Hello Mirna,
lovely to see you posting your poems again.
I love the upliftment in this one.
Hope it reflects how you feel.
love Janet.x

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Hi Mark
Just spotted your comment on my 'If I was...' poem. Ta for that (and the extra stanza!... maybe you're right i should just keep adding to it. Hell, why stop?

Anyway - that's how I came to your page and I love your stuff - hard to choose a favourite, nice mix of sinister, playful, quirky ideas and that all important 'miserable bastard' one at the end.
Hope to catch you live some time!

Comment is about Mark Underwood (poet profile)

Original item by Mark Underwood

Thanks for your kind comment... hey you're hot stuff yourself!

Comment is about Moira Eribenne (poet profile)

Original item by Moira Eribenne

Witty and unexpected turn at the end! Has a very surreal aspect with the brain on the mantle piece and can 'hear' the flow of the good intentions!

Comment is about Stand-alone intelligence (blog)

Original item by Shelley Ann Dwornik

Very powerfully imagined. The play on 'lies' is deeply affecting and conveys so viscerally the unsettling discordancy of language.
So kinaesthetic too. The parchment of the 'gaping bird's throat ' ..physically shattering.Superb!

Comment is about Ink lies seeping (blog)

Original item by Moira Eribenne

So true Steve, I feel your pain and understand your anger.
" The spittle of your vitriol will catch in the wind one day and burn your skin for all eternity"
Yes

Comment is about A Girl Like Faith (blog)

Original item by Stevie Turner

Dear poet and fellow slammer,
Tony congrats on your Irish Poetry Slam Win!
Keep slammin.
Pete

Comment is about Tony Walsh aka Longfella (poet profile)

Original item by Tony Walsh aka Longfella

Hi Louise, great to see you and have a chat. Thanx again for your comments about your work, really enjoyed your stuff tonight and your performance, well presented!

I will more than likely be at the Fredup event at the Green Room next week , but even if I'm not I will e-mail you the details about next months theme and number to ring etc.

Right hope to see you soon, cheers Jeff X

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Original item by Louise Fazackerley

The road to 'Inner Peace' expressed so well in your words. I enjoyed this poem

Comment is about Hidden World Unknown (blog)

hi Richard, Carla's fine, think she's coming watching me at a gig I'm doing on saturday in Bolton!

Thanks for comments about my poem, will catch up with yyour recent entries soon, been busy and off to wigan tonight!!

Comment is about Richard Brooks (poet profile)

Original item by Richard Brooks

Some roads lead to nowhere

You just stand in the middle

Looking for a way out, but then

"What if I stayed here?”


good philosophical point!

the problem is not where we are all heading, it is where we all stay.

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"Many a fool has been caught in the crossfire of temptation

Shot, left to die beneath scorching sun by those wronged

Still like a lizard I crawl toward new her, be dammed each nation"

I like these lines Phil, it was just getting going for me!!!!!

I reckon you can just put 'the riggin is at breakin point' as its fun to place the heart there ourselves

I love the sentiment in this poem Phil

Comment is about Emotional Rainbow (blog)

Original item by Phil Golding

etc.. etc... etc...

I found myself putting my own words where you left a gap. Which made me smile.
However, even though i love the concept of your poem Richard. I feel you could do a much better job on it. ( in my extremely humble opinion.)

Hello, love Janet.x

Comment is about Repetition (blog)

Original item by Richard Brooks

Its great how you managed to show the resuer as the one needing the help of the lady in the long run as he had amnesia...

Comment is about Richard Brooks (poet profile)

Original item by Richard Brooks

The I Think Your Sexy poem would make good lyrics to a rap song...

Comment is about Moira Eribenne (poet profile)

Original item by Moira Eribenne

I love the Pallette poem, a well deserved featured poem...

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Hi Belinda, did you know your just under me now on the poets showcase list!

I've just read your reply to me on your comments! Great stuff, don't worry made me laugh, easy to do, I commented on someone's profile once about a poem they hadn't even written, easy done!

