You manage to convey so much in so few lines of poetry, Holden. Stunning and I agree with Stephen, I can certainly see 'Waiting For Godot' in this poem.
Comment is about Absurd (blog)
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Hiraeth mawr a hiraeth creulon,
Sydd bob dydd yn tori nghalon.
Comment is about HIRAETH (blog)
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John,
On reading this poem my mind returned to when I was an altar boy at Benediction when we sang the words at the end of the second verse of the O Salutarius "O grant us life that shall not end In our true native land with thee". I always thought of this as being the place or dimension from where we came and to where we shall return. Here and now a transitory place in a "veil of tears" to be restored at our departure from this mortal coil. Am I on the right track?
I enjoyed this
Thank you
Keith
Comment is about HIRAETH (blog)
Original item by John E Marks
Ditto Julie. But a superb autumnal poem! ??️
Comment is about Autumn Mood (blog)
Original item by julie callaghan
Thanks for the comments Julie & Stephen! ?
And John, excluding 'don't forget' I've wrote 3 remembrance poems, & it's 2-1 in favour of WWI, so you may be right! A search for remembrance does bring a lot of WWI memorabilia
Comment is about The Last Call (blog)
Original item by Stephen W Atkinson
I heard it said that such is the hospitality in those regions that there isn't a Welsh word for "no". I'd like to believe it.
Comment is about HIRAETH (blog)
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I like this very much, Stephen.
Comment is about The word is love (blog)
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Beautiful indeed, Stephen. Is it just me or do others subconsciously set Remembrance in a WW1 context?
Comment is about The Last Call (blog)
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I think the technique, Stephen, is to shove a metal sleeve up first and then introduce the red hot poker down it. No wounds then, see?
Double the fun!
Comment is about EDWARD II (blog)
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Thanks so much for the note, Gail/John! ?
Comment is about New Year’s Fireworks and Your Snore (blog)
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Thank you Jennifer, that's very kind. It's good to celebrate the small moments sometimes ?
Comment is about Best In The Morning (blog)
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An emotional & exhilarating peice Keith
Comment is about Headlong (blog)
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That's gotta hurt ! ? Written with skill & wit as always, John ?
Comment is about EDWARD II (blog)
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Indeed,Stephen. I cry whenever I have my prostate exam.
I saw his tomb at Gloucester Cathedral, MC.
And thanks for the Like, Stephen A.
Comment is about EDWARD II (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
Thanks Jennifer, so pleased you like this. A revelation for drummers!
Ray
Comment is about FOUR FOUR (blog)
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I recall a visit to Berkeley Castle, to which Edward had been consigned by the evil queen and her lover Mortimer. It was
easy to imagine what a desolate place it must have overlooked
back then,.the nearest inhabitation a cluster of hovels beneath
its ramparts and the Severn sweeping by to add its mist and moisture to lower the spirits.. The couplet stays with me:
The screams through Berkeley's rafters ring
The shrieks of an agonising King.
The manner of his death was just as likely to be a bit of medieval vengeance for Edward's personal proclivities as well as a useful method of disguising evidence of murder.
Comment is about EDWARD II (blog)
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This is a beautiful poem, Stephen. Thank you.
Comment is about The Last Call (blog)
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I love the rhythm and pace of this poem, Keith. It makes the reader feel part of the action, which is a rather disturbing but also stimulating experience.
Comment is about Headlong (blog)
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Brought tears to my eyes, John, if you see what I mean.
Comment is about EDWARD II (blog)
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Thank you, Nigel, for your beautiful poetic comment.
And many thanks to Stephen, Rudyard, Holden and Pete.
Comment is about The word is love (blog)
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Thankyou for the Like, Holden.
I suspect the poker-up-the-bum story took hold because he was homosexual and was reinforced by Marlowe. (Chris, that is, not Phil).
Comment is about EDWARD II (blog)
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The next Away With Words Hull is on Thursday 2 December at 7.30pm at the Union Mash up, Princes Street, Hull.
