Steady on, Stephen! We've still got a cess pit. (Actually a septic tank).
I can relate to this. I was brought up as one of the scuzzie kids on a slum nicknamed "Little Moscow" and where the local councillor was, appropriately enough, a Communist. They pulled it down when I was seven and we moved to the new council estate slum.
Comment is about Unmade (blog)
Original item by Stephen Gospage
"From unmade roads," to me, connotates the plight of travellers, or the homeless. I thought this was a beautiful and vulnerable testimony to resilliance.
"Reputed brutish," I know that one. An ideal boxer is hungry.
Comment is about Unmade (blog)
Original item by Stephen Gospage
The last line of the final stanza is to be found in scripture and how true it is. Good Poem for Easter.
Thanks
Keith
Comment is about The Grand Experiment (blog)
Original item by Brian Hodgkinson Jr.
Sat 3rd Apr 2021 21:47
Thank you very much ?
I can't say there's been any hip hop influence, but I'll take it as a compliment ?
Comment is about L'Esprit de L'Escalier (blog)
Original item by Holden Moncrieff
There's too much tension in this one for me, I'm afraid.
Comment is about (blog)
Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas
I've missed your gift ?
Comment is about New Year's Morning, 2021 (blog)
Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas
Reminds me of Jimmy Dean's 'Big John's. Love this
Comment is about The Childe of Hale (1578-1623) (blog)
Original item by Mike Bartram
You dance with rhyme nicely, I love your stuff. Am I detecting a hip hop influence?
Comment is about L'Esprit de L'Escalier (blog)
Original item by Holden Moncrieff
Thank you, kind sirs, I will. As Rambo once screamed: "I can't turn it off."
Comment is about Psychosis (blog)
Original item by Ferris Ty Taylor
Clyde, that's lovely. Aviva this is a beautiful poem, to write this at 17 implies a great deal of genius, I think
Comment is about Reckless Abandon (blog)
Original item by Aviva Rifka Bhandari
Thank you for commenting Clyde ?
Good advice, I recall we did have some pale pink roses in the garden, but even more memorable were the blackberries and the Bramley apple tree - a lot of baked apples and apple crumbles. ?
Thanks also to everyone who has clicked 'Like' for this poem ?
Comment is about Reckless Abandon (blog)
Original item by Aviva Rifka Bhandari
I like the shaped poem best.
Take the blade to the garden
and cut a rose.
Tomorrow is a new day.
Comment is about Reckless Abandon (blog)
Original item by Aviva Rifka Bhandari
Thank you to Rose, Philipos and Adam for your very kind comments and to everyone for the likes. I am so glad that you all enjoyed this poem, which is partly autobiographical, although highly embellished. 'Something else', as you say, Rose.
I did once live on an unmade road, we did have a cesspit and my Mum boiled cabbage on a Sunday morning, but as for the rest, they are lurking on a collective memory which may or may not include mine. Fun to write, though. Thanks once again to all the readers and Happy Easter.
Comment is about Unmade (blog)
Original item by Stephen Gospage
As Brian says "Keep writing"
Keith
Comment is about Psychosis (blog)
Original item by Ferris Ty Taylor
Reflection is good for the soul and this poem is the epitome of it. An inner examination and cleansing.
Thank you for this
Keith
Comment is about REFLECTION (blog)
Original item by ShalomP
<Deleted User> (13740)
Sat 3rd Apr 2021 13:57
and can also do naughty things on kitchen table . That's what I was thinking anyway ha ha
Comment is about The Kitchen Table (blog)
Original item by d.knape
Thank you for commenting Ferris Ty Taylor. ?
I suppose it is one of the many mysteries and mystiques of poetry
Sometimes it seems more true when it rhymes
Sometimes it seems more true when it doesn't rhyme
(And then there's half-rhymes)
Though I couldn't judge it at the time, I think this poem had a lot of schematic confidence and maturity for an early poem.
Comment is about Troubled Water (blog)
Original item by Aviva Rifka Bhandari
Thank you for your comment Ferris Ty Taylor.
I'm really happy that this poem impressed you that much.
Though, I'm concerned that I won't live up to the expectation
Thank you for exploring back through some of my poems too.
?
Comment is about Freefalling (blog)
Original item by Aviva Rifka Bhandari
A well thought out poem which I find interesting.
Thanks
Keith
Comment is about "There, (in my heart)" (blog)
Original item by Emeka Collins
You subvert my expectation of a rhyme to allow for starker truths
Comment is about Troubled Water (blog)
Original item by Aviva Rifka Bhandari
Stunning. I swear the poets on here have drastically improved.
Comment is about Freefalling (blog)
Original item by Aviva Rifka Bhandari
This is a devestating read. So powerful
Comment is about "Lockdown at 67" (blog)
Original item by Emeka Collins
Prosaic and lyrical. So emotional. I love your stuff!
Comment is about "Holy Politics" (blog)
Original item by Emeka Collins
You're most welcome Keith, thank you for comment. It's more of a step away from reality, or at least it was written from one. I've got a few micro poems that I'm gonna upload this week, I find that writing them is a good exercise in writing impactfully.
Comment is about Psychosis (blog)
Original item by Ferris Ty Taylor
I find a lot of humour in your stuff, I'm probably gonna stop commenting now cos I'm starting to creep myself out but I'm so excited. Your poetry is amazing. I'm having a ball reading these, I hope you make money from writing
Comment is about Am I a Son of God? (blog)
Original item by Emma-Jane Stradling
I wrote a REALLY similar poem to this a few years ago
Comment is about Breathing Liquor (blog)
Original item by Emma-Jane Stradling
I love it when a poem doesn't breech advertising law
Comment is about Beautiful (blog)
Original item by Emma-Jane Stradling
Also got connotations of homophobia but I've been wrong before
Comment is about Dead Wood (blog)
Original item by Emma-Jane Stradling
Is this about bad sex or is my mind in the gutter?
Comment is about Dead Wood (blog)
Original item by Emma-Jane Stradling
Is this the realisation of the self? A brief poem which is loaded with content and worthy of much thought.
Thank you for this
Keith
Comment is about Psychosis (blog)
Original item by Ferris Ty Taylor
"Vicarious in its truth", does that refer to contagion? Very evocative. Your work really speaks to me, Emma I'm gonna fav your profile
Comment is about The unkindness of Covid (blog)
Original item by Emma-Jane Stradling
This is excellent. I love it so much!
Comment is about Monday in Tier 4, New Year Jan 4 (blog)
Original item by Emma-Jane Stradling
The final line of the first stanza hit hard. Love this
Comment is about Reforming Clay (blog)
Original item by Emma-Jane Stradling
Sat 3rd Apr 2021 09:00
Ghost Raders YES,
most of my readers have passed away
preceded by reading my poems.
?
Comment is about Aviva Rifka Bhandari (poet profile)
Original item by Aviva Rifka Bhandari
Thank you for reading and the nice comment!
Comment is about My Day (blog)
Original item by Mike Bartram
Nigel Astell
Sun 4th Apr 2021 01:04
1972
Andy N
a fighter
from day one.
1973
Big ears
got you
in a flap.
Comment is about #Haiku of Life 1972 and 1973 (as part of #NaPoWriMo) (blog)
Original item by Andy N