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Anya

Tue 25th Sep 2018 10:36

There is something raw about this poem, especially when you read it, I am coming back drawn by it, again and again...

Look forward reading and listening to more

Thank you

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Kate G

Tue 25th Sep 2018 10:34

Wonderful and very clever.

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Kate G

Tue 25th Sep 2018 10:32

Your poetry is so insightful Anya. I have felt this, that sense of something broken that can't be labelled. Beautiful.

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Kate G

Tue 25th Sep 2018 10:25

This made me ponder.... Really great.

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Kate G

Tue 25th Sep 2018 10:22

This could be my daily ode. Love it.

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Don Matthews

Tue 25th Sep 2018 09:38

Oh Elle, you're on the right track...😎

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Don Matthews

Tue 25th Sep 2018 09:33

I just can't understand this
Can't understand it Elle
Why no-one has responded
To tell you you write well

It's obvious to me
You're asking for feedback
Does no-one want to give it?
Why feedback do you lack?

Like you I want to know
On poems how did I go?
For as we both agree
Feedback is how we grow

D 😎

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Don Matthews

Tue 25th Sep 2018 09:19

MC echoes my same thoughts Elle 😎

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Becky Who

Tue 25th Sep 2018 07:45

This is great - can I use it with my English students? Could you write one about the overuse of the phrase "in a nutshell" too please?

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Jon Stainsby

Tue 25th Sep 2018 07:43

Thanks for like and the thoughts, Hugh.

A sad image.

Jon

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Wendy

Tue 25th Sep 2018 06:29

Hayley Thankyou for your comments you sound very much like me when younger only one parent and ill health most of my life my mum worked all her life full time in the mills and then Altzimers for 25 years . with not much education I had to just get on with things could never spell until iPad now look at me lots more to come well done love wendyx

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Wendy

Tue 25th Sep 2018 06:04

Thankyou for all your comments Rose you make me feel brand new my children all going into their fifties like them too lots of love Wendy x

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Wendy

Tue 25th Sep 2018 05:52

Thankyou for all your comments much appreciated my mind is a whirle it was a pleasure to see a man with such convictions and being truthful he would have my vote any day it’s a pity they are Ridiculed so much for being honest. I’m sure The truth will out. Kind Regards Wendy x

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Kate G

Tue 25th Sep 2018 04:22

Dark and delightful

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Big Sal

Tue 25th Sep 2018 02:33

Like some imagery conjured by Andrzej Sapkowski. More excellence.πŸ‘

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Don Matthews

Tue 25th Sep 2018 01:16

I like it Anya 😎

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john short

Mon 24th Sep 2018 23:07

Hi Becky, this works great as a performance poem and you give it a nice flowing delivery that makes it come alive. It always amazes me how some people can remember all the words of a poem without looking. Nice one.

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Charlotte Thomas-Rowe

Mon 24th Sep 2018 22:14

Thank you both ❀️

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Xoanxo

Mon 24th Sep 2018 22:03

Thank you Anya!!!

Thank you Rose, drifting would work too but I guess I went for flying in juxtaposition with the birds requiem who I viewed singing while resting on a branch...

Wow Ray!!! I would have never recognised you by your profile photo!!! Thank you!!! It was a great evening of fantastic poetry by a group of very talented poets!!! Very inspiring!!!

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Brian Maryon

Mon 24th Sep 2018 21:50

Trev - you've definitely given me food for thought!

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John Marks

Mon 24th Sep 2018 21:38

Hello Becky and congratulations!!

I loved this phrase in particular: "I was advised not to euphemize", I, at first, misread it as "euthanize"! There's a whole school of Psychology built upon the interpretation of malapropisms and slips of the tongue! I, like you, too, splatter rhyme all over my work and cling-clang along to iambic pentameter. Anyroadup, very well done Becky.

John

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Hugh

Mon 24th Sep 2018 21:15

So many homeless on our streets,
Hiding their bodies under dirty sheets.
Pleading for spare change in desperation,
Change landing in their costa cups,gratification.

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Nigel Astell

Mon 24th Sep 2018 21:06

Thanks Martin

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Trevor Alexander

Mon 24th Sep 2018 21:00

But what entertained
was something much dafter
when she complained
I kicked her in after

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Becky Who

Mon 24th Sep 2018 20:48

Thanks for all the kind comments guys! I really appreciate it!

Bxx

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220August

Mon 24th Sep 2018 20:39

With the first line I thought of the first lines of this song: Mark Knopfler - Are We in Trouble Now (https://youtu.be/Ri_y_BjIrDs). Great poem! Thanks for sharing...

