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You And Me Babe

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YOU

 

I stood in your shadow

In awe

Too in awe

Of the brilliant mind

That could blind yet bring sight

To you

The binding blowtorch

And the scorch from the heat

Of you

The weight that could crush

And the rush and the push

Of you

The know who I am

And the know what I want

Of You

I listened

I watched

I drank you in

Never let you in

Had I ever unfurled, uncurled

Been just what I am

You would have known

With brilliant eyes

That you

Were not worthy

Of me.

 

 ME

 

If ‘I’ Wasobel

You could ring a ding ding me

If I was a song

You could zing zing zing zing me

Oh the side splitting

Rib cracking

Phlegm in the throat of me

The higgerty jiggerty

Jumping jack joy of me

The wouldn’t hurt a hair

On the head of a fly of me

The try not to ask too much

How and the why of me

Cos I am as bright

As a spectrum of light

In a soapy soft bubble

That pops on your skin

Not exactly exacting

I’d love every fault of you

Hug and adore

The skin and the salt of you

From the head to the toe

To the nail on the boot of you

All that you see

Why that’s me.

 

 

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Comments

<Deleted User> (6344)

Sun 21st Jun 2009 14:53

Hi Isobel,

Thanks for the comment on my poem. I really enjoyed 'You and Me Babe'. Original, witty, and touching.

Rachel

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Jeff Dawson

Sat 13th Jun 2009 13:50

Great stuff Isobel, and well performed at Wigan, I'll be in touch soon, Jeff XX

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George Stanworth

Sun 7th Jun 2009 15:58

Hi Isobel.
Thanks for your comments regarding 'Despair'.
I think 'You and Me Babe' is excellent.
There's some grat lines in this such as the 'Binding Blowtorch'. I agree with some of the other comments that the poem is full of rythm.
George

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winston plowes

Wed 3rd Jun 2009 11:43

Hi... This is fantastic Isobel. Love the little tricks and loops it performs and surprises you with its turns and twists. Great to meet you in Bolton. Win xx

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Gus Jonsson

Sat 30th May 2009 09:47

Hi once again Izo

The sizzling snappy rhythm is wonderful great lines

The intertwining of the couplets are superb
Particularly like

The higgerty jiggerty
Jumping jack joy of me
The wouldn’t hurt a hair
On the head of a fly of me

Just love the delicate under apparel off this poem!!!


Gus x

Pete Crompton

Fri 29th May 2009 22:59

LoVe ThIs YoU aNd Me BuSiNeSs

great double wammy.
great summer scorcher.


blinding blowtorch = thumbs up
skin and the salt of you = thumbs up

super work.

Im a fan of this (not sure insert poetic term here) this....er " the xyz of me" I too have used similar so this poem or these poems ring a bell for me.

they err ring the bell of me.

"slide down the leg of me"
"dredge the dregs of me"
"sledge the sludge of me"

scmashin IsObEla
im always looking forward to reading your poems, im poppin ya on my fan list

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Andy N

Fri 29th May 2009 22:03

Interesting stuff, Isobel.. Would be interested learning more about this as I think you really have something there.. Have you performed this yet?

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