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suki spangles

Thu 27th Jul 2017 04:14

Cheers dystopian poetry fans!

David - the poem was in part inspired by Machiavelli observing that people in caves see shadows on the wall, but its source is a hidden flame. Or some thing along those lines.

Ray - cheers for the Poe compliment. I enjoy reading a bit of Poe now and again. I will check out the film if it is on TV, Thanks.

Here's this for you both. Inspired by Poe's Dream within a Dream.

https://youtu.be/Q4E1zMLghhY

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suki spangles

Thu 27th Jul 2017 04:00

Hi David,

Is there a cheeky hint of rock lyric parody to this? Mind you, I could imagine Nine Inch Nails doing this justice to such sentiments. Yeah!

SS

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Frances Macaulay Forde

Thu 27th Jul 2017 03:05

Love the layers and expressions of pain summed up by the word 'delete'.

(Are you really just 14 years old? Saying that, I do remember my teenage angst and still have the notebooks to prove it.)

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Frances Macaulay Forde

Thu 27th Jul 2017 03:02

Yes, I agree with Martin - those two last lines are very powerful.
And Rachel - darkly you.

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elPintor

Thu 27th Jul 2017 01:37

So very film noir--you must do a fedora while reading.

Rachel

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Tiffany

Thu 27th Jul 2017 00:55

Good! Can definitely feel the depth behind this poem.

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Tiffany

Thu 27th Jul 2017 00:50

My words every time I feel my life is a mess.
-Tiffany

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Martin Elder

Wed 26th Jul 2017 22:59

You seem to finding your feet more and more with your poetry or should it be, finding your voice.
nice one Rose

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Martin Elder

Wed 26th Jul 2017 22:53

those final lines are the killer of the whole piece for me David
sometimes love is the lie
when the lust has recededย 
great words my friend
Martin

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Martin Elder

Wed 26th Jul 2017 22:49

Truly beautiful Colin from start to finish as Cynthia says a pleasure to read. I haven't heard the words cubby holes used in a long time. But my favourite is
'the dovecote with waffle walls'
Nice one

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Wardah

Wed 26th Jul 2017 22:20

Sad and beautiful with a glimmer of hope. Its a good one.

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Wardah

Wed 26th Jul 2017 22:15

There seems to be a recurrent theme of death...

I like the references to food one can almost taste it. U make death sound delicious. That is certainly an interesting concept.

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Wardah

Wed 26th Jul 2017 21:58

Thanks for the comments Ameya I'm glad you liked it ๐Ÿ˜ƒ

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LEON STOLGARD

Wed 26th Jul 2017 20:35

๐Ÿ‘for leaving me dangling in a wonderful space.I also ๐Ÿ‘'d your POTW.

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LEON STOLGARD

Wed 26th Jul 2017 20:30

had a peek earlier today.So,great job made with (enhancing) the advice young man.

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LEON STOLGARD

Wed 26th Jul 2017 20:26

I'll 2nd that.

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LEON STOLGARD

Wed 26th Jul 2017 20:20

1 from the ๐Ÿ’“!

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LEON STOLGARD

Wed 26th Jul 2017 20:17

very much ๐Ÿ‘ it.
Would ๐Ÿ‘it even more if it isn't true.

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LEON STOLGARD

Wed 26th Jul 2017 20:13

(๐Ÿ‘๐Ÿ‘๐Ÿ‘) case of exiting my pit from the wrong-mebbe.

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LEON STOLGARD

Wed 26th Jul 2017 20:09

if that she-devil in the image is a good likeness R.C. then what the 'hell' are you doing tonight? just that I happen to have a lifetime spare.

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LEON STOLGARD

Wed 26th Jul 2017 20:03

before I'm given the big E aka my marching orders whenever that may be,I would like to thank all those who have commented.

And to Greg Freeman in particular for having struggled with my incapability to send through the Q&A's in time,but nevertheless sorted the problem out after getting his breath back from a long train journey! How's that for support!?

Much appreciated Greg! you'll have to choose a seasoned punter next time! haha! and thanks for the updated gig info,will check it out in the near future.

Sorry I didn't clarify which of the three poets work I'd like to have taken with me-'tough question!' as Parky says in his ad.So I'll take Mr Larkins wonderful work.

In conclusion,may I wish everybody on WOL good luck regarding the next headliner.

Thanks ALL in admin for the pleasure.Will I be chosen again? Pigs might fly!

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raypool

Wed 26th Jul 2017 19:45

Thank you fans. I always like to attack a theme when no-one is expecting it, so I thought i'd catch Santa with his pants down seasonally. I think Santa may actually be Christ in a suit and hat but with an insane smile. He does fulfil a promise if only temporarily but only if we believe, and I can't really change either into a believer or into the suit, even though I am the right age now. I much enjoyed your comments Col and David sparky to say the least. I remember doing a poem about Punch and Judy another example of worrying cross dressing. Thanks Emer for liking!

I'm just off for the medication - things are looking up!

Ray

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kishore karunik

Wed 26th Jul 2017 19:24

Missing from the scene,๐Ÿ’

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kishore karunik

Wed 26th Jul 2017 19:21

Fortitude does little to break down walls of the elderly,
Acid feels like water in my eyes,
For I am blind to the sound in my ears.๐ŸŒท

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kishore karunik

Wed 26th Jul 2017 19:17

๐ŸŒท๐ŸŒท

very good

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kishore karunik

Wed 26th Jul 2017 19:14

all right


That paper that held years and years of age,๐ŸŒท

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kishore karunik

Wed 26th Jul 2017 19:11

good

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kishore karunik

Wed 26th Jul 2017 19:06

fine

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Michaela Sheldon

Wed 26th Jul 2017 18:28

It is intresting how we keep certain values/things but later throw away because we create better ones hey? But we forget how important those things may be to other people around us. You hit the meaning on the nail, Colin!!

