"in the dim light of a sleepy sun" I'm traveling with you David, traveling with you.......!
thanks for leaving an comment 2.
Ally

Comment is about David Franks: Walkabouts Verse (poet profile)

Original item by David Franks: Walkabouts Verse

This is So- So- Soooo - Good, Jeff. Welcome to our Boards.

Comment is about Punk's not Dead!! (blog)

Original item by Jeffarama!

Afraid a gremlin crept in in the editing: the bit about Caroline England says in my original script 'Pozzian, sfumato type pieces', a reference to the late Italian poet Antonia Pozzi and to the sfumato painting technique. What appears in the review sounds more like an Italian footballer who's gone out for a quick fag. But it was close.

Comment is about Ugly Tree Reviewed by James Hartnell (article)

Original item by Julian Jordon

HI Melissa,
Nice poem!

Comment is about Clouds Over Sky (blog)

HI Melissa,
Loved the poem!

Comment is about Taste of Love (blog)

HI Richard,
Loved the poem!

Comment is about I Love The Night (blog)

Original item by Richard Brooks

HI Alison,
Very nice poem.

Comment is about The Ghost of Me (blog)

Original item by Alison Mary Dunn

HI Peter,
This is a very nice poem. take care

Comment is about my howling hollow (blog)

I agree with, Pete - canny use of verse, photography/light.

Comment is about The Ghost of Me (blog)

Original item by Alison Mary Dunn

'I am autumnal to the touch'

great line.

I like the draining coldness of this poem.
The ghost white of the image adds to the howling hollow of the image you paint.

I must write an antithesis for this

Comment is about The Ghost of Me (blog)

Original item by Alison Mary Dunn

I enjoyed your two poems.I like the line about jumping off the bridges.

Also I really enjoy the sentiment of 'letting go' very clever the way you use the painted nails / paint pots idea to show the progression and ageing and the growing up.

the nails that wave goodbye, with the armour of the red gloss....but would they one day come back with tales to tell...................is there ever a true goodbye.?

great work
Look forward to more.

Comment is about Helen Shay (poet profile)

Original item by Helen Shay

How can I follow the wonderful words of Melissa, if only to say that you've moved me deeply with the hope that springs from your beautiful poetry.
Your soul glows with possibilities. Perhaps you saw it through the curtains...

Ally x

Comment is about Crack in the Curtains (blog)

Original item by Phil Golding

Frank your poems are quite out there. I checked out your site. I'm so impressed by your very bold creations. Shadows is powerful. I agree with Darren's comments, the ending is pretty brilliant.
thanks a lot for sharing.

Ally

Comment is about Frank Burton (poet profile)

Original item by Frank Burton

Richard, I loved you poem so much. Your words have taken me completely to those times 'quite often' when I have felt like this. It reminded me of walking home in the autumn rain at night. My bike had a puncture so all I could do was walk with it through a flooded tree lined street where countless leaves had fallen and traffic literally sped by and splashed the puddles on me.
I was in that moment and didn't give a damn. It was amazing. You're poem has all of this.

Please don't stop putting those thoughts down on that mobile!

Ally

Comment is about I Love The Night (blog)

Original item by Richard Brooks

Hi Jeff - us Bolton lads have to stick together. Welcome to WOL and I hope that you feel that your contributions are read. They usually are, but many people don't feel that it's their place to add comments to other people's work for many different reasons.
Anybody that mentions The Stranglers in their work gets my vote, I'm a big fan and have watched them recently (back stage no less) which is one gig closer to my 50 Stranglers gigs. (44 at present).
Whatever the reason for your writing, you'll find that if you have an audience, then it should develop with the right kind of feedback.
Regarding your poem, it was a trip down memory lane for me too. I was a keen Stranglers fan back in 1975 - but didn't consider myself a punk. I hated the 'Pistols' but loved The Ruts. I can't even begin to explain why?
keep writing and posting...

Comment is about Punk's not Dead!! (blog)

Original item by Jeffarama!

Another intimate piece with an intensity that is obvious. You are asking lots of questions Melissa without touching upon how you would perhaps attempt to remedy the 'situation'. As the poem is so intimate, sometimes a critique is not taken too well and some take it as a personal attack - I hope not. I enjoy your poetry simply because it has an honesty to it that many fail to release in their work. Some poetic works have what is referred to as a 'turn' and I think that one could be used here to great effect. You ask lots of questions - why not try to answer them in the final stanza. This could reinforce your reason for questioning yourself or simply provide the answer as to just WHY you ask so many questions. (relationship breakdown of a intense love or a close family member whom you loved has died). By bringing in the reason, or at least having an inference to it can allow the reader to empathise with you that little bit more.
Your work is very, very readable.
Thanks for sharing.

