cheers for the suggestions, anthony over the three poems.. I normally would work on them a heck of a lot before putting them up but thought I would put them straight up... I am gonna be looking at all three poems in due course, but you are right with your comments so thank you for them!

Comment is about Anthony Emmerson (poet profile)

Original item by Anthony Emmerson

Sad... but so true for many.
Love these lines:
'It does not matter
That he is lonely
Michael has embraced
The furious pace
Of the modern man
And his vacant housewife
Lives only in imagination
Yet is real in desire'

Comment is about Microwave Michael (blog)

You know how to describe the most intimate moments with such beauty and passion...

Comment is about Vinni (blog)

Anthony

Must agree with the others about this - I loved it. "Another place, some other year". When and where it was is a matter of record, but that's not the feeling is it. There's something in us which mythologises our own history

Very sorry our chat ended so abruptly - computer room has been taken over temporarily by daughter who needed to get dressed for work. Some other time I hope.

Comment is about undercurrents (blog)

Original item by Anthony Emmerson

Hi Emma,
You're right of course - work is a thankless task - the evil necessity that occurs between weekends! The human species was never meant to be enslaved in this totally unnatural and regimented way. What have we done/allowed to happen to ourselves?

Regards,
A.E.

Comment is about 18 months experience (blog)

Original item by Emma Roy- Williams

Hi Marianne,
Yet again you throw wave after wave of images at us, and prod us to link them subconsciously somewhere. it's a very effective, interesting and almost subliminal technique. Fascinating.
Regards,
A.E.

Comment is about War Widow (blog)

Original item by Marianne Daniels

Thank you one and all. It's been interesting to get a variety of reponses. The serious purpose (if there was one - it's tongue in cheek really) was to draw attention to what researchers tell us is a real phenomenon.

19th century newspapers and epic poems illustrate the point. Huge banks of tiny text which people cheerfully ploughed through, we are told, employing attention spans most of us can only marvel at.

I still find it all difficult to believe, but apparently it's measurable. And I would go along with Cynthia and Anthony in holding that there is nothing wrong with a long poem - rather the reverse, often - it creates a space to move around in and explore.

Hmmm. This comment is longer than the blinking poem - sorry!

Comment is about Attention spans (blog)

Original item by Dave Bradley

Hi Cynthia,

This is powerful, expressive and very definitely and pointedly feminine (in a Goddess like way!) There is a dark magic about these verses; a celebratory ritualistic feel that the male of the species will never experience or understand. When portrayed like this it is no wonder that it is a subject that has "frightened" many men over the years. Alas, the only cycles that we men are comfortable with have two wheels and pedals.

Sensual, earthy, erotic, mystical, (uncomfortable for some, no doubt) and very good.

Regards,
A.E.

Comment is about Moon Month (blog)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

Hi Emma

Just run across your stuff for the first time and like it, especially this one. Reminds me of the only quote from a Conservative politician I've ever found worth repeating "Inertia develops a momentum of its own" Douglas Hurd

Comment is about Banal (blog)

Original item by Emma Roy- Williams

Hi Marianne
Glad you liked 3 Random strangers. Bus stops are always good poem material arn't they. Winston

Comment is about Marianne Daniels (poet profile)

Original item by Marianne Daniels

Hi Dave,

Methinks you're wrong
- prefer them long!

Regards,
A.E.

Comment is about Attention spans (blog)

Original item by Dave Bradley

Hi Isobel, Thanks for your comments on 3 Ramdom strangers. Had to look back at your red shoes to understand your reference, and there is a line the same isn't there. Coincidence or subliminal? don't know which.
P.S. I turned all my mirrors over years ago, nothing to see.
Win xx

Comment is about Red Shoes (blog)

Original item by Isobel

hi dave, Thanks for your comments on rats / fish / barrels / poetry etc. Maybe this was left in the barrel when all the shooting was over! Inany case I think its ok but you are right, it is easy to write this type of thing and maybe thingsof greater worth only come with greater effort. See you about. P.S. I still love you too.

Comment is about Dave Morgan (poet profile)

Original item by Dave Morgan

you're right dave i am maybe a little bit more caught up now with putting stuff out there so i can get some comments back- I wrote this poem in about ten minutes when i was at work and i knew then that it was a bit 2D when I did it. PS were you on the scriptwriting for screen course?

Comment is about 18 months experience (blog)

Original item by Emma Roy- Williams

Thank you all for taking the time to comment, my attention seeking plan worked.

Comment is about Give Generously (blog)

Original item by Dave Morgan

Hi Emma, Looking at your last few entries I like your style, short and to the point, anecdotal, diary-like, all very recognisable. Like above illustration too, v.funny but two edged. One small point, unless you really mean to, think of some other word or phrase rather than repeating on successive lines eg tea/tea, gone/gone ( even a coffee for a tea and a done for a gone ), but no matter keep 'em rolling.

dave

Comment is about 18 months experience (blog)

Original item by Emma Roy- Williams

liked this little ditty
Winston

Comment is about Attention spans (blog)

Original item by Dave Bradley

Gripping expressive stuff Cynthia. Winston

Comment is about Moon Month (blog)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

This was an interesting story wrapped up in the arms of poetry, and I should have guessed that it was true. Haunting tales such as this usually do hold a grain of truth.