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M.C. Newberry

Wed 26th Jul 2017 17:48

Indonesia takes the hardest line of all with the dross that
deals in this rubbish.
Self-indulgence is the sin
That lets the body-abusers win;
Parasites of weak-willed lives
Knowing self-obsession thrives.
But whether its pills, crack, or hash,
There seems no lack of someone's cash.
Personally, I find it far from funny
How these dopeheads spend their (our?) money.

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Rose Casserley

Wed 26th Jul 2017 17:26

ta ladies and gentilians. I did say sorry afterwards P&S.
Why?

cos I'm the queen of bet hedgers! ๐Ÿ˜†

kindly Colinious,any chance of lending yours or will you need it for ha-ha-halloween? ta me owd mucker

Jemster-ta loveadovey


Rose ๐Ÿ’‹๐Ÿ’‹๐Ÿ’‹๐Ÿ’‹

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Rose Casserley

Wed 26th Jul 2017 17:18

Jemmo,this is BEAUTIFUL!and I adore the title.


later kiddo.



Rose ๐Ÿ’‹

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Rose Casserley

Wed 26th Jul 2017 17:13

and since they have grown your Rajesty,I better not keep a certain two other things apart. Wooh!


ta me darlin'



Rose ๐Ÿ’‹

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Ameya.

Wed 26th Jul 2017 14:41

thank you for reading ๐Ÿ˜ƒ
Well, no one is quite ready, but still they are ready; besides we will halt at our grave, when it is time for us to rest for eternity, until then, I'd say we sway our feet and enjoy the life dance instead ๐Ÿ˜ƒ

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Russell Thompson

Wed 26th Jul 2017 13:31

You rock me, daddy-o. Eight to the bar.

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Wolfgar Miere

Wed 26th Jul 2017 13:26

Very true Ray,

Amusingly I have seen Christ and Santa decoratively confused in China, it pleased me greatly as they are both false prophets.

Santa always made me feel very uneasy indeed, whereas Christ was just a conman with mental health issues.

David.

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adrian metcalf

Wed 26th Jul 2017 12:50

I like that idea! Thanks Jemima ๐Ÿ˜ƒ

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Jemima Jones

Wed 26th Jul 2017 10:22

Lovely to see you soldiering on Wendy.Much love.Jemima.

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Jemima Jones

Wed 26th Jul 2017 10:20

Loved the Poem very much Adrian but do you think the swapping around of 'daybreak' and 'crescent' might improve that particular line? Thank you.Jemima.

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Jemima Jones

Wed 26th Jul 2017 10:13

For me,a very very moving piece Connor and so well read.Thank you.Jemima.

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Jemima Jones

Wed 26th Jul 2017 10:10

brilliant Rose.A wonderful mingling of the serious and not so serious.Thank you.Jemima.

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Jemima Jones

Wed 26th Jul 2017 10:07

had the guy been mine Rose,you would haven't have had the slightest chance of coming within a hundred miles of him! Love how you put a lot into that one word Leon,as much as I love Karen's.Indeed they are Tom and we must keep them clear enough for everything good to get to the soul.Appreciate your comment and concern Raj hoping that you are in the same good health as I am.I think you two are romantic Patricia and Stefan,according to quite a few of your poems if they are anything to go by.Thank you.Jemima.

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Jemima Jones

Wed 26th Jul 2017 09:55

I had the age old subject of memories in mind when writing this piece.Sorry Rose,Patricia and Stefan if the ending nearly sent you down a wrong road.Glad you managed to go down the right one.Thank you.Jemima.

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Jemima Jones

Wed 26th Jul 2017 09:49

although I sometimes try to compose poems using the 'unusual' Patricia and Stefan,it can be quite a struggle.Thank you.Jemima.

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Colin Hill

Wed 26th Jul 2017 08:37

many yays to that - killer last line, all that's missing is a scythe.

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Colin Hill

Wed 26th Jul 2017 08:23

life is a continual
dance with death,
we flirt with him
and he with us,
but am I ready
to be waltzed
to my grave?
oh no!
oh not just yet!

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Colin Hill

Wed 26th Jul 2017 08:15

bit early Ray!

More and more Santa has come to represent our self-centred greed for consumerism. It's time he swapped his red cloak for a green one but can the masses be persuaded? I thinks not. The glaciers will melt and we will all be clinging to that landfill mountain of unrecyclable glitzy packaging, floating migrants in a swirling gyre of throwaway plastic.

Hang on, maybe Santa is Christ returned having a good old piss take as our mortal sins cast us ever more closer to hell's fiery pit of eternal damnation? And to think, all it took was one bite of an apple.

How's that for an interpretation Raymondo?

Merry Christmas!

Col.

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Colin Hill

Wed 26th Jul 2017 08:00

nicely thought out and written Terry.

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Colin Hill

Wed 26th Jul 2017 07:56

this reminds me of an old mirror I once had which I turned into a great work of art (lol). I scratched a poem into the varnished frame and added some embellishments. A few years later I got bored with it and threw it away much to the shock of my family - I had no idea they liked it that much and I was shocked at them being shocked. Anyways, we were all left with a blank feeling including the wall where it used to hang. Nice work Michaela and no doubt nothing to do with my interpretation. C๐Ÿ˜ƒL.

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