Thanks for your comments about my sanctuary. I see what you mean about the 1st stanza, never even crossed my mind! Fair point really, but I think I'll have to leave it in as it has the title in it! It's probably in my way setting the scene, thanks though very useful.

Teaching English and learning Japanese, wow, sounds great, a friend of mine is in Thailand doing the same thing, but not learning japanese obviously!

Right brew time catching up with more poetry, feel free to look at my other months work on the blog entries (theres all sorts of stuff - even one about using the correct Queens english - you will teach 'em better than they do here!) if you get time and let me know what you think, really appreciate it!

Bye for now, Jeff X

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Hi Belinda

As you can imagine, I prefer take 2 by far, love the way you've highlighted the centre of Zombieland being on the underground. I can see them on their own little missions without a care for anything else! How profound, as you said, they can't see the wood for the tress, great stuff, Jeff x

Comment is about Zombies Take II (blog)

Original item by Belinda

Hi Emily,
I think this shows a kind of human frailty?
We all get days like these.
I really like this one. It feels almost child-like.
Begging for protection. Feeling the need to be strong enough to be both an oven glove and an egg face.
Love Janet.xx

Comment is about Egg Face (blog)

Hi Melissa,
Yes you certainly dug deep for this one.
Metaphorically and literally it seems.
I know exactly what you mean by "awakening yesterdays demise."

Keep 'em comin', as they say.
Love Janet.x

Comment is about Tether (blog)

Very funny with some fantastic rhyme.
You're always on the ball when it comes to taking the pith out of the politicians.
ps. spot the deliberate mistake?

Love Janet.xx

Comment is about Downing Street pillow talk (blog)

Hi Freda,
Really explains so well, the feeling of being lost in the act loving.
It's lovely. Love Janet.x

Comment is about Love Song (blog)

Original item by Freda Davis

Hi Gabriella,
love the romantic image in this.
If it's true, you're a very lucky girl.
I can't recall anyone doing anything quite so romantic as writing a poem for me but it's on my wish list.

Love Janet.xx

Comment is about I READ YOUR POEM (blog)

Ah! Who says fate is of the male gender?
Personally i think she's a bitch!

Apart from that. Fate is following your destiny.
So depending on whether or not you follow the intuitive guidance from inside yourself. Fate becomes good or evil.
That's fate!

Oh well. So i've been told anyway.
That line in your poem about being the controlled and the controller is so very true.
We either allow people and things to control us and our destiny / fate, or we don't.
That's fate. Master it.

Forgot to say, love this thought provoking piece from you.
Hello, by the way.
Love Janet.xx

Comment is about Fate (blog)

Original item by Richard Brooks

Hello Scott,
Your poem is so very simply written and yet evokes much beauty.
I'm in full agreement with Moira and Val.
Love Janet.x

Comment is about Bodies (blog)

Hi Richard,
I'm gonna dedicate this to my ex husband.
Especially the first two stanzas.
Didn't know what he had till he lost it.

Quite refreshing this poem. I feel much better now. Thanks.
Love Janet.xx

Comment is about Are We Forever? (blog)

Original item by Richard Brooks

Hello Antonionioni,
I quite like this poem but have to admit to having to read it three times before picking up the rhythm.
Some great lines though.

Love Janet.xx

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Mums the word

Comment is about poem for the depraved (blog)

Hi Moira

I aim to please! Love your comments, and glad you like my sanctuary poem. I've been on here 4 months and love it! If you wanna look back at other blogs of mine, feel free, music stuff and all sorts!!

And yes, love a bit of rhthym like yourself, and it's hotting up in here! Don't need the fire on! Oh and the month has been extended for you, its an indefinite offer!

Bye for now Jeffarama! X

Comment is about Moira Eribenne (poet profile)

Original item by Moira Eribenne

Yes Darren its basically a poem saying that believe that fate decides everything if anything... this is a paradox in itself I guess because this would mean fate doesn't exist so how can I write a poem about it!

Comment is about Fate (blog)

Original item by Richard Brooks

Dear Jeff,

I live and work in Japan as an English Teacher, that's all they would allow me to do here :)).