Comment is about Taste of Love (blog)

Hi Richard, this is marvellous!! Night is a time I like and I felt like I was there.

Thanx for comment on my poem, Punk's not Dead, even if the Queen is!! Cheers Jeff

Comment is about I Love The Night (blog)

Original item by Richard Brooks

Hero's are few and far between, and perhaps one day our world leaders will make heroic choices.

Your verse has provoked much thought.

Thank you, and thank you for the compliments on my last blog.

Comment is about Clouds Over Sky (blog)

hope you like his poem everyone! I wrote it on my mobile while walking home from uni. Poetry should be written in second hand books with a fountain pen but all mine seem to originate on my mobile phone! lol

Comment is about I Love The Night (blog)

Original item by Richard Brooks

wicked poem! "Only the fakes survive" Johnny Rotten

Comment is about Punk's not Dead!! (blog)

Original item by Jeffarama!

Thanks for that great review Dave. I had hoped to get to this and didn't make it. I really wish I had.

Comment is about Dropping the Mask (blog)

Original item by Dave Morgan

Hi Everyone, hope you like this, comments welcome!!!

Comment is about Punk's not Dead!! (blog)

Original item by Jeffarama!

I love how this poem opens like a rose in bloom. Every word brings an image of running through a maze of thought with words etched within the labyrinth's walls. The eyes are windows to the soul, and your mind is a blueprint of discovery and beauty.

Comment is about Read my Mind.... (blog)

Original item by Alison Mary Dunn

My heart goes out to you, and I drink in every word spoken and written by your hand. You call me brilliant, but I am but a small star next to your crescent moon. Time is endless when we write, and dreams keep hope in the future. We never know what the next chapter brings, but if we can see a crack in its facade, maybe it we will see something good, something great.

Comment is about Crack in the Curtains (blog)

Original item by Phil Golding

You have the life of the Artic hare well explained here.

Comment is about christine bousfield (poet profile)

Original item by christine bousfield

I loved the imagery in the poem of the dead wasps in the windscreen and the pheasents fluttering in the breeze

Comment is about Gaia Holmes (poet profile)

Original item by Gaia Holmes

Thank you Louise

I didn't know I was going to write this. It sort of just came out. It made me feel funny too.

Comment is about Only Child (blog)

Original item by Malpoet

Great review Dave!
And yes it was a good night and I though Aaron was brill.
Just a pity it's going to cost me three points and a fine for speeding - Argh!

Comment is about Dropping the Mask (blog)

Original item by Dave Morgan

Has Darren been Tango'ed or Tenerifed?

Comment is about Darren Thomas at the Tudor House, Wigan April 2008 (photo)

This is a very simple poem, and a very beautiful one. The subject is small, and is almost a snapshot, and the open structure allows it to be expanded. Very nice indeed.

Comment is about Letting-Go (article)

Hi, thanks for the kind words!

I really like Big Eyes Blinking Blankly, it's incredibly powerful.

Gem :)

Comment is about Tomás Ó Cárthaigh (poet profile)

Original item by Tomás Ó Cárthaigh

hey, clarissa. Sorry I'm so late in replying... I'm getting lost around here! Anyways.. thanks.. it's nice to be different!

Comment is about Dai Miles (poet profile)

Original item by Dai Miles

i got gooseflesh. well done.

Comment is about Only Child (blog)

Original item by Malpoet

I agree with George: simple, perfect.
The writer's implied sadness touches me as I read: doesn't cling any more; cooler hand; she'll have her own varnish...
all point to the writer's anticipation of, what? rejection, increase in loneliness with the increase in her child's independence.
The wave goodbye is a wonderful touch, great imagery. raw, honest, well crafted and - sorry Tomás - better for not rhyming. I say this because I feel the raw honesty would be lost if Helen had tried to force it to rhyme.
This poem could not be 'better'; it just is.
Lovely choice, Sally.

Comment is about Letting-Go (article)

Hello, Tomas

You are doing great translating from one language to another. I was not aware of Ireland having own Language...Interesting!

GREAT WRITE!

Regards,
Zuzanna Musial

Comment is about Poems in the Irish Language with English Translations (blog)

Original item by Tomás Ó Cárthaigh

Thanks Helen and Mel

Thoughts of Bordeaux with Wolers.

This is genuinely about the level of my French, but it is not my behaviour. I would not have had the courage to approach any of the French ladies or to have faced the beating up I would have got when I came home. I just settled for vast quantities of alcohol and lascivious thoughts.

Comment is about L'Amour Franglais (blog)

Original item by Malpoet

If this poem were perfume...it would be intoxicating.

Lovely.

Mel
x

Comment is about Surrender No 5 (blog)

Original item by Shelley Ann Dwornik

I second Helen's comments. It is a very, very funny poem. where do you get your inspiration.

A fantastic poem.