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C Byrne

Mon 24th Sep 2018 20:37

do you keeping deleting / recreating your profile?

are you going to https://billetto.co.uk/e/naviar-haiku-fest-london-2018-tickets-302863 ?

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keith jeffries

Mon 24th Sep 2018 20:05

This poem is brimming with optimism but I am not certain I can say that I am looking forward to footsteps in the snow. A good poem. Thank you.
Keith

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keith jeffries

Mon 24th Sep 2018 20:02

Anya,
This poem has an almost mysterious quality to it in that one knows yet does not know what is broken or lost. Yet it has resulted in some kind of transformation leaving him bereft. It has got me thinking. Thank you for this
Keith

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Big Sal

Mon 24th Sep 2018 19:50

Type II - Type III Kardashev. Don't make Rose get to IV!

😡

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Jon Stainsby

Mon 24th Sep 2018 19:48

Intriguing.

Jon xx

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Big Sal

Mon 24th Sep 2018 19:46

Sounds very much like the concept of a book I am doing.

Well woven indeed Anya.

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Taylor Crowshaw

Mon 24th Sep 2018 19:14

Unique Don love your work..πŸ’•

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Taylor Crowshaw

Mon 24th Sep 2018 19:13

Enjoyed this Rose..πŸ’•

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Taylor Crowshaw

Mon 24th Sep 2018 19:12

Thought provoking poem. Whose voice speaks..

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Taylor Crowshaw

Mon 24th Sep 2018 19:09

I hope you fished it out,
and that she didn't shout.
I am a fan of infinity pools,
They are really cool..

Enjoy x x

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Taylor Crowshaw

Mon 24th Sep 2018 19:06

So true...Thank you M.C.

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John Coopey

Mon 24th Sep 2018 18:43

MC - I’m sure my finances would be safe (from me!). I feel less safe for my safety!

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Trevor Alexander

Mon 24th Sep 2018 17:22

Bit of a Phobia about humans? Or recalling Arnie?
Hope I picked it right! lol πŸ˜‚

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Trevor Alexander

Mon 24th Sep 2018 17:07

But just as long as the bill doesn't come to me me, eh?

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keith jeffries

Mon 24th Sep 2018 17:06

A good well written funny poem which was a joy to read.
Thank you
Keith

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M.C. Newberry

Mon 24th Sep 2018 17:06

This I like! Superior imaginative observations about the
finality of existence, our fears and our resistance to its
intrusion into our minds.
I'm reminded of the opening lines of a favourite poem from
the past:
Lady Life's a piece in bloom
Death goes dogging everywhere;
She's the tenant of the room,
He's the ruffian on the stair.

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keith jeffries

Mon 24th Sep 2018 17:02

Succinct but woefully true
Thanks
Keith

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M.C. Newberry

Mon 24th Sep 2018 16:58

Speaking as someone holding that position and power -
I chuckled at your own observations - and would merely
comment -
Rest assured when you start that final journey
Your future is safe via "power of attorney"!

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Wolfgar Miere

Mon 24th Sep 2018 16:54

Thank you Ray, I truly believe I wrote this subliminally about Brexit, I apologise for uttering the word.

Many thanks for the likes also.

David.

Sealed not with a kiss but with a large cheque.

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M.C. Newberry

Mon 24th Sep 2018 16:52

Consistent and constantly faithful in its depiction of the
various facets of a distressing condition. On a technical
side, I would prefer an alternative to the double use of
the word "take" in verse nine...but just maybe it fits with
the following line about being "repetitive"?

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Wolfgar Miere

Mon 24th Sep 2018 16:46

Hi Ray,
I sense you exploring cemeteries, wagon yards and disused stations again.

I did some digging around on Defford, found some great pictures and stories.

It is true I suppose that we are all existing beyond what was someone elses vanishing point, slowly reaching toward our own.

I note you write "here stands" which sets me wondering. ?

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M.C. Newberry

Mon 24th Sep 2018 16:42

Successful in evoking a time and place that is known to
many of us with origins in or a familiarity with the countryside. I can almost feel the rain dripping from
overhanging branches and feel the mud squelching
beneath my feet.
In my mind, I am once again
Meandering down a "memory lane".

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M.C. Newberry

Mon 24th Sep 2018 16:36

Your words reject any notion of acedia
And should be compulsory for the media!

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Jon Stainsby

Mon 24th Sep 2018 16:31

Cheers, Rose. πŸ˜ƒ

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