Are We Forever?

Tuesday 9th September 2008 12:04 pm

I remember when your arms were inviting
and your tongue didnt move just to correct my point of view
Remember when our kisses led to biting?
Now I only bite in frustration at you

Your bed used to keep me warm
now I wake up to insomnia freezing my bones
Our arguments make me want to be alone
But when i'm away I miss the love we own

Can we go back to the way we were?
Have we come to far to relinquish the fire?
Can I bear to wake up with you not there?
Will our hearts forever burn if we stay together?

If we remain on this ship will it sail us to a place where love is unrequited?

Should our hearts be invited?

The hardest thing to do is admit that your not one but two
Are we forever?

How long is forever?

Could the essence of doubt in questioning be the answer?

Tell me where should I be
what door is for me
what is forever?
Are we forever?

The hardest thing to do is admit your first love wont be your last love
the cowardice thing to do is let your first love think you're her last love

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Jeff Dawson

Tue 16th Sep 2008 17:09

Hi Richard this is good stuff, very sad obviously, no surprise there!!

Some great lines here and unfortunately I can identify with the sentiments.

Anyway, something spooky, I was reading this listening Echo and the Bunnymen. It was the album 'Evergreen' and as they say on there funnily enough - 'Nothing ever lasts forever', which I think I'll have for my funeral!

Don't worry I'm okay, although you might not think so when you read my latest poem! 'When I'm Down' - Hope you like it, keep up the good work, Jeff

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Tue 9th Sep 2008 18:57

Hi Richard,
I'm gonna dedicate this to my ex husband.
Especially the first two stanzas.
Didn't know what he had till he lost it.

Quite refreshing this poem. I feel much better now. Thanks.
Love Janet.xx

Richard Brooks

Tue 9th Sep 2008 12:46

Thanks as usual for the hints and tips.I really must watch my grammer, its just lazyness, or maybe because I'm rushing to make the blog entry without my manger seeing that i'm on the internet.

darren thomas

Tue 9th Sep 2008 11:44

The hardest thing to do is admit your sirst love wont be your last love
the cowardice thing to do is let your first love think your her last love

I think the above statement is great and perhaps, just perhaps, that's where the piece could end?

Usually with poems that ask questions the writer will include an answer of sorts. It may even be an answer that compels a reader to ask more questions - and so it goes on.

Just a little thing that jarred Richard - 'your' should be a contraction of 'you are' which is 'you're' you have written - let your first love think your her last love. The first is correct the second 'your' isn't.

Some great lines though - remember when your kisses led to biting. Now I bite in frustration of you.

That's women for 'ya.

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