Mel
x

Comment is about L'Amour Franglais (blog)

Original item by Malpoet

HI Mr Brooks, I loved this poem, so smart of you ! How much do you want for the pen? Try not to worry about what others think of your writting, I keep telling my self the same thing.I have a bad case of writters block at this time. So good job and let me know how much that pen is? LOL

Comment is about READ THIS!: Unique Pen for sale to all Poets (blog)

Original item by Richard Brooks

Dear Mr Brooks,
I certainly wouldn't send round heavies to steal your shoes because I've seen your shoes - lol.
I wouldn't pen-a-lise you either as we've encountered this very problem before and I'll send you a note on how to deal with it.

In the mean time try not to worry, always remember a pen's got a very limited intelligence even though it is mightier then the sword...I shouldn't have said that should I? Oh dear...

Comment is about READ THIS!: Unique Pen for sale to all Poets (blog)

Original item by Richard Brooks

very deep poem. Its the worst thing to deal with when family are in the hospital, its the only place we want to be because we want to be there for them yet at the same time its the last place we want to be. Best wishes

Comment is about Hospital (blog)

Just wanted to point out that, in order for the record to be rigorous and difficult to beat, we want to recruit poets who have already performed at least one gig in front of an audience and who will be performing their own original work.
Tony Kinsella

Comment is about How Many Poets Does it Take to Change a Light Bulb? (article)

Hello, Philip

I think you already got all the answers to your own problem with your health. Your wisdom has been enormous! This stanza has all the answers.


***I may not be able to hear as well as you
but how many of you actually try and listen
I may not be able to see as well as you
but how many of you actually use that vision
I may not be able to be as steady on my feet as you
but how many of you get drunk, stagger home and or drive
I may not have the same physical strength as you
but how many of you actually use their strengths
I may not have the same beliefs and values as you
but how many so you have the courage and conviction***

Well written- research like poem.

GREAT WRITE!
Zuzanna

Comment is about Danger of Societies Shackles? (blog)

Original item by Phil Golding

Hello, Philip

The poem explains a lot of your sorrow for the unwanted health issue. Just keep positive thinking and take your medicine God will help you to cope with this. Just to assure you that you are not alone with this. Yes, you are young, but with this slow illness, you have many years ahead of you if properly monitored. I worked with patients in the hospital for over 22 years. You have lots to offer to the family and the World as long as you take good care of you. Perhaps monitoring your food and taking good care every day will help. Writing is good therapy as well. Keep up the fabulous work!!

THANK YOU!
Zuzanna

Comment is about Word Trigger Memory Churn (blog)

Original item by Phil Golding

Hello, Graham

What an excellent write you created here!
The metamorphosis in each line- well implemented.
I wonder how you would like as being one of the pebbles on the mountain. This is lovely.

Your imagination is very impressive and great poem.

Thank you,
Zuzanna

Comment is about pebble (blog)

Original item by Graham Eccles

Hello, Phil

Your poem has been written with all the deep feelings and the fear of who you will become when the illness progresses. There is good medicine out there to slow the process. You are doing great, Fight for the best in your life.
Be strong. Your family loves you. Your sons love you the way you are. Trust me on that!

I went trough very difficult time in my life with family health so I am speaking of my own experience. Just think of those who lived up to 80 plus and affected by this illness. I love your poem so much. You wrote this extremely well.

"""Then I say be dammed with all my Parkinsonism
I have a lot to offer and by God the world will get it"""
Do your best and God will do the rest!

The wrapping is self assuring and very powerful.
With my best wishes always;

Thank you,
Zuzanna

Comment is about It’s not just me (blog)

Original item by Phil Golding

Hello, Antonio

I am sorry that you have a family health issues. You have captured the very essence of the hospital scenarios in your Sonnet.
I hope your loved ones will be fine. I understand that health is the most important in life. This is what I found always very stressful when someone gets ill. You wrote this in a very peaceful manner. The Sonnet is great!

Wish for your parents the best of health.

Kind Regards,
Zuzanna

Comment is about Hospital (blog)

Thanks, Tomas - that introductory poem/experience was really the catalyst for my whole collection; and I've just enjoyed a visit to your profile.

Comment is about David Franks: Walkabouts Verse (poet profile)

Original item by David Franks: Walkabouts Verse

Thanks for your visit, Tomas, and, in turn, I do like your meaningful traditional metre-and-rhyme; also great to see verses in Irish as I love the world being multicultural.

Comment is about Tomás Ó Cárthaigh (poet profile)

Original item by Tomás Ó Cárthaigh

Loved your "Bobbing and Peering" poem, a great commentary on the scene is given. My poem "For Sale: A Soul and a Body, Whole" is on a similar vein.

Comment is about Malpoet (poet profile)

Original item by Malpoet