Review is about Away With Words Hull on 18 Nov 2021 (event)
Sun 14th Nov 2021 03:43
Thank you for the very kind comment, John, I really appreciate it! ?
Comment is about Willow (blog)
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Wow. This is so powerful and moving.
By the way I am John. Gail's my wife!
Comment is about Willow (blog)
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I was mesmerised by this poem and needed to re read and re read it again. I liked the line "November is all old breath". A poem well crafted and thought provoking.
Thank you for this,
Keith
Comment is about The Lock-Up (blog)
Original item by David Blake
Thank you Stephen G, M.C Newberry and Stephen A, for your kind and thoughtful comments, they are much appreciated.
I hope that remembering such losses, in a collective way, might help to share the pain that they caused.
Ideally the world should find a way of living peaceably but sadly that continues to be out of reach. I live in hope.
Comment is about Haunted by Passchendaele (blog)
Original item by Brenda Wells
Very unusual subject but very topical. A fascinating read with a sting in the tail. Better to die or become obsolete? Jennifer
Comment is about Singularity (blog)
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So well put as always. Loved 'master of the stretch of skins, he moves in circles widdershins! Ever a pleasure to read. Jennifer
Comment is about FOUR FOUR (blog)
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Yes! And the socks who have "run from their mothers"...where do they sleep at night?
Comment is about The Resident Poltergeist (blog)
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Sat 13th Nov 2021 16:04
Thank you so much, Stephen, I'm honoured you say that! ?
Comment is about Willow (blog)
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I really enjoyed the humour in this poem which hits you with a surprise at the end. Manages to be poetic and funny. Great!
Comment is about New Year’s Fireworks and Your Snore (blog)
Original item by Candice Reineke
Thanks Holden and Stephen for supporting my poems - appreciated!
Thanks Stephen, I used that line also in the context of a sax player launching into a busy solo once! Well spotted rhyme. Also Charles Manson,,,,,
Ray
Comment is about FOUR FOUR (blog)
Original item by ray pool
Gail -thank you for the very kind words. My family, like so many
others, has experienced loss in war.
Comment is about NOVEMBER DAWN (blog)
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Hello Nigel, thank you for reading the poems and leaving your precious poetic comments. Much appreciated.
Comment is about Nigel Astell (poet profile)
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You are a wonderful wordsmith, Holden. Lovely stuff
Comment is about Willow (blog)
Original item by Holden Moncrieff
A poem worthy of some meditation. I was particularly drawn to the fifth stanza.
John, thank you for this
Keith
Comment is about In pursuit of the blue (blog)
Original item by John E Marks
A sombre poem of soul searching.
Thanks
Keith
Comment is about Regret (II) (blog)
Original item by JustKelvinMasilela
Discreetly passed pen included
paper strip secretly folded
on days like this
we often miss Maggie
explaining the Collage rules
to all poetic newcomers.
Comment is about November 2021 Collage Poem: Perplexing Forms (blog)
Original item by Stockport WoL
The last two lines
is why love works
in a way that
we can never understand.
Comment is about The word is love (blog)
Original item by Stephen Gospage
Dream the dream
hope can guide
God will love
darkness leave behind.
Comment is about 62. Poem (blog)
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Keith I agree with you about the energy the poem carries, i wrote this when I was at one of my lowest days in life that I saw nothing but a true meaning of a failure. However with time I will learn to see otherwise
Comment is about failure (blog)
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A vividly described encounter. I enjoyed this
Thank you
Keith
Comment is about The (f)EAR (blog)
Original item by Edbreathe
An almost unbearable tale and poem, Brenda. Thank you for bringing it to us with such skill and feeling.
Comment is about Haunted by Passchendaele (blog)
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I liked how you personalised the struggle yet linked to wider political issues. Very moving.
Comment is about SLEEP EASY (blog)
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I think this is deeply moving and profound. Excellent subtle inclusion of war imagery. Fabulous poetry!
Comment is about NOVEMBER DAWN (blog)
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julie callaghan
Mon 15th Nov 2021 10:06
Thanks for the lovely comment Stephen A ?
Thanks also for the likes.
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