I teach children and some adults, but mostly children :).

I will read your poem shortly after my brew :).

Following your commemts I revised my poem and I'll post Zombies Take II on the blog.

Look forward to your comments, and to reading your poem.

Belinda x

Comment is about Belinda (poet profile)

Original item by Belinda

Thanks as usual for the hints and tips.I really must watch my grammer, its just lazyness, or maybe because I'm rushing to make the blog entry without my manger seeing that i'm on the internet.

Comment is about Are We Forever? (blog)

Original item by Richard Brooks

The hardest thing to do is admit your sirst love wont be your last love
the cowardice thing to do is let your first love think your her last love


I think the above statement is great and perhaps, just perhaps, that's where the piece could end?

Usually with poems that ask questions the writer will include an answer of sorts. It may even be an answer that compels a reader to ask more questions - and so it goes on.

Just a little thing that jarred Richard - 'your' should be a contraction of 'you are' which is 'you're' you have written - let your first love think your her last love. The first is correct the second 'your' isn't.

Some great lines though - remember when your kisses led to biting. Now I bite in frustration of you.

That's women for 'ya.

Comment is about Are We Forever? (blog)

Original item by Richard Brooks

Hi Richard - At first I was a little confused as to what the message was. Is that the paradox of not recognizing 'fate' and its concept.
Yeah, fate is indeed a funny 'un. Let me think about this for a while...

Comment is about Fate (blog)

Original item by Richard Brooks

A gift of poem Moira!
Wilderness eyes!

Comment is about Sack the sat nav (blog)

Original item by Moira Eribenne

Reflective and searching...and your writing unchains words and worlds! POWER!

Comment is about UNCHAIN ME (blog)

Great sense of escalation and trance like repetition as words declare themselves anchored to the loved one. Love the ritualistic aspects of your writing!

Comment is about I LOVE YOU. I LOVE TO LOVE YOU (blog)

Very good Pete . Says it all well..

Comment is about Confessions from a bad hotel (blog)

I love this gentle poem, its full of images and feeling Scott. Good work

Comment is about Bodies (blog)

Utterly beautiful...moving, capturing the elemantal nature of deep connection.

Love it,
Moira

Comment is about Bodies (blog)

yeh john cooper clarke is my uncle babes

Comment is about Richard Brooks (poet profile)

Original item by Richard Brooks

Great this A, had good laugh, its so true but from a poetry point of view its well balanced, cheers Jeff

Comment is about Downing Street pillow talk (blog)

Hi Melissa,

thanks for sharing, glad you dug it out. Might be a while back but from the heart as always, and as deep as you know I like it!

thanks for your messages, good to hear all okay & glad you liked Man in the Moon, Jeff :-)

Comment is about Tether (blog)

i'm definately depraved

Comment is about poem for the depraved (blog)

Rang my bell! Theres another song! Good fun, nice one Gabriela, think I'll use the cold bath after Ieuan! Jeff X

Comment is about DING MY DONG !!!! (blog)

Hi Belinda, or whatever it is in Japanese!

Good to know you appreciated feedback, and thanks for your comments about my work, means a lot.

I can imagine its quite manic in many parts of Japan although I''ve never been and the frustration came through in your poem

How did you end up in Japan and what are you doing there? Apart from the capital and a few cities.

Good luck with the language - I don't know much about Japanese, apart from that all words end in a vowel or the letter 'n' - mine of useless information!

Good to hear from you, take care Jeff X

ps i've put a new poem on tonight!

Comment is about Belinda (poet profile)

Original item by Belinda

Hi Moira, no probs, you can amend it. Just click on edit whe you're logged in and amend, when you save it, it will post it again with same comments etc, just in case you didn't know, good to see you on the site, good init! Jeff x

Comment is about Moira Eribenne (poet profile)

Original item by Moira Eribenne

hey gabz its the 1 to perv form

Comment is about 6284 (blog)

ya ya ya its the Gabriella come back edited version!

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lovely cum back ;)

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