital art pieces.

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I hate this too. But I love it! It feels like you asked Siri to please write us a poem. ?

Comment is about Poetic Dissection (blog)

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Jon this is a beautifully crafted slice of real life that so many of us can relate to so easily.
Thanks for posting this
Nice one my friend

Comment is about Disturbing The Dead (blog)

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Sherlock Holmes - the creation of a medical mind - might not have
agrees with your own comment. ?

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Thanks ?

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Thanks ?

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I go along with DW about those lines - especially the "all front and
trousers their rears exposed" - perfectly judged to evoke a mental
image.

Comment is about city of birth (blog)

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I tell you what, I knew I'd hate this as soon as it came to me. Thank God we don't think like machines.

The perfect example for me of why you should always write with your heart.

J.

Comment is about Poetic Dissection (blog)

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A blog that encourages thought on human
behaviour and expectations..
Your lines remind me of a poem I wrote some time ago and i'm encouraged to re-post it

Comment is about Bravery (blog)

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Hi A.M! Love your passionate bio! Love your powerful sample! Great work and I loved the audio too!
Thank you?
Mae

Comment is about AM Cash (poet profile)

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"Only he knew
He died young
Head damaged
Body ravaged"

I think that says it all - the sheer cruelty of war.

Dorothy

Comment is about Grandad 1930 (blog)

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Lost Days

Faceless
are
those
who
are
imprisoned
within
themselves.

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Oh mate, what an absolutely beautiful poem. Favourite line amongst many, do you know what, I just re-read it and I can't pick one out. Really, really good. I love the understanding of not trying to, "Fix," somebody's sad face, but just accepting it as part of who they are. Loved this Ged.
And another one goes on the favourites list.?

J.

Comment is about Show me your sad face… (blog)

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Dear "Heart," you will my friend, you will. ?

J. x

Comment is about Every Last Chip (blog)

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Thanks Kate, I did enjoy writing this I do admit. I very much appreciate your comments ?

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"We had the tast of the blues"

"A town like malice"

authentic
Dorothy

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"it was a dark and stormy night"....Snoopy

thanks for reading my poem "New Book".
(coming soon, "Old Book.)

did you do the artwork in the photo?
if so...very good.

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Beautifully picturesque - you do it so well, please don't stop!

Comment is about city of birth (blog)

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"just have to trust there'll be enough time between now and then."

Sometimes life is a gamble, but certainly worth playing. Filling in the spaces with more than just breathing. Still looking for the map, the guide, the answer key but alas, I haven't found it yet.

Comment is about Every Last Chip (blog)

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Ah this made me smile. Just what I needed. As yet another American, it certainly seems fitting.

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Hi Jon, I can't believe I missed this. I felt as though you took me on a tour, and invited to tea with your Dad as he reminisced. I could imagine his hands clasping the photo. Absolutely beautiful.

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Hi Martin
Beautiful imagery, so much I could quote but virtually all of this Poem is a gem. Great to read. Enjoyed it immensely.

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Hi Ged
Clever piece with a great sense of rhythm
Nice one

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It feels like you made a little window for people to peer in on your love. Private moments made beautiful. Wonderful.

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Thanks Kate, I can see why that's one of your favourites, it's excellent.
And, also really true happiness, sadness, joy, loss, tears and laughter, all the opposing sides of the coin of life.

Thanks,

J. x

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Hi Ged,
I'm drawn to The butterfly girl, it feels like the start of a much grander story. I'm so glad I've discovered you.
I look forward to discovering more of your words.
Cheers, Kate

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I really like this

Comment is about Sometimes Things Just End. (blog)

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Jason, this is lovely. The idea of imbalance is one I like...for without one state, we can't appreciate the other. Therefore the bad times are a poorly wrapped gift. It reminded me of one of my favourite poems by Naomi Shihab Nye.

Kindness
Before you know what kindness really is
you must lose things,
feel the future dissolve in a moment
like salt in a weakened broth.
What you held in your hand,
what you counted and carefully saved,
all this must go so you know
how desolate the landscape can be
between the regions of kindness.
How you ride and ride
thinking the bus will never stop,
the passengers eating maize and chicken
will stare out the window forever.

Before you learn the tender gravity of kindness
you must travel where the Indian in a white poncho
lies dead by the side of the road.
You must see how this could be you,
how he too was someone
who journeyed through the night with plans
and the simple breath that kept him alive.

Before you know kindness as the deepest thing inside,
you must know sorrow as the other deepest thing.
You must wake up with sorrow.
You must speak to it till your voice
catches the thread of all sorrows
and you see the size of the cloth.
Then it is only kindness that makes sense anymore,
only kindness that ties your shoes
and sends you out into the day to gaze at bread,
only kindness that raises its head
from the crowd of the world to say
It is I you have been looking for,
and then goes with you everywhere
like a shadow or a friend.

Comment is about Every Last Chip (blog)

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i am indeed martin. reading from my new book.

hope to see you there!

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Thanks for the comment

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Thanks for the comment

G

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Thanks Andy and Stu.

Yep I must admit to have got a little lost and confused with all the flurry of activity Andy. Glad you liked the poem

Thanks for reading Stu. I do wonder whether I am doing the memory poems too much. But time will tell. Are you going to be guest poet at Sale in June. If you are I will try and get there.


Thanks again chaps, much appreciated


Martin

Comment is about city of birth (blog)

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How I've missed you Taylor. Your words will sustain me today.

Comment is about The Matriach (blog)

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Thanks John. It's true that if you look at it in the singular and objectively, you don't get sorrow and pleasure in equal measure, but we tend to find those two things, sometimes only because we need to, but sometimes because it's there. Thanks for always giving detailed and honest analysis. That's one of the reasons I always value your opinion so highly.

J.

Comment is about Every Last Chip (blog)

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Beautiful, stark and dark. Really love this.

J. x

Comment is about His Eyes (blog)

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Pithy poem. But it aint fair is it? "Sorrow and pleasure in equal measure" - nope. Some by nature and some by nurture and some by both are given so many advantages - physical attractiveness, intelligence, good genes, money, contacts/family.... a thought-provoking poem. John

Comment is about Every Last Chip (blog)

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That is really good, complex but really good. I'm going to have to read it again.☺

J. x

Comment is about Thelema (blog)

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Such a complex relationship..great piece ?

Comment is about Dear Mom (blog)

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As an american I will at least read the reviews

Comment is about New Book (blog)

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great words as ever martin, you do this kind of nostalgia very well

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