Comment is about Did a Spirit Knock On Rossbawns Walls (blog)

Original item by Tomás Ó Cárthaigh

thanks for your comments on ,,, oh i have forgotten the name of the poem :) i must be in love ha

Comment is about Winston Plowes (poet profile)

Original item by Winston Plowes

Succinct

Comment is about Attention spans (blog)

Original item by Dave Bradley

thanks for the response :)

:)

Comment is about Moon Month (blog)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

the use of the last line is interesting, chuck as it cuts the poem short.. is that intended? like the poem thou..

Comment is about War Widow (blog)

Original item by Marianne Daniels

I kind of know where you're coming from here.
It'd be much simpler and quicker if all poems were shorter to be able to read and comment but life isn't like that and poets have a choice. :-)

It is witty and i like it.
Janet.x

Comment is about Attention spans (blog)

Original item by Dave Bradley

ooh, i remember it so well! :-)

Some oddly fascinating imagery in this poem Cynthia. A bit gruesome for the feint hearted i would think.

Janet.x

Comment is about Moon Month (blog)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

somewhat in response to 'shoeless' - same general filing cabinet anyway

Comment is about Moon Month (blog)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

Marrianne, when you have a moment, will you enlarge just a bit on the word 'startling' in reference to my work. I am intrigued to know what you mean.

Comment is about Marianne Daniels (poet profile)

Original item by Marianne Daniels

No, they're not, and no, they shouldn't ... generally speaking.

Comment is about Attention spans (blog)

Original item by Dave Bradley

Well you couldn't get much shorta than this Dave! Very witty - let's hope folk, find time to place a comment on your rhyme......

Comment is about Attention spans (blog)

Original item by Dave Bradley

Awww...
It is sometimes hard to not want them out of our way...
They are here for a reason, as we all are...

Comment is about the dying fly (blog)

Awww... the dilemma for many who find themselves alone...

Comment is about Mixed Grill (blog)

Every New Year rings in hope... it is up to each individual to make the best of their resolutions and opportunities...
Sad though that many end up celebrating blindly without the motivation to make their magic happen...

You have it expressed it well...

Comment is about A something New Year (blog)

Forgetting for a moment the vision of do gooding at the office one eyed teddy care bearing...red nose dick day... I get a great feel for 'Groundhog Day' here within or should I sat throughout this poem ...that dreaded alarm... what was it again..... Sonny and Cher... 'I've got you Babe' well thats a sort of Tirra Lira Tirra Lira... isn't it?

Liked the POM choice... very much!
Well done Rachel

Gusxx
Hang on a minute this is familar...???

Comment is about Lady of Shalott Day (article)

Forgetting for a moment the vision of do gooding at the office one eyed teddy care bearing...red nose dick day... I get a great feel for 'Groundhog Day' here within or should I sat throughout this poem ...that dreaded alarm... what was it again..... Sonny and Cher... 'I've got you Babe' well thats a sort of Tirra Lira Tirra Lira... isn't it?

Liked the POM choice... very much!
Well done Rachel

Gusxx

Comment is about Lady of Shalott Day (article)

Hi Anthony,
Thank you for the link to the children's poetry competition - it's appreciated. I'll check that out.

Comment is about Anthony Emmerson (poet profile)

Original item by Anthony Emmerson

You're too top! x

Comment is about Sex Addict (blog)

Original item by Mia Darlone

poetic ;)

Comment is about Last Month's Stats (blog)

hi win,
thanks for the comments. i do try to comment on a few but i get a little tongue tied most of the time so i fear I wouldn't do justice! I do greatly admire your work though and opinion, i hope i have not come across as a boring enigma.
thanks again, it is greatly appreciated. x

Comment is about Winston Plowes (poet profile)

Original item by Winston Plowes

Only just ran across this and am another mongrel who loved it. Great!

Comment is about British, Not Pure (blog)

Original item by Simon Rennie

Hi Melissa, Like the philosophical / dream like message which comes through half way through this piece and continues to the end. Win x

Comment is about Black Birds (blog)

Awww... I always had to learn the hard way too ; )

Comment is about Friendly fire (blog)

Tellement triste...
'we go alone
Closer to authority
To fire
To burn or to freeze
The question stirs
An unease
In mortality thinking
People huddled
We talked, we tired
We tied bonds
And we cried
to escape the thoughts'

Très bien fait Peter!

Comment is about below the eviction (blog)

Fantastique Peter...
Pleins de belles images...et de tristesse...
'Only my own hand to hold
scared
Crying
Crying because I see emptiness now
and I know I could do better.
There were once swathes of sunlight here.
But alas I fear too late.'

Comment is about It’s Barron in my garden (blog)

C'est triste...
beaucoup d'émotion...
pas de surprise là... avec toi...

Comment is about clever and crafted (blog)

Beautiful... : )

Comment is about the very first wall (blog)

Hi thanks!
It was for my schoolfriend John who struggled with his father.

Comment is about Bullet proof father (blog)

These lines are very poignant:
'Without the lesson in love
Nothing
And the birds and bees
Kept deathly silent
And mother suppressed
Vocal violence'
says so much... I feel the pain...

Comment is about Bullet proof father (blog)

Manic Street Preachers

Comment is about Dave at Stubbing Wharf, Hebden Bridge September 2008 (photo)

Super expression of the British gene soup - and great rhythm too.
Best wishes

Comment is about British, Not Pure (blog)

Original item by Simon Rennie

Enjoyed the metre, the rhyme, the humour.

Comment is about Elvis McGonagall (poet profile)

Original item by Elvis McGonagall